Street Writing Man
You keep writing, I'll keep reading. and commenting. 
Yeah, I heard it from someone who lives part-time in Forks; she graduated high-school there, ironically enough. I live in WA myself, about 10 minutes from the Canadian border. Given the disposition of the few Twihards I've had the misfortune of meeting, I could easily see something like that happening but I've no proof. A picture would have been priceless.
EDIT: What's really ironic is the fact that 95% of the movie scenes were filmed in Oregon.
edited 22nd Nov '10 8:58:15 PM by drunkscriblerian
If I were to write some of the strange things that come under my eyes they would not be believed. ~Cora M. Strayer~
I exist!
I am comfortable with the terms of this proposal.
Most of the diehard fans I met in high school were, well, enthusiastic, overly so. To the point where I was a bit frightened of them, so I suppose I can see how letting a flock into your town would. Well. End poorly?
Forks is really nothing like it's portrayed, or so it seems, and it's quite bizarre writing a setting I know to be inaccurate. I suppose it doesn't matter in the end. Though, as I was under the impression that real!Forks and Twilight!Forks being completely different was common knowledge, it could be interesting to mention this fact to a fan who didn't realize the movies were not shot on-location.
edited 22nd Nov '10 9:07:07 PM by CampQueen
You could make a point of placing Twilight!Forks somewhere else in the state, just to make it clear.
Street Writing Man
Bumping this thread...Camp Queen, where is the next chapter? I want to read it...
If I were to write some of the strange things that come under my eyes they would not be believed. ~Cora M. Strayer~
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I'm interested in this too. This story could quite possibly turn me into a Twilight fan.
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I recently began an investigation into what about Twilight enchants people so much, and my findings were that it's basically every girl's fantasy. Many of the things mentioned by the previous posters already, while being poor for art, are good for business, and I attribute its success to the business face of the work rather than the art face. Unfortunately, this never-ending battle between art and business often concludes with business the victor and art gasping for air.
Anyways, here are factors that I think enchant the fans:
(Clearly, Bella is meant to represent the reader.)
1) Almost everyone instantly loves Bella, and those that don't (Victoria) are negated by those that do (Edward, Jacob). (Flawed art but good business)
2) Jacob and especially Edward, very quickly, become fervently and eternally loyal to Bella without truly sufficient reason. This is especially clear with Edward because of his long life-span (he'd have certainly met another lovely person in all that time). (Flawed art but good business)
3) Edward is the badboy who turns out to be super-sweet and caring. This is in no way plausible, but it's every girl's fantasy nonetheless. (Flawed art but good business)
4) The language used is so simple that anyone can read it with ease. Simply put, it lacks eloquance and sophistication as a result. (Flawed art but good business)
5) Whenever Bella praises the vampires' beauty, it's like the author is praising the reader's beauty because most people think of themselves as not being physically beautiful or at least not fitting Hollywood's incredibly specific definition of beauty (for women). (The one positive I can think of at the moment that's not truly a bad thing)
Anyways, these things are probably worth keeping despite my distaste for the first four.
I read your redux and think it's great. I actually only have one tiny thing to point out, which truly shows how good I think it is:
The line "He still lived in the same house he had when he was still married to Mom." is redundant. Simply removing the second "still" will fix it.
edited 28th Nov '10 10:16:09 PM by colbertimposter
United Earth
Have you tried having a look at Luminosity? It's a really good Twilight fic, it explains everything weird in the books and actually makes it make sense.
And I liked the sparkles. And the Oregon scenery.
Darkness cannot drive out darkness; only light can do that. Hate cannot drive out hate; only love can do that.
Just make sure Bella's flaws aren't just informed flaws. People have already mentioned her shyness and social awkwardness. You'd never guess those from the way people fawn over her. She's said to be clumsy too, right? Make that mean something than a few nice stumbles into Edward or Jacob's arms.
Overall, think of it as translation. Conserve as much as you can, just make it work in the target language of "passable literature values"... Write it like you were Meyer... if Meyer was a better author :3
edited 8th Jul '12 3:36:44 PM by peccantis
My English professor yells at me for using dashes- I can't help it, it's just so much fun. If I can blame another for a moment, I think it's because I entered college as a Junior and got shunted into the higher-level courses even though I'm only, technically, a first year. I just don't have very much experience with writing things that aren't research papers.
In other words, PLEASE CONTINUE TO GIVE ME CRITICISM. It is like the juicy meat of a cactus in the desert, since water is so cliche.
That story is... interesting, to say the least. If it's true, I sympathize with both the beleaguered townspeople and the Twilight fans who just want to see a bit of their favorite book. Maybe Forks residents could set up a little tourist trap for Twilight fans just outside their borders and lure them all there, instead? Honestly, and in a self-centered way, it makes me embarrassed that one of my goals in life is to see the "real" location of Platform 9 3/4. Are all fans of things that obnoxious?