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Edited by Mrph1 on Nov 16th 2023 at 5:37:57 PM

Melinda Since: Dec, 2019 Relationship Status: Puppy love
#17551: Mar 25th 2022 at 2:03:15 PM

@ Percy Jackson and the Olympians

  • The entire scene with the three bickering mystical taxi drivers who only have one eye between them and keep passing it around. Percy and the others being scared senseless for the whole ride is even funnier.
  • Tyson mistaking the Capitol building for Mount Olympus, with Grover quipping that both are run by powerful, self-centered people.
  • Dionysus cuts down Annabeth and Grover's plan to use the Fleece to cure Thalia, only to publicly suggest the same idea they had and start Stealing the Credit one Gilligan Cut later.
  • Hermes, played by Nathan Fillion, gets in a funny Firefly reference by enthusiastically mentioning his favorite show, and then saying "So of course, cancelled" with a meaningful look.
@ Percy Jackson and the Olympians
  • The fight with the Colchis Bulls is pretty cool, but the film version is even better despite only having one bull, due to some Visual Effects of Awesome that even some haters of the film like.
@ Percy Jackson and the Olympians One-Scene Wonder
  • Thalia Grace (or at least her younger self) is only onscreen for about a minute, but her performance as a tough but clearly terrified and vulnerable Little Miss Badass earns a lot of praise.
@ Dog (2022)
  • Alternate Character Interpretation :
    • Is the cop who questions Briggs about Lulu attacking a Muslim man really a Bigot with a Badge who is amused by the incident? Or is he trying to lull Briggs into a false sense of security either to get an incriminating admission or due to the Inter-Service Rivalry between MPs and Rangers?
    • Is the homeless smash-and-grab thief a Phony Veteran or a real one? He’s evasive when asked which unit he served with, but Ethan says there are many desperate vets who behave similarly to the homeless man. Additionally, the credits call him “homeless vet.”
@ Aladdin: The Series They Wasted a Perfectly Good Plot
  • Minos and Fatima pursuing Aziz after turning good and seeking redemption could have been an interesting story, but none of the three are ever seen again after their two-part debut.

Edited by Melinda on Mar 27th 2022 at 1:39:23 AM

Clare Since: Aug, 2009
#17552: Mar 25th 2022 at 2:25:20 PM

@ jOSEFdelaville (Page 706)

Tintin

  • Bloodless Carnage: Dead people may be depicted in full view of the reader, but there is never any trace of blood. This is especially noticeable when we see Haddock's ancestor and his crew fighting pirates and there are several corpses with no blood or wounds.

Code Lyoko S 1 E 22

  • Hypocritical Humor: Yumi justifies her anger about Ulrich seemingly dating Emily by stating that Emily is a year older. It's pointed out that Yumi herself is one year older than Ulrich, making the argument a poor attempt to hide her jealousy.

Madness Combat

  • Death of the Author: For years, fans assumed that the Project Nexus games were an alternate continuity to the main Madness Combat animated series. However, shortly before Project Nexus 2 came out, Krinkels said that everything is canon, implying that the animation series and the games are a single continuity. Some fans preferred to ignore this information because of some contradictions between the animated series and video games such as Hank and Deimos being back in their normal forms or the lack of references to the video games in the animated series.

Edited by Clare on Mar 26th 2022 at 3:05:00 PM

Minorica Rhythm Heroine from Earth Since: Dec, 2019 Relationship Status: It's so nice to be turned on again
Rhythm Heroine
#17553: Mar 26th 2022 at 4:55:48 AM

For Hilarious in Hindsight Visual Novel:

Edited by Minorica on Mar 28th 2022 at 4:26:30 PM

"No matter how bad the heroes can get or how bad the situation is, we're sure we can overcome it and get our happy endings..."
Clare Since: Aug, 2009
#17554: Mar 26th 2022 at 8:04:17 AM

@ Melinda

Percy Jackson and the Olympians

  • Tyson mistaking the Capitol building for Mount Olympus, with Grover quipping that both are run by powerful, self-centered people.

