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Write down what you wish to edit on the wiki. If you have been suspended from editing, another troper might be kind enough to edit for you after your suggestions have been corrected.

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Edited by Mrph1 on Nov 16th 2023 at 5:37:57 PM

Alpinist Since: Jul, 2023
#30501: Jul 11th 2024 at 8:37:39 AM

Let me see if I can make one perfect or near perfect long post after all these years.

@ Run Sweet Heart Run

  • They Wasted a Perfectly Good Character: Michelle (who is surprisingly loyal to her boyfriend's ex-girlfriend), Michelle's roommates, Judy (the conflicted wife of The Renfield), the prostitute who seemingly encountered Ethan before, the Good Samaritan left-wing club girls, and the angelic First Lady and her students all have some colorful moments. However, they only appear briefly when fans would have liked to see them do more to help Cherie against Ethan throughout the whole story and get further development.

@ Black Council

  • Pet the Dog: He is overly traditionalist in some ways and has an Armchair Military attitude. However, he defends Rhaenyra when several other council members criticize her mysterious absence while she parlays with Alicent.

He disguises himself as a Septon to accompany Rhaenyra when she privately approaches Alicent at the onset of the war.

  • Heart Broken Badass: He is an accomplished knight who is left devastated when his father is killed early in the war.
@ Damsel out of Distress
  • Beverly Hills Cop: Axel F: In the final act, Jane is taken hostage by the villains but gets out of her handcuffs and finds a gun to fight them with the moment they leave her alone to go fight her father and the others out to rescue her.
  • Friday the 13th (2009): In the extended edition, Bunker Woman Whitney picks the lock on her handcuffs, sneaks out of the tunnels, and nearly makes it to the nearest cabin before being recaptured.
  • Someone To Watch Over Me: When the Big Bad takes Detective Keegan's wife Ellie and son Tommy hostage in the climax, he ends up being shot dead by Ellie during a Mexican Standoff.
@ Axel F
  • Contagious Cassandra Truth: When Jane and Billy claim that their client was framed for murder, Detective Grant is openly skeptical. After subsequent developments convince him otherwise, he still fails to convince Chief Taggart.

@ Batman: Soul of the Dragon

  • Jerkass to One: Jade never has a kind word for Shiva and her favored status, but she respects O-Sensei (despite being willing to question his decisions), chats amiably with the other students, and recommends them as potential wielders of the Soul Breaker over herself.

@ True Blood

  • Wise Beyond Their Years siblings Coby and Lisa only appear a few times per season but have bigger fanbases than many Bon Temps residents.

@ The Stand

  • James Hogliss, the only known Intrepid Reporter among those who warn the public about Project Blue to be isolated enough to avoid government retaliation, would have made an excellent addition to the Boulder community but dies of the plague in his first scene.

@ Baby-Sitting Is a Dangerous Job

@ Jeremiah

  • Spiritual Antithesis: Jeremiah has some similarities to Babylon 5, an earlier J. Michael Straczynski science fiction show, as both shows are sometimes spiritual and heavily feature a location that promises strength and stability amidst a looming destructive war that is being caused by forces who want to destroy everyone who won't embrace their twisted vision and include a President Evil who is rarely seen despite his major influence, but their premises also sharply diverge.
    • Babylon Five is set in a far future with many alien races and space travel. Jeremiah is 20 Minutes into the Future, is set on Earth, and has no aliens.
    • The eponymous space station in Babylon Five is a recent creation that everyone knows about and that people travel to as they build diplomatic ties. Thunder Mountain in Jeremiah is an older but forgotten establishment that was originally built for war and usually sends people out to other communities to build alliances with them rather than inviting them to Thunder Mountain.
    • The protagonists of Babylon Five are mostly middle-aged well-trained professionals, while the cast of Jeremiah are twenty-something self-trained people who grew up in a Teenage Wasteland.

@ Frankie Drake Mysteries

@ The Prince in the Tower The Prince in the Tower, by Joggi, is a A Song of Ice and Fire work detailing the life of Daemon Blackfyre II after his capture at the end of "The Mystery Knight". Daemon grapples with I Hate Past Me depression about his failures while also finding himself a Gilded Cage prisoner inside the Deadly Decadent Court of King Aerys I.

The (ongoing, as of 2024) story can be found here.

Tropes In the Story:

