deltanine,
I said \"isn\'t quite as.\" Erza\'s a good person at heart, if a bit rougher around the edges and slower to warm up to people than Lucy or Wendy. Of course, that comment was beside the point, and only a prelude to how Out of Character the torture is for her. If anything, Erza showing compassion is proof that she isn\'t the kind of person she is in this fic..
Well, as the author of this fanfiction, I think that there is a point to it. You see, I don\'t *just* think Kyouka should have suffered more than she did in canon. I also think that Erza should have actually caused that suffering. She should have taken the suffering that Kyouka subjected her to, multiplied it by ten, and bombarded Kyouka with it.
SpectralTime,
To put it simply, it doesn't. He's essentially saying that the point of the fic wasn't to take revenge on Kyouka- it was to have *Erza* take revenge on Kyouka. Of course, given that of his four other fics, two are of Marvel comic book characters killing George Zimmerman and one is about [[Web Video/RWBY Blake killing Adam]](the remaining one's just "Expiration Date" with Saber Tooth members), it's hardly surprising that he'd write this as a Revenge Fic with no other redeeming value to it.
On one hand, fanfic is whatever and people are gonna write stuff for themselves, so I don\'t see the point in in-depth critique of what is ultimately an exercise in personal expression - at least, not outside of the comments for that fanfiction.
On the other hand, creating a wiki article for your own fanfic on a website with both an avid media-savvy userbase and an *in-built review function for every work page* kinda opens you up to criticism. Like you went above and beyond, presumably for reasons like personal pride and a desire for wider visibility - which is fine - and someone found your fanfic because of that and wrote a negative review. Like, them\'s the breaks.
It\'s been six years, dude/chick/non-binary pick. Chill.
Lol, It was deleted as a 5P thing. Which means it violated the content policy by being too pornographic.
Yes, your work being on this website is not a right.
Working on: Author Appeal | Sandbox | Troper WallAlso, here's a link to an Internet Archive page from when the page was up: https://web.archive.org/web/20170325235200/https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Fanfic/WhatChapter372OfFairyTailShouldHaveBeen
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A Shameless Revenge Fic
A lot of fanfics exist to take revenge on canon characters, from a good guy who makes a questionable judgment call who doesn't get punished for it, to a villain who commits atrocities against the heroes. Few fanfics, however, are as brazen about or focused on this purpose as this one is, and this isn't a good thing
The fic takes place at the start of Chapter 372, in which Erza, now free, is interrogating Kyouka, who'd previously tortured her for information Erza didn't even know. This time, instead of Kyouka escaping from her shackles and attacking Erza, Erza inflicts horrific tortures on Kyouka, completely out of proportion to what Erza suffered in canon.
The preceding paragraph describes the entirety of this fic. The author eschews everything that does not relate to the torture so the fic is written as a Script Fic that consists of character dialogue and the bare minimum description of their action, making it come off as minimalist and lazy.
Erza's highly Out of Character here, as while she isn't quite as compassionate as people like Lucy or Wendy, she isn't a Sadist like she is in this fic, even considering what Kyouka's done to her.
Perhaps the worst part is that there isn't much of a point to this fic.Kyouka gets tortured, but considering that in canon, Mard Geer did the same thing to her for "toying with" humans, and she later gets killed by Minerva, it hardly seems necessary, except as a way of satisfying those who think she should have suffered more.
All in all, I can't recommend this fic in good conscience unless you enjoy seeing characters like Kyouka suffer and don't care about anything else.