Conversation Between Characters

Some dialogue I wrote for two characters to help develop them, mostly the girl.

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• Theo: Well, Jo's nice, but I'm kind of interested in someone else.
• Anita: Like who? (Theo awkwardly stares at her. Beat.) ...Me? But I'm-I'm not... I-I mean... I don't know anything!
• Theo: Oh, come o-
• Anita: Except how to make lasagna. And um... (Pulls on a ponytail and twists it.) How to braid ponytails... And... Uh, and... How to remove stains! Yeah! That's all I know how to do, lasagna cookin', ponytail braidin', and stain removin'. Just those three things, absolutely nothing else. I'm strictly a three way girl! (Smiles dopily. Beat. Face Palm.) Did I really just say that outloud?
• Theo: You don't know anything, huh?
• Anita: Yep.
• Theo: So you don't know how to change yourself?
• Anita: Well, I guess I know-
• Theo: Or use the toilet?
• Anita: Of course I know how to-
• Theo: Or buy clothing, or set your alarm clock, or breathe?
• Anita: Huh... I-I guess I know how to do things...
• Theo: Yeah, (Smiles.) so don't sell yourself short.

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I tried to make Theo, who is usally a brutally honest snarker, have a bit of a sweet side (At least in private), while Anita, who is usually the perky girl girl, be a bit socially awkward. Did I succeed?

At-a-glance: It seems rather formulaic.

Theo did not seem snarky.

Anita did not seem socially awkward, more of, a nervous babbling wreck.

I know I should be posting more than that, but I'm lazy at the moment. Ask for specifics, and I'll get my rear in gear next post.

edited 18th Aug '11 1:38:30 PM by MrAHR

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Theo didn't seem brutal.

Also, needs more motions and a setting.

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Well, Theo wasn't meant to seem snarky in this scene. He usually is everywhere else, though.