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Edited by Mrph1 on Nov 16th 2023 at 5:37:57 PM
From page 431 @miraculous
@Arivne: No. Chiyo's father and Rentorou's uncle are the same guy. Chiyo is rentorou's cousin.
This is what you wrote:
"Rentarou's uncle whose Chiyo's father has always planned to pair them up as he views him..."
^ As written, your post said that Chiyo's father and Rentorou's uncle are different people. I assume you meant "whose" to be "who's" (who is)?
If you wanted to say that they were the same, you would write:
"Rentarou's uncle (who is also Chiyo's father) has always planned to pair them up, as..."
Edited by Arivne on Apr 7th 2021 at 10:52:11 AM
From page 431 @ElJuaco
...with the lights turned off?...do something inappropiate and...
...is sent after...trips her (?) with...bathroom? By this point, hasn't she deduced that...her in trouble?
...beating him up, threatening him and flattening his...
...ensure she will get sent to prison...
...why didn't Benny have mercy on his...little and it wasn't their fault...
Jimena is still attending school, <- comma but it's explicitly stated that...
...why did they allow her back into school even while she was pregnant?
Would this clear up confusion.
For The 100 Girlfriends Who Really, Really, Really, Really, REALLY Love You (yes. That's the actual name of the manga. Lol)
- Kissing Cousins: One of the 100 girlfriends of Rentarou Aijou is his younger cousin Chiyo Iin. Rentarou's uncle aka Chiyo's father has always planned to pair them up as he views him as the only one good enough for his daughter.
From page 431 @Sugar Butterfly 432
Alma was born with her little white dress and wears it throughout her infancy until she gets older.
From page 431 @Melinda
The John Sandford book...
^ Creator names are normally not italicized.
The flashback scene shows over a dozen merpeople are shown revolting...
While that would have left her on a ship about to explode, but she does have teleportation powers.
^ You could have deleted the word "While" instead of "but".
One Castle episode...His superiors go along with this to avoid a scandal, <- comma but...
Edited by Arivne on Apr 7th 2021 at 11:26:06 AM
From page 431 @No Names Ever
Sure, <- comma the...heroic, others, <- comma like Symmetry, <- comma are...
@ Batman Beyond S1 E6 "Dead Man's Hand"
- Hope Spot: Melanie tells her father that he's taking too many risks in his feud with Batman and that she likes having a normal life. When he harshly tells her she should leave the family if her heart isn't in crime, she defiantly takes him up on that. Then Melanie's mother gives her a villainous pep talk that makes her stay.
Edited by Melinda on Apr 7th 2021 at 11:28:41 AM
From page 431 @Stardust 120
In the Vargas CAMP event, there's a monster...prologue, <- comma except...Yuu notices that the...they encountered before.
...Pei Heng have been...be married by...Qian Qian and avoids seeing...
In the season 1 finale, after Chen Xiao Qian returns to her own world, she thinks she won't be able to see her lover Han Shuo again due to being in another world and the fact that he's slowly dying from his injuries, but she finds out the actor Han had an accident at the same time she was transported into her transcript. However, unlike Xiao Qian, <- comma who retained her memories from the modern world, he didn't remember who he was, <- comma and all he remembers from his dreams is Xiao Qian. She realizes the person she fell in love with wasn't Han Shuo, but the actor Han all along. The two reunite and they end up together in secret. After that, she changes the ending in the transcript (where Chen Xiao Qian and Han Shuo end up being a loving couple and Chen Chu Chu becomes the City Owner of Huayuan City) <- parentheses thanks to Chen Qian Qian's help.
Telepath RPG Servants of Gods
- Off-Model:
- Malis's eyes and hands are purple on her sprites, but they are somewhere between pink and magenta on her character portrait.
- Rahel, Set and and Qudssi have dark skin on their sprites, but light skin on their character portraits.
- Non-Lethal K.O.: When the final boss is beaten, he will just fall on his knees instead of dying.
- Sand Blaster: Iblis can use two sand-based attack: sand blast, which hits a random character, and sandstorm, which hits every playable character on the field. (Cut the last sentence. Too speculative.)
- Self-Duplication: Cygnus has a unique psychic power to create clones of himself.
- Stationary Boss: Iblis can't move because it's a jinn possessing a statue.