  • Dionysus cuts down Annabeth and Grover's plan to use the Fleece to cure Thalia, only (superfluous words - cut) to suggest the same idea they had and start Stealing the Credit one Gilligan Cut later.

  • Hermes, played by Nathan Fillion, (comma) fits in a funny Firefly reference by enthusiastically mentioning his favorite show, and then saying "So of course, cancelled" with a meaningful look.

Percy Jackson and the Olympians

  • The fight with the Colchis Bulls is pretty cool, (comma) but the film version is (superfluous word - cut) even better despite only having one bull, due to some Visual Effects of Awesome that even some critics of the film like.
^ Examples Are Not Arguable. A trope either applies or it doesn't; there's no "arguably" about it. Also, anything on a Moments page is arguable by definition, so using the word "arguably" is redundant.

Percy Jackson and the Olympians One-Scene Wonder

  • Thalia Grace (or at least her younger self) is only onscreen for about a minute, but her performance as a tough but clearly terrified and vulnerable Little Miss Badass earns her a lot of praise.

Dog (2022)

  • Alternate Character Interpretation :

    • Is the cop who questions Briggs about Lulu attacking a Muslim man really a Bigot with a Badge who is amused by the incident? Or is the Inter-Service Rivalry between MPs and Rangers prompting him to lull Briggs into a false sense of security (superfluous word -cut) to get an incriminating admission? (superfluous words - cut)

    • Is the homeless smash-and-grab thief a Phony Veteran or a real one? He’s evasive when asked which unit he served with, (comma) but Ethan says there are many desperate vets who behave similarly to the homeless man. Additionally, the credits call him “homeless vet.”

Aladdin: The Series They Wasted a Perfectly Good Plot

  • Minos and Fatima pursuing Aziz after turning good and seeking redemption could have been an interesting story, (comma) but none of the three are ever seen again after their two-part debut.

Edited by Clare on Mar 26th 2022 at 3:06:43 PM

Melinda Since: Dec, 2019 Relationship Status: Puppy love
#17555: Mar 26th 2022 at 8:15:41 AM

Thanks Clare. The Dog edit you mad changes the meaning of what I was trying to say (I wanted to say that he wants a confession either in his job as a job or is just Trolling him due to the rivalry). @ The Books of Ember

  • Composite Character: Sul is a composite of pipe works boss Lister Munk, Arlin Froll (who shows Doon around on his first day at work), and the unnamed old man who maintains the generator but doesn’t completely understand it.
  • Senior Sleep-Cycle: Sul is an 80-year-old man who falls asleep almost every time he sits down in his work chair.
  • Fat and Skinny: Scrawny Corrupt Quartermaster Looper is accompanied by a plump crony in a few scenes.
  • Adaptational Job Change: Mrs. Sample is a mender in the book but appears to be a timekeeper in the film, as she keeps track of how long the blackouts last and tasks Linda with spreading the news across town.
  • Demoted to Extra: Sadge has a small but notable and dialogue-filled role in the first book, but only has brief cameos in the sequel.
  • Good Counterpart: Sadge and his fellow supply clerk Looper both know that the city is running out of supplies but race in different ways, although they aren't Foils due to never appearing together. Looper is stealing and hoarding to survive the blackouts, doesn't care about what happens to the rest of the city, and is helping the mayor lie to them about how bad things are. Sadge searches the dangerous Unknown Regions for resources or an escape route to save the city and then tires to warn people about how bad things are after giving up hope.
  • What Happened to the Mouse?: In the film (unlike in the book), Sadge is never seen again after his failed attempt to brave the unknown regions, and the guards drag him away to quarantine due to fear that he may have been exposed to radiation.

