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NapoleonDeCheese Since: Oct, 2010
#37151: Apr 22nd 2012 at 6:34:32 PM

Re: The typos- What can I say? Blame the translations I got used to.

Re: Gundam- I've only watched Wing and G. The former bored me, I liked most of the latter.

Re: Ritsuko- Technically, there are NO EVA units in the current iteration of the URAE verse. There are no giant mecha at all out of in-universe fictional works, save for a few prototypes codenamed "Patlabors" Lloyd Asplund is developing at England and a few giant suits of mystically powered armor buried deep within Mundus Magicus.

EvaUnit01 Fandom Heretic Since: Mar, 2011 Relationship Status: Complex: I'm real, they are imaginary
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#37152: Apr 22nd 2012 at 6:38:17 PM

Well, now you have ready-made material on occasion that you need an omake and Ritsuko makes a Badass Boast.

NapoleonDeCheese Since: Oct, 2010
#37153: Apr 22nd 2012 at 6:39:58 PM

She doesn't even need to mention the EV As. All she needs is saying "I'm the great-great-great-great-(repeat forty hundred times more) grandmother of all of you. OF COURSE I know better than you. Now shut up and do as I say!"

edited 22nd Apr '12 6:41:02 PM by NapoleonDeCheese

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#37154: Apr 22nd 2012 at 6:42:22 PM

[up][up][up][up][up]Define "bounce him off Negi". (Is That What Theyre Calling It Now! For all your IfYouKnowWhatIMean needs!)

Yuri Domon? I must've missed that. I only saw a few episodes of G Gundam, so it'd be harder for me to recognize a reference to him.

@IANCE: The Atropos thing works if you foreshadow it by, say, having Negi mention that he used the spell to break Eva's curse. Crossing it over with Oh My Goddess without warning would be much more asspully.

edited 22nd Apr '12 6:43:17 PM by rikalous

NapoleonDeCheese Since: Oct, 2010
#37155: Apr 22nd 2012 at 6:46:48 PM

Mage, forgive me, but I'm going to write something for the demon faceoff now. Don't worry, it's nothing about the fight itself, it's just "Kyle" and Deadpool announcing themselves to the kids. I realized the demons haven't made their pre-battle "Sorry, but we're going to kick you asses" short speech yet, and I think I have a working take on it.

edited 22nd Apr '12 6:47:15 PM by NapoleonDeCheese

SCMof2814 Since: Nov, 2010 Relationship Status: I don't mind being locked in this eternal maze!
#37156: Apr 22nd 2012 at 7:02:52 PM

Oops, I wrote EXACTLY that just now. Here, let me show you...

Battle Fantasia

Everyone tensed as Kotaro transformed, gripping their weapons. There was a sort of stillness in the air, everyone waiting for the other group to attack first. Kira Deathnote Paru-sama was familiar with the feeling. It didn’t come up often but sometimes, when she and the United Magical Girl Association were called to fight, they’d feel that same tension as everyone observed and assessed a new enemy for a second, then two, time and nerves dragging things along until the violence inevitably erupted (well, except for that time when the bad guys had collapsed in abject surrender, begging Green Lantern-chan not to blow them up to kingdom come).

Deathnote sorted quickly through her thoughts. She’d only have once chance, and if she got it wrong…

Her fingers made a nigh-microscopic doodle on the corner of her Artifact, drawing what she needed. The size of the drawing on the page didn’t really affect how it came out, though the most basic constructs were usually the same size as their drawing. Still, she’d learned a lot the past year and several months.

She boldly stepped forward, past where this world’s little Negi (AH, SHE’D FORGOTTEN HOW MOE AND ADORABLE NEGI-SENSEI USED TO BE!) was having a stare-off with Kotaro, her construct in hand. Amidst the nearest group of demons, a rather distinctive-looking individual in red and black stepped forward as well, his eyes glaring at her grimly through his red and black mask. She faced him as she felt the moments counting down. Any moment, the violence would explode. She’d only have one shot at this…

With a roar, both she and her designated dramatic opponent, in the fine tradition of Japanese warfare, roared their challenges as Deathnote threw what was in her hands, dully noting he’d done the same as she let loose with her chosen battle cry. “SURPRISE BUTT SECKS!” they both cried.

The black and red –checkered panties Deathnote had thrown slammed into Deadpool’s face just as the pair of Panda-chang ‘Since 1196’ boxers he’d thrown slammed into hers. Both blinded, he drew out his katana as Deathnote summoned something from her Artifact. Unfortunately, the handles slipped off the blades, thus leaving Deadpool to slash ineffectually at the Ero-Nodoka Deathnote had blindly chosen.