- The Unfought: Hakim is the only one of the three Ravinal Acolytes who is not fought in the game, unlike Fernatus and Malekahin.
- "Where Are They Now?" Epilogue: When the game is finished, a text explains to the player what every playable character does after the story is over. Some of the epilogue may change depending on the player's actions throughout the game.
Dicey Dungeons [SPELLED WITH AN S]
- Body Armor as Hit Points: The shield statut (Do you mean statute?) basically acts as a second life bar, the difference being that there is no maximum shield amount and losing shield does not increase the limit break bar, [COMMA] unlike with the actual HP bar. Also, [COMMA] the poison statut ignores shield and directly affects HP.
Madness Combat
- Kuleshov Effect: In his introduction in Aggregation, Sanford only had two expressions: a normal default expression where he looks stoic, and an annoyed expression where he's frowning. However, when he sees Deimos's corpse, he goes from his annoyed expression to his default one, and the disappearance of his frown upon seeing his partner's corpse makes him look more surprised than stoic. Then he sees the Auditor and goes back to his annoyed expression, but the context makes him looks more angry than just peeved.
Kid Paddle - Trivia
Shrug of God: During an interview, Midam was asked why he designed Horace bald and with a few white hairs even though he's a young kid. Midam answered that he had no idea himself.
From page 431 @Ltnik 244
Shipper on Deck: This in Ao no Kiseki between her older sister Noel and Lloyd. She also plays The Matchmaker by encouraging Noel to pursue Lloyd.
^ The first sentence is a Zero-Context Example because it doesn't say what Fran Seeker thinks or does about Noel and Lloyd.
^ The second sentence should be its own example for The Matchmaker.
Edited by Arivne on Apr 7th 2021 at 11:22:35 AM
x 6 @Melinda
Melanie tells her father that he's taking too many risks in his feud with Batman and that she likes having a normal life. When he harshly tells her she should leave the family if her heart isn't in crime, she defiantly takes him up on that. Then Melanie's mother gives her a villainous pep talk that makes her stay.
I don't see any problems with the English in that post.
@Michael Katsuro: Thanks (I did have a feeling that it got overlooked due to Easter).
Here are some more more examples I would appreciate having looked at.
A revision of one of Dr. Butterfly's examples on Characters.Buso Renkin:
- Undying Loyalty: Dr. Butterfly is utterly loyal to his close friend Victor, due to the help he provided completing the research that transformed him into a homunculus. The whole reason Butterfly founded the L.X.E. was to gather the resources needed to heal Victor.
An addition to the House Goliath section on Characters.Necromunda:
- Feel No Pain: Goliath fighters as so tough and inured to pain that their unique Muscle skill tablenote includes the Iron Man and Walk It Off skills that allow them to ignore and recover from Flesh Woundsnote respectively.
A rewrite of a Daemons of Khonre example in the Blades of Khorne folder on Characters.Warhammer Age Of Sigmar Grand Alliance Chaos:
- Genius Bruiser: Much like their creator, the monstrous leaders of Khorne’s daemonic legions are far more than simple butchers, having been bequeathed a portion of the Blood God’s near infinite tactical knowledge, which allow them lead the Blood Legions with diabolical purpose.
A revision to an example for the Silent King on Characters.Warhammer 40000 Necrons:
- Self-Imposed Exile: Ashamed of the role he played in the Unwilling Roboticisation of his race, Szarekh did not enter hibernation, and left the galaxy to travel the depths of inter-galactic space. This exile came to an end shortly before the opening of the Great Rift, when Szarekh returned to combat the dangers that threaten his people.
Dr. Butterfly is utterly loyal to his close friend Victor, due to the help Victor provided completing the research that transformed him into a homunculus. The whole reason Butterfly founded the L.X.E. was to gather the resources needed to heal Victor.
"Goliath fighters are so tough and inured to pain"
"Much like Khorne himself, the monstrous leaders of Khorne's daemonic legions are far more than simple butchers, having been bequeathed a portion of the Blood God's near-infinite tactical knowledge, which allows them to lead the Blood Legions with diabolical purpose. (Without my change, it's not clear to a new reader who created them. Too much elegant variation can do that.)
