So...I need a little input

I've finished and posted a story, and now I'd like a little critiquing on it if you guys would be kind enough to give me some of your thoughts.

http://echidnadudeofart05.deviantart.com/#/d3raupi

It's a short horror story, mostly psychological.

Also I am aware of the horrible horrible grammatical errors

opinions? Thoughts? Praise? suggestions?

edited 7th Aug '11 6:14:12 PM by emmens

I'll try to check it out for you tomorrow.

If you don't hear from me, send me a reminder PM.