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Edited by Mrph1 on Nov 16th 2023 at 5:37:57 PM

Melinda Since: Dec, 2019 Relationship Status: Puppy love
#19076: Jul 15th 2022 at 8:15:35 AM

Thanks

@ Power Rangers Jungle Fury

  • Master Swoop introduces himself to the Rangers by levitating with his powers and snarking about how they're testing his blindness by waving in front of his eyes (which he picks up on even though he really is blind). It's debatable whether any of the other masters establish their chops quite as fast as Swoop does in that moment.

@ The Scooby-Doo Show

  • Screw This, I'm Outta Here!:
    • Prior to "The Gruesome Game of the Gator Ghoul", all of the workers at the showboat restaurant quit out of fear of the winter except for the bookkeeper and a dishwasher. The bookkeeper is the culprit.
    • In "The Spooky Case of the Grand Prix Race," one of the race car drivers says that he's leaving after another driver is kidnapped, although three other drivers affirm that they're staying. Unusually for the show, the man who leaves because of the kidnapping is innocent and one of the other three drivers is the culprit.

@ Men of Sherwood

  • The Dark Knight Returns: The Sons of Batman Vigilante Militia made up of ex-gang members takes a while to become non-violent enough for Batman to trust them, but they help break up a riot after a blackout, and help stock his new Bat-cave after he fakes his death at the end.

@ The King Nobody Wanted

  • Actually Pretty Funny: After Aerys, during Tywin's wedding about twenty years ago, compared himself to all of the great kins of the Westeros, Tytos added Aegon the Unworthy and Maegor the Cruel to that list. The king actually laughed after a brief Stunned Silence.

@ Batman (1966)

@ Prom Wars

  • Canada Does Not Exist: The film is a Canadian production but the characters act like they're in the average American teen movie, and the only thing to explicitly imply the movie is set in Canada and not the U.S. is that the schools have prefects and head girls, student government positions that exist in the Commonwealth of Nations but not the U.S.

Free Willy 3: The Rescue

Tropes:

  • Beware the Nice Ones: This movie marks the first-time that heroic and noble orca Willy unambiguously tries to kill a human, a whaler who has made repeated attempts to kill him.
  • Broken Pedestal: Max has a great relationship with his father in the first few scenes and is excited about his first voyage on the family fishing boat. His sense of respect for his father is badly damaged after the first time he sees him poach a whale.
  • Evil Poacher: The antagonists are fishermen who are illegally killing protected whales and selling them to Japan as sushi. They get a slightly more sympathetic portrayal than usual, as John is a loving Family Man, his crewmen are mostly nice to Tag Along Kid Max, they never try to kill any of the human protagonists, and they eventually get a Heel Realization. Nonetheless, they are brutally killing intelligent mammals in violation of the law and John even acknowledges there's no real purpose to it beyond the money, while his ancestors could at least say and believe that they were lighting up the world by harvesting whale oil for lamps.
  • Heel Realization: John and his whaling crew finally realize that the whales are more than unintelligent "fish" and that hunting them is wrong after Willy saves John's life due to pleas from Jesse and Max even though Willy tried to kill John a couple of minutes earlier.
  • Obstructive Bureaucrat: Captain Drake is in charge of the research vessel Jesse and Randolph are working on and spends most of his time telling them not to do much to stop the whaling because it isn't their job and the research boat is too expensive to risk damaging.
  • Put on a Bus: Glen, Annie, and Elvis don't appear in this film, although the former two are mentioned, as Jesse is living and working away from home during the movie.

@ Free Willy 3 The Rescue

  • Contested Sequel: Some fans consider this to be weaker than the previous two movies due to it not giving as much depth and focus to Jesse and Willy's relationship. Others feel that it's better than the second movie and maybe even better than the original film, due to having some good performances and a more compelling and realistic, but still family-friendly, plot.

@ John Putnam Thatcher

  • Ivy League for Everyone: Pretty much everyone who holds a notable rank at the Sloan or one of its contemporary banks, brokerage houses, or big corporations went to either Harvard or Dartmouth. Come to Dust heavily features Dartmouth's admissions process and endowment system.

