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This thread is for tropers who have trouble with English and would like some help with the crazy grammar of this crazy language.

Write down what you wish to edit on the wiki. If you have been suspended from editing, another troper might be kind enough to edit for you after your suggestions have been corrected.

The thread is for help and feedback on your own suggested edits.

If you want help correcting other people's edits (e.g., if you find a page which seems to have grammar problems but want a second opinion, or you don't feel able to fix it by yourself) then that's off-topic here, but we have a separate Grammar Police cleanup thread that can provide assistance.

Edited by Mrph1 on Nov 16th 2023 at 5:37:57 PM

Ayumi-chan 3rd happiest man in Connecticut from Iacon City (Experienced Trainee) Relationship Status: I like big bots and I can not lie
3rd happiest man in Connecticut
#27851: Jan 5th 2024 at 1:57:44 AM

Compilation Re-release

  • Pikmin 1 + 2 is a compilation consisting of the first and second Pikmin games for the Nintendo Switch. However, both games are available separately via the Nintendo eShop.

She/Her | Currently cleaning: N/A
Clare Since: Aug, 2009
#27852: Jan 5th 2024 at 4:11:07 AM

@ AsrulGuza (page 1114)

BoBoiBoy

  • Bad Powers, Good People: Most of Light/Solar's powers are lethal and cause more (superfluous words - cut) damage than Lightning/Thunderstorm and Fire/Blaze. Since the power is now inherited to BoBoiBoy, he can (superfluous word - cut) use Light/Solar (superfluous word - cut) without endangering the others or himself, although it requires using much energy and this can lead to him becoming exhausted.

  • Light Is Good: Although Light/Solar lacks any holy connotations and is the most lethal Elemental Form, he is the only Elemental Form whose attack is light-based (superfluous word - cut), has worn white-colored clothes since he was in his based tier form and is now inherited to a good-hearted boy.

  • Made of Iron: When BoBoiBoy uses any kind of Elemental Form, (superfluous words - cut, move text, remove comma) no matter how hard the antagonist hits or throws him (superfluous words - cut), he is (superfluous word - cut) durable enough to take any damage from the antagonist during the fight, even though he still feels pain and can be wounded.

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#27853: Jan 5th 2024 at 8:40:44 AM

Page 1114 @jahman

There don't appear to be any English mistakes in those examples.

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#27854: Jan 5th 2024 at 8:51:10 AM

Page 1114 @peterlo209

     Corrections 

...backlash from fans and viewers because not only is he a downgrade from his novel counterpart, who in the novels was more competent and acted as a physical threat to the heroes several times, but...species. And He had less screentime to set him up as the final villain and in the screentime he appears, he is dumbed down to a bumbling, idiotic Jerkass who fails to force any respect from some of his men. His incompetence includes trying to stupidly destroy his super-locusts, resulting in the destruction of his dino sanctuary and, <- comma when his plans starts to fall apart around him, he throws an annoying and wimpy villainous breakdown. In addition is his poor acting and dialogue and being too over-the-top to be a dangerous threat.

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#27855: Jan 5th 2024 at 8:56:28 AM

Page 1114 @G-Editor

...committing such actions are to try...and get him to view her...

The fact that Clyde is cursing at her while doing so <- no comma does nothing...

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#27856: Jan 5th 2024 at 9:03:04 AM

Page 1114 @ Alpinist

While the books have a fair number of action scenes, there only tend to be...

...only makes three speaking by appearances...

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#27857: Jan 5th 2024 at 9:04:57 AM

Page 1114 @N2002

I can't find any English errors in those examples.

Edited by Arivne on Jan 5th 2024 at 9:05:28 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#27858: Jan 5th 2024 at 9:17:17 AM

[up] @Ayumi-chan

I don't see anything wrong with the English in that example.

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#27859: Jan 5th 2024 at 9:19:01 AM

[up] @Chris X

As a matter of personal policy, I don't proofread and correct already existing text on the wiki.

