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I'm not too familiar with the Naruto franchise, but I followed a link to this fanfic and started reading.
The writer had some interesting ideas, but was lacking in technical skill. For example, it's hard to know who's saying what when the paragraphs are structured like this:
Yeah, it's like that for many chapters, and it's pretty confusing. It gets a little better in the later chapters, but I wasn't interested enough to continue on past chapter 14.
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