Edited by Melinda on Jul 16th 2022 at 7:36:33 AM

miraculous Goku Black (Apprentice)
Goku Black
#19077: Jul 15th 2022 at 2:30:17 PM

Power Rangers Time Force character page

Ransik

  • Diabolical Mastermind: An intelligent criminal mastermind who basically ruled and threatened the entire city with his army which he forged through his sheer charisma and will power. Unlike other villains in the franchise, Ransik also desires both power and money and his schemes are often geared just as much towards increasing his wealth as it is to plots to destroy the city like a classic Power Rangers Big Bad.

  • Faux Affably Evil: Ransik is calm, cultured and snarky and even pretty funny at times but can get very nasty if he's pushed towards his enemies and is even willing to threaten his minions if they get out of line. That he said is genuinely kind to his daughter.

Nadira

  • The Heavy: Her father Ransik is the Big Bad but is a laidback sort and prefers to plot in the background usually which leaves Nadira as the one who usually leads the monster attacks on the city as well directly attacking the Time Force rangers.

Edited by miraculous on Jul 15th 2022 at 2:32:26 AM

"That's right mortal. By channeling my divine rage into power, I have forged a new instrument in which to destroy you."
Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19078: Jul 16th 2022 at 8:19:35 AM

[up] @Melinda

...dishwasher. The bookkeeper is the culprit.

Unusually for the show, the man who leaves because of the kidnapping is...

After Aerys, <- comma at Tywin's wedding, compares himself to all of the great kings of the Westeros...Maegor the Cruel to that list.

^ As originally written, you said that all of the great kings of the Westeros were at Tywin's wedding. When you put one phrase (e.g. "at Tywin's wedding") right after another phrase (e.g. "all of the great kings of the Westeros"), the second phrase modifies or applies to the preceding phrase. To make it clear what you mean, you need to put the phrase as close as possible after what it's modifying, as I did in my correction, not tack it on at the end of the sentence.

In the "Zodiac Crimes" three-parter, Venus's...

^ See above. If a phrase applies to the entire sentence, it goes at the beginning.

...there are far more scenes of Scatter Brained Senior and wannabe witch Hilda gathering...

...teen movie, <- comma and...student government positions that exist in the...

^ In order to say "are used", you would need to change it to "student government position titles that are used..." A position by itself can't be "used" in this way.

Nonetheless, they are brutally killing intelligent mammals in...

^ Whales are mammals, not fish.

...whales are more than unintelligent mammals and...even though Willy tried...of minutes earlier.

Some fans consider this to be weaker than the previous two movies due to it not giving...

Edited by Arivne on Jul 16th 2022 at 9:05:52 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19079: Jul 16th 2022 at 8:36:08 AM

[up] @miraculous

...his army, <- comma which...money, <- comma and...wealth as they are to plots...

...times, <- comma but...he's pushed towards his enemies and...line. That said, he is...

^ "pushed towards his enemies" is not correct English, but I can't tell what you meant to write. Threatened/endangered by? Challenged by? Forced to fight?

Her father Ransik is the Big Bad, <- comma but...background, <- comma which usually leaves...who usually leads...well as directly...Force Rangers.

miraculous Goku Black (Apprentice)
Goku Black
#19080: Jul 16th 2022 at 10:37:59 AM

Challenged by works best? I'll change it to that.

Other than that thank you arivne

"That's right mortal. By channeling my divine rage into power, I have forged a new instrument in which to destroy you."
Nukeli Since: Aug, 2018
#19081: Jul 16th 2022 at 11:28:46 AM

@ Forced into Evil

  • Wonder Woman (1942): Paula von Gunther, Wonder Woman's first recurring villain, was eventually revealed to be working for the Nazis because they were holding her daughter Gerta hostage. When Gerta is rescued, she swiftly switches sides and defects to Paradise Island.

@ Wonder Woman (1942) (Paula von Gunther's folder)

@ Smart People Build Robots

  • Alfred J. Kwak: A season 2 episode randomly shows the titular Alfred building a robot in his house. It briefly runs amok when he's on the phone, and is never mentioned again afterwards.

