>Loquacious Adolescent
Robot Master of the YEAR. No, DECADE.
...and another question: do any of you want to put Crisis of Infinite Konoka's in an excerpt somewhere, or should I troll and upload it as part of Vampire Konoka?
edited 9th Apr '12 8:15:18 PM by Cygnus
You know you want to add more tropes to THIS.If we add a dash of SHAFT, Makie could also be Fail Girl.
Ayaka, Shota Girl and Asuna Ojii-san Girl?
Maybe adding Takane and naming her Stripper Girl?
Anya, Forgotten Girl? The joke being Chachamaru completely forgets her and goes on to beat Dr. Chao without ever visiting her stage.
edited 9th Apr '12 8:22:11 PM by NapoleonDeCheese
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You want me to send it to you or just store it somewhere on Iridia's FF.net account?
Unequally. Fill-in-the-blanks scene.
The henchmen, like they most often did, sat apart to eat. For their own good. Eating near the Joker was always a risky move, even moreso than talking near the Joker, laughing near the Joker, playing videogames near the Joker, smoking near the Joker, coughing near the Joker or breathing near the Joker. They all were amazed the kids had lasted as long as they had so far.
"So," the clown said between avid mouthfuls of takeout, "The plan is simple, but that's the beauty of it! It's a hit and run, very vaudevillesque. Think of classic silent comedy. It's all about goofily running into the confusion, tipping our hats all along the way, claiming the prize, and running away into the horizon, fleeing the incompetent cops who wave their truncheons around. Of course, that kind of comedy works better with a duo instead of a group, so we'll go alone, Quarty. Ruri-Ruri here doesn't have the physical comedy chops for it yet."
Ruri indifferently took more soba noodles to her small mouth. "I think it's a stupid plan, but it's not my call..."
All the henchmen did a sudden panicking shudder, tensing up in place.
But against their expectations, Joker only smiled and bopped his knuckles on Ruri's head. "I thought you were supposed to be a smart girl."
"There are times when being stupid or smart makes no difference on how lost we are," she mused.
He nodded. "Now that's very true. But you'll still be cheering us from here, won't you, Hon?"
"I'll be handling your communications and monitoring your advancements, yes," she said. "If you're in danger, I'll activate the extra protocols as agreed."
"And you'll pray for us?" Joker ruffled her hair.
"I'm not a believer, actually..."
"Aren't you? We all should believe in something superior to ourselves. Even me, when I find something that is superior to me. Just look at Quarty! Even he, a soulless machine of destruction and pyromania, can find it in his charcoaled black hair to pray!"
Ruri looked at Quartum, who was muttering a "Thank you, Lifemaker, for this food..." before eating his personally burned down meal. A cup of inhumanly hot and smoking coffee was next to his plate.
"I thought you had no ties to your supposed creator anymore?" Ruri wondered softly.
"I'm no practicer, but I still observe the theory," Quartum said very seriously.
"Ah."
"Must be a nice religion," an amused Joker commented. "Put on your Sunday's best and your shiny shoes made of human skin, and go to Church very early in the morning! Dutifully pray for the world's destruction, and make a generous contribution to the plate with coins your hodded priest passes around! A-men!"
"Well," Quartum scratched his head, "Not like I ever was fully activated back then. From what I gather, they lost me before they considered me fit for field testing. They put some memories from Primum, Secundum and Tertium into me for combat purposes, but they either failed to put more, or Ra's blocked the rest out," he shrugged indolently. "From what I remember, or rather, they remembered, Lifemaker was pretty much a god made flesh. Very impressive," he spoke almost reverently for once. "All surrounded by shadows, hiding his face with a hood, and you literally could feel the power coming out of him..."
"In my town, we call that incontinence," Joker failed to be impressed.
"Is that being dead now?" Ruri asked.
"Everyone seems to think he is," he shrugged again, blowing a soft column of smoke from his overcooked dinner. "But if they made more models, then someone with a definitive idea of what they're doing is continuing his work."
"It's easier to kill a god than killing faith," Joker theorized, looking quite pleased with himself. "Hey, that's deep! Tonight, I feel attuned to the universe! Poor universe. My horoscope told me this morning I'd have a few very happy reunions and a lot of interesting fateful and life defining experiences, and it didn't lie! Batsy came for me! Only for me! Oh, that makes me so happy...!"