Tylerbear12 What you see is what you get, just a guy. from The Green Hills. Since: Apr, 2015 Relationship Status: Yes, I'm alone, but I'm alone and free
What you see is what you get, just a guy.
#27860: Jan 5th 2024 at 11:01:14 AM

YMMV.Disney On Ice:

  • Older Than They Think: While the show launched in 1981, the concept of Disney characters on ice predates the show by 32 years, as The Ice Capades would feature various Disney segments in its shows beginning in 1949 and through the 1950s. Notably, the costumes created for the The Ice Capades would be reused for Disneyland in its first few years of operation.

  • Base-Breaking Character: Ruby Rose herself has deeply divided the FNDM. Many fans adore Ruby for her unbridled optimism, kindhearted and heroic personality, and badass abilities and weapons, while others find her to be a clichéd, underdeveloped, and bland Vanilla Protagonist who has no stakes in the overarching narrative and has little to stand out compared to the rest of the cast, including her teammates.

Edited by Tylerbear12 on Jan 5th 2024 at 8:29:46 AM

G-Editor The 47th President Since: Mar, 2015 Relationship Status: Above such petty unnecessities
StarSword Captain of USS Bajor from somewhere in deep space Since: Sep, 2011
Captain of USS Bajor
#27862: Jan 5th 2024 at 1:07:21 PM

[up][up]Both of those appear to be correct English.

Trust me, I'm an engineer!
liamrev Since: May, 2020
#27863: Jan 5th 2024 at 2:30:03 PM

can someone please add [spoiler: callaghan] from big hero 6 into the tragic villain/film page

i cant edit cause i got sucky grammar so i need someone else 2 do it 4 me

mabye along the lines of "he was once a respected scientist who after losing his daughter went crazy and tried to take revenge on the man he feels is responsible; he ends up killing [spoiler: tadashi] and then in a cruel twist of fate [spoiler: his daughter is alive and all this was for nothing]" but ya'know word it good

thx in advance whoever puts in on there

Tycoonninja Since: May, 2023
#27864: Jan 5th 2024 at 2:53:08 PM

RWBY: Jaune Arc

    #-H 

Big Little Brother: He's taller than his big sister Saphron.

Edited by Tycoonninja on Jan 6th 2024 at 1:44:38 AM

ChrisX ..... from ..... Since: Jan, 2001 Relationship Status: Singularity
.....
#27865: Jan 5th 2024 at 4:18:57 PM

@Arivne

You misunderstand. I would like to replace what existed in the wiki with new sentences. Like, for instance, trying to get rid of ZCE and expanding an example that's a bit too short and looks like a carryover of the old style of wiki. For the sake of clearance. Remember the time you corrected my proposal for Multiplayer Online Battle Arena page? It's a bit like that.

If my initial post gave you the impression I wanted to proofread existing texts without bringing something new, then I apologize. It's not my intention.

Edited by ChrisX on Jan 6th 2024 at 5:28:31 PM

FateStayWho Since: Jul, 2016
#27866: Jan 5th 2024 at 4:33:25 PM

Super Mario Bros.

Warhammer 40,000

Monster Face Off

This work doesn't have pages for either of these so I plan to make some.

Moment of Awesome

  • The entire fight in Tyrannosaurus rex vs. Palaeoloxodon namadicus:
    • The larger elephant charges the dinosaur. The T-Rex proves far more nimble than it appears, dodges out of the way and bites the Palaeoloxodon’s rear leg. In response, the Palaeoloxodon attempts to push the Tyrannosaurus away and shows its sheer power by picking up the dinosaur and shoving it back.
  • After realizing the danger of the Palaeoloxodon's tusks and seeing how it is to get around them when the elephant understands the Tyrannosaurus’s greater ability, the dinosaur sidesteps a charge from the elephant and bites onto one of its tusks. The analysis stated that a Palaeoloxodon's would be hard to break even for the powerful jaws of a Tyrannosaurus. The dinosaur still manages when the elephant tries to shake it off by rearing up and stomping, the impact breaking the tusk the T-Rex bit into.
  • The Palaeoloxodon does not let losing a tusk slow it down and seeing the T-Rex is up close, grabs its neck with its truck. While the Tyrannosaurus shakes free, the Palaeoloxodon uses the opening to push it over. With the dinosaur knocked prone, the elephant gores with its good tusk. While Tyrannosaurus is clearly dying from the wound, the Palaeoloxodon still isn’t finished and brings its front legs down on the T-Rex and crushes the life out of it. Having beaten the Terrifying Tyrannosaur, the Palaeoloxodon raises its trunk to the sky and trumpets in triumph.