~*bleh*~
kawaiineko333 (4 Score & 7 Years Ago)
#19082: Jul 16th 2022 at 11:42:09 AM

Metalocalypse S 2 E 14 Dethsources

  • Initiation Ceremony: Groupies who manage to survive training and become Klokateers are cattle branded on the back of their neck with a gear-shaped brand, welcoming them into the fold.
  • There Is No Kill Like Overkill: Offdensen throwing Melmord off of Mordhaus's roof was sufficient enough to kill him. The Mordhaus train running over his body made sure he's not coming back.

Avenger09 Since: May, 2014
#19083: Jul 16th 2022 at 1:52:58 PM

The Dragon Prince

Callum is Demiromantic
  • So far, the only girls he's shown any romantic interest in were Claudia, a childhood friend, who he fell out of love with when she betrayed their close bond, and Rayla, someone he'd grown to admire and respect as A True Hero and who in time declared him to be her best friend. His romance with Rayla, especially, has the feeling of it being an extension of their friendship.

Clare Since: Aug, 2009
#19084: Jul 16th 2022 at 2:05:59 PM

@ Nukeli

Forced into Evil

  • Wonder Woman (1942): Paula von Gunther, Wonder Woman's first recurring villain, is eventually revealed to be working for the Nazis because they are holding her daughter Gerta hostage. When Gerta is rescued, Paula swiftly switches sides and defects to Paradise Island.
^ Be careful how you use pronouns if you have two or more characters of the same gender as it can become hard to tell which pronouns refer to which characters. The "she" in the second sentence could refer to either Paula or Gerta.

Wonder Woman (1942) Paula von Gunther

^ Type Labels Are Not Examples. In fact, they're considered a form of Zero-Context Example because they tell the reader nothing about how the trope is used in the work. Rather than simply saying "Type 1, as she initially works for the Nazis", talk about the traits she has that make her come across as a villainous character.

Smart People Build Robots

  • Alfred J. Kwak: A season 2 episode randomly shows the titular Alfred building a robot in his house. The robot briefly runs amok when he's on the phone, and is never mentioned again afterwards.
^ Zero-Context Example. You've got the bit about building a robot, but you don't say anything about Alfred being smart, which is what's required to meet the criteria for this trope. Also, the way you wrote the second sentence makes it sound like his house "briefly runs amok."

Edited by Clare on Jul 16th 2022 at 10:10:07 AM

AsrulGuza A QUINCY Since: Jul, 2022 Relationship Status: All is for my lord
A QUINCY
#19085: Jul 16th 2022 at 6:52:03 PM

For character section of Agent Ali

  • Beta Bitch: Rizka is this to Sam. As they really get along to each other and both of them very arrogant and look down the young agents by consider them as a loser.
  • The Bully: Sam and his team payback the Young Agents prank with harsh prank. Such as making Mika wheelchair's and R-O malfunction, put ugly make up on Rudy's face and later put extra spicy sauce at the Young Agents sandwich.
  • Animal Motif : Bear. Aleks has intimidating size and personality. He also use wrestle as his fighting style as shown when he grapple Rudy for the first time.
  • Came Back Strong: In season 2 Rizwan suffer fatal blood poisoning due to his injury not fully healed and his condition get worsen due to microbugs inside his body that implanted by Uno. Season 3 he finally able to takes a action to protecting innocent and take down Numeros with no fear of being controlled back by Cinco thanks to Cuatro efforts to heal him by wipe out the microbugs on his body.
  • Combat Pragmatist: Aleks has no problem use violent brute force to beat his opponent just like how he first time introduce where he easily defeat Mika and Rudy by slamming them.
  • Fire-Forged Friends: Ali pull this with Kim in second round of Arena to defend themselves from the droids and senior agents. They trusting for each other to defeat their mentors and the droids by perform combination attack.
  • Everyone Has Standards : Despite of his jovial and easy-going side and sometime playfully tease to everyone around him, In "Payback" Bakar still consider the prank, food wars and fighting each other during second round that the Young Agents and the International Agents pulled are petty action. He also scold his own nephew for joining them by reminds him that his mother never do such the things.
  • Small Role, Big Impact: Wak Musang just a minor character who worked as information breaker for criminal and being trusted by Dos to take care I.R.I.S for Uno. Due to his mistook Ali as the one who wanted I.R.I.S instead Uno after the young boy accidentally tell the code to him, Wak Musang give it to Ali and resulting on him being target of Numeros.
  • Token Good Teammate : Kim is the only one in Sam's team who less antagonistic toward the young agents. She even willingly socialize with them even combine her skill with Ali during second round.

