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Edited by Mrph1 on Nov 16th 2023 at 5:37:57 PM
Page 1079 @matruz
If you venture to the Elevated Temples before defeating Afilaor, Anunciada appears in order to helpfully tell you that you need to acquire an additional ability to proceed and mark its location on the map.
^ As this is worded, you mark its location on the map.
^ If it's actually Anunciada who makes the mark, the wording needs to be changed.
Anunciada: "...and marks its location on the map for you.
Edited by Arivne on Nov 8th 2023 at 9:04:11 AM
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Point taken on the "marks" for you. The "appears in order to" point seems a bit wordy to me, but ok.
For a description of a new work page:
Loadstar: The Legend of Tully Bodine, also simply known as Loadstar, is a Science Fiction Rail Shooter designed by Brian Moriarty, developed by Rocket Science Games and released in 1994 for the MS-DOS and Sega CD.
The story is set in the year 2031, in which Space Trucker Tully Bodine (played by Barry Primus) is looking to make one last big gig before finally retiring; opportunity then presents itself while on the Moon he's approached for a job hauling a cargo of camels to Mars; However, he soon runs afoul with the local sheriff who has an old grudge with him. And it quickly becomes apparent that there's more at work with this last job than he might have thought...
The gameplay consists of rail-shooting enemies, selecting the routes to reach the destination, and managing the Loadstar's Deflector Shields to deflect any fire.
Edited by matruz on Nov 8th 2023 at 12:39:13 PM
I'm making a new page. Here's the description. I'll come back with tropes.
Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles X Stranger Things is a crossover comic between Stranger Things and Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles consisting of a four-issue miniseries.
The kids of Stranger Things are heading off to New York City for a relaxing vacation. They hope to get away from the weirdness that haunts their town until they discover the presence of their major foe Mind Flayer and Demodogs. To stop them, they'll have to team up with the Ninja Turtles to save New York from an otherworldly threat.
"That's right mortal. By channeling my divine rage into power, I have forged a new instrument in which to destroy you."YMMV.The Legend Of Zelda Twilight Princess:
- Fanon: While it's not confirmed, given that this version of Link was raised on a ranch and is a descendent of the Hero of Time, many fans have theorized that Hero of Time Link ended up with Malon in the interim between Majora's Mask and this game.
- Fans Prefer the New Her: Although this is the only game to depict Zelda with brunette hair (rather than her usual blonde), many fans adore the look and feel it fits very well with her intelligent, regal, and wise personality, with some arguing it fits her better than the blonde hair. While later games will revert her hair back to blonde, some fans wish future incarnations of her had kept the brunette hair going forward instead of it being a one-time ordeal.
- Saved from Development Hell: According to Shigeru Miyamoto in the initial press release, a Zelda movie had been in the works since 2013. While there have been failed attempts to make the film a reality, it wasn't until Sony Pictures picked up the rights in 2023 that it would become official.
- Self-Adaptation: Much like The Super Mario Bros. Movie prior, Nintendo is directly involved with the film's production, with Shigeru Miyamoto himself being confirmed as a producer alongside Avi Arad.
- What Could Have Been: Before Sony picked up the rights to make a movie, a live-action Zelda series was reportedly considered for Netflix back in 2015, with one report describing it as "Game of Thrones for a family audience". However, the show was cancelled by Nintendo after news of its production was leaked to the press by a disgruntled Netflix employee.
Edited by Tylerbear12 on Nov 9th 2023 at 12:55:02 PM
Hello got some more trope entries to check for spelling and grammar errors.
- Big Bad Ensemble: Kuroiwa becomes an antagonist independent from Ichinose in the finale, after Ichinose orders his death to server his connections to the murders. In turn, Kuroiwa would attempt to kidnap Ichinose’s lead researcher, Shono, and force him to continue making AD-9.
- Big Bad Ensemble: Ichinose becomes a separate antagonist from Kuroiwa in the finale, when the former orders the latter’s death, while Kuroiwa attempts to kidnap Ichinose’s chief researcher, Shono, for his own agenda.
- Dragon-in-Chief: Kuroiwa may technically be working for Shono under Ichinose’s orders, but out of the three it is Kuroiwa who is the biggest threat, since he's the one who delivers test subjects for Shono and matches Yagami in terms of combat, while Shono is a cowardly Nervous Wreck who seems to fear Kuroiwa and Ichinose is just a Non-Action Big Bad.