Burnt Alive Lion, who was sitting on a tiny dollhouse chair near the main table, discreetly hopped his way with it back to where the henchmen ate.
"I think my appetite's been spoiled," Ruri said.
"Can I have your leftovers then?" Quartum asked.
"Go ahead."
He pointed a finger at her plate, shot a blaze that left the food a charred mess, and pulled it into his plate with what he had been eating. "Excellent."
"I think you mean 'thanks'," Ruri said.
Joker and Quartum gave her twin 'Oh, c'mon, please!' looks.
"Forget I said anything..." she had to shake her head.
Hmm
Tripped over my own two feet, hit my head, and forgot what I was going to say
Oh well
Anyone got any advice for writing a Setsuna v. Fate Testarossa fight scene? I suck at writing fights, and I want to give my readers SOMETHING worth while
You know you want to add loveIt's Fate's "Joining the Ala Alba" fight test. Mostly straight-up combat, with a nice sprinkling of spells and attacks thrown in for good measure.
I figure I can wiki both of their move lists on their respective wiki's, though if anyone has any advice on making it flow, I'd appreciate it.
I know I tend to 'hype', but I just wanna deliver something quality.
I'll check over everything tomorrow, I need to sleep
You know you want to add love@Magey: Add to it, you say? MWAAAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHA
Well, I posted it in the topic earlier, but because my posting history doesn't go that far back and I hate skipping 5 pages at a time, I guess I'll repost it.
She found herself slowly stirring, and it took a while before she could get her bearings straight. By that time, though, she found herself staring... at herself.
"Eh? Wha...?" Konoka blinked owlishly, trying to figure out what the hell was going on with herself.
"Are you okay, original me?" This other Konoka asked. Unlike herself, who was dressed in casual clothes, this particular Konoka still had her school uniform on. She was just as helpful though, lifting her up to stand on her feet.
"Ummm, what's going on?" Konoka asked.
"A bunch of me's from other worlds have gathered. And we're having a meeting," she explained. "We finally managed to pull you in. Sorry about the abruptness of it, though."
"Huh..." She looked around what looked like a small, square ampitheatre, to find several... hers gathered around. "A bunch of mes... odd, but pretty neat." She nodded. "So what are we talking about?"
"Who else but Secchan?" Came another Konoka. She didn't look very different, but she had very lecherous eyes. "Or should I say Onee-sama?"
"Onee-sama?!" Konoka reeled back.
"In my world, we're related~" This Konoka answered, a sly grin on her face. The original decided she reeked of decadence.
"Hey, children are present!" Yelled her other self. "Please watch what you say!"
"I don't mind!" Called a tiny voice, who bounded up and came towards her and the other. She was a tiny thing, no older than 6. "If we're talking about Stalker-sama, then I want to know it all!" She permitted herself to have a piggyback ride on the original, who gasped for a moment before easily smiling and adjusting.
"You say that now..."
The child just giggled.
"Nothing says 'I own you' like 'Stalker-sama'," Came a wistful voice. Konoka looked over to see another her—this one with white hair. "I wish I came up with that when she was that age." Konoka was heavily reminded of Eva, but couldn't figure out why—that was, until she gave a lecherous grin, highlighted with sharp canines.
"She can stalk me anytime~" Came another Konoka. She looked normal on the outset, but Konoka could have sworn she had a knife, and her face was a little paler. "Of course, she better be good at it, or Daddy might make me punish her again..."
The original felt slightly weirded out by this. "Well ahh..."
"I know what you're thinking," Barked a lower voice. Konoka turned around to see an older form of herself, dressed regally in Kansai robes. "Aren't these mes a little weird? Well, we have to be. Secchan throws her life on the line for us, we must show our appreciation in turn!"
"Really?" Konoka questioned. "But shouldn't that be shown through peace and love?"
"Will it be enough? Lest we forget, Secchan is half-demon. Many loathe her for mixed blood. That's why I'll rule the world... for her sake!"
Konoka sank into the ground and tried not to cry. I could become a supervillain?!
"Relax, relax! Things could be worse!" Came a much cheerier older voice. Konoka looked up to see a version of herself with—interesting horns. And a white tail. And magical power that would break scouters. "She could be gone entirely." She paused. "...that actually happened to me! Secchaaaaaaannn!" And she broke into tears, sobbing profusely. Konoka saw white wings grow out of her back and shield her for her embarrassing display.