  • Cruel to Be Kind: According to Princess Elaena, Aerys loves his wife and only avoids her bed because he is convinced that Bloodraven will murder any children they have and that she doesn't deserve that heartbreak.
  • Deadly Decadent Court: King Aerys may be a good man, but his court is full of lickspittles, political animals, and suspected assassins.
    Princess Elaena: The king died, as did his heir, whose own sons had conveniently died in the womb. Matarys, too. Three strong men, tragically taken by sickness. Yet here I am, an old woman. I survived. As did Ser Gilbert and most his white knights. Feeble Rhaegel and the delicate Queen Aelinor. What sort of sickness takes the strong and spares the weak? ... Why do you think Prince Maekar hides at Summerhall? Why do you think he sent one son across the Narrow Sea and the other to travel the realm with a lowly hedge knight? The gutters and allies of the realm are safer places for Targaryen princes than the red keep.
  • Dragon with an Agenda: Mad Danelle Lothston is one of Bloodraven's top allies in capturing Daemon and subjecting him to the Jack Bauer Interrogation Technique. But, afterward, she uses leeches to take some of Daemon's blood for some magical ritual that Bloodraven is alarmed to hear about and doesn't know the meaning of.
  • I Hate Past Me: Daemon is painfully aware of how he let himself be a puppet for the cold-hearted Gormon Peake, put too much trust in Duncan, and treated his loyal lover Alyn poorly, and regrets all of these actions.
  • Kill and Replace: Maynard Plumm disappeared years ago in Essos while trying to negotiate with the Blackfyres and was probably killed by Bloodraven (who is heavily implied to have assumed his identity).
  • Twin Switch: Princess Aelor dresses up as his twin sister during a tourney (with the gay Daemon having an Attractive Bent-Gender reaction to "Princess Aelora") while Aelora wears his armor to participate in the joust.

Edited by Alpinist on Jul 11th 2024 at 6:12:24 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#30502: Jul 11th 2024 at 9:13:45 AM

Page 1220 @Yuuyatails

     Corrections 

Chibi Mothra doesn't like bugs, so she has to fly high over the...

...loves green peppers <- no comma and that he is willing to eat the ones that Chibi Godzilla has burnt to the ground.

^ How can he eat peppers that have been burnt to the ground? Wouldn't they be ashes?

It later turns out that the farm is full of nothing but peppers, which Chibi Godzilla proceeds to burn them down.

As the farm grows nothing but peppers, the chibi kaiju have to prep the...

The episode ends with the group finding out who's responsible for growing the peppers and making the farm full of them:

Edited by Arivne on Jul 11th 2024 at 9:43:17 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#30503: Jul 11th 2024 at 9:24:46 AM

Page 1220 @Tylerbear 12

     Corrections 

...initially rejected the show, as they felt a...The show might not...

However, it has been confirmed...no new features will be added to the tier.

^ Changed to past tense as per Examples Are Not Recent.

The film was initially released to lukewarm reviews when it was first released and...

^ "initially released" and "first released" mean the same thing, so you only need one of them.

Gordon's impact into Kirk Ronan Station is one of the show's most iconic crashes due...

^ You used "crash" twice in the same sentence.

...caused by his brakes getting jammed and him being unable to stop.

Edited by Arivne on Jul 11th 2024 at 9:43:03 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#30504: Jul 11th 2024 at 9:33:30 AM

Page 1220 @Sminus

     Corrections 

...Sonic the Hedgehog (2006) and Sonic Forces <- no comma nor his appearance in Sonic the Hedgehog (Archie Comics) <- no comma for some reason (Sonic '06 and Forces' reviled reception, or Screwed by the Lawyers in the Archie Sonic's case).

^ x4

Catherine calls the police to arrest Dave and send him to jail until New Years 2024 because he opened Brian and Emma's Christmas presents for himselfnote earlier before Christmas.

^ "earlier" and "before" mean the same thing, so you only need one of them.

Edited by Arivne on Jul 11th 2024 at 9:33:58 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#30505: Jul 11th 2024 at 9:42:12 AM

Page 1220 @Blue Sparkles

     Corrections 

...betrayed her trust at different...as they earn her trust...

Spruce holds resentment ...the way John Dory treated him...younger brothers when they were younger, thinking...after Branch calls him out...put an effort into correcting his...

...and forcing Clay to...when Branch calls him...

Edited by Arivne on Jul 11th 2024 at 9:42:40 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#30506: Jul 11th 2024 at 9:54:02 AM

[up] @Alpinist

...to her boyfriend's ex-girlfriend) and her roommates <- no comma Judy...

...because of her sweetness and The Woobie nature.

Deadly Decadent Court

...Maynard Plumm disappeared <- space years ago in Essos...

Edited by Arivne on Jul 11th 2024 at 9:54:22 AM

TheCrossoverFan Since: May, 2023
#30507: Jul 11th 2024 at 10:09:15 AM

@Arivne

The Crossover Fan (Sandbox)

Edited by TheCrossoverFan on Jul 11th 2024 at 11:48:31 AM

Tylerbear12 What you see is what you get, just a guy. from The Green Hills. Since: Apr, 2015 Relationship Status: Yes, I'm alone, but I'm alone and free
What you see is what you get, just a guy.
#30508: Jul 11th 2024 at 2:24:04 PM

YMMV.Thomas And The Magic Railroad:

  • Audience-Coloring Adaptation: Given that this is Thomas' only theatrical film, this film has greatly shaped and influenced the mainstream perception of Thomas outside of the fanbase, especially with its depiction of the engines being entirely sentient beings who can operate on their own (rather than real-life man-operated engines who just so happen to talk and have faces as depicted in The Railway Series and the series), which would, for better or worse, shape how people outside of the fandom view them.