Nightmare Fuel

  • Tyrannosaurus rex vs. Palaeoloxodon namadicus gives the Terrifying Tyrannosaur a frightening set of bright yellow eyes that the audience gets to see many times in a shot where the dinosaur is looking straight at the viewer. The image gives the feeling it is about to rush at the audience to try to eat them.
  • The same episode hammers in that being a herbivore does not make an animal friendly by showing real footage of African elephants attacking rhinos. And the Palaeoloxodon namadicus featured in the battle dwarfs the modern day elephant, and even the T-Rex.

Alpinist Since: Jul, 2023
#27867: Jan 5th 2024 at 4:43:16 PM

Thanks @ Criminal Minds

  • Bunny-Ears Lawyer Detective McGee and Action Survivor Maggie from "Legacy" both have decent fanbases.
  • Break the Cutie kidnapping victims Brooke and Polly from "North Mammon" and Polly's concerned mother (who reaches out to the FBI) are considered compelling and underrated guest stars.
  • Long-term Defiant Captive Stephen and his still hopeful parents from "Mosely Lane" have been called some of the best guest stars of the show in some online forums.

@ Once Upon a Time in the West

@ Psych

  • Ruby from "Thrill Seekers and Hell Raisers" is a pretty popular Gus Girl of the Week for her Adrenaline Junkie lifestyle, nice bonding with Shawn and Gus, and moments of trying to stall the killer in the climax.

@ Alternative Character Interpretation/Supernatural

  • For that matter, some fans wonder if, rather than Ava controlling the atypical breed of demons from that episode, they were possessing her for at least part of the episode so that being betrayed and attacked like that by one of their own would make the last Special Children more willing to kill each other and listen to the corrupting words of Lucifer.

@ Fargo: Season Four

  • Does Josto treat Rabbi well out of simple pragmatism, because he feels closer to him due to (possibly correctly) suspecting that Rabbi was another victim of his former molester Owney, because he respects the sacrifices Rabbi had made, because his hatred of Owney makes him feel indebted to the man who helped kill him, or some combination of the four.
  • Is Leon a Small Name, Big Ego punk who only turns on Loy as the result of some harsh Mistreatment-Induced Betrayal, or is he an Obfuscating Stupidity figure who was always planning on betraying Loy?

@ Fargo: Season Four

  • Informed Ability: He is described as a Lightning Bruiser with baseball player strength and reflexes who killed many German soldiers with a bayonet in close-quarters combat, but he never gets into any fights like that during the show.

@ Reacher

New York's Finest

  • Russo shows some deep Et Tu, Brute? anger and sadness at his boss and Honorary Uncle being a Dirty Cop while his boss (maybe truthfully, maybe not) insists he's only doing this to avoid An Offer You Can't Refuse fate, and a debate about whether the Little Wing missiles could be used in another terrorist attack like 9/11 clearly hits a raw nerve for both men as they talk about the people who died that day.
  • After Russo is mortally wounded, Neagley holds his hand despite her Hates Being Touched attitude.

@ Non Sequitur, *Thud*

  • The fiction works of William Johnstone often have Black Comedy scenes where various antagonists are killed or injured in a surprise attack, and in several books, one gets hit over the head and briefly regresses to rambling about an earlier point in life before passing out.
    • In The First Mountain Man: Forty Guns West, one of several aristocrats interested in Hunting the Most Dangerous Game gets clobbered in the head and, after getting up, thinks he is talking to his mother and tells her he pooped in his nightie.
    • More darkly, in Code Name: Survival, a member of an All Bikers Are Hells Angels group is left half conscious after a fight and thinks he is a teenager and, in a Suspiciously Specific Denial manner, tells his coach that it must have been someone else who raped that girl in the gym.

@ Embarrassing Nickname

@ Godzilla and Mothra: The Battle for Earth

  • The Adventurer Archaeologist sequence at the beginning is viewed as a unique sequence for the series and is one of the first things many people trying to learn more about the movie will hear about.
  • The conclusion of the final showdown, where Mothra and Battra carry a beaten but still gamely fighting Godzilla out to sea and he kills Battra is a powerful sequence of images that still warrants some talk.
  • Visual Effects of Awesome: Between the way her eyes glow and the beautiful colors on her wings, this version of Mothra is one of the most visually striking puppets of the character.

