100k+ words, novel-length, Paternal is alright. The plot is interesting, the grammar is excellent, and the humor is the cherry on top.
However, there are a few things that affected my enjoyability of the fic, though not bad enough to ruin it. Still, consider 'em.
First, I keep feeling like the character development sometimes progresses a bit too quickly, as in, a merc will have a COMPLETE personality turn-around in one chapter. I guess you could say the characters adapt to changes way too quickly (maybe they're really gullible?). Also, on... Read More
It's alright I guess
100k+ words, novel-length, Paternal is alright. The plot is interesting, the grammar is excellent, and the humor is the cherry on top.
However, there are a few things that affected my enjoyability of the fic, though not bad enough to ruin it. Still, consider 'em.
First, I keep feeling like the character development sometimes progresses a bit too quickly, as in, a merc will have a COMPLETE personality turn-around in one chapter. I guess you could say the characters adapt to changes way too quickly (maybe they're really gullible?). Also, on... Read More