@ The Books of Ember

  • Doomed Predecessor: Sul gives Doon a helmet that belonged to a pipeworks worker who drowned and mentions the name carved into the helmet was the only thing left to identify him with. It later turns out that the worker was Lina's father. An earlier scene shows Lina and her sister sadly listening to a tape of his voice, with the tape containing a few hints that he and his friends were up to something. As Lina and Doon try to find a safe way out of the city, they realize that Lina's father died trying to do the same thing.

Edited by Melinda on Mar 26th 2022 at 5:03:00 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#17556: Mar 26th 2022 at 8:20:26 AM

From page 702 @ElJuaco

...getting it blown up in his face...

...and was later used in subsequent Looney Tunes projects...

During the match, the Monstars cook <missing text> into a roast turkey...

If he's gonna be forced to stay forever at Moron Mountain...

From a multiversal point of view in regard to...though he once grows...

From a multiversal point of view in regard to...

From a multiversal point of view in regard to...

...seeing back the...respectively come back would...incarnation of these four heroes helmed...

If she learned, <- comma thanks to Monica Rambeau, <- comma that...because of how...right? The Wanda who...

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#17557: Mar 26th 2022 at 8:22:35 AM

From page 702 @Bullman

...is Shauna/Jackie. <- period It continued...So instead, <- comma a...

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#17558: Mar 26th 2022 at 8:26:43 AM

[up] @Melinda

...favorite show <- no comma and then saying...

...how long the blackouts last...

Sadge has a small but notable and dialogue-filled role in the first book, <- comma but...

...but react in different ways...save the city, <- comma and then tries to...

...due to fear that he may have been exposed to radiation.

Sul gives Doon a helmet that belonged to a pipeworks worker who drowned...

^ If the worker is dead, the helmet doesn't belong to them any more.

Edited by Arivne on Mar 26th 2022 at 8:34:34 AM

Bullman Enid Sinclair Since: Jun, 2018 Relationship Status: Longing for my OTP
Avenger09 Since: May, 2014
Melinda Since: Dec, 2019 Relationship Status: Puppy love
#17561: Mar 26th 2022 at 5:31:51 PM

@ The Books of Ember

  • Benevolent Boss: Both versions of Fleery are nice, supportive, and accommodating toward their subordinates, although the book version isn't smart enough to be a Reasonable Authority Figure.
  • Gender Flip: Fleery is a woman in the book and a man in the film.
  • Lazy Bum: When Natty tells a friend not to come over for dinner because his stove is broken, his friend calls him "old fleaface" and suggests that Natty is lying because he's too lazy to cook.
  • Screw This, I'm Outta Here!: Tick leaves Sparks when his attempts to achieve power in a False Flag Operation are about to be exposed.
  • The Ghost: Anisette is mentioned when Mrs. Polster gives Lina a message for her, but she's never seen receiving the message and is never mentioned again.
  • Noodle Incident: Stern Teacher Mrs. Polster sends a message to Lafrond saying that "My confidence in you has been seriously diminished since I heard about the disreputable activities in which you engaged on Thursday last." Lina has no clue what this means, though, and neither she or the reader ever find out.
  • No Name Given: Lottie's sister is never named.
  • Patriotic Fervor: Lottie Hoover is dedicated enough to the city of Ember to take its flag with her during the Citywide Evacuation.
@ The Running Man What Happened to the Mouse?
  • Dozens of prisoners escape from the labor camp during the second scene, but only Ben, Weiss, and Laughlin are ever seen or mentioned again.
@ Percy Jackson and the Olympians
  • The obstacle tower scene from the movie is a bit clichéd and has a Fight Scene Failure in the background, but it gives Clarisse a cooler and flashier Establishing Character Moment than her book counterpart and has a pretty good musical accompaniment.
@ The Books of Ember new page.