"That's bull and you know it. She's inside you as a soul right now!" The other older Konoka poked her.
"What?" The demonic Konoka peeked out of her wings, eyes still shining with tears.
"That's right! I bet your soul is having sex with hers at this very moment. I'm jealous~" Came the call of that one perverted Konoka (which means all of them, but we're referring to the decadent one particularly).
Konoka groaned and smacked her head on the table. "My future is going to be sad, isn't it?" The younger Konoka poked her in concern.
"Unless you take matters into your own hands!" The empirical Konoka cried, but another her sailed in and smashed her face with a Dynamic Entry. "GUUUAUUGH!"
"Please don't pay her any mind. So long as you stay with Secchan thick or thin, your future will be bright!" It was a third older Konoka, this one was the most developed out of all present. "It might be a good idea to marry Negi-kun to keep Grandpa off your back, but if you make him appreciate girl on girl, he definitely won't interfere."
The younger Konokas actually considered this.
"That's true," Konoka's other noted. "Negi-kun's got pactios with the whole class in my world, but if I win, I think I could secure a future with Secchan too!"
"That just makes you a traitor..." groaned the mad Konoka on the ground.
"And that just makes you stupid," The white-haired vampire Konoka sneered, though her sneer looked just like any other brand of Konoka smile to the average onlooker. "Any advantage to keep Secchan close should be considered."
"Really."
Said argument, however, stopped when the door opened. In walked Setsuna Sakurazaki. "Ojou-sama, I thought about what I could do and—" She stopped. What the hell did she just walk into. What the hell did she just walk into?
All Konokas, even the original, stopped what they were doing and immediately stared. And then went for the loving dogpile. "SECCHAN~<3!"
Asuna would later describe this event as "Armageddon—for Setsuna's chastity."
edited 9th Apr '12 8:43:53 PM by Cygnus
You know you want to add more tropes to THIS.*rereads the first 19 chapters of Out of Control to remind himself of what's happened*
WHAT THE HELL IS THIS MESS?!
Yeah, laundry list! We have:
- original canon
- Shaft canon
- Decadent Habits
- Preschool version from Ito Bun
- Joker!Konoka
- Vampire!Konoka
- Evil!Konoka from When Light Descends to Madness
- Demon!Konoka
- Bisexual!Konoka from Her and His and Her Circumstances
At the time I wrote this, I don't think Unequally Konoka or Anya's Konoka stood out. I also considered the-Konoka-that-hates-Secchan from The F word, but that story was most unfortunately taken down. I also considered some fights between the stronger ones.
You know you want to add more tropes to THIS.FINALLY finished the exposition!
“We all know the story,” Chao said. “On the night of her tenth birthday, Evangeline was turned into a vampire. Her parents were tragically killed, but on their graves, she swore to fight the evil that took their lives. Knowing her enemies to be a superstitious and cowardly lot, she took on the persona of–, hey wait a minute, how did that get into my cue cards?” Other-Chao said, suddenly frantically tapping her tablet. A series of chibis appeared as she did so, consisting of Nodoka on Yue’s lap being spanked (both Nodokas and Yue blushed, while the Harunas grinned gleefully), Asuna in glass coffin, Negi as some kind of berserker demon with blood– or was that fire?– dripping from his mouth, Nagi and Arika– or was that Negi and Evangeline?– kissing passionately while standing on his floating staff, Setsuna on Konoka’s lap being spanked– both Setsunas panicked as the Konoe parents sweatdropped– before finally settling on a pink-haired girl holding a sign that said ‘Gotcha!’.
Other-Chao’s eyebrow twitched. “I see the genetic tendency to be petty lives on.” She sighed, and tapped her control, and the presentation picked up where it left off, with a hologram of a really hot Evangeline. You know, for fanservice. “Ahem. So, as the popular story goes, Eva-sama was turned on the night of her tenth birthday, and as a result of her bloodlust wiped out nearly all of her clan–”
“How the heck do you know this story?” Evangeline demanded. “Have you been using time travel to spy on me?”
Other-Chao blinked. “Why, not at all, Eva-sama. The epic romance of your transformation was a popular story in my time. There are several beautiful movies based on it. I particularly like the one starring your daughter–”
Eva spat out her tea. “BWAH?-!” she demanded, wide-eyed.