Everyone else on both sides of the battlefield sweatdropped, and took a step back, trying to declare through body language and sheer force of will that they weren’t with the two idiots with underwear on their faces, so sir, didn’t know them at all, in fact what people with underwear on their faces?

They thus made the fatal mistake of forgetting there were two Harunas.

“SURPRISE BUTT SECKS!” Haruna cried, charging forward surrounded by a flock of Angry Birds, charging down the hill letting momentum carry her.

Apparently, someone on the other side had enough. “LEEEEEEEEEROOOOOOOOY JEEEEEEEEENKIIIIINS!” a cute little oni with a spoon-sized bat cried in a loud, shrill, childish voice, charging forward to meet her.

A roar rose among the demons, drowning out the embarrassed red oni who was picking up the little one and telling it to stay behind daddy during Bring Your Son To Work Day so it doesn’t get hurt, and that good little oni shouldn't say things they hear from crazy human girls, and look, daddy will explain what it means later, okay, daddy has to work now…

More actual fighting after this...

edited 22nd Apr '12 7:07:34 PM by SCMof2814

NapoleonDeCheese Since: Oct, 2010
#37157: Apr 22nd 2012 at 7:04:55 PM

Oh, never mind. I'll write Konoka and Konoka having quality time with Tsukuyomi, then.

Edit: No, wait, I think I can fit some of my intended dialogue before your scene. I'll post it and let you see what you think.

edited 22nd Apr '12 7:07:06 PM by NapoleonDeCheese

SCMof2814 Since: Nov, 2010 Relationship Status: I don't mind being locked in this eternal maze!
#37158: Apr 22nd 2012 at 7:08:59 PM

Cool. I sorta wanted Haruna and Deadpool to both do this simultaneously because they were just that crazy, but I gueass giving Haruna a reason to single Deadpool out works too.

Now, I gotta find an opening for the 'Sexy-chan' joke...

edited 22nd Apr '12 7:09:26 PM by SCMof2814

NapoleonDeCheese Since: Oct, 2010
#37159: Apr 22nd 2012 at 7:17:58 PM

Let me see. Fitting it in without retconning anything of what you wrote is kinda harder than I expected. But I'll try finding an angle.

Sextum will come closer as soon as Kotaro is defeated. That should give you your opening.

SCMof2814 Since: Nov, 2010 Relationship Status: I don't mind being locked in this eternal maze!
#37160: Apr 22nd 2012 at 7:22:17 PM

Nah, just write your scene and I'll edit both to fit. And thank for the Sextum openeing. Who are the URAE people with this group again?

NapoleonDeCheese Since: Oct, 2010
#37161: Apr 22nd 2012 at 7:25:46 PM

Negi, Chisame, Matoi, Misa, Sakurako, Haruka, Natsuki, Chamo, Batman (although for the moment he has disappeared into the shadows to play strike at surprise), Misora, Asuna and Haruna.

Chao and Hakase are fixing Chachamaru.

Konoeko, Makie, Sora, Keiichi, Ayaka, Roberta, Nodoka and Kero are with Joker and Quartum.

Ritsuko, Yuuna and Akira are coming up the hill.

Eishun and Takahata are in the fight against Evangeline.

edited 22nd Apr '12 7:28:11 PM by NapoleonDeCheese

Cygnus Fist of the thunder god from Mahora Evil Academy Since: Jan, 2001
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#37162: Apr 22nd 2012 at 7:30:41 PM

@rikalous: yuri Domon is Marie. You saw her going "THESE FIST OF MINE GLOW WITH AN AWESOME POWER. THE DARKNESS THEY'RE SOAKED IN TELLS ME TO BEAT YOU."

Oh, and Fate would inevitably goad Negi and Asuna about how they're going to solve the MW crisis in light of the new problems with Demon Konoka.