Books

  • Many of the messages Lina is assigned to play, and/or the responses to them, have some good humor. Most notably, Lina's former Stern Teacher has a Sesquipedalian Loquaciousness tongue-lashing to give to someone over unspecified "disreputable activities" the other woman engaged in. It takes Lina a while to memorize it, causing her to joke about how if she was still one of Mrs. Polster's students, she'd have gotten a "red dot" for that.
  • Doon reads a book called Mysterious Words from the Past which discusses the meaning of sayings that the people of Ember have forgotten, or where the context to understand the sayings has been lost. For instance, it speculates that "batting a thousand" refers to swatting bugs.

Movie

  • Lina's messages from the book are omitted, but there's a humorous new message when the elderly vegetable merchant wants to express his dissatisfaction with a shriveled potato that greenhouse keeper Clary (a close friend of Lina's) sent him.
    Lina: (apologetically reciting the message) If this is a potato, then I'm sixteen and sexy.
  • When Mrs. Murdo recites her Cargo Cult beliefs, even two-year-old Poppy looks incredulous for a moment.
  • When the mayor is fleeing for his storeroom, he trips and falls face first into the new portrait of himself, obscuring his features in the portrait and smearing himself with wet paint.

@ The Deep

  • Bitch in Sheep's Clothing:
    • Henri "Cloche" Bondurant introduces himself in a polite and gracious way while offering to buy an artifact David and Gail found for supposedly harmless reasons. When they decline to deal with him, he has them kidnapped, threatens to cut David's tongue out, and subjects Gail to a Shameful Strip.
    • Coffin is introduced as a kindly old sea dog who is fairly tranquil about working a menial job, happily provides the main trio with information about the Goliath, and says he wants to recover the bodies of his dead shipmates onboard the wreck. Once he actually starts working with the main trio, it becomes clear that he's willing to betray and endanger them for the valuable morphine in the cargo hold.
  • Everyone Has Standards: Coffin isn't a very reliable ally, but he looks shocked when he sees Bondurant's men chumming the waters so that sharks will endanger the three main characters during their diving trip.
  • Have You Told Anyone Else?: When salty treasure hunter Treece finds out that David and Gail have found a wreck he's heavily interested in, he asks who else knows about it. After a moment's pause, they truthfully reply that a local man named Bondurant has approached them about the wreck. However, it quickly becomes clear that Treece is a pro (or at least an Anti-Hero) and Bondurant is a ruthless crime lord.
  • Sole Survivor: Coffin is the only survivor of the sinking of the Goliath and is interested in salvaging the wreck now that it's been found.
  • Ungrateful Bastard: Treece saved Coffin's life when he "washed up on the beach" after the Goliath sunk, but Cofflin is willing to betray and endanger him during the treasure hunt.
@ The Deep
  • Ensemble Dark Horse: Kevin has little dialogue and only about ten minutes of screen-time, but he's quite popular due to the scene where he fearlessly fights a thug who tries to kill him by using an outboard motor like a chainsaw.
  • Nightmare Fuel: The moray eel attacks, due to its enormous size, gaping jaws, and the way no one can tell what's dragging Gail into the wreck by her net the first time the eel attacks.
  • Signature Scene: As striking and suspenseful as the diving action scenes are, many fans view this fight scene between The Dragon and a Mauve Shirt buddy of Treece as the best part of the film, with several YouTube comments calling it one of the best fight scenes ever.
  • The Woobie: It's hard to deny that Gail (who doesn't want anything to do with the treasure hunt in the first place) goes through a lot. She nearly drowns in a moray eel attack in the opening scene. She's subjected to a Pervy Pat Down and a Shameful Strip after being kidnapped by Cloche and is clearly uncomfortable about both. Then, she is attacked in her hotel room, her clothes are cut off with a knife and she's painted with animal blood for a Hollywood Voodoo ritual. David arrives to find a sobbing Gail in a Troubled Fetal Position afterward.
@ Turning Red Ensemble Dark Horse
  • Mei's classmate Stacy only has a couple of minutes of screen time, tops, but within less than a month of the film's release, there were a surprising number of YouTube video compilations of her scenes (or at least the main ones). Put it down to her Big "OMG!" the first time she sees Mei transformed, her Squee reaction to Mei's panda form the second time she sees it, and her [[Small Role, Big Impact having a big impact on the plot despite her lack of screentime.
@ The Running Man
  • The prison riot that follows the opening scene has some decently intense gunplay. It helps that rather than have Ben be a One-Man Army, his friend Laughlin and a Red Shirt prisoner named Chico also get some good action moments.
  • Captain Freedom telling off Killian and refusing to go against Richards with an unfair advantage.
  • Amber's fight with the armed, trained stalker Dynamo, particularly when she gives him a Groin Attack.
@ The League Of Extraordinary Gentleman
  • Mr. Hyde is the source of some very impressive scenes, but Dr. Jekyll also gets a good Armor-Piercing Response when Nemo coldly comments on the danger he poses.
    Dr. Jekyll: I am in control.
    Captain Nemo: I very much doubt it.
    Dr. Jekyll: Your talk is all well and good, sir... but your own past is far from laudable.

