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Edited by Mrph1 on Nov 16th 2023 at 5:37:57 PM
Page 1038 @jahman
...be it a freak of nature that can kill a giant even as a child (Big Mom) <- no comma or whose power manifested in their childhood (Doflamingo). In contrast, before his training, Luffy was virtually helpless until Shanks rescued him and gave him his straw hat.
^ As you wrote the second sentence, you said that Shanks rescued what would become Luffy's hat.
Edited by Arivne on Sep 2nd 2023 at 8:48:03 AM
For My Ideal Academia.
- Screw the Rules, I'm Doing What's Right!: Seeing the Beast kill many civilians on TV, Shirou decides to escape from his probation and hunt him down before the Beast kills more innocent victims, even though Shirou knows his action would lead to much more harsh consequences than probation.
One Notices First Films — Live-Action
- Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone: Vernon Dursley tries to shoo away a bunch of owls sitting on the roof of his car, his wife Petunia nervously tapping his shoulder and pointing her finger on the driveway. The next shot reveals a small pile of Hogwarts acceptance letters to Harry Potter. The owls sitting all day were trying to deliver them to him, but Vernon had them confiscated and burned.
- Gravity Falls: In "Summerween", Soos had destroyed the Summerween Trickster with his car. He and the kids were driving away when Mabel saw one of the pieces of the Summerween Trickster. She said "Hey you guys.", and everyone looked out of the car windows to see the Summerween Trickster being put back together and started chased them down.
Mimi will help Lunella and Devil over the course of the season
Well, she has helped Lunellla by helping her charge up Aftershock during the first episode of the season and currently is helping her take down the monsters.
Now that after she and the duo (Devil and Casey) have rescued her...
Which people that may find out about Lunella’s secret identity
Well so far Casey, Mimi, Aftershock, LOS— 307, and presumably Abyss are the only ones who know about Lunella’s secret identity as Moon Girl, <- comma with the four keeping Lunella’s secret to prevent Aftershock from blackmailing her in an attempt to hurt her family.
With Season 2's with various plots since the cliffhanger resolved, people who may become suspicious or find out about Lunella being Moon Girl could become a plot focus or maybe an arc during' the season.
Edited by Arivne on Sep 2nd 2023 at 8:46:03 AM
Vernon Dursley tries to shoo away a bunch of owls sitting on the roof of his car, with his wife Petunia nervously tapping his shoulder and pointing her finger at the driveway. The next shot reveals a small pile of Hogwarts acceptance letters to Harry Potter. The owls were sitting there all day trying to deliver them to him, but Vernon had them confiscated and burned.
...and starting to chase them down.
Edited by Arivne on Sep 2nd 2023 at 8:59:12 AM
Thank you Arivne. I apologize for my habit of doing that and will try to remember not to in the future (although this time I hadn't noticed how many short posts you had to correct and thought you really were done).
Anla'Shok has not added to any of their stories since early 2022, so it is possible that the unfinished fic is dead.
The current status of the story is unclear, as it was last updated in January 2022.
- Break the Haughty: The treacherous Wayne Enterprises directors (such as the greedy and condescending Paul Hemming and the less venal but particularly rude Frank Miles) go from self-satisfied and dismissive of Bruce to gaping in shock and fear after he reveals that he knows their various dirty secrets.
- Not-So-Harmless Villain: Scott Thomson and Larry Buccheim (the respective heads of marketing and propulsion at Wayne Enterprises) may seem like a pair of bottom feeders without much to contribute to either Bruce or the man they are betraying him to, but both of them are surprisingly good at drawing up engineering specs to pass on to Lex Luthor for some of his key villainous endeavors.
@ Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows
- It is subtly implied that someone at the Ministry of Magic (potential suspects are Arthur Weasely and the Almighty Janitor Magical Maintenance department) is deliberately making it rain in the offices of the Death Eaters and their collaborators at the Ministry of Magic in defiance of their recent takeover.
@ Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows
- The goblins Griphook and Gornuk make a series of Deadpan Snarker quips about how it is an open secret among the goblins that the critically important Sword of Gryffindor has been replaced with a copy while the Death Eaters remain clueless.
- John Sheridan, the main protagonist of Babylon 5, one of the earliest works of serialized television, only debuts in season 2 to replace a character whose actor had to quit.
- Sameen Shaw doesn't join the Person of Interest team until late season 2.
- Damian Wayne, the fourth Robin and Batman's son, debuted as an infant almost fifty years after the first Batman story, and took nearly twenty years after that to become a regular character. However, he quickly became a Breakout Character and made it into several adaptations.
- Sa'luk debuts in Aladdin and the King of Thieves, the third Aladdin movie, but is a particularly notable Disney sequel Big Bad.
- For a certain generation of Hot Wheels fans, the ten Teku and Metal Maniacs drivers from Hot Wheels: AcceleRacers are the face of the whole franchise, even though only four of those ten drivers were present in Hot Wheels: World Race, which AcceleRacers acts as a sequel to.
- Dortmunder: Tiny Bulcher doesn't work with the Caper Crew until Nobody's Perfect (book 4) and is more of a part-time member for his first few appearances, but he eventually ends up as a full-time crew member and one of the author's most memorable and quotable characters.
@ Ministry of Magic
- Dirty Coward: Her appearance in The Deathly Hallows subtly implies that she's not as much of an eager Death Eater accomplice as someone frightened of their wrath, but even if that is the case, her fear still causes her to accept a posting to the Kangaroo Court Muggle-Born Registration Commission and send scores of innocent people to Azkaban.
Edited by Alpinist on Sep 3rd 2023 at 7:28:35 AM
- Missed Him by That Much: In "The Bird Parade", Alfur and the Great Raven unknowingly end up at the bearded man statue at which Hilda and Johanna were also going to meet with the duo, knowing that they'll be there. However, Trevor snatches the raven moments before Hilda and Johanna reach the statue, causing them to miss the two.
- Blunt "Yes": In "The Troll Rock", when Hilda asks David if she is being disruptive in school", he replies with a simple "Oh yes", much to Hilda's exasperation.
- Disproportionate Retribution: A downplayed case is brought up in "The Troll Rock"; after the duo finds out that David unknowingly brought in a Troll Rock, he mentions that he heard a story of a kid who got locked up for fifty years because he willingly brought a troll into Trolberg. While this is understandable, given that the kid brought it in on purpose, and trolls are The Dreaded in Trolberg, after Hilda asks, it's quickly revealed by David that the punishment for accidentally bringing in a troll to Trolberg is significantly harsher than it is to bring one in on purpose, with the penalty being a hundred years, which, even if understandable, is still incredibly harsh for an accident.
Frida: "They really, really don't want anyone doing it by accident."
YMMV.Hilda:
- Common Knowledge: Frida and David are often assumed to be canon foreigners made for the show. While the show does feature plenty of characters who don't appear in the graphic novels, Frida and David are not amongst those characters, as both did originate from the graphic novels (first appearing in Hilda and the Black Hound). This misconception is understandable, however, as both characters are only minor supporting characters in the graphic novels, while the show upgrades them to main characters.
Edited by Tylerbear12 on Sep 3rd 2023 at 10:58:16 AM
Corrections:
Main.Working On The Chain Gang
Literature
- In East of Eden, Adam is twice arrested for vagrancy, convicted and sentenced to six months of hard labour in Florida. He escapes six days before the end of his second sentence to prevent the authorities from arresting him a third time.
This is for a fanfic section I want to add to. Here is source RWBY: Winter's Dusk
What Could Have Been: Esdeath and Byleth were going to be revealed as Chromified clones for the Plot Twist revel. However, after discussing it with his friends, the author decided it was a bad idea. Instead, Esdeath was kidnapped and replaced by an evil robot clone, while Blyeth was used as a Red Herring.