You know you want to add more tropes to THIS.
SCMof2814 Since: Nov, 2010 Relationship Status: I don't mind being locked in this eternal maze!
#37163: Apr 22nd 2012 at 7:31:29 PM

Ugh, double post...

edited 22nd Apr '12 7:42:11 PM by SCMof2814

SCMof2814 Since: Nov, 2010 Relationship Status: I don't mind being locked in this eternal maze!
#37164: Apr 22nd 2012 at 7:41:31 PM

@OM: Thanks for the list. Fridge Logic question: Where are all the staff and mages from the Konoe compound? After all, they weren't petrified or anything, and those that survive are likely not dumb enough to fight Evangeline. Can we have them come up from behind the group in a small Big Damn Heroes appearance? For that matter, can we have them try to blow up the Joker, letting Konoekoe get away and organize the attack in her husband's stead?

edited 22nd Apr '12 7:42:27 PM by SCMof2814

NapoleonDeCheese Since: Oct, 2010
#37165: Apr 22nd 2012 at 7:49:11 PM

[up]As we've seen, a few of them have been beaten silly by Quartum. Since he's just ignited an inferno in the escape passages, it's gonna take a lot of effort from Konoeko and Roberta, the more battle able in that group, to help the beaten men get out of harm's way before everything goes to hell.

Quartum's attack forces that group to split. Konoeko, Roberta, Nodoka and Kero and the men fall out into the river, from where Konoeko quickly re-organizes the resistence. Believing Ayaka could have died, Roberta goes Bloody Rampage of Revenge a la Baile de la Muerte canon arc. Ayaka and Sora have to go back the way they came and rejoin Negi's group right on time for you know what. Keiichi and Makie reach the library where the previously posted preview scene happens.

The other men in the villa, after the initial chaos of the Eva attack, are gathering to fight the demons surrounding the whole place. Joker and Quartum will continue making short of any of them they run into.

edited 22nd Apr '12 7:49:38 PM by NapoleonDeCheese

SCMof2814 Since: Nov, 2010 Relationship Status: I don't mind being locked in this eternal maze!
#37166: Apr 22nd 2012 at 7:56:05 PM

Oh, so I can't have Sakurako use her powers to 'luckily' make them come to the girl's rescue? Because there can't be THAT few people in the compound.

How many do you say there are? Because given the crisis that happened earlier in Cinema town, I'd have expected them to call in everyone and have them on high aleart, especially since they're were planning on getting Konoka back. I don't think Konoeko's the type to not insist to her husband that they call everyone they can get their hands on to kick the ass of the sons of bitches who took her daughter. In volume 6, we saw they had loads of archers, and two chaps ago there was Eishun's escort and such. They should have a sizable force in there, most magic-capable, and those who aren't armed as either Shinmeiryu or with guns. Lots of guns.

Random plot bunny idea: Setsuna says Shinmeiryu can be used with any weapon during the Mahorafest Arc, Tournament section. What if someone used it with guns? I can see it... Boulder-cutting Bullet... Exorcism Bullet...

edited 22nd Apr '12 8:02:58 PM by SCMof2814

NapoleonDeCheese Since: Oct, 2010
#37167: Apr 22nd 2012 at 8:01:29 PM

It's hard to calculate how many of those guys would they have around, especially since I'd expect a major part of the Association's resources to be spreaded around the whole Kyoto area looking for Konoka everywhere. But yeah, there should be a lot of them at ground zero.

Can we have Honami showing up at some point as part of the forces? We already saw she's a Kyoto born mage working at the Kyoto jurisdiction, so even if she isn't working directly for the association, she should be familiar enough with them for they to use her talents during a situation like this.

edited 22nd Apr '12 8:02:09 PM by NapoleonDeCheese

Cygnus Fist of the thunder god from Mahora Evil Academy Since: Jan, 2001
Fist of the thunder god
#37168: Apr 22nd 2012 at 8:04:11 PM

[up][up]Oh ho? That's actually a plot point with GHQ. Andras taught it to a slew of people just to see what they can come up with (hooray demon of discord!), including Imamiah. And that fallen angel is capable of not only using it with her wind and fire wheels, but loading elemental attacks into it as well.

You know you want to add more tropes to THIS.
NapoleonDeCheese Since: Oct, 2010
#37169: Apr 22nd 2012 at 8:07:09 PM

Scary thought: Bullseye, the man who can turn anything he touches into a weapon, learns Shinmeiryuu.

SCMof2814 Since: Nov, 2010 Relationship Status: I don't mind being locked in this eternal maze!
#37170: Apr 22nd 2012 at 8:10:29 PM

I'm cool with Honami. So, I guess I can't end this fight scene with Sakurako lucking up a rescue for her friends. Okay, how abotu she tries but fails. How should she react to that? Because currently, I've got:

Sakurako: Don't you fret, we've got it made! Gondor Calls for Aid!

(nothing happens)

Haruna: Of my god, Sakurako's luck isn't working anymore! IT'S THE END OF THE WORLD! WE'RE ALL DEAD!