YMMV.Thomas And Friends All Engines Go:

  • Broken Base: To say the show had derailed the Thomas fandom would be a understatement. From day one, the show has attracted a large hatedom consisting of longtime fans of the original books and show who consider the show to be a complete betrayal of the original books and show due to its lack of railway realism and the Denser and Wackier tone. That said, the show has attracted many defenders as well, with fans arguing that older fans are being far too harsh on the show and that the show is still a well-animated and well-written show in its own right, even improving on some of the original show's issues, like Nia being more fleshed ouy. Others opt to Take a Third Option, arguing that while the show isn't bad, it should've been a separate spin-off rather than a full replacement for the original series, feeling the two could've co-existed alongside each other.

Edited by Tylerbear12 on Jul 12th 2024 at 6:44:48 PM

G-Editor The 47th President Since: Mar, 2015 Relationship Status: Above such petty unnecessities
The 47th President
#30509: Jul 11th 2024 at 2:31:25 PM

I have some trope entries I want to check for spelling and grammar errors.

Total Drama

  • Affably Evil: Chase may be a Narcissistic jerk and terrible boyfriend, but he is capable of being genuinely friendly and polite whenever he wants to be. It helps that his more despicable actions are done out of complete ignorance rather and maliciousness.
  • Virtuous Character Copy: Ripper is considered to be a G-rated version of Eric Cartman in that they are both brunette, selfish, misogynistic Fat Bastards who are rude to everyone, including their own friends. Of course Ripper lacks Cartman’s Evil Genius, manipulative and sociopathic qualities and does have his moments of genuine kindness making the former come across as an ignorant Jerkass at his worst days rather than a sadistic and psychopathic Jerk with a Heart of Jerk like Cartman. They also get into a relationship with a girl, much to everyone’s disgust, but Ripper proves to be a kind and caring boyfriend to Axel, becoming a nicer person in the process, while Cartman proves to be an abusive and manipulative boyfriend to Heidi Turner, where he shows his worst qualities during his relationship with her.

Disventure Camp

  • Big Bad Wannabe: It happens once again in All-Stars where he ends up being a Domestic Abuser to Grett while contributing nothing to the Villains Alliance, aside from voting whoever they want out. Sure enough, he’s the first person from the Villains Alliance to be successfully voted off post-merge when Grett finally has enough of his abuse and breaks up with him.
  • Disc-One Final Boss: Though his romance arc with Grett gets a lot of focus in All-Stars, Yul ends up becoming first villain in his alliance to be eliminated post-merge after Grett decides to dump him and vote him off.
  • Evil Feels Good: Yul proudly admits that he enjoys being cruel and mean to others and hates having to it to downplay his horrible behavior in public, where he plans to no longer hide it once he wins the 3 million dollars.
  • Psychopathic Manchild: Despite being 20 years old in his debut season and 21 in All-Stars, Yul nothing more than bigoted and cruel brat who's even more immature than Fiore. To summarize, Yul enjoys tormenting people, refuses to admit any faults of his own, and throws tantrums whenever he doesn’t get his way.
  • Villainous Breakdown: Yul has one when Grett dumps him before helping Gabby successfully vote him off the show, where he spends his lost moments cursing at the remaining contestants, especially Grett, before flipping them (and the audience) off.
  • Catharsis Factor: Given Yul’s Domestic Abuse towards and his overall horrible Jerkass behavior to everyone else, it’s immensely satisfying when Grett stands up to him, breaks up with him, and eliminates him from the competition.

Free Guy

  • Card-Carrying Villain: Antwan gleefully admits he’s a lying and greedy asshole who looks down on people with heroic intentions; he even calls Guy a "do-gooder" with venom in his tone.

Edited by G-Editor on Jul 10th 2024 at 11:31:51 PM

My sandbox of EPs and other stuff
Clare Since: Aug, 2009
#30510: Jul 11th 2024 at 4:00:10 PM

@ G_Editor

Total Drama

  • Affably Evil: Chase may be a Narcissistic jerk and terrible boyfriend, but he is capable of being genuinely friendly and polite whenever he wants to be. It helps that his more despicable actions are done out of complete ignorance rather than maliciousness.

  • Virtuous Character Copy: Ripper is considered to be a G-rated version of Eric Cartman in that they are both brown-haired, selfish, misogynistic Fat Bastards who are rude to everyone, including their own friends. However, (comma) Ripper lacks Cartman’s Evil Genius, manipulative and sociopathic qualities and does have his moments of genuine kindness, (comma) making him come across as an ignorant Jerkass at his worst (superfluous word - cut) rather than a sadistic and psychopathic Jerk with a Heart of Jerk like Cartman. They also get into a relationship with a girl, much to everyone’s disgust, but Ripper proves to be a kind and caring boyfriend to Axel, becoming a nicer person in the process, while Cartman proves to be an abusive and manipulative boyfriend to Heidi Turner, showing his worst qualities during his relationship with her.
^ "Brunette" is used to refer to females with brown hair, so I chnaged it to "brown-haired". Also, the words "former" and "latter" are best avoided unless it's clear what they refer to.

