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I think this story’s main problem is that it has an at least halfway interesting story going for it, but it insists on interrupting it with almost direct book scenes where the only difference is you switch out “Hermione” for “Hermione and Acquila”. It makes me wonder why the authors didn’t just have a Harmony soul bond instead. In most of the book scenes, there seems very little reason for Acquila to be there - she either agrees with one of the M Cs or doesn’t, but is ignored. It’s my personal pet peeve to have one character basically take on another characters role because it’s so BORING. Let your characters be individuals! (I even once read a story where the author admitted that Hermione didn’t go to Hogwarts because their character “wouldn’t have anything to do”! That’s pretty much what this story is only Hermione does appear). Further to that, some of the conflict (and it seems like increasing amounts of conflict) come from unnecessary misunderstandings and ooc interactions - Harry, for instance, after being Acquila’s best friend for years and always saying that her fathers crimes are not hers suddenly says he hates her when he thinks that Sirius betrayed his parents. It didn’t come across as very believable to me. I powered through most of these issues as if a story has some uniqueness to it I can usually forgive its weaker points, but unfortunately by chapter 21 I’m skimreading most of it and losing very little by doing so. I’m sorry to the authors because they’ve but a lot of care and time into this story but it’s not for me. I will also note though not much affecting my opinion, the authors are not native speakers which results in a lot of stiff/formal language in their dialogue, which is a bit odd for children, and some odd turns of phrase or word choices.
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