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Edited by Mrph1 on Nov 16th 2023 at 5:37:57 PM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19026: Jul 12th 2022 at 7:37:30 AM

From page 761 @kawaiineko333

In her death ending in The Letter, Isabella dies this way by being torn open, with every rib broken off. , and her eyes glassy

^ Deleted some Word Cruft.

^ I don't see how her eyes being glassy is important, so I removed it.

...he can instantly knit and sew anything...cryoprison. When his...

^ I've watched the movie. He can't do it "instantly".

Edited by Arivne on Jul 12th 2022 at 7:37:50 AM

kawaiineko333 (4 Score & 7 Years Ago)
#19027: Jul 12th 2022 at 7:42:27 AM

The Letter

Folder->Ash

  • Hairpin Lockpick: He uses bobby pins to pick locks, whether it's breaking into Zachary's apartment regularly, or breaking into Briar Realty Corporation's records room in the routes where Isabella is dead or in a coma. If he's the Sole Survivor when he breaks into the Ermengarde Manor, he uses them to pick the cuffs on his hands after being tortured and left for dead by Luke and Johannes.

Edited by kawaiineko333 on Jul 12th 2022 at 4:07:19 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19028: Jul 12th 2022 at 7:47:47 AM

From page 761 @Coock-atoo

...charm (especially the...Minnie, <- comma who I...hilarious, <- comma with...slapstick, <- comma regardless...to cover the scenarios...It's like Tex Avery and the Looney Tunes meet the...those characters and a...

^ "mention to" and "spread" are not correct English, but I can't tell what you meant to say. "especially" and "cover" are just a guess.

Edited by Arivne on Jul 12th 2022 at 8:07:13 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19029: Jul 12th 2022 at 7:52:45 AM

From page 761 @DK Underdog

...wouldn’t be the only major to not fight every season. <- period though N Fuego...season 5, <- comma and...Season 4, <- comma though ...

^ This was a run-on sentence connected together by a comma splice.

Edited by Arivne on Jul 12th 2022 at 7:57:51 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19030: Jul 12th 2022 at 7:57:30 AM

From page 761 @miraculous

...Ryuya, <- comma is...life, <- comma and...eventually allows reforms of his villainy and...for the safety...

Edited by Arivne on Jul 12th 2022 at 7:57:58 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19031: Jul 12th 2022 at 8:01:57 AM

From page 761 @Mariofan 99

...Lucah grows increasingly...point, <- comma Lucah...up, <- comma only for...

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19032: Jul 12th 2022 at 8:04:04 AM

From page 761 @D-Troper

...sense. <- period Most of...design), <- comma while...

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19033: Jul 12th 2022 at 8:06:45 AM

[up] @kawaiineko333

He uses one to pick locks, whether...regularly <- no comma or...

^ He uses one what to pick locks?

miraculous Goku Black (Apprentice)
Goku Black
#19034: Jul 12th 2022 at 8:14:47 AM

Thbak you Arivne.

"That's right mortal. By channeling my divine rage into power, I have forged a new instrument in which to destroy you."
Melinda Since: Dec, 2019 Relationship Status: Puppy love
#19035: Jul 12th 2022 at 9:06:36 AM

Thanks Arivne. This is kind of long, I'll try to make one or more of the next few days pretty short.

@ Mamma Mia! Here We Go Again

  • Sam and Donna learn that the Large Ham singer at a restaurant they're dining at is the owner and bought the place just so he'd have a venue to sing at when none of the other local establishments would hire his band.
  • Bill's overweight and rather bashful twin brother giving a speech in Bill's place right after the host talked about their speaker's eloquence, charisma and sailing skills is pretty funny.
  • Harry falling asleep during a contract negotiation at a long and stuffy business meeting, specially around item 47, clause 11.
  • The fishermen all cheer when they get invited to the party and groan when they're told to bring their families.

@ Mamma Mia!

  • Love at First Sight: According to the movie sequel, Rosie fell hard for Bill within a couple minutes of meeting him and talked about how she'd love to have his babies and grow old with him, all before he even knew her name. Decades later, they enter an on-off relationship.

@ Power Rangers Jungle Fury

When he was even younger, Jarrod also refused to cheat on tests or get into fights at school and helped raise money to save his neighbors' home from foreclosure. Carnisoar goes back in time (whether literally or just in Jarrod's mind is a bit unclear) and erases those moments of kindness and integrity to harden Jarrod/Dai She in the present.