Edited by G-Editor on Nov 8th 2023 at 2:54:26 AM
My sandbox of EPs and other stuff
@matruz
The reason I added "in order" is that the word "appears" has multiple meanings depending on its context. "Appears" can mean "to suddenly become viewable" or "is apparently one thing, but is actually something else". Adding "in order" makes it clear it's the first meaning.
The story is set in the year 2031, in which Space Trucker Tully Bodine (played by Barry Primus) is looking to make one last big gig before finally retiring. <- period Opportunity then presents itself: <- colon while on the Moon, <- comma he's approached for a job hauling a cargo of camels to Mars. <- period However, he soon runs afoul of the local sheriff, <- comma who has an old grudge with him. And It quickly becomes apparent that there's more at work with this last job than he might have thought...
^ The first sentence was a run-on sentence
connected together by a semi-colon splice
.
Edited by Arivne on Nov 9th 2023 at 8:02:30 AM
@miraculous
Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles X Stranger Things is a crossover comic between Stranger Things and Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles consisting of a four-issue miniseries.
^ You know you need to add namespaces to, Blue Link and italicize the work names before you add this to TV Tropes, right?
...the presence of their major foes Mind Flayer and Demodogs.
Edited by Arivne on Nov 9th 2023 at 8:10:12 AM
Although Zelda is usually blonde, this game decides to switch it up and depict her with brunette hair. Although this is the only game to do so, many fans...being a one-time deal.
^ If you're only talking about one person or character of a specific gender, you can freely replace their name with the appropriate pronoun.
^ You should avoid writing redundantly ("depict her with brunette hair" x2). It isn't an official rule of English (as far as I know), but it is an unofficial one.
@G-Editor
In the finale, Kuroiwa becomes an antagonist independent from Ichinose <- no comma after Ichinose orders his death to sever his connections to the murders.
^ Whose connections to the murders are being severed? Kuroiwa's or Ichinose? Please replace the second "his" with the appropriate name.
^ When you're talking about two or more characters with the same gender, please be careful when you replace their names with gendered pronouns so you don't risk confusing the reader.
...but out of the three, <- comma it is Kuroiwa who is the biggest threat...
Thanks for the feedback and the links, Arivne.
Some trope examples for that same page:
- Game of Chicken: In the third level, one of Tully's rivals constantly plays a game of chicken with him by showing up in front of the Loadstar and attempting to ram it head-on. If the player fails to switch lanes in time, they will instantly lose a life.
- Schizo Tech: The use of camels on Mars baffles Tully. Mort then explains to him that their resilience and adaptability make them perfect for traversing the Martian terrain. He even shows Tully a picture of a camel wearing an EV suit in front of a Martian landscape.
- Stealth Hi/Bye: Tully's job contact disappears suddenly, without any explanation, when Tully turns his back to him. This leaves Tully very confused.
Edited by matruz on Nov 9th 2023 at 9:27:08 AM
Small shot at Percy Rabbit
(unrelated: i wanna do a page on Vourate Geitonoi if i binge it, should i make the page with the Greek title, Greeklish or the unofficial translation)
Percy Rabbit is a digital horror series created by mononiiz, and inspired by Lacey Games.
Percy Rabbit contains examples of:
- Art Shift:
- In the second game, there's a brief moment where Percy is asking the player how they're feeling, or he himself is asked, and is in a more simplistic black and white style as is the insult barrage.
- In the third video, the art style switched to the same black and white style 15 seconds in and shows Percy on the floor crying.
- The entire fourth video strays away from the usual art style in favor of the more simplistic black and white one.
- Body Horror:
- In the cooking rabbit videos, Percy will briefly have a lot of holes in him while the pizza is cooking in the oven.
- In the fifth video after he's forcibly sedated, Percy will briefly turn red, with a syringe in his now melting eye as well as holes and syringes all over him.
- Breaking the Fourth Wall:
- Percy will instruct the player on what to do in the second video, as well as reacting to how well they do.
- The point of the game in the "one thing i remember" video is the player interesting with Percy and vice versa.
- Butt-Monkey: Percy himself, who like Lacey seems to have gone through a rough childhood, with his adult life not faring much better.
- Disguised Horror Story: The videos seem like just lost media findings at first but turn out to be more sinister.