@ Dawn of the Jedi

  • Lady of War: She is a polite, poised, and generally calm veteran warrior who wears a suit designed to both look tasteful and be efficient to move around in during battles.

@ Dawn of the Jedi

  • Broken Base: Whether the comics or the novel have better worldbuilding and action is a bit debated.
  • Fanfic Fuel:
    • The Despot War and the adventures of the various people involved in it (the undercover Daegen, Ox Ryo Playing Both Sides while losing family to Hadiya and being married to a Je'daii, the Temple Masters, Hadiya and her generals, etc.) feel like they have a lot of untapped story potential.
    • What moral alignment Daegen ends up on, the exact manner in which he contributes to the Jed’aii schism, and how he feels about this are all interesting events that only take place after the main series.
  • Signature Scene: Quan-Jang and Shae Koda flying on tamed rancor dragons in their Establishing Character Moment is a pretty talked-about part of the series, even among some Legends fans who haven't actually read the comics.
  • Strangled by the Red String: Many fans of Shae and Xesh feel that the romance between them slightly reduced their characters after their promising beginnings and, given how the Continuity Reboot made the series run so short, that page time could have been better spent.
  • They Wasted a Perfectly Good Character:
    • The focus on the younger Je'daii and their main mentors can come at the expense of interesting older masters and rangers who get fewer appearances than fans would have liked, such as Kora Ryo (with her Dating Catwoman past with Ox), wise and humble Retired Badass Lha-Mi, Lady of War Rori Fenn, blacksmith Tem Madog (one of the few Masters to get along with Xesh), Miarta Sek (a light-aligned member of the Sith species who is the grandmother of a main character and worries about his balance with the Light), Scarily Competent Tracker Bel Zana, and Hermit Guru Rajivari.
    • Haidya's generals are introduced as a colorful but probably not irredeemable group of Retired Monsters whom Daegen seeks to recruit for an Enemy Mine alliance against the Rakata. Despite this promising introduction, they are never seen or mentioned after their debut issue (about halfway through the series).
  • They Wasted a Perfectly Good Plot: Tasha Ryo being tugged between the Je'daii Order and her father's criminal enterprise could have been a major theme and shown why future Jedi are reluctant to allow relationships between initiates and their biological families, but this only gets a couple of fairly unimportant scenes.
  • Unpopular Popular Character: Ambiguously Evil Daegen Lok and Wild Card Xesh are viewed with wariness and/or contempt by many of the lightsiders in the series, but most fans can't get enough of either of them.

  • Visual Effects of Awesome: In addition to the striking Mothra and Battra models, the Beam-O-War battles in this movie can be more captivating than in subsequent entries.

@ X-Wing Series

    Lujayne Forge 

Lujayne Forge

Species Human

Homeworld Kessel

The eldest daughter from a Teacher/Student Romance between a Kessel inmate and a man sent to help rehabilitate the inmates.
  • Dropped a Bridge on Him: She is murdered offscreen in her sleep by stormtroopers during a raid after spending several chapters as a major presence.
  • Foolish Sibling, Responsible Sibling: She is a hardworking, socially conscious freedom fighter, while one of her sisters, Inyri, is a gangster's girlfriend before getting some Character Development.
  • The One Who Made It Out: She worked hard to get off her penal colony homeworld and prove to the Galaxy that there are still decent people there who deserve aid and respect.
  • Team Mom: She mentors Gavin in astronavigation and looks out for the mental well-being of the others, being viewed as the heart of the squadron.
  • Wrench Wench: She is an expert mechanic specializing in speeder repair.