Other-Chao grinned. “Kidding! Gotcha there, didn’t I?”
“I thought Martians can’t lie?” Sakurazaki said blandly.
“Yes, well, I never said anything about us not having a sense of humor,” Other-Chao said.
"Chao, you have five seconds to explain how you know all this…" Eva growled.
other-Chao rolled her eyes. "I bugged the infirmary you were recovering in during Mahorafest! There, happy?"
"Not really," Eva growled, her nails elongating
“Now Master, calm down…!” Erebus said frantically, taking hold of her hands. He clasped them between his as he looked deep into her eyes beseechingly. “Master, in know you must be upset, but please, Chao-san is only trying to help. We all are. Give her a chance!“
He seemed not to notice the rapid change of Eva’s face from vampire-pale to tomato red. No one else did, however.
“Um, is Evangeline-san all right?” Negi asked in concern. “She seems to be flushed. Did she catch a cold again?”
“Yeah, she’s got Negi fever…” Kuro said in a snide undertone. “Seriously, am I the only one who doesn’t get it?”
Somewhere, the Joker sneezed.
“W-well..!” Evangeline said, turning her face away quickly and trying to pull her hands away. There was a ‘tsun!’. “I-I suppose I can hold off on beating her to a pulp until later… blood of Mars, my host wants you, do her please…” Evangeline blanched, before she literally tried to strangle herself.
Erebus blinked on confusion. “Master?”
“G-get oN WiTH iiiit…!” Eva choked out around her own steel-strong hands. “Run run run run run run run runrunrunrun…”
“Should we be concerned?” Batman said.
“No, like all creatures of darkness and the night, she’s in denial about her basic humanity and human affection…” Chachamaru said.
Everyone looked at the gynoid. “What?” Negi asked.
“I said Evangeline-san is a creature of the night and as such, she’s in den–” was as far as she got before Eva kicked her in the face.
Chao and Hakase glared at Evangeline.
Other-Chao coughed. “Ahem. Anyway, Evangeline-san was for several years a wholly unremarkable vampire on the path to being just another Dead Apostle. The only remarkable thing about her was her status as a statistical anomaly in recovering her wits in a few minutes, a nearly unheard of phenomena in regards to Dead Apostle-strain vampires. Until she drew the attention of Type-Moon.”
Other-Chao made a vague gesture of annoyance. “In all honesty, I don’t know why Type-Moon chose Eva-sama as a host. It could have been anything from boredom to mercy to pity. Regardless, what is known is that two hundred years after her conversion, Eva-sama became the physical host of Type-Moon. It was around this time that she began apparently ‘outgrowing’ her vampiric weaknesses– sunlight, running water, crosses, that sort of thing. It lay within her, altering her physiology to optimize her as a host of Type-Moon, making her into a Shinso.”
Kagurazaka snapped her fingers dramatically. “Ah, that’s why Eva’s so crazy powerful, isn’t it! She’s been tapping into the power of this Type-Moon thing, isn’t she?” She smiled widely, as if she’d just realized some big weakness in Evangeline.
“No, Eva-sama is just that badass and crazy powerful,” Other-Chao said, and Kagurazaka deflated. “Eva-sama has never touched Type-Moon’s power. It’s just lain there, dormant inside her… until a few days ago.”
“Hakase’s crazy experiment…” Kuro said.
Other-Chao nodded. “When you were all sent here following the accident, it triggered an alert on one of my sensors. You being sent outside of our multiverse was essentially the same as you being removed from the timeline without explanation, and I couldn’t have that. I was alerted to the situation, and followed you. On the trip however, it became apparent that some time during the voyage, Eva and Type-Moon were separated due to the altered Anature of the Second Magic as it interacted with Hakase’s experiment. Eva landed in Mahora with the rest of you. Type-Moon, however, was a spiritual being, and thus was thrown a lot farther. It only settled down in the Kyoto Area when it finally managed to manifest a physical form, but the shock of manifestation coupled with the experiment left it unconscious. It was then that Chigusa found it, and subsequently began weaponizing it.”
“Weaponizing it?” Eishun said sharply, concerned.
“Type-Moon and others of her level are too powerful to be controlled with magic, unless it’s specifically tailored to them,” Other-Chao said. “So they’re not using magic.”