- Animation Bump: While the character animation (such as Chirin, Chirin's Mother, the sheep flock, and Woe) is decently animated compared to other animated works from the seventies. The animation when Chirin starts mourning his mother's death is animated smoothly, such as his entire body trembling rapidly as he's crying. His facial expression is also not only animated fluidly, but more detail with his mouth moving in sync to his dialogue when he says "No! You can't die mom!" (in the Japanese version) with visible wrinkles around his mouth, eyes, and nose. Any close up shot of Chirin during dramatic, emotional, and tense movements tends to have up Chirin's character animation to emphasize the story's dark and depressing tone. Compared to the majority of Chirin's mouth either using the traditional mouth flaps seen in anime or not moving with his dialogue (which extends to Woe and Chirin's Mother).
An explanation for how sheep and lambs become the animal strongly symbolizing innocence goes back to biblical times. Sheep were very important animals in numerous stories in The Bible and frequently used in a majority of hymns. While lambs were already prominent during The First Testament, after Jesus' birth where a flock of sheep attended and honored the birth of "Their New Born King" in a manger in Bethlehem. Sheep and lambs immediately became associated with Jesus (referred as "The Lamb of God") and his followers. However, sheep were mostly used to get sacrificed in order to be forgiven for their sins which was frequently referenced in The New Testament. After Jesus' crucifixion, sheep immediately become the default animal representing innocence, gentleness, peace and purity more so than doves. Alongside symbolizing sweetness, forgiveness and meekness. Due to this, lambs are very prominent on holidays (such as Christmas and Easter) that have religious origins.
A non-religious example is lambs being heavily associated with the season of Spring and Winter. During the season of Spring (Winter to a lesser extent), ewes give birth to tons of newborn lambs referred as "Spring Lambs" and known as "Lambing Season" by the public.
Edited by brb1006 on Apr 8th 2021 at 10:46:04 AM
- Adult Fear:
- The Legendary and Mythical Pokémon are understanding afraid that other humans will take advantage of Alma due to her adoptive relations to them.
- Vulpix's, Riolu's, and Smoochum's parents' reactions to the sledding incident is what any parent is understandable as their children weren't at school and were forced to skip by Alma. It's hard to blame them since Alma could have serious injured her and the three young Pokémon.
- Thomas's mother has every right to be angry at him since he went to the forest with only having his Eevee with him despite knowing it's against the law that children under the age of fifteen aren't allow in the forest by themselves without an adult. It's also doesn't help that he encounter Entei and challenge the Legendary Pokémon to a battle. Granted, Entei didn't harm Thomas despite defeating Eevee by only using Flamethrower and the Legendary Pokémon did return them both home before telling Thomas (though telepathy of course) that a child shouldn't be in a forest by themselves. However, the fact that Thomas didn't told his parents where he was actually going, his mother's anger is justified since anything could had happened if Entei came across them.
- It's revealed in a flashback in Pokémon Colors of the Roses, Ash's Pokémon feared that his encounters with the Legendary and Mythical Pokémon would one day kill him with no force bringing him back. Sadly, by the time the story takes place, their fear came true after Ash had to sacrifice himself to stop Cain.
- Parental Abandonment:
- Both Shin and Kai used to live on the streets before they were taken in by their elderly boss and became Pokémon hunters to repay him for everything with no mentioning of what happened to their parents that led them to live on the streets. The only Known adult figure from their old life is Shin mentioning his old man, but it's unknown if he meant his father or grandfather.
- Chapter 19 reveals that Ash and Serena had a daughter together. However, Serena died from childbirth and Ash sacrificed himself so his daughter would have a life in a world where humans and Pokémon could live together.
Edited by SugarButterfly432 on Apr 7th 2021 at 7:26:05 AM
@ Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles 2003 S 1 E 13 Notes From The Underground Part 1
- Foreshadowing: The Apocalyptic Log mentions that the mutant slaves discovered an underground settlement unrelated to Shredder's enemies. That settlement becomes very important in Part 3, as well as one of the show's secondary Story Arcs.
- While the solution to the mystery in "65 Million Years Off" is fairly predictable, The Summation is quite impressive.
Juliet: [Shawn] guarantees that in ten minutes he can solve the case, nab the killer, close an additional unsolved murder, and ...Vick: And what?Juliet: Unearth a dinosaur.
- Even Evil Has Standards: One of the Mooks chasing the Cult Defector has reservations about "hunting down one of our own."