Disventure Camp

  • Big Bad Wannabe: It happens once again in All-Stars where he ends up being a Domestic Abuser to Grett while contributing nothing to the Villains Alliance, aside from voting whoever they want out. Sure enough, he’s the first person from the Villains Alliance to be successfully voted off post-merge when Grett has finally had enough of his abuse and breaks up with him.
^ Saying "it happens" is a Zero-Context Example. You need to make it clear what "happens". Here, for example, the reader can't tell if this character is a Big Bad Wannabe as opposed to something like a Jerkass simply by reading the information provided.

  • Disc-One Final Boss: Though his romance arc with Grett gets a lot of focus in All-Stars, Yul ends up becoming the first villain in his alliance to be eliminated post-merge after Grett decides to dump him and vote him off.

  • Evil Feels Good: Yul proudly admits that he enjoys being cruel and mean to others and hates having to (superfluous words - cut) downplay his horrible behavior in public. (period, superfluous word - cut) He plans to no longer hide it once he wins the 3 million dollars.

  • Psychopathic Manchild: Despite being 20 years old in his debut season and 21 in All-Stars, Yul is nothing more than a bigoted and cruel brat who's even more immature than Fiore. (superfluous words - cut, remove comma) He enjoys tormenting people, refuses to admit any of hisfaults (superfluous words - cut), and throws tantrums whenever he doesn’t get his way.
^ The phrase "to summarize" is Word Cruft, so I removed it. Also, there's no need to avoid pronouns if it's clear from the context which character you're talking about.

  • Villainous Breakdown: Yul has one when Grett dumps him before helping Gabby to successfully vote him off the show, where he spends his last moments cursing at the remaining contestants, especially Grett, before flipping them (and the audience) off.
^ Partial-Context Example. You've got the bit about Yul having a breakdown when he's voted off, but you don't make it clear that he's a villain. Also, the phrase "has one" is Word Cruft of the "this example is an example" variety.

  • Catharsis Factor: Given Yul’s Domestic Abuse towards her and his overall horrible Jerkass behavior to everyone else, it’s immensely satisfying when Grett stands up to him, breaks up with him, and eliminates him from the competition.

Free Guy

  • Card-Carrying Villain: Antwan gleefully admits he’s a lying and greedy asshole who looks down on people with heroic intentions. (period) He even calls Guy a "do-gooder" with venom in his tone

Edited by Clare on Jul 11th 2024 at 4:03:19 AM

FGonzalez Since: Oct, 2021
#30511: Jul 11th 2024 at 10:18:29 PM

Hi, here's a trope I think would fit in Lazy Town episode Soccer Sucker

  • Graceful Loser: Sportacus after losing his first soccer game against Soccer Bot 6000, he humbly calls their game a good one and offers the robot a handshake, which it returns although in a smug way.

Edited by FGonzalez on Jul 11th 2024 at 10:18:42 AM

G-Editor The 47th President Since: Mar, 2015 Relationship Status: Above such petty unnecessities
Sminus Since: Jun, 2024
#30513: Jul 12th 2024 at 3:28:52 AM

Cultural Translation

  • The Garfield Movie: In the Persian Soren dub, in the scene where Jon tries to call animal control and the service changes language to Spanish, the Spanish dialogue was changed so that the language was Azerbaijani instead.

Fandom Heresy

  • Macross: But certain Macross sequels, such as Do You Remember Love, and any future sequel containing shared characters, mecha, and/or storyline, are currently No Export for You

Edited by Sminus on Jul 12th 2024 at 5:39:50 AM

Alpinist Since: Jul, 2023
#30514: Jul 12th 2024 at 6:16:03 AM

Thanks. It wasn’t a perfect post but it was good for a long one. And here is one more post which may or may not wrap things up for me.

@ The History Of The World Part One

  • Karma Houdini:
    • The King of France and the Emperor of Rome are both corrupt, vicious hedonists who suffer absolutely no onscreen punishment. The King of France, a sex criminal with far more blood on his hands, even appears to escape being killed in an active rebellion against him.
    • Brutal inquisitor Torquemada tortures and kills countless people without suffering anything worse than the temporary inconvenience of not getting converts, a setback his alluring nuns reverse.

@ Across the Universe (2007)

  • Moe
  • Whether as a sweet high school senior eager for a future with her soldier boyfriend, a supportive sister to Max, or a driven but nonviolent anti-war activist, Creator/arvanRachelWood makes Lucy a character who can embody a lot of affection.
  • Closet bisexual Prudence has a sense of sweet, soft vulnerability mixed with the occasional witty moment.

@ Saving Mr. Banks

  • Right before Travers surprises Walt in his office to attend the premiere that he tried to exclude her from, Walt's assistants have gleeful little smirks as they wait for the confrontation.

@ Across the Universe (2007)

  • The deaths and funerals of Lucy's boyfriend, Daniel, and Jojo's brother are contrasted in a lot of ways but can feel equally, tragically pointless.