@ Prom Wars

Prom Wars is a 2008 teen comedy centered around the students of three boarding schools: the academically-inclined Selby, The Proud Elite Lancaster school, and Miss Aversham and Miss Cronstall's School for Girls. Selby student Percy (former Phil of the Future star Raviv Ullman) and Lancaster student Geoffrey make jerks of themselves fighting over A&C student Diana (Alia Shawkat), who hates Geoffrey but gets mad at Percy and at boys in general as a result of the fight. She rallies the other A&C senior girls to remind the boys that they shouldn't take the girls for granted and make them sweat some. They issue a series of challenges for the two boys' schools to compete in, while saying that the girls will only go to the inter-school prom with boys from whichever school wins. Canadian actress Meaghan Rath has a tertiary rule as one of Diana's friends and her brother Jesse Rath plays one of the Selby students.

Tropes:

  • All Gays Love Theater: In one scene, the Ambiguously Bi Rupert earnestly talks about the Selby students' past and present plays.
  • Ambiguously Bi: Rupert gets a lot of Ho Yay dialogue, admires a statue of a naked man, and seems to admit that he's gay during the paintball scene. However, he also seems to be flirting with Tess at the end of the movie.
  • Changed My Mind, Kid: A non-action variant. When the girls bail on the boring Lancaster prom to spend time with the nerdy Selby kids, Jen B., the girl who has been the least sympathetic toward the Selby students throughout the film, initially stays behind, but she does show up outside to get in the bus with her friends a minute later.
  • Fake Boobs: A flashback shows Jen B. making out with a boy who finds out she padded her bra when some tissue paper accidentally falls out of her blouse. He laughs at her and fakes blowing his nose with it. The moment Diana reminds her about tha, tJen is bitter enough about the event to agree to Diana's plan to make the boys compete for the right to have prom dates.
  • Gamer Chick: It isn't shown or elaborated on, but Diana mentions that some of the most lusted after girls in her class can beat any boy at videogames.
  • Hot Librarian: The bespectacled Tess is fairly pretty, but spends more time reading, studying and talking about college applications than she does pursuing girly things, especially compared to her roommates.
  • Hufflepuff House: The Lancaster students get far less focus and attention outside of the challenges than the students of the other two schools, possibly to emphasize their status as villains who don't deserve much investment. Big Bad Geoffrey is the only Lancaster student who gets any memorable characterization or is regularly called by name.
  • Hypocritical Heartwarming: Rupert is one of the only jocks at the Selby school (due to being a legacy) and can be a Jerk Jock at times. But after the Lancaster boys bully some of his classmates and steal their pants, Rupert angrily says that no one can do that to Selby students except him.
  • Interrupted Intimacy: Jen B. is going down on Geoffrey in his car when the other A&C girls happen by. Since none of the girls are supposed to date or make out with the boys from either of the neighboring schools until after the prom competition, Geoffrey has to leave (despite requesting two more minutes), the Lancaster school loses several points, and Jen B. has to be the peer counselor for the freshmen girls.
  • Know When to Fold 'Em: When Joseph is surrounded by four Lancaster students during the Paintball Episode, he realizes fighting or running is futile and offers to just blow his whistle and signal that he's out. They all pellet him anyway.
  • Love Letter Lunacy: Joseph writes nerdy love poems to Jen B. that he's embarrassed by and never has the guts to send.
  • Lingerie Scene: Three, one of which is entirely gratuitous:
    • The girls wear bikinis and underwear to pose for pictures to make the boys more interested in the prom competition. This gets them in trouble with their headmaster.
    • The main girls are seen changing after a soccer game in one scene, with some of the others drawing attention to Jen B.'s lacy bra and asking if it's sensible for a sports game.
    • When the Lancaster boys force several Selby students to strip down to their underwear as they're heading to a party Diana is hosting, the girls there take off their own pants so they're in their underwear as a show of sympathy and then take some pictures to raise the Selby students' morale for the competition and de-moralize the Lancaster students.
  • Naughty Nurse Outfit: Jen B. and Jen L. wear revealing nurse costumes while being on standby to provide first aid to anyone who gets pelleted too badly in the paintball contest (and to motivate the horny teenage competitors into trying harder).
  • Nerds Are Virgins: The intelligent but non-athletic Selby students are mostly dateless and even though the prom date offer doesn't come with the promise of sex, several of them are hopeful that things will progress and lead to them losing their virginities, although as a face-saving Last-Second Word Swap they try to claim that it's the girls' virginities they're hoping will cease to exist.
  • Oh, Crap!: Tess wearily says "shit balls" when her friends overhear her breaking the contest rules by giving the Selby students inside information. She gets punished by being forced to spend some time cheerleading, which she is very unenthusiastic about.
  • One-Person Birthday Party: A variant occurs when a flashback shows Tess's roommates throwing her a birthday party that they attend, but they spend three hours vainly waiting for the boys they invited to show up. Tess eventually starts crying.
  • Paintball Episode: The final prom wars competition is a paintball/capture the flag game. This is glimpsed in the opening scene, leading to a How We Got Here fade out.
  • Platonic Life-Partners: Sabina knows Percy from his old school and gets along better with him than any of his Selby classmates, but neither displays any romantic interest in him nor gets any in return, even when she offers to be his date for a dance just so he won't be alone.
  • The Proud Elite: The main Lancaster students are arrogant, handsome, well-groomed athletes who come from very rich families, think nothing of offering enormous bribes to get ahead in school competitions, and bully the weaker and relatively poorer Selby students. Geoffrey even hires John Woo to film a paintball game he's in and make an introduction that makes him and his friends sound like the greatest military heroes their country has had in years.
  • Pyrrhic Victory : In a surprising aversion of Underdogs Never Lose, the preppy and athletic Lancaster students beat the nerdy and more sympathetic Selby boys for the right to ask the girls to prom. However, the Lancaster boys are even more smug and insufferable than usual as a result of their victory, and as a result, all of the girls can't stand it after a while and duck out of the party to spend time with the Selby students.
  • Screw the Money, I Have Rules!: Geoffrey offers Percy $30,000 to throw the paintball contest but he refuses due to his hatred for Geoffrey and desire not to let his classmates down.
  • Sequel Hook: The film ends with Percy and Diana awkwardly and tenuously reconciling, some of the students trying to figure out what to make of the Prom War's outcome, and the narrators debating about whether the story is over or not.
  • Stealth Hi/Bye: Francis is very stealthy during the paintball contest and is able to appear behind Lancaster students when they'd just been chasing him in the opposite direction.
  • Surprisingly Realistic Outcome: During the skeet-shooting contest, Joe (a small thin boy who has never fired a gun before) gets knocked over on his back by the recoil.
  • Two-Timer Date: The two headmasters are just as invested in the prom war as some of their students are, due to wanting to show up each other. It's later revealed that the source of their rivalry is an incident where the same girl took both of them to prom.
  • Wrong-Name Outburst: During the School Play completion, Percy plays one half of a couple in an Awful Wedded Life and accidentally calls his "wife" by his (real world) ex-girlfriend Diana's name. After an awkward pause the actor playing his wife works that into the play by asking if Diana is another one of his mistresses and getting mad that he can't remember her name, to the judge's delight.

