DKM has been at this for awhile, your opinion of his story is dead on. But to be honest, his previous work are more or less than same thing. He is a conundrum of a writer, a person who doesn't seem to like writing but does it out of a sense of obligation to himself. He treats it like therapy, something to assist in him dealing with crap in his life. This would be okay, if he wasn't doing it to reinforce his interpretation of life as correct.
I would say that his horrible writing is just an extension of his deep personal problems. Any conversation with him would alert you to this fact. Be that as it may, he's beyond help of any kind. He doesn't listen to criticism, of all kinds. I should know, I have tried once or twice to inform him of his shortcomings and he treats it like I have some kind of vendetta or desire to see him suffer. I don't, I just hate his work. I have nothing but pity for him and the fact he's buried himself in his hatred.
Back to my original point, his previous stories were of similar TERRIBLE quality and similar problems. Generic characters, stolen plot lines, bland moral messages, TV show structure that jars with how a literary work should be written and a blinding self-destructive hatred of his subjects. If it isn't the entirety of MLP, it was Terra from Teen Titans for not getting back together with Beast Boy or Kari and TK from Digimon because the former did not return Davis' love. And he made several stories expressing his hatred of those characters by making them suffer until Davis of Beast Boy died in a way that somehow made the women who scorned them feel guilty or said women relented and redeemed themselves by admitting they should've loved them all along.
His stories all have an anti-feminist/misogynistic feel to them because of this, if you haven't noticed. It may explain why MLP, a highly female oriented show with a number of feminist "girl power" themes, makes him so angry. While none of them are worth your time, looking at them does make you realise... he's always been like this. It's just My Little Pony is his most recent target.
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Not very good, or even So Bad, It's Good
It's fairly easy to tell that My Little Unicorn is not going to be a good fic from first glance,, when the author declares that he doesn't like My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic, especially the idea of The Power of Friendship, and he is going to set out to make a better version of the show.
What we get is a highly cliched piece about Lightning Dawn, student of the Grand Ruler, using the Uniforce and the power of "believing"(whatever that is), to fight against Titan and various other one-dimensional villains, with equally one-dimensional allies. Despite setting out to replace Friendship is Magic, he eventually includes characters from that show, but they are not the same ponies you know and love.
I'm not that familiar with Friendship is Magic, as I've seen a few episodes and know the general personalities of the cast. But I've noticed that while characterization is not the author's strong suit (he points out that he finds three dimensional characters confusing), he mainly rips off of existing characters for the original cast while making the canon characters flat and two dimensional. As such, he doesn't have any hilariously outlandish characterization decisions.
The plot is largely episodic, with the episodes being fairly unoriginal and formulaic, featuring repetitive struggles against Titan's minions and the monsters they create. The chapters are also surprisingly long for a badfic, which the author says is trying to emulate the length of a TV episode, which is hardly a good decision(when I write fanfics, I prefer considering factors such as plot developments, and the chapters vary widely in length, from under 2,000 words to over 10,000).
The writing is relatively bland and forgettable, with the author apparently writing it to be more like an episode synopsis than an actual work of literature. As a result, the fic is driven more by the author telling us what is going on than by characters' dialogue or actions, and the former is not especially well written. The grammar is less than stellar, but there aren't any hilarious mistakes like "CHARD MONSTER!"
All in all, reading this fic is like watching someone try to do a stunt but failing in such a way that you can't laugh at them or feel sorry for them. It's not worth your time, even for Bile Fascination.