Edited by Melinda on Mar 27th 2022 at 2:22:30 AM

kawaiineko333 (4 Score & 7 Years Ago)
#17562: Mar 26th 2022 at 6:13:58 PM

https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Funny/TeamFourStar

Jojo's Bizarre Adventure: Stardust Crusaders in 6 Minutes

  • The ocean chapter has Jotaro ask Joseph if the party has to worry about boats. Joseph said he's never had a problem on a boat—Gilligan Cut to the party on a lifeboat going to the next ship, though Joseph doesn't believe all boats are evil—Gilligan Cut to the party on the lifeboat again as Strength sinks into the ocean, represented by a cutout of an orangutan (Forever) sinking in the background.
    Joseph: So that boat was a monkey. I blame you, Jotaro.
    Jotaro: I think I like the ocean now. That will forever be a part of my character.

Minorica Rhythm Heroine from Earth Since: Dec, 2019 Relationship Status: It's so nice to be turned on again
Rhythm Heroine
#17563: Mar 26th 2022 at 8:27:20 PM

For Akai Ito:

Edited by Minorica on Mar 29th 2022 at 6:38:09 PM

"No matter how bad the heroes can get or how bad the situation is, we're sure we can overcome it and get our happy endings..."
Bubblepig Steve from Minecraft (Experienced, Not Yet Jaded) Relationship Status: is commanded to— WANK!
#17564: Mar 26th 2022 at 9:16:12 PM

@The Lost City

  • Big Bad: Abigail Fairfax, a billionaire who kidnapped Loretta to find the lost city that Loretta book is based on.
  • The Stinger: The mid credit shows Loretta and Alan as a couple in the meditation center . They’re later surprised to find out that the person who meditate behind them is Jack Trainer, who is revealed to have survived a head shot, albeit lose a part of his brain.
  • Surprisingly Sudden Death: Jack is suddenly shot in the head while he’s in middle of untieing Loretta with no warning. Subverted later on in the mid credit stinger as Jack revealed to be alive and well.

"CHICKEN JOCKEY!"
kawaiineko333 (4 Score & 7 Years Ago)
Mauserhawkefd3435 Since: Oct, 2014
#17566: Mar 27th 2022 at 3:59:19 AM

For Fire Force

Edited by Mauserhawkefd3435 on Mar 27th 2022 at 10:35:09 AM

Clare Since: Aug, 2009
#17567: Mar 27th 2022 at 4:13:54 AM

@ Melinda

The Books of Ember

Percy Jackson and the Olympians

  • The obstacle tower scene from the movie is a bit cliched and has a Fight Scene Failure in the background, but it gives Clarisse a cooler and flashier Establishing Character Moment than her book counterpart and has a pretty good musical accompaniment.