- Freeze-Frame Bonus: The second video has two of them
- The first one is a series of rapid fire ones after Percy glitches out saying feeling, and shows a crude drawing of him hanging from a noose, then there's a series of insults like burden shown around him which implies that he didn't grow up in a supportive environment .
- The second one is at the end of the video and it reads "if you're reading this, this is a cry for help" followed by two bunny drawings. It shows up again at the start of the third video.
- Madness Mantra: In the third video, there is a scene where we see Percy repeating "Hello, my name is Percy, do you want to be my friend?" For a few seconds. It shows up again in the same video, but is interrupted by the Ominous Visual Glitch sooner.
- Mood Whiplash: The videos start off innocent but quickly take a turn for the worse.
- Ominous Visual Glitch: Happens often in the series to indicate that things are going off the rails.
- Retraux: Deliberately meant to look like old flash games, akin to stuff like Sarah's Cooking Class and Papa Louie Arcade.
- Silence Is Golden: After Percy puts the pizza in the oven and waits for it to cook, the music stops and all that can be heard are sound effects.
- Throw the Dog a Bone: In the fifth video, the player is actually tasked with helping Percy clean himself up. It would later be subverted when Percy displays a disinterest in brushing his teeth, as he's quickly surrounded with tons of syringes and is rendered unconscious just so the player can brush his teeth.
fixed Body Horror
Edited by Adembergz on Nov 9th 2023 at 9:30:47 PM
@Arivne:Oh I know that. I was planning to do that in the sandbox im making after the fixed are done. Thanks by the way.
And here's the tropes.
- Alternative Continuity: The comic is non canon but is set in between season 2 and 3 of Stranger Things while the TMNT side uses the mirage comics in style and look as it's basis.
- Crossover: The series is a crossover between Stranger Things and Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles.
- Eldritch Abomination: The Mind Flayer is an eldtrich monster from a world known as the Upside Down with the ability to create monsters and plans to feed off the city of New York.
- Mad Scientist: Dr. Baxter Stockman is a scientist who has been experimenting on and fusing the demondogs with his own robotic Mousers, planning to open a portal to the Upside Down and study it's predators to create his own perfect ones.
Edited by miraculous on Nov 9th 2023 at 12:20:07 PM
"That's right mortal. By channeling my divine rage into power, I have forged a new instrument in which to destroy you."- Four-Point Scale: In "Anime Girls vs Pizza Hut", Jiko review bombs Pizza Hut with a 1-star rating, saying "They food mid." to get Master Chief and the Spartans he brought with him to back off.
Folder->Web Original
- In So This Is Basically...'s episode for The Legend of Heroes: Trails of Cold Steel, Jello calls out how everyone you meet, good and bad, is a "sneak-ret snake cultist", aka members of Ouroboros. Machias Regnitz says the secret society isn't so secret if everyone they meet is in it, only to realize he's the only one who's NOT a member.
Machias: Wait, am I the only person here who isn't secretly evil? Did you guys make a second Discord server without me?!
For My Ideal Academia.
- Arch-Nemesis: Invoked by the Grail. After Shirou wins against Gilgamesh in their battle, the Grail acknowledges Shirou as the victor of the Fifth Fuyuki Holy Grail War and grants his wish to become a hero by sending him to a world of heroes and villains. Unfortunately, Angra Mainyu, All the World's Evil, who has been lurking inside the Grail, sees it and decides to follow Shirou to this world. However, the Grail does not stop him, even if it could. The Grail muses that every hero needs his villain, and Angra Mainyu fits the criteria. Rightly so, Angra Mainyu is a main problem throughout Shirou's journey to becoming a hero.
Edited by sdewap on Nov 10th 2023 at 7:53:09 PM
For Character page BoBoiBoy
- Stock Shōnen Hero: BoBoiBoy is compassionate young boy who gain a Elemental Powers from a Power Sphere named Ochobot and determine to protect earth and later galaxies from bad aliens. He is a son of legendary galactic Superheroes who mostly absent during his teenage years due to their duty and also consider to be a Superior Successor of previous Seven Elemental Master in past. While he does have moment of being silly both as himself and Elemental Superhero, BoBoiBoy is intelligent student and mellow individual. As the story progress, he lean more to more deconstructed this tropes as he gets stressful due to his difficulty to juggling his hero and student duties and controlling newfound 3rd tier form that potentially can corrupted him which cause BoBoiBoy afraid of his own powers.