@ Apocalyptic Underground Refuge

    Comic Books 
  • Crossed: One Badlands arc features a man who built bunkers for rich doomsday preppers to ride out the Zombie Apocalypse in, although they suffer from Critical Staffing Shortage, not everyone who paid for them can make it to them, and their builder eventually becomes The Quisling, tricking people into opening the door for the Crossed hordes to save his own life.
  • The Colony (2013): The last survivors of the glacial apocalypse hide in underground colonies where they struggle to survive on dwindling supplies of seeds and livestock.
  • Black Tide Rising: Only two of the many American government bunkers survive the Zombie Apocalypse, with a minor bureaucrat coordinating The Remnant of the government from one. Later short stories show the Canadian government in a similar situation, and there are also a few The Elites Jump Ship bunkers in similar situations.
  • The Host (2008): Many refugees from the Puppeteer Parasite aliens hide in a cave system Jeb Stryder found while hiking before the invasion.
  • Swan Song: When the nuclear bombs fly, many people are lucky enough to be in a time-share survival bunker at the time... except that the owners Cutting Corners causes a massive cave-in which kills many residents, and infighting kills many more.
  • Wool: The setting is an underground bunker run in a dictatorial fashion, with the Earth above having been irradiated generations earlier. It turns out there are hundreds of other bunkers nearby, and their builder started the war that wiped out the surface after tricking or kidnapping all of the original occupants into the bunkers to preserve the human race.
  • Jeremiah:
    • The soldiers, scientists, and other officials trying to find a cure to the Only Fatal to Adults Big Death plague take refugee in the Thunder Mountain NORAD bunker but are wiped out when a guard-turned-looter accidentally brings the plague back into the bunker. However, the bunker does protect their children from the subsequent Apocalypse Anarchy and give them a base for their efforts to help rebuild the world.
    • The people who actually caused the Big Death take refuge in a second bunker, Raven Rock, survive the initial outbreak and eventually start plotting to impose their will on what remains of the world.

@ The Prince in the Tower

The Rat, the Hawk, and the Pig traded on stories about their association with Dunk to get close to Aelor.

Daemon will have a dream about how Bittersteel dies without ever accomplishing his goals and will impart it to Bittersteel or one of his allies, with Bittersteel denying the truth of this vision but also being unsettled it.

Daemon will be in contact with Aenys.

The courtship between Daeron and Kierra, Valarr's widow, will get some attention.
  • Daeron being a fellow dreamer could give him some interesting interactions with Daemon, how Daeron ended up with Kierra has interesting story potential, and it would also be a way to posthumously flesh out Valarr and possibly his brother.

There will be hints that Daenaerea Velaryon is an Invented Individual and Jaehaera actually lived to be the mother of Aegon III's children.
  • Admittedly, this is a long shot, but it would give the Blackfyres even more Targaryen blood, the maesters are sometimes presented as sinister falsifiers of history, and the author might want a way to tie the story in with the ongoing House of the Dragon.

Edited by Alpinist on Jul 12th 2024 at 9:57:50 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#30515: Jul 12th 2024 at 9:21:37 AM

[up] @The Crossover Fan

     Corrections 

This took a lot longer to correct than I thought it would, so I won't be correcting anything of yours this long again.

The third sandbox of mine where I will make character sheets, recaps, or any tropes that have been added, <- comma maybe like franchises.

The anthology of animated television from Creator/Nickelodeon, <- comma with moments of cartoons that give...

The theme opening where the children show how much they love cartoons.

Each of the characters from the shorts getting their very own good endings (excluding The Goose Lady). <- period

During his battles with the villains, Santa always tries to give them a chance at redemption, <- comma which helps both South Pole Joe and Elmer Scrooge’s employers. Bedlam Bunny even starts <missing text>

Jelly defending Fargus from the angry mob when <missing text>

The townspeople praising Fargus for his actions when he saved the city.

Ravenrant’s reason for wanting to capture Thatta Boy? As a gift to give for his daughter Georgette’s birthday. <- period

Tutu being praised by the townspeople, <- comma who explain to...

Blotto going to the rescue to stop The Balloon Goon from taking away Dotto <- no comma shows how much he cares about his wife.

The Twins having fun with the animals during the time in the jungle.

The Golden Robot sees a water fountain being drunk from.

One of them even defends the twins from one of the robots that is later destroyed.

Hubbykins and Sweetypie loving each other as both husband and wife.

When Hubbykins tried hiding in the clock, with the bird, <- comma with his wife and children.

Hubbykins cleaning the house after feeling guilty for...

Urp considering Billy as his “friend” <- no comma after having thoughts of wanting to leave shows how much strong their friendship has been to each other.

^ Since you only mention two people, the reader will know their friendship is with each other, so you don't need to say so.

Jamal telling his the audience how much he loves his sister Polly.

Jamal going through his life in the sewers to rescue his sister.

^ I assume he doesn't spend his whole life in the sewers just to rescue his sister, which is what the text says. If he does, change it to "Jamal spending hIs whole life in the sewers...'

Ravenrant’s reason FOR wanting to capture Thatta Boy?

Hobart buying a puppy for Okra <- no comma to help her stop walking her toaster.

The Weedkeeper's whole reason for chasing Sal and Hobart?

Later, after Nadya was locked in a locker, <- comma Kenny went to stop the monster and free her.

^ B

Bud’s partner checking in on him with the loud-speaker. <- period even checking if he’s okay as well.

^ If he's checking in on him, the reader will know it's to see if he's okay, so you don't have to mention it. If the first checking in is not to see if he's well, you need to say what it's for.