Edited by AsrulGuza on Jul 16th 2022 at 9:43:05 AM

Melinda Since: Dec, 2019 Relationship Status: Puppy love
#19086: Jul 16th 2022 at 8:35:25 PM

I said fish instead of mammal because I was paraphrasing the characters.

@ The Cooler

  • Evil Is Cool: Mob-Affiliated Control Freak casino manager Shelly is a monstrously cruel and corrupt guy in a lot of scenes, but his clinging to the nostalgia of old Las Vegas and sleek, authoritative manner make him an engaging character even without his Pet the Dog moments.
  • One-Scene Wonder: Buddy, the world-weary, heroin-addicted old school lounge singer who spends his one scene being a Morality Pet of sorts for Shelly and displaying some impressive insight about how the two of them are facing the End of an Age.
  • They Wasted a Perfectly Good Plot: It can feel wasteful how Bernie never interacts with his son and daughter-in-law again after he finds out they were using him, they watch him assume a large debt to protect them, and Mikey gets injured in a way a lot like Bernie did six years ago.

@ Men of Sherwood

  • The Death of Stalin: General Zhukov and his soldiers do almost all of the work in the coup against Hate Sink Beria, while Krushchev and the other politicians merely stand poised to conduct a show trial and then step into Beria's shoes. Zhukov and his men succeed almost effortlessly.

@ The Incredibles

    Chad 

Chad Brantley

Voiced by: Adam Gates

A talk-show host who appears in the second movie. Both of his attempts to interview Elastigirl are interrupted by Screenslaver.


  • Lantern Jaw of Justice: He has a long jaw and thick chin and is a media personality who seems interested in helping superheroes make a comeback.
  • Nice Guy: He's polite to Elastigirl during both of her visits to his show. The second time, he also seems fine with talking about how he got hypnotized and embarrassed by Screenslaver earlier in the film.
  • Sharp-Dressed Man: As befitting a TV personality, he wears nice suits.

Edited by Melinda on Jul 17th 2022 at 6:45:39 AM

Clare Since: Aug, 2009
#19087: Jul 17th 2022 at 4:23:32 AM

@ AsrulGuza

Agent Ali

  • Beta Bitch: Rizka is this to Sam. (superfluous word - cut) They really get along with each other and both of them are very arrogant and look down on the young Agents, (comma, superfluous word - cut) considering them losers.
^ Saying a character "is this" is considered a Zero-Context Example as it tells the reader nothing about what "this" is nor how it is used in the work. Even with context, it becomes Word Cruft of the "this is an example" variety. Also, I'm not sure if Alpha Bitch and Beta Bitch can apply if one of the characters is male; you might want another trope.

  • The Bully: Sam and his team payback the young Agents' pranks with harsh pranks of their own. These include making Mika's wheelchair and R-O malfunction, putting ugly make up on Rudy's face, (comma) and later putting extra spicy sauce in the young Agents' sandwiches.

  • Animal Motif : Bear. Aleks is a big guy with an intimidating personality. He also uses wrestling as his fighting style as shown when he grapples Rudy for the first time.

  • Came Back Strong: In season 2 Rizwan suffers fatal blood poisoning due to his injury not having fully healed and his condition gets worse due to Microbugs inside his body that were implanted by Uno. In season 3 he is finally able to take (superfluous word - cut) action to protect the innocent and take down the Numeros with no fear of being controlled (superfluous word - cut) by Cinco thanks to Cuatro's efforts to heal him by wiping out the Microbugs in his body.

  • Combat Pragmatist: Aleks has no problem using violent brute force to beat his opponents just like in his introduction where he easily defeats Mika and Rudy by slamming them.

  • Fire-Forged Friends: Ali and Kim team up in the second round of the Arena to defend themselves from the droids and senior Agents. They work together to defeat their mentors and the droids by performing combination attacks.
^ It's "pulls this with Kim", not "pull this with Kim", if Ali is the only one doing the action. That's a Zero-Context Example anyway as it tells the reader nothing about what he "pulls". I changed that bit to talk about him and Kim teaming up. Also, "trusting for each other" isn't correct English, so I changed it to "work together."

