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SeptimusHeap from Switzerland (Edited uphill both ways) Relationship Status: Mu
#1: Jul 21st 2022 at 2:44:18 PM

The flag here for Hell's Loud was sent with the rationale

According to the work page a bunch of adult succubi fall in love with a 12 year old.

"For a successful technology, reality must take precedence over public relations, for Nature cannot be fooled." - Richard Feynman
Berrenta Bejeweled (she/her) (Ten years in the joint) Relationship Status: I made a point to burn all of the photographs
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#2: Jul 26th 2022 at 10:00:51 AM

Looking at the examples, we have a clear plot that would point towards keeping the page.

As for the moment discussed in the report, we need to determine how graphic it is. If they're just falling for him, that's different from doing the squicky deed. If it's minor enough, we can just not reference it, but if it's too much, that's points against it.

Edited by Berrenta on Jul 26th 2022 at 12:05:55 PM

underCoverSailsman Peeks from Under Rocks from State of Flux Since: Jan, 2021 Relationship Status: [TOP SECRET]
Peeks from Under Rocks
#3: Jul 26th 2022 at 10:37:50 AM

Found on the character page, grouped under the general folder for "Verosika and Crew" (The Succubi in question):

  • Virgin Power: Chastity is like a drug to succubi. Lincoln coming into the studio Verosika and her crew were working in was like dumping a big pile of sugar into a beehive. The women waste no time in swarming Lincoln and covering his face with lipstick.

On the ficpage:

  • Likes Older Women: Downplayed. While under the effects of the truth bomb, Lincoln openly admits that he likes Verosika Mayday and his hallucination has him fantasizing about her dating him. So it's sort of liking a specific older woman.

Related to ^, LL's character page has

  • Dirty Kid: Under the effects of the truth gas he says he likes being hugged to Verosika's chest and the attention of her posse. ficpage tropes this as Marshmallow Hell

Edited by underCoverSailsman on Jul 26th 2022 at 12:40:58 PM

mightymewtron Word Up from New New York Since: Oct, 2012 Relationship Status: THIS CONCEPT OF 'WUV' CONFUSES AND INFURIATES US!
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#4: Jul 26th 2022 at 11:13:48 AM

Glancing the description, it says, "Rated M just to make sure," and that lack of confidence in the rating suggests that it's not too explicit.

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SeptimusHeap from Switzerland (Edited uphill both ways) Relationship Status: Mu
#5: Sep 3rd 2022 at 2:32:03 AM

Bumping to get it out of the stack of locked threads.

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SeptimusHeap from Switzerland (Edited uphill both ways) Relationship Status: Mu
#7: Sep 24th 2022 at 12:59:01 AM

Bumping to get it out of the stack of locked threads.

"For a successful technology, reality must take precedence over public relations, for Nature cannot be fooled." - Richard Feynman
underCoverSailsman Peeks from Under Rocks from State of Flux Since: Jan, 2021 Relationship Status: [TOP SECRET]
Peeks from Under Rocks
#8: Sep 24th 2022 at 9:14:42 PM

Does anyone know where the interaction with the succubi starts?

I tried skimming this one, but the grammar is so bad that it can't be skimmed and makes it painful to read.

Amonimus the "Retromancer" from <<|Wiki Talk|>> (Sergeant) Relationship Status: In another castle
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#9: Sep 25th 2022 at 6:08:00 PM

I'll give it a read in spare time to clear this out. It's not a short fic though.

First chapter out of 16, pretty much a tamer early Helluva Boss episode, but with Lincoln Loud being dragged into plot. I'll post if I see something of note or when done.

e: half-way through. Met the reported succubus, nothing interesting happened, but the author note says she'll get more appearances later.

e: 13/16.