Mo-Skito being there for Mitzi when she <missing text>

Crazy <missing text>

...suggesting she can go ask <missing text>

Fathead’s father giving him advice on how to take the egg.

^ Take the egg how? Take the egg where?

In the present during freetime, Nadia is shown to be alone and sad with her mother, <- comma revealing for the Yhe Principal w <missing text>

Both Tear Jerker and...

As Kenny reveals to Nadya about his past experiences of being a robot that came to Earth along with his creator, <- comma he says that his creator sadly passed away and Kenny felt guilt for failing to protect him from his passing, feeling like he has no purpose. He warns Nadya that he shouldn’t hangout with him because of “bad luck”.

^ Wait a minute. Down below you wrote "Kenny defending Nadya and scaring the bullies away when they tried to bully her.", which makes Nadya female. But here you wrote "He warns Nadya that he shouldn’t hangout with him", which makes Nadya male. Which is it? And is the "Nadia" you mention in "In the present during freetime, Nadia is shown" the same as "Nadya"?

Olly being bullied by his peers for being a nerd after his invention goes berserk.

Olly getting suspended by the principal, <- comma which leads...

Despite that, <- comma however, Olly appears to show little guilt about it despite being upset at his dog for humiliating him at school (both are unaware that Bratwurst was the who got them into trouble).

^ This violates Example Indentation in Trope Lists because it's a single example at the second level of example indentation.

The Weedkeeper’s song, <- comma in which one of the things he wanted to do was have a pet, <- comma almost driving him to tears.

[[folder: A Cop and His Donut]]

^ You need a [[/folder]] at the end of the Hobart folder.

Bud getting injured while saving his donut pal from being crushed, <- comma with both his partner and loudspeaker being very concerned if he’s going to be fine.

Sweetypie leaving in tears and going to her room after seeing the mess in her house leaving her going to her room.

Urp being not respected by the society by them not even calling him an alien or anything while he is stuck on Earth with no way home, including with Billy being the only companion who appreciates him.

Billy waving goodbye to Urp sadly. <- period

The Feelers singing on the streets, <- comma during which no one hears them, <- comma like anyone would do but because they're small, <- comma no one notices and they are almost nearly getting crushed under humans.

Mitzi being bug sprayed by the record producer after almost finishing her, with Mo-Skito and their friends being saddened by her supposed death. <- period

After Kate explains to them that the map they took was her project assignment, The Alien Dogs go into a depression from almost digging and searching their <missing text> for nothing. It turns into a Teardryer when it’s revealed that it’s another part of the map to the Lost City.

^ Almost digging and searching their what for nothing?

Kenny defending Nadya and scaring the bullies away when they try to bully her.

Bene kicks his fe we and...

^ Bene kicks his what?

Olly making an invention of Poultry Man from his comic book.

^ Did you mean to write "Olly making an invention for Poultry Man..."?

He rolls over, jumps into the <missing text> and stops the machine from hurting the duo.

^ Jumps into the what?

...despite knowing how painful it will be poked while nautiois.

^ "poked while nautiois" is not correct English.

Tutu using her hair to figure out where the criminal went when he took the animals.

...with her ending up throwing them into <missing text>

The Neanderthals making a fake phony egg with the differences between it and <missing text> as it’s different.

^ "Fake" and "phony" mean the same thing, so you only need one of them.

^ The differences between the fake egg and what?

Taung informs Fathead that she took a fake egg for him to use, <- comma with the latter pointing out that it’s cheating and not fair and the former pointing out Pogo only has one foot. During the beginning of the match, Fathead reminiscences about not wanting to do anything his parents' way as well as his friend telling him how his <missing text> Instead, he uses said fake egg by throwing it into the rocks while he uses the xylophone, <- comma which distracts the dinosaur long enough for Fathead to take out the egg and put it in his nest, <- comma with his pet dinosaur Bird coming to his aid to rescue and take him safely to the match. All <missing text>'''

^ His friend telling him how his what?

Trixie’s magic tricks during her montage as the assistant: <missing text>

She uses the cards to create a version of the Eiffel Tower in Paris. <- period

Her last one is when she gets presumably fe d in an attempt...

^ "fe d" is not correct English.

Afterwards, the hat she wears has a few animals and objects coming out of it. She uses one of the music notes to free herself from of chains.

After being locked up in a cage with various animals coming after her, <- comma Trixie uses a napkin to escape. She uses one of the hoops, <- comma which has the gorilla accidentally punch a lion, <- comma after which she uses one of said hoops to escape from a cage. The tiger escapes, <- comma but instead the little girl uses a rope to remove its stripes from its body and uses it to climb over <missing text> to leave a door <missing text>.

^ Climb over what to leave a door what?

She then uses the scene change lever, <- comma which changes which changes the scene to ocean, the North Pole, outer space, modern, <- comma western, and station.

Even when nearly being endangered, she uses her magic to turn said tiger into a bunny.

She uses one of the curtains as a magic trick to save herself from being hurt.

...for having gotten them in trouble so many times without no punishment at all.

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#30516: Jul 12th 2024 at 9:24:52 AM

[up] @Tylerbear 12

...(rather than real-life man-operated engines...