  • Everyone Has Standards : Despite (superfluous words - cut) sometimes playfully teasing (superfluous word - cut) everyone around him, (move text) Bakar still considers the pranks, food wars and fighting between the young Agents and the international Agents during the second round in "Payback" (superfluous words - cut) to be petty actions. He also scolds his own nephew for joining them by reminding him that his mother would never do such (superfluous word - cut) things.

  • Small Role, Big Impact: Wak Musang is just a minor character who works as an information broker for criminals and is trusted by Dos to take care of I.R.I.S for Uno. Due to his mistaking Ali instead of Uno for the one who wants I.R.I.S (move text) after the young boy accidentally tells him the code, Wak Musang gives it to Ali, (comma, superfluous word - cut) resulting in him being targeted by the Numeros.

  • Token Good Teammate : Kim is the only one in Sam's team who's not antagonistic toward the young Agents. She even willingly socializes with them and combines her skills with Ali's during the second round.

Edited by Clare on Jul 17th 2022 at 12:32:33 PM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19088: Jul 17th 2022 at 7:25:52 AM

[up] @kawaiineko333

Offdensen throwing Melmord off of Mordhaus's roof was sufficient enough to kill him.

^ Sufficient and enough mean the same thing, so one of them is redundant.

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19089: Jul 17th 2022 at 7:31:38 AM

[up] @Melinda

Mob-affiliated Control Freak casino manager Shelly...

Edited by Arivne on Jul 17th 2022 at 7:31:50 AM

Smoker130 Since: Jul, 2015 Relationship Status: Above such petty unnecessities
#19090: Jul 17th 2022 at 7:40:26 AM

Example of Wrong Genre Savvy:

  • Tantei Opera Milky Holmes: In a moment of genre-savviness during a Closed Circle mystery, Nero accuses the wheelchair-bound old man on the grounds that in detective fiction, it is common for a culprit to fake a disability to avoid suspicion. When the butler is revealed to be the culprit, she dismisses the idea because she knows that "The Butler Did It" was actually never a cliche. What she forgets is that they are in a parody of detective fiction. The butler really did it, and the very obvious clues pointing to him weren't Red Herrings.
    She was right about the old man faking a disability, but he was just their mentor disguised to investigate discreetly and check on how they were doing.

And a example of Memorial for the Antagonist:

  • Embalming: After taking down Wraith, Fury asks Aberdine that his body be brought to the manor where they grew up and given a proper burial and a gravestone, not too far, nor too close to Edel's grave. This is because before dying and being reanimated as a Frankenstein, subsequently turning into a Yandere and killing Edel in a fit of jealousy, Wraith was Fury and Edel's best friend. So while Fury hates Frankenstein!Wraith for what he did, he still wants his friend's body to be buried properly.

Edited by Smoker130 on Jul 17th 2022 at 12:19:37 PM

Minorica Rhythm Heroine from Earth Since: Dec, 2019 Relationship Status: It's so nice to be turned on again
Rhythm Heroine
#19091: Jul 17th 2022 at 8:58:59 AM

Edited by Minorica on Aug 12th 2022 at 10:42:27 PM

"No matter how bad the heroes can get or how bad the situation is, we're sure we can overcome it and get our happy endings..."
Melinda Since: Dec, 2019 Relationship Status: Puppy love
#19092: Jul 17th 2022 at 7:03:33 PM

Thanks

@ Batman (1966)

  • The Bookworm is probably the most popular one-shot Villain of the Week due to his literary-themed capers, his well-developed personality, and his costume (particularly the reading lamp attached to his hat).

@ Batman (1966): Rogues Gallery

    Pauline 

Pauline

Played by: Sherry Jackson
A failed actress who acts as the Riddler's main assistant during his movie-making caper.
  • Decoy Damsel: She wears a Little Bo Peep costume and runs up to Robin, talking about how her brother has been kidnapped. Then, once Robin drops his guard, she gasses him into unconsciousness.
  • Defiant Captive: After being captured, she refuses to tell Batman anything that might help him catch Riddler or rescue a captive Robin. Batman has to use a form of truth serum on her to get any information.
  • Shes Got Legs: One of her costumes bares her legs, something the camera pays attention to.