@ Emperor (2020)

  • Equal-Opportunity Evil: Downplayed. The villains are all prejudiced against African-Americans, but a meeting of the most powerful and ruthless plantation owners in the region has one woman attending and being taken seriously by her peers, over half a century before women could even vote.

@ The King Nobody Wanted

  • Hidden Disdain Reveal: Garth Tyrell spends some time acting distantly cordial and respectful toward Oswell When, albeit disappointed in his lack of political smarts. In chapter 87, as Oswell prepares to leave on a campaign, Garth reveals that he despises Oswell and gives him a very bitter, accurate, and drawn-out “The Reason You Suck” Speech about his many failures as a Kingsguard. Among other things, he hates how Oswell helped Rheager start the war by helping hm get Lyanna Stark to marry him under questionable circumstances, for failing to rein in Aerys, and then for leaving the confused, teenaged Jamie to be the only Kingsguard present at the Mad King's side for months (Garth calls Jamie the best of them for finally snapping and killing Aerys). Oswell is troubled to realize how much of the disdain is warranted and how little his efforts to atone have accomplished so far.

@ Power Rangers Jungle Fury

  • Fanfic Fuel: The Great Offscreen War where Masters Lope, Guin, and Rilla died is implied to have occurred relatively recently, during a period where Dai Shi and his generals were still imprisoned note , leaving it interesting to imagine just what happened to them.
  • He's Just Hiding: In the final battle, the many resurrected villains from past episodes (Carnisoar, Toady, Stingerella, Jellica, Osiris, Buffalord, etc.) are all defeated at once in one big explosion that isn't as explicit as some deaths in the show. Given the number of Creepy Awesome and Affably Evil villains in that crowd, it can be tempting to hope some of them might have survived the explosion.