    Inyri Forge 

Inyri Forge

Species Human

Homeworld Kessel

One of Lujayne Forge's sisters, who starts out as a reluctant ally of the squadron before becoming less reluctant and eventually becoming a full member.
  • Conflicting Loyalties: She spends a while choosing between her Bastard Boyfriend (who is working with the Rogues but plotting against them) and the Rogues who have saved her life and care for her because of her sister.
  • Foolish Sibling, Responsible Sibling: Lujayne is a hardworking, socially conscious freedom fighter, while Inyri is a gangster's girlfriend and accomplice, although after getting some Character Development, she becomes very similar to Lujayne.
  • Reformed Criminal: She goes from preparing drugs for her boyfriend to becoming an earnest and dedicated soldier who fights against multiple galactic menaces.

    Andoorni Hui 

Andoorni Hui

Species Rodian

Homeworld Rodia

A Rodian huntress and member of the squadron when it begins clashing with Isard's forces.
  • Doomed Hurt Guy: She insists on flying on a mission before fully recovering from being nonfatally shot by assassins in an earlier scene and dies on that mission.
  • Proud Warrior Race Guy: She is a famous land huntress who decided to become a fighter pilot to increase her reputation and took to it Like a Duck Takes to Water. However, she makes a conscious choice to serve the New Republic (making friends in the squadron) when many of her people become Imperial lackeys.
  • You No Take Candle: She speaks limited Basic and has a hard time forming long sentences, saying "Not do" when she is unable to make a maneuver.

    Peshk Vri'syk 

Peshk Vri'syk

Species Bothan

Homeworld Bouthuwai

A Bothan pilot put on the squadron to reward his people for stealing the Death Star plans.
  • Jerkass: He is arrogant, ignores opportunities to befriend others, and enjoys looking good at their expense.
  • New Meat: He is an inexperienced but talented pilot who is put in the squadron for political reasons.
  • We Hardly Knew Ye: His Jerkass attitude keeps him from interacting much with his comrades before his death late in his one appearance.

    Tal'dira 

Tal'dira

Species' Twi'lek

Homeworld Ryloth

The commander of a Twi'lek squadron that flies alongside the Rogues. He later briefly becomes a member of the squadron,

@ Dawn of the Jedi

  • Keep Circulating the Tapes: While there are ebooks for each individual issue, the trade paperbacks only have one printing and tend to cost $50 or more, while the individual paper issues are also on the pricey side.
  • Screwed by the Network: The series was off to a good start, with a fun cast and an interesting plot buildup, before Disney announced its Continuity Reboot with no exceptions even for prequel stories like this one, causing the last arc to get a Time Skip, hurry to rush through various plot points to take care of the main villains, and end with some elements still unresolved. A common feeling is that, if the series had run as long as previous Dark Horse labels and not just -5 issues and one tie-in novel, it could have made a huge impact.

@ Nice, Mean, and In-Between

  • "Three Brothers, Two Sisters, and One Cup of Poison", a short story in the young readers' mystery anthology collection Super Puzzletastic Mysteries, features triplet brothers Drake (a rude Perpetual Frowner), the cheerful Blake, and Jake The Stoic (who, along with Blake, acts as The Dutiful Son, albeit partially to avoid being disenherited), who become suspects in the attempted murder of their wealthy mother. Blake is the culprit and admits his niceness is an act, while Drake unsuccessfully tries to frame both of his brothers before Blake is exposed to get both of them disinherited and leave him as the sole heir.

@ Star Trek Strange New Worlds

  • Dirty Coward Sir Rauth, swashbuckling Action Girl Sir Adya, and Princess Classic Adya from "The Elysian Kingdom" are just storybook characters who Pike, Ortegas, and La'an are temporarily hypnotized into assuming the roles of. Still, all three provide some extremely well-remembered lines and scenes.
  • Stranded Vulcan Navy sympathetic mutineer-turned-commander of a wet navy T'Var only appears as a supporting character in the tie-in novel The High Country and is absent from the first act or two of it, but quickly won over a lot of fans.

@ The King Nobody Wanted

Spotted Tom Sand (the only Ninepenny King who has yet to have his exact method of death mentioned yet) was killed by another Dornishman, given how the family of the Old Mother implies there was something especially sad about his death.

Spotted Tom was an actual butcher who became a famed warrior due to circumstances out of his control and was never The Butcher in battle.

@ Psych

  • Shawn and his Girl of the Week (the maid of honor at a wedding) in the third episode hit it off well, and he seems genuinely sad about exposing her as the killer. Her brother, best friend, and father are all also hurt by his revelations and how the crime was motivated by her being passed over for possession of a family heirloom that her father casually gave to her sister-in-law instead of her.

