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BobCat
Since: Dec, 1969
Mar 2nd 2011 at 12:40:21 AM
Okay, one line in here is still good. "That crazed look could have meant any number of things!" Slightly clunky, but good.
MrAHR
Since: Dec, 1969
Mar 2nd 2011 at 3:00:58 AM
Yeah. Shive has lines that are not bad. They increase as time goes on. My theory is, he thinks of an amusing line, then tries to figure a way to insert it into the story.
