FanficRecs Needs work, but not bad
My philosophy is that if anything is on the fan fic recs page and has it's own page, it must be worth checking out. I'm only on chapter 14 now, but I think I can make an opinion. It needs work. The grammar can be pretty bad, and everything seems dull and rushed. It's like there is no attention to detail and the flow of events: Things just happen, and when they do it's "X does Y." That being said, I'm not that far. I heard there is a directors cut, but i think it needs to me more of a director's rewrite. I'm gonna keep reading, hopefully it gets better.
FanficRecs Decent idea
The story itself is fairly sound and works well in theory. However, as noted by gonzomehum, the sentence structure and grammar needs a great deal of work to be a truly good fic.
Someone get this author a Beta-reader, stat!
FanficRecs Would Avoid Skipping
"...she had LONG purple hair that was LONG but had a twin buns in it..."
Redundancy is the least-evil of the crimes committed against literary language here. The author needs to work a lot more on basic grammatical structure and storytelling elements before this fic can be legitimately recommended.
Let me emphasize: A LOT more.