Edited by Alpinist on Jan 6th 2024 at 7:10:26 AM

AsrulGuza A QUINCY Since: Jul, 2022 Relationship Status: All is for my lord
ssbob90 Since: Sep, 2015
#27869: Jan 6th 2024 at 5:38:15 AM

Blood West

  • Bottomless Magazines: Both the Spirit Bow and Spite (bows) don't require ammo to fire arrows while the Four Winds and Hatred (tomahawks) always return to the player's hands.

  • Cast from Hit Points: In exchange for their Bottomless Magazines (see above), each shot of the Spirit Bow and Spite will cost 3/5 HP respectively

  • Energy Bow: Both the Spirit Bow and Spite fire arrows of energy, giving them unlimited ammo but damaging the wielder with each shot.

  • Fan Disservice: The Prodigal Daughter is rather well-endowed, which is further propped up by her corset. But the curse has horribly mutated her with both her left leg and arm bloating with tumors and her face is disfigured to the point she is bald and wears a skull mask.

Role Association Anime

Dungeon Meshi: A team of adventurers, consisting of their leader Male Shez, Elf mage Nami, and Halfling thief Emporio Alniño, has to delve into a dungeon, again, to save Shez's sister/their cleric, Zion, who saved them from a dragon via a teleport spell. Who are soon joined by the Dwarf FL4K who helps them cook the various dungeon mobs to eat on their journey.

Frieren: Beyond Journey's End: After defeating the Demon King and bringing peace, the heroes, consisting of the Elf mage High Elf Archer, priest Jacques Schnee, Dwarf warrior Gecko Moria, and their leader Connie Springer, would watch a meteor shower that happens every 50 years, with High Elf Archer promising that they'll meet again in 50 years to see the meteor shower at a better view. But when they meet again High Elf Archer notices that everything has changed, and soon after Connie passes away from old age. Twenty years after their last meeting High Elf Archer would form a new adventuring party consisting of Jaques adopted daughter Rikka Takarada, Temenos Mistral, a warrior trained by Moria, and apathetic priest Miles Edgeworth.

Edited by ssbob90 on Jan 6th 2024 at 10:28:19 AM

Minorica Rhythm Heroine from Earth Since: Dec, 2019 Relationship Status: It's so nice to be turned on again
Rhythm Heroine
#27870: Jan 6th 2024 at 6:46:45 AM

For Harsher in Hindsight, Video Games "Harsher because of real-life events":

For Harsher in Hindsight, Sudden Sequel Death Syndrome, Not Quite Saved Enough Video Games "Harsher because of in-universe events":

  • Zettai Zetsumei Toshinote : Done egregiously. All the survival moments and the protagonists' rescue events with Natsumi Higanote  throughout the series ultimately became meaningless when Disaster Report 4 Plus: Summer Memories came out. In the later half of the aforementioned game, Higa shoves both the protagonist and her student Hirokonote  to save them, only to get immediately crushed by a collapsing building milliseconds later, and she's found immobile and bleeding. To make it worse, the fourth game takes place 4 months after the third game (if you can do math) and she's confirmed to be dead when you check the radio in-game and there's no other way to save her, unlike previous gamesnote . The Epilogue DLC (which takes place 5 months after the main story) doesn't make it better. Instead of retconning the main story or adding Higa's survival route, Higa remains dead in said DLC, and the protagonist and Masayuki Sudonote  can't help but offer flowers at the location of her death and pray for her soul.

Edited by Minorica on Jan 7th 2024 at 9:04:21 PM

"No matter how bad the heroes can get or how bad the situation is, we're sure we can overcome it and get our happy endings..."
Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#27871: Jan 6th 2024 at 1:20:08 PM

[up] @Tycoonninja

He's taller than his big sister Saphron.

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#27872: Jan 6th 2024 at 1:32:02 PM

[up] @Fate Stay Who

     Corrections 

...the two are a surprisingly popular ship, <- comma especially with...

