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The overall writing skill is excellent and what the author is trying to do with the setting and story is very worthwhile. However, I see three areas that keep the story from being as good as it could be.
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The overall writing skill is excellent and what the author is trying to do with the setting and story is very worthwhile. However, I see three areas that keep the story from being as good as it could be.