    Blimpy 

Blimpy

The most prominent of the three aviation-themed thugs working for the Puzzler.

  • Stout Strength: He’s quite plump (and sensitive about it), but is a decent brawler. Blimpy also takes advantage of his girth by sitting on Robin after knocking him down.
  • This Is Gonna Suck: During the climax, he is the first villain to notice that the heroes have arrived and resignedly points at them without saying a word, while sporting an unhappy expression.

Edited by Melinda on Jul 18th 2022 at 11:22:03 AM

kawaiineko333 (4 Score & 7 Years Ago)
#19093: Jul 18th 2022 at 5:04:37 AM

Dead By Daylight Non Playable

Folder->Archie MacMillan

  • Fantasy-Forbidding Father: During Evan's childhood, he forbid him from so much as sketching.
    "Evan enjoys creating something from nothing. He's not an artist, but he enjoys sketching and he hides his sketches from his father. His father forbids sketching. Sketching is for weaklings, vagabonds, gypsies. He wants Evan to do worthy things."
  • Kick Them While They're Down: He kicks and beats a sick mine worker who can't work anymore, fires him, then has Evan drag him out of the mine.

kawaiineko333 (4 Score & 7 Years Ago)
#19094: Jul 18th 2022 at 5:39:00 AM

The Letter

Folder->Ashton

  • Paper-Thin Disguise: If Isabella is alive during Ashton's chapter, when you look at the Open House sign-in sheet, he signed his name as "Ash Lee." Even he realizes that was a boneheaded move since Johannes would not only see through it, but even Isabella calls him out on it.

darknessRising Since: Jun, 2012
#19095: Jul 18th 2022 at 7:15:17 AM

For Friendship is Failure:

Folder-> Tropes Applying to Several Characters

  • Entitled to Have You: Many of the central characters have this attitude when it comes to romantic attraction of any kind, to the point where it's the driving motive behind their action. When their feelings end up unrequited, they (and the narrative) will constantly threat the object of their affections as if they're to blame for their misery and any misfortune that ''they themselves'' inflicted on others, simply because they weren't automatically loved back.

Folder-> Ath-Lita

  • Adaptational Villainy: More recent rewrites tend to make her even more abusive to the point where she doesn't just attack her brother, but random ponies in a rather out of character manner. All for the sake of making Talon look better by comparison.

Folder-> Courier

  • Too Dumb to Live: Chrysalis' curse will kill him if he comes into contact with a "a creature of great love". Despite knowing this he never thinks to skip town the moment he finds out Cadance, The Princess of love, is in the same town as him.

Edited by darknessRising on Jul 18th 2022 at 11:17:19 PM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19096: Jul 18th 2022 at 8:03:53 AM

[up] @Smoker 130

...but he was just their mentor, <- comma disguised to investigate discreetly...

...Fury asks that Aberdine have his body be brought...So, <- comma while Fury hates Frankenstein!Wraith for what he did...

^ This isn't an English correction, but our Characterization Tags policy forbids using terms like "Frankenstein!Wraith".

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19097: Jul 18th 2022 at 8:11:19 AM

[up] @Minorica

...shooting himself in the head...of the main cast mourn for his death in The...sympathize with his...to Heaven or...and, <- comma realizing what he has done...make some amends...Unsurprisingly, <- comma it...and led to the creation of...doesn't die/commit suicide...

...Liangxue Li is dying in Kyōsuke's...

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19098: Jul 18th 2022 at 8:15:22 AM

[up] @Melinda

He’s quite plump (and sensitive about it), <- comma but is a decent brawler.

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19099: Jul 18th 2022 at 8:19:39 AM

[up] @kawaiineko333

During Evan's childhood, his father forbade him from so much as sketching.

Even he realizes that was a boneheaded move, <- comma since...

Edited by Arivne on Jul 18th 2022 at 8:20:52 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19100: Jul 18th 2022 at 8:29:09 AM

[up] @darknessRising

...behind their actions. When...constantly threaten the...

More recent rewrites tend to make her even more abusive, <- comma to...

Despite knowing this, <- comma he...Cadance, the Princess of Love, is...as he is.


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