Not to mention that the enemies of the Imperium are, <- comma by and large, <- comma just as evil as imperial propaganda makes them out to be, especially Chaos. As a result, <- comma it becomes <missing text> to root for the Imperium when it is faced by enemies seeking humanity’s annihilation, or at the very least, see the Imperium less as a cautionary tale on fascism and more as a victim who became a bully. <- period

^ It becomes what to root for the Imperium? Easy?

...all the moments where he was written as a petty jerk...

After realizing the danger of the Palaeoloxodon's tusks and seeing how hard it is...a Palaeoloxodon's tusk would be hard to break even for the powerful jaws of a Tyrannosaurus. The dinosaur still manages to do so when...

The Palaeoloxodon does not let losing a tusk slow it down, <- comma and seeing the T-Rex is up close, grabs its neck with its trunk.

The same episode hammers in that being a herbivore does not make an animal friendly by showing real footage of African elephants attacking rhinos, <- comma and the Palaeoloxodon namadicus featured in the battle dwarfs the modern day elephant <- no comma and even the T-Rex.

Edited by Arivne on Jan 6th 2024 at 1:32:28 AM

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#27873: Jan 6th 2024 at 2:04:10 PM

[up] @Alpinist

     Corrections 

The train battle (the aftermath of which looks quite impressive and) takes...in action <- no comma or Morton...

...avoid An Offer You Can't Refuse fate, <- comma and...

...thinks he is talking to his mother and tells her he pooped in his nightie.

...is left half conscious after a fight and <- no comma from the ground, thinks...

In the libertarian pulp novel Code Name: Survival, a Really Gets Around biker...

The Despot War and the adventures of the various people involved in it (the...

Tasha Ryo being tugged between both the Je'daii Order and her father's criminal enterprise...

...while one of her sisters, Inyri, <- comma is a gangster's...

She is an expert mechanic specializing in speeder repair.

...sympathetic mutineer-turned-commander of a wet navy...

[[WMG:Spotted Tom was an actual butcher...

Her brother, best friend, and father are all also hurt by his revelations <- no comma and...

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#27874: Jan 6th 2024 at 2:12:13 PM

[up] @ssbob90

     Corrections 

Both the Spirit Bow and Spite (bows) don't require ammo to fire arrows, <- comma while...

But the curse has horribly mutated her, <- comma with both her left leg and arm bloating with tumors and her face being disfigured...

...has to delve into a dungeon <- no comma again <- no comma to save...spell. They are soon joined by the Dwarf FL 4 K, <- comma who...

But when they meet again, <- comma High Elf Archer notices that everything has changed, and soon after Connie passes away from old age. Twenty years after their last meeting, <- comma High Elf Archer would form a new adventuring party consisting of Jaques's adopted daughter Rikka Takarada, Temenos Mistral, a warrior trained by Moria, and apathetic priest Miles Edgeworth.

^ Is Temenos Mistral the warrior trained by Moria, or arew they two separete people?

^ Same: Temenos Mistral (a warrior trained by Moria), and...

^ Different: "Temenos Mistral, apathetic priest Miles Edgeworth, and a warrior trained by Moria."

Arivne Since: Jan, 2001
#27875: Jan 6th 2024 at 2:18:19 PM

[up] @Minorica

     Corrections 

...ultimately became meaningless when Disaster Report 4 Plus: Summer Memories came out. In the later half of the aforementioned game, Higa shoves both the protagonist and her student Hirokonote who previously attempted to commit suicide due to Eri's bullying to save them, only to get immediately crushed by a collapsing building milliseconds later, and she's found immobile and bleeding. To make it worse, the fourth game takes place 4 months after the third game (if you can do math) and she's confirmed to be dead when you check the radio in-game and there's no other way to save her, <- comma unlike previous gamesnote in the second game, particularly in Nishizaki's arc, saving Natsumi Higa is mandatory and the only way to progress the story. In the third game, the protagonist can choose to save her when she's trapped inside the burning storage <missing text> or pick a food box and let her die. The Epilogue DLC doesn't make it better. <- period Instead of retconning the main story or adding Higa's survival route, Higa remains dead in said DLC, and the protagonist and Masayuki Sudonote the protagonist of the first game, also known as Keith Helm in the English version can't help but offer flowers at the location of her death and pray for her soul.

^ When she's trapped inside the burning storage what? Building?


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