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Commented out ZC Es, corrected a trope name, fixed quote indentation, some grammar
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* TheAllConcealingI: you don't know your gender for a few pages, and you still don't know your name. Pretty common in {{Gamebook}} stories, however.
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* TheAllConcealingI: you You don't know your gender for a few pages, and you still don't know your name. Pretty common in {{Gamebook}} stories, however.
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* BigYes: Unsurprisingly, both are from Corliss: when shes tries to cover up to your brother about Dream High School, and (though less big) when you agree to be friends.
* BigWhat
* BigWhat
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* BigFirstChoice: All of the first choices have a big impact on the story, but the most evident one is when you tell Corliss your name is Grok, Destroyer of Worlds, she believes you, and tells everyone. Over 30 pages later and people still know you as Grok.
* BigYes: Unsurprisingly, both are from Corliss: whenshes she tries to cover up to your brother about Dream High School, and (though less big) when you agree to be friends.
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* BigYes: Unsurprisingly, both are from Corliss: when
%% * BigWhat
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-->'''Corliss:''' Oh my gosh, I'm soo sorry! Is that a foreign name?
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-->'''You:''' It's a joke.\\
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-->'''You:''' And my name's not Grok, Destroyer of Worlds!\\
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* DreamLand: Exactly what Dream High School is.
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%% * DreamLand: Exactly what Dream High School is.
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* FirstBigChoice: All of the first choices have a big impact on the story, but the most evident one is when you tell Corliss your name is Grok, Destroyer of Worlds, she believes you, and tells everyone. Over 30 pages later and people still know you as Grok.
* FirstPersonPerspective
* FirstPersonPerspective
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* NaiveNewcomer: Your character.
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* PresentTenseNarrative
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* StunnedSilence, mostly from Corliss.
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%% * StunnedSilence, mostly StunnedSilence: Mostly from Corliss.
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The floating sign unnerves me. I'm not sure why or what it means, but I look forward to learning in class tonight!
** On Page 5 you even quote it again, but still don't get it.
** On Page 5 you even quote it again, but still don't get it.
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The floating sign unnerves me. I'm not sure why or what it means, but I look forward to learning in class tonight!
**tonight! On Page 5 you even quote it again, but still don't get it.
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Dream High School is similar to a {{Choose Your Own Adventure}} except that it's more of a choose-''our''-own-adventure- you decide with other readers what the main character does next through a variety of events. Readers have also won various prizes, such as giving sentences to the author that he has to use in the story and naming characters.
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Dream High School is similar to a {{Choose Your Own Adventure}} {{Gamebook}} except that it's more of a choose-''our''-own-adventure- choose-''our''-own-adventure -- you decide with other readers what the main character does next through a variety of events. Readers have also won various prizes, such as giving sentences to the author that he has to use in the story and naming characters.
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!!Dream High School provides examples of:
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* TheAllConcealingI: you don't know your gender for a few pages, and you still don't know your name. Pretty common in ChooseYourOwnAdventure stories, however.
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* TheAllConcealingI: you don't know your gender for a few pages, and you still don't know your name. Pretty common in ChooseYourOwnAdventure {{Gamebook}} stories, however.
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* ChooseYourOwnAdventure: A variant in that you actually vote on what happens next and are locked on a path with everyone else. So it's more like Choose Our Own Adventure.
* {{Gamebooks}}: A variant in that you actually vote on what happens next and are locked on a path with everyone else. So it's more like Choose Our Own Adventure.
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* SliceOfLife: At least so far; it focuses more on connecting with students and learning about the school than an overarching plot. Since it's a ChooseYourOwnAdventure, it could become a part of a larger plot, though.
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* SliceOfLife: At least so far; it focuses more on connecting with students and learning about the school than an overarching plot. Since it's a ChooseYourOwnAdventure, Gamebook, it could become a part of a larger plot, though.
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Dream High School is available [[https://storieslc.com/dhs/ here]].
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Dream High School is available [[https://storieslc.com/dhs/ com/dream-high-school/ here]].