@ Power Rangers Jungle Fury

  • The way the individual Zords take turns striking Grinder at the end of the battle with him is impressive and unique.
  • Watching the spirit animals of the heroes briefly fight each other the way real animals would during the test to be masters is pretty cool.

@ Chekhov's Gunman

Sometimes, though, seemingly unimportant characters aren't examples of this trope and are only Red Herrings to distract Genre Savvy fans who find their seeming insignificance suspicious by itself.

@ The Cemeteries of Amalo

  • Hunter of Monsters: One of the many duties of a witness for the dead is to respond to ghouls rising from the grave and put the spirits inhabiting the recently dead to rest to stop them from acting on their hunger for human flesh. In the first book, a local churchmen without the ability to speak to the dead attempts to defeat a ghoul by himself before a witness can arrive, which ends badly for him.
  • Wham Line:
    • During Thara's hunt for a ghoul, he and his companions find a Too Dumb to Live prelate dead in the cemetery where he tried to catch the monster himself. Then, as he tries to determine what to do next to find the ghoul, he makes a startling observation.
      It was as I was turning away from the terrible remains of Othala Perchenzar that I realized two things. First, that the Clestenada cemetery, with its elaborate fence, did in fact make a perfect trap. Second, that this ghoul was smart enough to figure that out.
    • Two plot lines, Thara being accused of lying by a man who forged a will and the mruder of a blackmailing opera singer turn out to be connected when Thara attends the reading of the real will and learns that one of the opera singer's coworkers is due to inherit money from the dead man and thus might have been a special target of the blackmailer.
      Lawyer reading the will: And to our grandson, Tura Olora, child of our favorite child Daleno, we leave five thousand muranai.

@ Batman: The Brave and the Bold

  • About eight percent of "Mayhem of the Music Meister" is the eponymous villain singing catchy Villain Songs or Black Canary singing gentle, wistful melodies. One highlight is "Drives us Bats"
@ Batman (1966): Rogues Gallery
  • Sweater Girl: Lydia’s shirt wardrobe seems to consist solely of tight sweaters that make it apparent that she isn’t wearing a bra.
@ Charmed (1998)
  • They Wasted a Perfectly Good Character:
    • Charlene from "Ex Libris" is a Cute Ghost Girl with an interesting backstory of being a "Well Done, Daughter!" Girl who is killed by demons for researching their existence and nearly proving it. She's only in one episode, but feels like she could have been kept around for a while in a recurring role.
    • "Repo Manor" features a trio of female demons and their master, who want to take the power of the Charmed Ones to free their people from slavery. They could have been interesting recurring characters and formed and/or inspired some feelings of respect or empathy with the heroes. Instead, they're just One Shot Characters whose motives the heroes learn little about and never fully appreciate as they fight each other.
    • The Crouching Moron, Hidden Badass Psycho Rangers Stillman sisters are decently entertaining villains who survive their debut in the show but never show up as recurring foes.

Edited by Melinda on Jul 13th 2022 at 11:39:50 AM

kawaiineko333 (4 Score & 7 Years Ago)
#19036: Jul 12th 2022 at 1:03:20 PM

The Letter

Folder->Johannes

  • Comedic Sociopathy: In Ashton's chapter if he's the Sole Survivor of the playable characters after getting caught by Luke and Johannes, the latter delights in slicing Ashton up with a knife.
    Luke: You sure look like you're having fun.
    Johannes: Of course. Schadenfreude is best experienced at nighttime. Would you like a turn?

Edited by kawaiineko333 on Jul 12th 2022 at 4:03:45 AM

Clare Since: Aug, 2009
#19037: Jul 12th 2022 at 2:29:31 PM

@ Melinda

Mamma Mia! Here We Go Again

  • Sam and Donna learn that the Large Ham singer at a restaurant they're dining at is (superfluous word - cut) the owner and bought the place just so he'd have a venue to sing at when none of the other local establishments would hire his band.

  • Bill's overweight and rather bashful twin brother giving a speech in his place right after the host talked about their speaker's eloquence, charisma and sailing skills is pretty funny.
^ Be careful how you use pronouns if you have two or more characters of the same gender as it can be hard to tell which character you're referring to. For example, does "his place" refer to Bill's place, his brother's place or the host's place? Also, do you mean "in his place" as in someone's home or business, or "in his place" as in standing in for someone else?