From day one, the show has attracted a large hatedom, <- comma mainly...

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#30517: Jul 12th 2024 at 9:26:48 AM

[up] @F Gonzalez

Sportacus. <- period After losing...which it returns, <- comma although...

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#30518: Jul 12th 2024 at 9:30:11 AM

[up] @Sminus

But Certain Macross sequels...future sequels containing...currently No Export for You. <- period

This was written as if it followed another sentence.

Edited by Arivne on Jul 12th 2024 at 9:30:24 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#30519: Jul 12th 2024 at 9:34:35 AM

[up] @Alpinist

Brutal inquisitor Torquemada tortures and kills...

Moe <- no colon

...activist, Evan Rachel Wood makes Lucy a character who can...

Right before Travers surprises Walt in his office to attend the premiere that...

...the author might want a way to tie the story in...

Edited by Arivne on Jul 12th 2024 at 9:41:58 AM

Tylerbear12 What you see is what you get, just a guy. from The Green Hills. Since: Apr, 2015 Relationship Status: Yes, I'm alone, but I'm alone and free
What you see is what you get, just a guy.
#30520: Jul 12th 2024 at 2:06:51 PM

Thanks, Arivne.


YMMV.Little Witch Academia:

  • Franchise Original Sin: Diana in the TV series has been criticized for being "too perfect". However, Diana has always been considered The Ace and there are several moments in both the short films that establishes her intellect and skill (like her answering a high level question in the 2013 film and defeating the mushroom monster with Finnelan in The Enchanted Parade). However, these moments were offset by her Alpha Bitch behavior. In the TV series, however, her flaws were toned down, with some episodes like "Luna Nova and the White Dragon" having her solve adult problems with ease, which many felt was too much.

Edited by Tylerbear12 on Jul 13th 2024 at 10:25:06 AM

jahman Since: Dec, 2014 Relationship Status: Dancing with myself
#30521: Jul 12th 2024 at 6:12:16 PM

Pokémon S11E9 "Team Shocker!"

Dawn is highly optimistic about her chances of winning the Solaceon Contest, especially considering her extensive training devoted to her recently acquired and evolved Ambipom. Therefore, it's tough for her to accept when the unexpected happens. However, this setback is an invaluable learning experience thanks to a friendly rival's support.

Pokemon S 11 E 14 Lost Leader Strategy

  • The Load: Dawn opens up to Maylene about her concerns that she might be holding Ash back by participating in Contests. She feels like she's not improving and worries if she's a worthwhile companion for Ash. Dawn challenges Maylene to a battle to help her escape her low spirits. It's suggested that Dawn's primary goal is to ensure that Ash gets his gym battle and, if she's lucky, regain her confidence by proving to herself that she can contribute to Ash's ambitions.

Pokemon S 11 E 47 A Trainer And Child Reunion

As the group progresses, they come across Aaron, widely regarded as the most renowned member of the Sinnoh Elite Four.

  • Chick Magnet: During Aaron's public practice session, a large number of enthusiastic supporters showed up, including Jenny and Dawn, who were just a couple of the many female fans in attendance.

Pokemon S 12 E 2 A Breed Stampede

Dawn's Piloswine becomes somewhat temperamental, and things only escalate when it evolves into Mamoswine.

Rent-A-Girlfriend

Chizuru

  • Last of Her Kind: After Chizuru's grandmother recently passed away, and with her father having abandoned her, her mother long gone, and her grandfather's death still fresh in her mind, she essentially lost her entire family. The impact of being the last Ichinose has affected her more deeply than she is willing to acknowledge.

  • Never Be Hurt Again: Chizuru's fear of intimacy and relationships runs deep because of the emotional trauma from losing her family. Kazuya is committed to helping her overcome her barriers, mend her heart, and consider the potential for a meaningful relationship.

Kazuya

  • Living Emotional Crutch: As Kazuya gradually wins over Chizuru's guarded heart and as Sayuri's time nears its end, she tearfully entrusts Kazuya with the responsibility of looking after Chizuru when she's gone, passing on her role as her granddaughter's pillar of strength. Kazuya accepts the task and goes above and beyond to fulfill his promise, despite having some doubts about whether he can live up to it.

    Miho Takayama 

Miho Takayama

A fellow actor from Chizuru's recent schoolgirl plays and a secret rival that Ichinose is unaware of.

Edited by jahman on Jul 13th 2024 at 10:39:05 AM

Alpinist Since: Jul, 2023
#30522: Jul 12th 2024 at 8:31:19 PM

N/A

Edited by Alpinist on Jul 13th 2024 at 6:37:59 AM

Alpinist Since: Jul, 2023
#30523: Jul 12th 2024 at 8:37:59 PM

I really did mean to be done with the last post but decided it wouldn’t be fair to leave a couple of bulleted out zero context examples I made.

@ Underground refuge

  • The Hunger Games: District 13, the last area to remain free of the dictatorship in a country repeatedly ravaged by disasters and brutal wars, is almost entirely underground in old graphite mines.

@ Murdoch Mysteries

    Leigh and Heather Iverson 

Teenaged sisters who go on a killing spree to avenge some vicious and highly public Slut-Shaming Heather experienced.