NapoleonDeCheese Since: Oct, 2010
#37171: Apr 22nd 2012 at 8:16:04 PM

How about this: Sakurako calls for a rescue. The troops come. Everyone thinks everything's okay now.

Just as soon, Sextum walks in, effortlessly freezes all the troops without a sweat, coolly faces the heroes. Now there's a collective Oh, Crap!.

SCMof2814 Since: Nov, 2010 Relationship Status: I don't mind being locked in this eternal maze!
#37172: Apr 22nd 2012 at 8:17:29 PM

Okay, I'll write the set-up for that. We're talking Harmless Freezing, right?

NapoleonDeCheese Since: Oct, 2010
#37174: Apr 22nd 2012 at 8:27:25 PM

Unequally

Hell to Pay

Before Kotaro could jump ahead to attack, the rather distinctive-looking individual in red and black and sitting on the shoulders of the largest of all the demons cleared his throat loudly. "Your attention, pleeze! Kotaro, I know you can't wait to jump on that boy's bones, but let's introduce ourselves properly first, partially for the sake of those who've lost track of the story so far! The hunk I'm riding is named Kyle!"

"That... came out sounding really wrong..." Kyle said.

"And I'm Deadpool, Merc with a Mouth! Although you can't see it with this mask on, I guarantee you I have a mouth!" he put a gloved hand on his chest. "I'll be your main gratuitous cameo tonight! But don't worry, for those more in the mood for something more L*l*, we have Yami the Golden Darkness!" He gestured towards the stoic looking blond girl clad in black, standing on top of a demon turtle. "Say hello to our adoring public, Yami!"

"Call me by that name again and I'll kill you," she dryly promised. "One second thought, just don't call me any way."

"Ah... yeah... And over here, we have the bird guy from the second Ranma movie, who finally got himself another gig!" Deadpool pointed at another demon standing next to Kyle, who seemed to be his second at command.

Haruna looked puzzled for a moment and opened her mouth to ask something, but just as soon, she closed it back shaking her head.

"What the home are you saying?" the masked bird demon asked. "I've never been in any movies! That's brain-rotting entertainment! Filmmakers are the real root of evil nowadays, I tell you!"

Kyle shook his head. "To think Lady Amagasaki would waste our time, summoning us here to fight a bunch of schoolgirls and a little boy with a wooden stick. It's a misuse of our might..."

"On the plus side, we get to see this world again," another demon said. "I love this world. It's so full of hatred, prejudice, greed, fear and misery...!"

A collective dream sigh ran amongst the horde. Even Deadpool joined the sigh.

"Hey, we aren't all children!" Matoi protested. "We have Batman-sama with us, too!"

"We do?" Misa looked in all directions, not finding a trace of him.

"Crap! If the guy who is supposed to be the smartest of all superheroes slipped away before the fight starts, it's because we're hopelessly lost...!" Misora gulped.

"The Batman. Yeah, right," the bird demon rolled his eyes. "As if we're going to believe such a ridiculous urban legend!"

There was a beat, as even the other demons looked critically at him.

The bird man feigned a cough. "Anyway, even if you're children, we won't go easy on you! We were hired for this, and we'll honor that contract to the letter! Plus, we're evil, you know. So don't curse us, and just be thankful none of us brought tentacles!"

The Harunas made matching disappointed faces.

The bird man noticed those. "What in the name of all that's unholy is wrong with you humans this century?"

SCMof2814 Since: Nov, 2010 Relationship Status: I don't mind being locked in this eternal maze!
#37175: Apr 22nd 2012 at 8:30:01 PM

Looks good as is!

Oh, where's URAE!Setsuna BTW. With Negi's group? Never mind, I'll assume she is...

Anyway, here's the rest of the fight scene...

“Excuse me everyone?-!” Miyazaki screamed, briefly drawing attention as she pointed at them, the jeweled thing on her finger glinting. “WHAT IS YOUR NAME?”

“Jaculatio Gladinis!” Ayase cast, throwing the curtain of ice-spears ahead to clear the path. The demons only stumbled back, only one or two succumbing. Ayase grunted. Clearly, these were more powerful than the canon fodder Chigusa had called in their world, who had mainly survived with powerful skill rather than brute strength. The rebel had obviously gone the other way here. Still, maybe that could be to their advantage…

“Asuna-san, in the lead!” Miyazaki was crying, organizing them. “Your Artifact can banish them in one hit! You just need to touch them! Haruka-san! Watch her back! Natuski-san, cover them and watch the skies! Misa-san, keep an eye for flyers and tag them with your needles so we can see them! Haruna-san–“

“Saotome Anything Goes School of Martial Arts Mangaka-ken! Armor Piercing Bird Flock!”