Edited by Amonimus on Sep 29th 2022 at 9:06:51 PM

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Amonimus the "Retromancer" from <<|Wiki Talk|>> (Sergeant) Relationship Status: In another castle
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#10: Sep 29th 2022 at 3:02:48 PM

    Notes 
Half of it is a copypaste of Helluva Boss but with this distressed Lincoln (12) as Tag Along Kid. Since the fic doesn't want to deviate from the sources, he mostly just sticks nose into everyone's personal issues or provides conviniently-timed support magic. I probably didn't have to read it that throughly.

There are also in-between fan episodes for the B-plot of Lincoln learning The Power of Hate magic (and to swear) and bonding with the cast. Somehow, they go out of their way to not put this kid and Hulluva's 18+ humor in the same context like he has some Children Are Innocent type Plot Armor and imps for some reason make sure he doesn't see, say or do any vulgar stuff (can't do anything about Blitz's Sir Swears-a-Lot though), though they teach him weapons. He still doesn't get to kill anyone.

The amout of typos is offensive though.

The "Helluva Boss S1E3 "Spring Broken"" adaptation is when it gets relevant here because it has the reported succubus and her team. They don't hide they're magnetically hungry for his "unspoiled chastity" and basically kidnap him, but they don't really say what they were planning to do to him. He was "bombarded with kisses" and specifically notes they "didn't take things any further" before Blitz barges in and bails him out. "Lincoln staying with them for a week" gets added to the parking lot duel bet and Blitz agrees. As in the original, Verosika loses, however she gets some Adaptational Heroism near the end and Lincoln covers her from cops, and later she makes flirty selfies to "mysterious L.L." on her socials, which he avoids checking.

In "Helluva Boss S1E6 "Truth Seekers"" adaptation, under a hallucination, Lincoln slips he wouldn't mind being hugged by Verosika again (the wording is ambiguous if it's Marshmallow Hell or he gets faceplanted into her) and then enjoys her company when her copy appears... and immediatelly snaps out of it when he remembers all the hardships so far. Later he hears on a radio that she went rehab but doesn't comment. Her bodyguard/ex-boyfriend later inform him the girls are still interested in him despite being a kid and Lincoln avoids the topic.

In "Helluva Boss S1E7 "OZZIE'S"" adaptation the team flat out refuse to bring the kid to the bar just in case the succubuses happen to be there, though he wonders how's she doing. Then Blitz drags him along anyway. Lincoln manages to walk through the red light district by avoiding eye contact. Turns out she is there and has a What Is This Feeling? crisis. He fails to sneak out and has to hear out rounds of flirt from her entire posse. He defuses them with real complients and drunk Verosika goes on a relationship advice. The original plot happens and the gang is asked to leave. Before that Lincoln comments on her relationship with Blitz and girls give him face kisses and phone numbers.

The latest chapter so far is Lincoln helping Blitz's hangover while (finally) showing how's The Loud Family has been holding up last few months, so it's not 5P relevant.


Despite the M rating, being a part of vulgar demonic assasin team, and the kid having to interact with succubuses, the kid isn't put in any situation that isn't family unfriendly and shows no romantic interest. And romantic interest towards him is a mix of demonic biology and Because You Were Nice to Me, and doesn't get much development.

So I'd call false alarm here, though not an invalid reason to check.

Edited by Amonimus on Sep 29th 2022 at 1:16:03 PM

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#11: Sep 29th 2022 at 3:14:12 PM

Solid Keep than

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#13: Sep 29th 2022 at 4:04:38 PM

Looks like a keep.

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Siegfried1337 Calabash. from The Eastern Luminant Since: Sep, 2018 Relationship Status: Will you go out with me to the End?
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#14: Sep 29th 2022 at 7:34:59 PM

Reiterating my keep vote, this time it's for sure.

Eh, good enough.
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SeptimusHeap from Switzerland (Edited uphill both ways) Relationship Status: Mu
#17: Sep 30th 2022 at 8:16:33 AM

Looks like we have a consensus to keep here. I'll do the record-keeping; closing in the meantime.

"For a successful technology, reality must take precedence over public relations, for Nature cannot be fooled." - Richard Feynman
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