- Gawain: You bust a cap in that old bitch's head, everything be simple.Professor Dorr: Not easy to do. Many reasons. Practical ones. Quiet neighborhood, sleepy town. Reasons of moral repugnance. A harmless woman, a deed conceived and executed in cold blood. Oh, no, Gawain, would that it were simple.Gawain: Well, fuck, man! What we gonna do? Give the money back and go to church?
- Massive Numbered Siblings: Gawain's flashback shows that he has at least four younger siblings.
- Pet the Dog: Gawain once tried to adopt a puppy (even promising to clean up after it), but his mother wouldn't let him keep it.
- Jumping Off the Slippery Slope: Dorr is initially an Affably Evil slightly buffoonish figure who is planning a nonviolent robbery. Then he reluctantly agrees that they need to kill Mrs. Munson due to her demand that they return the money. And in the final act, he becomes disturbingly comfortable with his partners dying off, and become more serious about killing Mrs. Munson.
- Tempting Fate: Pancake is fond of saying "Easiest thing in the world," shortly before a job he's been given (or taken upon himself) goes badly.
- Uncle Tomfoolery: Gawain is a boisterous idiot with a stereotypical ghetto speech pattern.
- Villain in a White Suit: Caper Crew leader Professor Dorr wears a fine white suit in several scenes, adding to his Southern Gentleman appearance.
- Affably Evil:
- Major Courtney is one of the politer thieves. When he draws the short straw to kill Mr. Wilberforce, he instead decides to Screw This, I'm Outta Here! (albeit while taking the money with him).
- One-Round is fairly gruff, but not really malicious, and he has a clear set of principles.
- Jerkass: Louis is irritable, mocking and a Perpetual Frowner even before the robbers find themselves forced to kill someone.
- The writer for a soap opera sees being arrested on suspicion of murder as a chance to do research on "the harsh underbelly of prison life."
Gus: This is the Santa Barbara jail, not San Quentin.Gus: It was written up in Fodor's last year as a nice spa alternative.
- Ensemble Dark Horse: Eventual Justice Force member Raptarr is the subject of a decent amount of attention, fan art, and Shipping fics due to his appearance and powers, his Ideal Hero nature, and the interesting Backstory of his species.
- But for Me, It Was Tuesday: In the novel, Suzanne tries to seduce a network executive to get a job. Years later, the guy says that so many ambitious, unqualified women who want to be on TV come after him that he has absolutely no memory of the specific incident with Suzanne, but can speculate about how it went.
- Demoted to Extra: Several characters (such as Suzanne's sister and the parents of Jimmy, Russell, and Lydia) have far more scenes in the novel.
- Oh, Crap!: Suzanne becomes very alarmed when her boss tells her that the police confiscated the videotapes she made with her accomplices.
- Used to Be a Sweet Kid: The home video of a young Suzanne talking about how she wants to be on TV would be pretty sweet if not for her actions as an adult. Averted in the novel, where she stole a prized family heirloom from her sister out of jealousy as a kid.
- The flashback scenes in "Sons of the Silent Age" and "A Wing and a Prayer" provide a gripping Perspective Flip of the already impressive Battle of Y'Lyntias from "The Entity Below." There's some great Slave Liberation action, combined with seeing the Avian and merpeople Slave Races escape and form new societies for themselves.
- Uncertain Doom: The surviving Mooks and aristocratic younger sons from Zod's army are last mentioned as being kept under guard after his defeat. Whether any of them are confined to the Phantom Zone between Zod's trial and Krypton's destruction is unknown.
- Baela, Daemon's Spanner in the Works Little Miss Badass daughter, is immensely memorable due to the nature and impact of her fight against Aegon III, even though she loses that battle and spends the rest of the story in the dungeon.
Edited by Melinda on Apr 8th 2021 at 11:31:12 AM
Arivne, "When The Wind Blows" BTW.
Edited by Minorica on Apr 7th 2021 at 10:45:18 PM
"No matter how bad the heroes can get or how bad the situation is, we're sure we can overcome it and get our happy endings..."Hi guys. It's me once again. Let's have another try.