The Books of Ember new page.

Books

  • Doon reads a book called Mysterious Words from the Past which discusses the meaning of sayings that the people of Ember have forgotten, (comma) or where the context required to understand the sayings has been lost. For instance, it speculates that "batting a thousand" refers to swatting bugs.

Movie

  • Lina's messages from the book are omitted but there's a humorous new message when the elderly vegetable merchant wants to express his dissatisfaction with a shriveled potato that greenhouse keeper Clary (a close friend of Lina's) sent him.
    Lina: (apologetically reciting the message) If this is a potato, then I'm sixteen and sexy.
^ Saying "there's a humorous new one" is considered a Zero-Context Example because it tells the reader nothing about what "one" is.

  • When the mayor is fleeing for his storeroom, he trips and fall face first into the new portrait of himself, obscuring his features in the portrait and smearing himself with wet paint.

The Deep

  • Bitch in Sheep's Clothing:

    • (remove quotation marks)Cloche (remove quotation marks) Bondurant introduces himself in a polite and gracious way while, (comma) for harmless reasons, (comma) offering to buy an artifact David and Gail found (superfluous words - cut). When they decline to deal with him, he has them kidnapped, threatens to cut David's tongue out, and subjects Gail to a Shameful Strip.
^ The way you originally phrased the first sentence makes it sound as though David and Gail found the artifact "for harmless reasons". Therefore, I placed "for harmless reasons" between "while" and "offering". Also, you later use Cloche's name without quotation marks. Try to be consistent about things like how characters' names are spelt.

  • Everyone Has Standards: Cofflin isn't a very reliable ally, but he looks shocked when he sees Cloche's men churning the waters so that sharks will endanger the three main characters during their diving trip.
  • Have You Told Anyone Else??: When salty treasure hunter Treece finds out that David and Gail have found a wreck he's heavily interested in, he asks who else knows about it. After a moment's pause, they truthfully reply that a local man named Bondurant has approached them about the wreck. However, it quickly becomes clear that Treece is a pro (or at least an Anti-Hero) and Bondurant is a ruthless crime lord.

The Deep

  • Ensemble Dark Horse: Kevin has little dialogue and only about ten minutes of screen-time, but he's quite popular due to the scene where he fearlessly fights a thug who tries to kill him by using an outboard motor like a chainsaw.

  • Nightmare Fuel: The moray eel attacks, and the scenes with the ThreateningSharks.
^ Zero-Context Example. You need to explain what makes these scenes particularly scary.

  • The Woobie: It's hard to deny that Gail (who doesn't want anything to do with the treasure hunt in the first place) goes through a lot. She nearly drowns in a moray eel attack in the opening scene. She's subjected to a Pervy Pat Down and a Shameful Strip after being kidnapped by Cloche and is clearly uncomfortable about both. Then, she is attacked in her hotel room, her clothes are pulled off, and she's painted with animal blood for a Hollywood Voodoo ritual. David arrives to find a sobbing Gail in a Troubled Fetal Position afterward.

Turning Red Ensemble Dark Horse

  • Mei's classmate Stacy only has a couple of minutes of screen time, tops, but within less than a month of the film's release, there is a surprising number of YouTube video compilations of her scenes (or at least the main ones). Put it down to her Big "OMG!" the first time she sees Mei transformed, her Squee reaction to Mei's panda form the second time she sees it, and her making a big impression despite her lack of screen-time.

The Running Man

^ Zero-Context Example. You need to explain what makes this scene an Awesome Moment.

Edited by Clare on Mar 27th 2022 at 12:21:39 PM

Clare Since: Aug, 2009
#17568: Mar 27th 2022 at 4:31:07 AM

@ Bubblepig

The Lost City

  • Big Bad: Abigail Fairfax, a billionaire who kidnapped Loretta to find the lost city that Loretta's book is based on.
^ Zero-Context Example. You need to make it clear what makes her the Big Bad. All we know from this is that she's a billionaire who kidnapped someone to find a lost city.