  • Harry falling asleep during a contract negotiation at a long and stuffy business meeting, specially around item 47, clause 11.

Mamma Mia!

  • Love at First Sight: According to the movie sequel, Rosie fell hard for Bill within a couple minutes of meeting him and talked about how she'd love to have his babies and grow old with him (move text), before he even knew her name. Decades later, they enter an on-off relationship.
^ The way you wrote it makes it sound like she literally wanted "to have his babies and grow old with him within a couple minutes of meeting him", which doesn't make sense. Therefore, I moved "within a couple minutes of meeting him" between "Bill" and the first "and", so it would flow better.

Power Rangers Jungle Fury

When he was even younger, Jarrod also refused to cheat on tests or get into fights at school and helped raise money to save his neighbors home from foreclosure. Carnisoar goes back in time (whether literally or just in Jarrod's mind is a bit unclear) and erases those moments of kindness and integrity to harden Jarrod/Dai She in the present.

^ The lack of an apostrophe in "neighbors" makes it hard to tell if you're talking about one "neighbor" or two or more "neighbors".

Singular possessive nouns should be written like this:

his neighbor's home

Plural possessive nouns should be written like this:

his neighbors' home

Prom Wars

Prom Wars is a 2008 teen comedy centered around the students of three boarding schools: the academically-inclined Selby, The Proud Elite Lancaster school, and Miss Aversham and Miss Cronstall's School for Girls. Selby student Percy (former Phil of the Future star Raviv Ullman) and Lancaster student Geoffrey make jerks of themselves fighting over A&C student Diana (Alia Shawkat) (change underscore to closing parentheses), who hates Geoffrey, (comma, superfluous words - cut) but gets mad at Percy and at boys in general as a result of the fight. She rallies the other A&C senior girls to remind the boys that they shouldn't take the girls for granted and make them sweat some. They issue a series of challenges for the two boys' schools to compete in, while saying that the girls will only go to the inter-school prom with boys from whichever school wins. Canadian actress Meaghan Rath has a tertiary rule as one of Diana's friends and her brother Jesse Rath plays one of the Selby students.

Tropes:

  • Changed My Mind, Kid: A non-action variant. When the girls bail on the boring Lancaster prom to spend time with the nerdy Selby kids, Jen B., the girl who has been the least sympathetic toward the Selby students throughout the film, initially stays behind, but she does show up outside to get in the bus with her friends a minute later.

  • Fake Boobs: A flashback shows Jen B. making out with a boy who finds out she padded her bra when some tissue paper accidentally falls out of her blouse. He laughs at her and fakes blowing his nose with it. Jen is bitter enough about the event to agree to Diana's plan to make the boys compete for the right to have prom dates the moment Diana reminds her about that (although later on she's less happy about the plan).

  • Hot Librarian: The bespectacled Tess is fairly pretty, (comma) but spends more time reading, studying and talking about college applications than she does pursuing girly things, especially compared to her roommates.

  • Lingerie Scene: Three, one of which is entirely gratuitous:

    • The girls wear bikinis and underwear to pose for pictures to make the boys more interested in the prom competition. This gets them in trouble with their headmaster.

    • The main girls are seen changing after a soccer game in one scene, with some of the others drawing attention to Jen B.'s lacy bra and asking if it's sensible for a sports game.

    • When the Lancaster boys force several Selby students to strip down to their underwear as they're heading to a party Diana is hosting, the girls there take off their own pants so they're in their underwear as a show of sympathy and then take some pictures to raise the Selby students' morale for the competition and de-moralize the Lancaster students.

  • Nerds Are Virgins: The intelligent but non-athletic Selby students are mostly dateless and even though the prom date offer doesn't come with the promise of sex, several of them are hopeful that things will progress and lead to them losing their virginity, (comma, remove parentheses) although as a face-saving Last-Second Word Swap they try to claim that it's the girls' virginity they're hoping will cease to exist (remove parentheses).

  • One-Person Birthday Party: A variant occurs when a flashback shows (superfluous word - cut) Tess's roommates throwing her a birthday party that they attend, but they spend three hours vainly waiting for the boys they invited to show up. (period, superfluous word - cut) Tess eventually starts crying.