  • Broken Bird: Heather went from a normal teenager being pressured into making out with her boyfriend into a suicidal and then homicidal killer after a photo of her and her boyfriend was put in the paper and everyone except Leigh treated her awfully as a result. She also asks to be hanged and sent to Hell as soon as possible after her arrest, makes a second suicide attempt, and wants Leigh to kill her when that fails.
  • Consulting a Convicted Killer: Murdoch asks them for information about a copycat killer a year after their case. The two (mainly Leigh, since Heather is mute after a second suicide attempt) tell him where they hid a murder weapon, show him some creepy fan mail they got, and discuss the psyches of the killer and a major suspect. Their price is requesting to get to see a movie that is being made about them.
  • Insanity Defense: They were sentenced to hang but the sentence was commuted because their crimes had elements of mental instability to them, although the sisters claim to be unhappy about this due to having Death Seeker traits.
  • Monster Clown: They commit killings in a clown costume they take turns wearing.
  • Red Right Hand: Heather is a murderer who has a scared face due to a suicide attempt.
  • Reports of My Death Were Greatly Exaggerated: Heather is supposedly dead before their debut episode, but that was a lie their parents spread after her suicide attempt, with her having been institutionalized instead.
  • Self-Made Orphan: Their abusive parents are among their victims.
  • Siblings in Crime: They are sisters who commit several murders together.
  • The Vamp: Leigh seduced one of their victims to lure him into a trap.
  • You Will Be Spared:
    • The boyfriend of their first victim is left untouched for being a New Transfer Student uninvolved in mistreating Heather.
    • After killing her last victim in front of George, Heather immediately turns herself in to him rather than try to kill him as well.

@!Sherlock Holmes

  • Bilingual Bonus: In "The Six Napoleons", much of the dynamics between the Venucci Family and Beppo is discussed in unsubtitled Italian.
  • Even Evil Can Be Loved:
    • In "Wisteria Lodge," sadistic, megalomaniacal former dictator Murillo has two innocent young daughters who love him almost as much as everyone else in the episode rightly hates him.
    • In "The Greek Interpreter," Miles Latimer murders the brother of a woman he is seducing but, while she had no idea he would do that and is upset to hear it, she admits it doesn’t change the affection she feels for him.
    • In "The Six Napoleons," Lucrezia Venucci still pines for for her lover Beppo even after he double crosses and robs her family and wounds and later kills her brother during fights over the loot. Their father is also shown weeping over the death of her thuggish, misogynistic, and criminal brother.

  • Improv Fu: "The Red-headed League" has one of the robbers and two cops throwing things, using a board as a weapon, and pushing down shelves when the cops corner him in a shop.
    • A line Watson makes which implies that Helen Stoner, or possibly but less likely her aunt died a few years after hiring Holmes is absent from "The Speckled Band".
    • Mary never marrying Watson and simply departing the story after her case is resolved keeps her alive.

@ The Prince in the Tower

Daemon III will be named more after Daemon II than his grandfather as a way of exploring any potential positive feelings between Daemon II and his remaining brothers.

Edited by Alpinist on Jul 13th 2024 at 9:31:29 AM

BlueSparkles Since: Dec, 2023
#30524: Jul 13th 2024 at 5:03:09 AM

Trolls Band Together:

  • Did You Think I Can't Feel?: Spruce and Clay treated both John Dory and Branch as the same brothers they remember. During an argument, John Dory revels the pressure he was under in taking care of his four younger brothers, which is hinting to Spruce and Clay that he can feel and is truly hurt about their treatment of him and accusing him of not caring about them. Branch is also hurt by three of his brothers treating him like a baby and believing that his feelings don't matter. Fortunately, after being called out by Branch for their behavior, Spruce and Clay realize that they not only didn't take both their older and youngest brother's feelings into contestation, but feel terribable for how they treated them. John Dory also realizes that he truly didn't consider Branch's feelings and felt bad for hurting him.
  • Prank Gone Too Far: More like joke gone too far as John Dory pulled one on Branch, but it backfired, as it ended up hurting his feelings. Realizing his mistake, John Dory tried to correct himself and assure Branch that he wasn't trying to hurt him, but it was too late as his youngest brother snapped at him and left.

Edited by BlueSparkles on Jul 13th 2024 at 6:01:51 AM

miraculous Goku Black (Apprentice)
Goku Black
#30525: Jul 13th 2024 at 8:13:15 AM

Roger ap Gwilliam character page in Doctor Who Villains Revival Series

  • Faux Affably Evil: Gwilliam presents as this charming, patriotic politician but he's anything but. In reality he desires to plunge the world into a nuclear war for fun and is a vicious implied rapist.
  • From Nobody to Nightmare: Gwilliam starts off as a working class errand boy before becoming the most dangerous prime minister in history and nearly bringing the world to the brink of nuclear annihilation.
  • Mask of Sanity: He hides it well by pretending to be a humble politician but Gwilliam is a deranged monster whose gleeful about starting a nuclear war for seeming kicks.

"That's right mortal. By channeling my divine rage into power, I have forged a new instrument in which to destroy you."

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