For a potential Headscratchers page of La rosa de Guadalupe. Here's one for the episode "Lo que se aprende en casa":
- Why were Adriana, the teacher and the student who later died unable to escape from the science lab? Edgar rescued Adriana but the teacher and the student stayed behind until the fire was put out, leading the teacher and the student to be taken to the hospital. But was it so hard to escape from the lab? It was just a room, not a whole building.
- When Arnulfo's mother prays to the Virgin, why does the rose appear on Edgar's house if the rose was meant to help Arnulfo? Even if Arnulfo bullied him, Edgar was the culprit behind Arnulfo's situation!
- A common complaint about this episode is that Arnulfo got away with his bullying towards Edgar and his other classmates. Why wasn't he shown apologizing with his class for his past actions? Yeah, his Freudian Excuse was that he was abused by his father and thus lashed out against his classmates, but like he didn't show specific regret for mistreating his fellow students.
Another one for "Fiesta de cumpleaños":
- Why do Solecito's classmates stop harassing her and accept her invitation to her birthday party if they hate and bully her? Shouldn't they have refused to hear what she wanted to say or mock her party? After all, they ultimately didn't go to the party.
- Why does Solecito invite Cristian, her main bully, to her party? He mercilessly bullies her and she doesn't like him as well. By the way, why does Mariana accept Felicia's help, (who hated her similarly) if Mariana knew that Felicia's son constantly bullied her daughter?
- Why doesn't Antonieta show up at Solecito's birthday party? She was her only friend at her school and she did get along with her.
Yet another one for "Muñequita de porcelana":
- Though it's shown that Bruno was really jealous for all the attention his little sister Marion received and he does say at the end that he did love her, weren't his ways to lash out at her too brutish and cruel? Yeah, brothers and sisters may get jealous of each other, but that doesn't justify, ahem, strangling them.
- Why do the police suspect Bruno from killing Marion with the baseball bat covered with blood? Didn't they think that if Bruno had been his sister's killer, he would have disposed of the bat so anyone would not have suspected of him?
And one for "Un camino de paz":
- How was Franco able to modify his boss while wearing a clown mask to threaten his school's bullies into stopping bullying his fellow classmates?
- Why does Franco attack Diego while they were at school? He could have been catched! At least when he threatened Ricky and Selene, they were walking alone at the lonely streets.
- This may have been done for the sake of drama, but how did Franco have a spider when he decides to give Diego a lesson? Same with the clown mask. What if Ricky didn't fear clowns?
- Upon threatening Ricky and Selene, Franco lets them go after they promise to no longer bully anyone. Why didn't he do the same with Diego? Really, in case Diego hadn't died from being locked up at a locker with the spider the whole night, what Franco planned to do with him? He would have been found sooner or later.
- How was no one except Franco aware that a student committed suicide back when they were on elementary school? The same students who bullied Franco and his friend did see the corpse after he jumped. How no one remembered or heard about it?
For A.I. Is a Crapshoot Video Games:
- Kuukiyomi: Played with. In a certain situation, the public service robot gets pissed off for being commanded a lot and swears revenge on humanity. You, as a robot, can be played straight if you intentionally show the wrong direction for the orphans who want to find the way to missing person service. But averted if you show them the right way, and subverted if you frequently changes the direction, causing the robot to malfunction.
- Arknights: Some Operators who happen to be the Infected (a term for people who are suffering from oripathy, a disease caused by radioactive originium ores) have magical abilities called Originium Arts. However this ability has a flaw: Casting Originium Arts too often causes the oripathy disease to worsen, and may cause death to the user. Rhodes Island Organization attempts to prevent the corruption effect from using Originium Arts and find the cure for oripathy, in which the former appears to be a success.
- In Simple 1500 series game The Helicopter, the player character's mom is ridiculously young (like a high school girl). Must be seen to be believed
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Edited by Minorica on Apr 9th 2021 at 8:21:42 PM
"No matter how bad the heroes can get or how bad the situation is, we're sure we can overcome it and get our happy endings..."

From page 431 @Orror SANESS
By the time of the Great Synod, the Imperial Orthodox Church has become corrupt via Indulgences. Indulgences are payments for sins to be forgiven, <- comma despite the Bible explicitly denouncing it. This is why Protestantism, or as it's also called in this universe, <- comma "Reformed Iconoclasm", <- comma (and its sect "Purism") <- parentheses got started.
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Edited by Arivne on Apr 9th 2021 at 11:57:12 AM