For YMMV BoBoiBoy
- Creepy Cute: BoBoiBoy Lightning/Thunderstorm and BoBoiBoy Fire/Blaze. They are still inherited original BoBoiBoy kindhearted side and adorableness, but has no problem of using brutal force to defeat their opponent. Special mention that Thunderstorm often show his menacing Death Glare whenever he gets mad, which is seen as cool, adorable and creepy at the same time by fans.
Edited by AsrulGuza on Nov 10th 2023 at 3:54:41 AM
@ AsrulGuza
- Stock Shōnen Hero: BoBoiBoy is a compassionate young boy who gains (superfluous word - cut) Elemental Powers from a Power Sphere named Ochobot and is determined to protect Earth and later the galaxies from bad aliens. He is the son of legendary galactic superheroes who are mostly absent during his teenage years due to their duties and is also considered to be a Superior Successor 'to the previous Seven Elemental Masters (superfluous words - cut). While he does have moments of being silly, (comma) both as himself and as an Elemental Superhero, BoBoiBoy is an intelligent student and mellow individual. As the story progresses, he leans more to being a deconstruction of this trope as he gets stressed due to his difficulty in juggling his heroic and student duties and controlling his new-found 3rd tier form that can potentially (move text) corrupt him which causes him to be afraid of his own powers.
- Creepy Cute: BoBoiBoy Lightning/Thunderstorm and BoBoiBoy Fire/Blaze. They have still inherited the original BoBoiBoy's kindhearted side and adorableness, but have no problem with using brutal force to defeat their opponents. Special mention goes to the way Thunderstorm often shows his menacing Death Glare whenever he gets mad, which is seen as cool, adorable and creepy at the same time by fans.
Edited by Clare on Nov 10th 2023 at 3:42:48 PM
@Adembergz
...and is in a more simplistic black and white style, <- comma as is the insult barrage.
In the third video, the art style switches to the same...
...is the player interacting with Percy and vice versa.
^ I assume that's what you meant to write.
...who, <- comma like Lacey, <- comma seems to have...
The videos seem like just lost media findings at first, <- comma but ...
The first one is a series of rapid fire ones after Percy glitches out saying feeling, and shows a crude drawing of him hanging from a noose, then there's a series of insults like burden shown around him which implies that he didn't grow up in a supportive environment. <- no space
^ The "saying feeling," and "like burden" didn't make any sense, so I deleted them.
The videos start off innocent, <- comma but quickly take a turn for the worse.
Ominous Visual Glitch: Happens often in the series to indicate that things are going off the rails.
^ - Zero-Context Example - What happens often in the series? How is this an example of the trope?
Be advised that adding Zero Context Examples to existing trope or work pages is a serious violation of TV Tropes rules and can cause the moderators to suspend you from editing.
Edited by Arivne on Nov 10th 2023 at 8:41:07 AM
@miraculous
The comic is non-canon but is set in-between season 2 and 3 of Stranger Things while the TMNT side uses the Mirage comics in style and look as its basis.
The Mind Flayer is an eldritch monster from a world known as the Upside Down with the ability to create monsters, <- comma and plans to feed off the city of New York.
...and study its predators to create his own perfect ones.

Page 1079 @Bullman
Wednesday Addams is reimagined here as a Mad Scientist, <- comma but retains her stoic charm and quick thinking. Repeatedly coming up with creative ways to kill her brother and wanting to make her own way in the world, Wednesday starts public school, <- comma where she revives a bunch of dead frogs to cause a school-wide panic and humiliate an Alpha Bitch. Befriending Parker and eventually imprisoned while Margaux tries to kill her family, Wednesday uses Parker's hairpin to escape and rescues her family, while having Parker film Margaux's freak-out and costing Margaux her show. When Gomez forces her to go on a family trip and enter a pageant, Wednesday uses a bunch of red paint to ruin it. She captures Mr. Mustela, who has been following her family, before dropping him to his death. Being led to believe that Cyrus Strange is actually her father, Wednesday uses Lurch's musical talents to convince a group of bikers <missing text> and later saves her family from Strange <- no comma before using her quick thinking to turn her mutated uncle back to normal.
^ She convinces a group of bikers that what?
^ Who is her "mutated uncle"? Mr. Mustela? Cyrus Strange? If you mentioned them before in the paragraph, you didn't make it clear.
^ ^^ You don't need to tell me these two things: please just re-write the text so the reader will know.
Edited by Arivne on Nov 8th 2023 at 8:50:26 AM