  • Platonic Life-Partners: Sabina knows Percy from his old school (remove comma) and gets along better with him than any of his Selby classmates, but neither displays any romantic interest in him nor gets any in return even when she offers to be his date for a dance just so he won't be alone.

  • The Proud Elite: The main Lancaster students are arrogant, handsome, well-groomed athletes who come from very rich families, think nothing of offering enormous bribes to get ahead in school competitions, and bully the weaker and relatively poorer Selby students. Geoffrey even hires John Woo to film a paintball game he's in and make an introduction that makes him and his friends sound like the greatest military heroes their country has had in years.

  • Screw the Money, I Have Rules!: Geoffrey offers Percy $30,000 to throw the paintball contest but he refuses due to his hatred for Geoffrey and desire not to let his classmates down.
^ You originally wrote this as an example of Screw the Rules, I Have Money!, but it seems more like the inversion of that trope.

Emperor (2020)

  • Equal-Opportunity Evil: Downplayed. The villains are all prejudiced against African-Americans, (comma) but a meeting of the most powerful and ruthless plantation owners in the region has one woman attending and being taken seriously by her peers, over half a century before women could even vote.

Edited by Clare on Jul 12th 2022 at 10:34:30 AM

sdewap (Experienced Trainee) Relationship Status: Complex: I'm real, they are imaginary
#19038: Jul 12th 2022 at 2:40:56 PM

@ My Ideal Academia.

  • Mama Bear: Although it's only been several months since Yu adopted Shirou, Yu has grown fond of Shirou and is quite protective of him. Case in point, when League of Villains attack Shirou's class at USJ, she quickly rushes over and defeats several of them.
@ My Ideal Academia
  • To help Archer, who is low on mana. Yu innocently suggest Shirou transfers some of his mana to Archer, not knowing it's done through sex, much to Shirou's horror. It's much funnier, considering Archer is Shirou's future self. Yu not knowingly just suggests Shirou screw himself.
  • Shinsou describes Mineta's quirk training as Mineta playing with his balls.

Edited by sdewap on Jul 13th 2022 at 5:46:20 PM

kawaiineko333 (4 Score & 7 Years Ago)
#19039: Jul 12th 2022 at 5:21:52 PM

The Letter

Folder->Zachary

  • Eye Scream: If Zachary dies in his death routes, his body is found with his eyes plucked out of his head during Ashton's chapter. When Luke is getting ready for the day during his chapter, he finds a package that contains Zack's eyes, and they're still wet.

Edited by kawaiineko333 on Jul 12th 2022 at 8:22:28 AM

Melinda Since: Dec, 2019 Relationship Status: Puppy love
#19040: Jul 12th 2022 at 7:11:38 PM

Thanks Clare.

I don't know what's wrong with me lately. There were way too many mistakes there, and not just typos but sentence structure and trope name stuff that I should have been able to do in my sleep. I'm sorry for making you and Arivne go through so much error-riddled stuff with no improvement in sight.

RaisinsLasagna Since: May, 2022
#19041: Jul 12th 2022 at 8:45:22 PM

The Smurfs (1981)

  • Dream Sequence: In "The Stuff Dreams Are Smurfed Of", Gargamel has a dream where he and Azrael tried to capture the Smurfs by setting a trap for them, only to be chased by the giant Smurfs.

Edited by RaisinsLasagna on Jul 12th 2022 at 11:46:20 PM

Clare Since: Aug, 2009
#19042: Jul 13th 2022 at 6:29:15 AM

@ sdwarp

My Ideal Academia

  • Mama Bear: Although it's only been a matter of months since Yu adopted Shirou, Yu has grown fond of Shirou and is quite protective of him. Case in point, when the League of Villains attack Shirou's class at USJ, she quickly rushes over and defeats several of them.

My Ideal Academia

  • To help Archer, who is low on mana, (comma) Yu innocently suggests Shirou transfers some of his mana to Archer, not knowing it's done through sex, much to Shirou's horror. It's much funnier, considering Archer is Shirou's future self. Yu unknowingly just suggested Shirou screw himself.