“Um, just keep on doing that, but stay with the group! Haruna-chan, pull her back! Setsuna-sans, flank Asuna-san!”

“Got it! Go, VORD KNIGHT RUSH!”

As the buzzing of a multitude of insects rose from Deathnote’s location, one of the demons, a small, lithe thing that looked vaguely ninja-esque managed to leap over and slip past the front line fighters. Drawing a knife, it charged at Nodoka.

Nodoka barely looked at him, dodging his slashes with a sort of pre-occupied air, before kicking him in the knee. The demon only stumbled slightly and that was all the opening Calculator’s robot maid Mint needed to slam a croquet mallet into his chin. There was a crack as his head naped backwards at an angel that looked very uncomfortable. Miyazaki was already ignoring him again before he ever hit the ground calling out more orders.

The Chisames stood together, Calculator behind her younger alternate, who was shooting electric blasts where she could. Matoi had somehow picked up the club of a fallen oni and was wielding the thing with absurd ease. Next to Calculator, her other maid Chitose had somehow pulled out an energy rifle out of nowhere, shooting with improbably aiming skills as her systems were significantly boosted by the presence of three of Calcualtor’s electronic sprites. Each shot of energy slammed straight into a demons vulnerable spot, instantly banishing or incapacitating them to leave them vulnerable to Mint’s mallet.

A demon about to catch Asuna from behind suddenly howled in pain, his hand slamming into his crotch. There was a little white streak as Chamo darted out from under his loin cloth, a surprisingly grim expression on his face, holding a burning lighter just as Asuna whirled to banish the demon. “Gah, the sacrifices I make!”

“Chamo!” Asuna exclaimed in surprise. “You’re.. actually being useful?”

Chamo was shuddering at where he’d just been. “Actually, it was other me’s idea…”

There were other screams as Alert leapt from demon to demon, a litcigarette in each hand, stabbing them at vulnerable place to distractthem long enough for Haruka and Natuski to tag them. “Come on! You wanna piece of me? I AM A SEXY, NAKED ERMINE OF WAR!”

Asuan sweatdropped though as Albert landed on some poor kitsune ninja’s enourmous cleavage, and began to snuggle in. “He’s stil la pervert though…” she said before slamming her staff to banish back the kitsune.

“Oh, thank you!” she said before she disappeared. “That’s it, I’m going to graduate scho–”

Even Misora was doing what she could, screaming in panic all the way. Surprised demons suddenly found their weapons ripped out of their hands by some speedy, nearly unseen force, those wearing extra weapons on them suddenly finding those stripped off them. Their companions were even more unlucky, as the weapons reappeared with a vengeance, slamming into them at jet-like speeds into unguarded backs, arms, torsos and heads, accompanied by a wailing scream.

“I’MGONNADIE, I’MGONNADIE, I’MGONNADIE, I’MGONNADIE, I’MGONNADIE, I’MGONNADIE–!-!-!-!-!-!”

“Sakurako-san, do what you can to shift things in our favor!” Nodoka ordered the cheerleader, who was using her power to try and trip up demons, get things stuck in their eyes, and generally leave them pen to attack.

Sakurako concentrated, trying to feel her luck as she leapt up and did a somersault, putting everything she had into the cheer. “Don't you fret, we've got it made! Gondor Calls for Aid!”

The cheer, however, left her complete vulnerable, and another of the smaller-lither ninja demons managed to wriggle in and lunge at her while her arms where spread, leaving her open.

From out of nowhere, a batarang flew, slamming into the side of the ninja’s head and exploding, banishing him back to where he came from.

Sakurako frowned cutely. “Let me try that again…”

“Oh my Hild, it’s the Archangel Uriel here to smite us!” one of the demons cried.

“Actually, I think it’s just Batman,” Asuna commented.

The bird guy from the second Ranma movie snorted derisively. “Oh, please! You humans and your silly superstitions. Everyone knows that Batman is just an urban legend spread by nasty humans who try to oppress our fellow evil-following huma–”

A batarang slammed into his face and exploded.

“Coincidence…” he managed to choke out before he vanished back where he came.

Will leave the Oh, Crap! moment for later. I'll leave Kotaro and Negi's fight to you. Will Kotaro had a grudge against Yue?

edited 22nd Apr '12 9:10:06 PM by SCMof2814


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