“Tetch!” Batman swore.
Chao nodded. “I think they’re going to try and use Tetch’s technology to try and use Type-Moon to free Sukuna. Tetch was taking too long, however, and the opportunity to use Konoka made itself known. And we’re back to where we are.”
“We can’t let that happen!” Setsuna declared frantically. “The idea of oujo-sama being used in that manner… in any manner…!”
“It gets worse,” Other-Chao said. “I checked on them half an hour ago. Apparently, Tetch has finished whatever device he needs to control Type-Moon’s power. Now, in addition the Konokas, they also have her power to feed to Sukuna.”
“With that much power… Sukuna will be unstoppable…” Takamichi said.
“Or Sukuna overloads somehow, killing it and destroying the entre city and most of the surrounding countryside, possibly setting off the major faults lines under Japan and beginning a chain reaction of volcanoes that starts the next ice age,” Chao pointed out. “That much power… if they’re going to try and use machinery to channel it… untested machinery at that…” She shook her head. “I’m a great scientific genius, and even I wouldn’t risk that!”
“Well, you’re too much of a wonderful, caring, compassionate human being to do such a dangerous thing,” Other Chao said.
“True,” Chao agreed.
“How do we stop them?” Natsuki asked, getting straight to the point. Konoeko decided she liked her.
“Only one vessel on the planet is up to the task of containing Type-Moon.” Other-Chao said. “Eva-sama.”
“Me?” Evangeline said warily. “Why me yes yes yes yes yes yes save me help me run run run runrunrunRUN…!-!-!-!-!”
“She specifically altered you to make herself more at home,” Other-Chao pointed out. “If you manage to make contact with her, I think you’ll be able to revive her enough to get her to seal herself back inside you.”
“You think?” Evangeline said. “Are you guessing runrunrunrunrunrunrunrunrun!-!-!-!-!-!”
Other-Chao hesitated, but sighed. “Yes. After all, I’ve never seen you really interact until now. I have no empirical evidence to draw on.”
“Ha ha!” Saotome laughed. “Don’t worry, Chao-chan! Fortunately, the heroic tradition is with you! Everyone knows a guess is always 100 percent right!”
Haruna nodded enthusiastically, giving the other Chao a thumbs up. “That’s right! My dad made all sorts of stupid guesses in battle all the time, and it hasn’t killed him yet!”
Other-Chao began to look worried. “Okay, now I’m getting worried. When Haruna agrees with you, it’s a bad sign. When two do…”
“Smart girl,” Calculator and Chisame chorused, then blinked and looked at each other.
Matoi swooned. “Ah, stereo Chisame-sama action…!”
Erebus sighed and turned to Evangeline, who sat with her head bowed. “Master, I know you don’t want to get involved, but should we happen toget you close enough, could you try and…”
Evangeline began to laugh, a low, slow sound. “He he he he he… ha ha ha ha ha ha… BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!-!-!-!-!” Evangeline roared, throwing back her head.
“M-master?” Erebus asked in concern as Ala Alba frowned at her curiously, Kagurazaka looking annoyed.
“Oh my…” a voice that very much wasn’t Evangeline’s rose from her throat. It was a semi-familiar voice that had everyone on alert. “My, such an interesting story. To think that not only do I have a goddess in my hands… but the great Dark Evangel herself. Truly, I am blessed. When I become a goddess, I’ll have to thank whichever coworker smiled upon me… runrunrun…!”
Both Setsunas swords were out of their sheaths. “Chigusa!” they cried in surprise.
“It looks like Tetch-sama is better than I thought…” ‘Eva’ continued, raising her hand slowly, wonderingly, and clenching and unclenching it. “The power and memories of the Dark Evangel herself… shall we test it out…?”
An arctic wind exploded around her as everyone cried, darting back.
“Actus Noctis Erebea!” Eva cried as power rushed around her…
Also need a scene where the planning meeting brings up Eva's singing issue, which is the lead in to Other-Chao's entrance...
edited 9th Apr '12 9:17:06 PM by SCMof2814
She crushes on Negi, like every female does, and Setsuna. That's makes her bisexual.

@No Limit: Objection! The last chapter confirmed Madoka for having a fetish for black-haired dogboys, which makes her more of a furry than Natsumi, whose crush just happens to be a dogboy.
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