Clare Since: Aug, 2009
#19043: Jul 13th 2022 at 6:48:02 AM

@ Melinda

The King Nobody Wanted

  • Hidden Disdain Reveal: Garth Tyrell spends some time acting distantly cordial and respectful toward Oswell When, albeit disappointed in his lack of political smarts. In chapter 87, as Oswell prepares to leave on a campaign Garth reveals that he despises Oswell and gives him a very bitter, accurate, and drawn-out “The Reason You Suck” Speech about his many failures as a Kingsguard. Among other things, he hates how Oswell helped Rheager start the war by helping him get Lyanna Stark to marry him under questionable circumstances, for failing to reign in Aerys, and then for leaving the confused, teenaged Jamie to be the only Kingsguard present at the Mad King's side for months (Garth calls Jamie the best of them for finally snapping and killing Aerys). Oswell is troubled to realize how much of the disdain is warranted and how little his efforts to atone have accomplished so far.
^ I'm assuming you meant to italicise "months".

Power Rangers Jungle Fury

  • Fanfic Fuel: The Great Offscreen War where Masters Lope, Guin, and Rilla died is implied to have occurred relatively recently, during a period where Dai Shi and his generals were still imprisoned note , leaving it interesting to imagine just what happened to them.

Batman (1966): Rogues Gallery

Charmed 199

Edited by Clare on Jul 13th 2022 at 2:49:20 PM

sdewap (Experienced Trainee) Relationship Status: Complex: I'm real, they are imaginary
Melinda Since: Dec, 2019 Relationship Status: Puppy love
#19045: Jul 13th 2022 at 8:19:50 AM

@ The Cemeteries of Amalo

  • The Coroner: Ulzhavar, the Master of the Mortuary, is a distant relative of an Impoverished Patrician and is often found conducting autopsies for investigative purposes and/or to instruct his new subordinates in how it's done. Thara consults him in multiple cases when he needs to exhume a body and determine if someone was poisoned. In an interesting coincidence, one of those victims turns out to be Ulzhavar's own great-aunt by marriage, and Ulzhavar's report helps catch her killer.

Edited by Melinda on Jul 13th 2022 at 10:05:53 AM

Melinda Since: Dec, 2019 Relationship Status: Puppy love
#19046: Jul 13th 2022 at 8:51:19 AM

@ The Host

  • Men of Sherwood: Several of the thirty-five humans in Jeb's compound venture aboveground to spy on the alien race that conquered Earth and scavenge supplies or act as guards at the cavern's entrance. Several of them are pretty minor characters and/or behave hostilely to the main character, but only one of them dies in the book and only two die in the movie (under different circumstances).

Edited by Melinda on Jul 13th 2022 at 10:04:04 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19047: Jul 13th 2022 at 9:07:26 AM

[up] !@Melinda

...specially around item 47, clause 11.

^ Unless this text is relevant to the trope, it's unnecessary and should be deleted.

...and grow old with him <- no comma before he even knew her name.

^ As an alternative, you could add the word "all" between the comma and "before".

In one scene, the Ambiguously Bi Rupert earnestly talks about...

The moment Diana reminds her about that, Jen is bitter...prom dates [[strike:(although later on she's less happy about the plan)=].

^ Unless the text in parentheses is relevant to the trope, it's unnecessary and should be deleted.

Jen B. is going down on Geoffrey in his car when the other A&C girls walk in on them.

^ The phrase "walk in on them" is normally used when someone walks into something, such as a room, not when they walk by or approach a car outdoors. You could use "walk by" or "happen by" instead.

...out. They all pellet him anyway.

...it's the girls' virginities they're hoping...

...nor gets any in return, <- comma even when she offers...

...in the prom war as some of their students are, <- comma due to...

...as Oswell prepares to leave on a campaign, <- comma Garth...failing to rein in Aerys...

Given the number of Creepy Awesome and Affably Evil villains in that crowd...

Sometimes, <- comma though, seemingly...

Two plot lines: <- colon Thara...the murder of...

She's only in one episode, <- comma but it feels like she could...

"Repo Manor" features a trio of female demons and their master, <- comma who want...

...or act as guards at the cavern's entrance....to the main character, <- comma but...

Edited by Arivne on Jul 13th 2022 at 9:13:16 AM

kawaiineko333 (4 Score & 7 Years Ago)
#19048: Jul 13th 2022 at 9:09:05 AM

The Last Dance

Folder->Video Games

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19049: Jul 13th 2022 at 9:16:44 AM

[up] @kawaiineko333

In Ashton's chapter, <- comma if...slicing him up...

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#19050: Jul 13th 2022 at 9:18:47 AM

[up] @Raisins Lasagna

...Gargamel has a dream where he and Azrael try to capture the Smurfs by setting...


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