  • The Stinger: The mid credit shows Loretta and Alan as a couple in the meditation center . They’re later surprised to find out that the person who meditates behind them is Jack Trainer, who is revealed to have survived a head shot, though he has lost a part of his brain.

  • Surprisingly Sudden Death: Jack is suddenly shot in the head while he’s in middle of untying Loretta (superfluous words - cut). Subverted later on in the mid credit stinger as Jack revealed to be alive and well.

Edited by Clare on Mar 27th 2022 at 3:41:51 PM

Melinda Since: Dec, 2019 Relationship Status: Puppy love
#17569: Mar 27th 2022 at 4:49:29 AM

@ The Cape

  • Badass Bureaucrat: Secretary of Prisons Patrick Portman has a gun in his desk to use against enemies in the second episode and provides some assistance during one fight scene in a later episode.
  • Self-Defenseless: In the pilot, Orwell tasers Vince before realizing they're on the same side, but his chest armor absorbs it.
@ The Cape
  • Scales says he's a firm believer in the separation of church and crime.
@ The Cape
  • Moe: Raia has her moments due to her constant smiling, being a Friend to All Living Things (although she rarely interacts with animals onscreen) and showing more sensitivity and compassion toward Vince than the other Carnival of Crime members.

Edited by Melinda on Mar 27th 2022 at 1:37:11 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#17570: Mar 27th 2022 at 8:18:17 AM

[up] @Melinda

Post 1

..My confidence in you has been seriously diminished...

The obstacle tower scene from the movie is a bit clichéd and...

Lina's messages from the book are omitted, <- comma but...

...he trips and falls face first into...

Coffin is introduced as a kindly old sea dog...

Coffin isn't a very reliable ally...

Coffin is the only survivor...

Bondurant's men chumming the waters...

^ "Chumming" is correct, since it means "dropping flesh/blood in water".

Treece saved Coffin's life when...

Then <- no comma she...off <- no comma with a knife...

...within less than a month of the film's release, there were a surprising number...

Post 2

Secretary of Prisons Patrick...and provides some...episode. <- delete extra "e"

^ I assume that "Secretary of Prisons" is an official title, is thus a proper noun and needs to be capitalized.

In the pilot, Orwell tasers Vince before realizing they're on the same side, <- comma but...

Edited by Arivne on Mar 27th 2022 at 8:37:51 AM

Melinda Since: Dec, 2019 Relationship Status: Puppy love
#17572: Mar 27th 2022 at 8:27:56 AM

Thanks.

@ The Cape

  • He Really Can Act: Dorian Missick, who isn't known for meaty, dramatic roles and seems like a Flat Character in several episodes, gets to display an impressive amount of emotional range and torment in the finale. The same might be said for Jennifer Ferrin, who had only ever starred in one show prior's to the release of The Cape.

Edited by Melinda on Mar 27th 2022 at 1:30:32 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#17573: Mar 27th 2022 at 8:32:21 AM

[up] @Minorica

Although the title is associated with (usually) romantic soulmates <- no comma and includes the Les Yay and blood-bonding elements of the visual novel (considering this is a Yuri Genre work) <- no comma like its sequel Aoi Shiro, all of the protagonists' sexual orientations remain unknown.

^ This was written in a confusing manner. I think this is what you meant to write, but I'm not sure.

Edited by Arivne on Mar 28th 2022 at 9:29:53 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#17574: Mar 27th 2022 at 8:33:14 AM

[up] @Mauserhawkefd 3435

Towards the end of the series, it is revealed to be a Stealth Prequel of Soul Eater.

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#17575: Mar 27th 2022 at 8:35:52 AM

[up] @Melinda

Dorian Missick, <- comma who isn't...dramatic roles and...episodes, <- comma gets...show prior to...


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