- Talented, but Trained: In the story, Luffy exhibits a natural talent and exceptional potential as a warrior, which is a rare occurrence. However, he achieves success through his determination, hard work, and the unwavering support of his crewmates and other people he meets. In addition to his childhood training under his grandfather Garp and his adoptive brothers Ace and Sabo, Luffy also undergoes apprenticeships under exceptional Haki masters such as Silvers Rayleigh and Hyougoro "of the Flower Capital" to improve his skills, particularly in Haki mastery. As a result, his efforts bear magnificent fruit.
- The Apprentice: In an effort to enhance his proficiency in the art of Haki, he willingly engages in rigorous training sessions with a select few Haki masters, who possess a wealth of knowledge and experience in this discipline.
For Complete Monster.
- Heart Of A Jedi: Prince Xizor is heir of planet Falleen and leader of the Black Sun syndicate. Working with Governor Tarkin and Admiral Daala, Xizor raids planets across the galaxy for slaves whom he has work on Despayre to build planet destroying Death Star, with many dying over course of two decades. After Tarkin is elected president of the Republic Thanks to Xizor’s backing, letter has him declarate war on Corporate Sector in order to destroy Urdur because Han Solo, who once stoped his slave shipments, married daughter of planet’s Governor. Xizor has newly completed Death Star destroy Despayre and kill all slaves and guard still on it, before taking it to Irdur. He uses his pheromones into coercing Daala into having sex with him, before destroying Urdur and having Tarkin declarate himslef dictator of the galaxy. Xizor betrays and kills Tarkin after having him threte to destroy Roonadan, presenting himself as the hero while planing to use Death Star to keep control of the galaxy. When Daala attempts to betray him, Xizor reveals he was working with her daugther Shira and helped her learn ways of the Sith. After Shira kills her mother, Xizor sends her to Coruscant to deal with the Jedi and eliminate threath to his rule.
@ EmperorGeode
- Heart Of A Jedi: Prince Xizor is the heir of the planet Falleen and the leader of the Black Sun syndicate. Working with Governor Tarkin and Admiral Daala, Xizor raids planets across the galaxy for slaves whom he has work on Despayre to build the planet-destroying Death Star, with many dying over the course of two decades. After Tarkin is elected president of the Republic thanks to Xizor’s backing, Xizor has him declare war on the Corporate Sector in order to destroy Urdur because Han Solo, who once stopped his slave shipments, married the daughter of the planet’s Governor. Xizor has the newly completed Death Star destroy Despayre and kill all the slaves and guards still on it, before taking it to Irdur. He uses his pheromones to coercing Daala into having sex with him, before destroying Urdur and having Tarkin declare himself dictator of the galaxy. Xizor betrays and kills Tarkin after having him threaten to destroy Roonadan, presenting himself as the hero while planning to use the Death Star to keep control of the galaxy. When Daala attempts to betray him, Xizor reveals he was working with her daughter Shira and helped her learn the ways of the Sith. After Shira kills her mother, Xizor sends her to Coruscant to deal with the Jedi and eliminate any threats to his rule.
...unknowingly end up at the bearded man statue that Hilda and Johanna were also going to meet at with the duo...
^ You could also write this as:
"...end up at the bearded man statue at which Hilda and Johanna were also going to meet with the duo..."
In "The Troll Rock", when Hilda asks David if she is being disruptive in school, <- comma he...
...and trolls are The Dreaded in Trolberg, 'after Hilda asks', it's quickly revealed by David that the punishment for accidentally bringing in a troll to Trolberg...
Edited by Arivne on Sep 3rd 2023 at 7:01:27 AM
- No Name Given: He doesn't have a name but he's often referred to as the Ringmaster.
- What Happened to the Mouse?: The Ringmaster was never seen again after he talked to the Tweedys.
Thank you. Please forgive the long post. Now that I’ve finished rereading the Harry Potter series and am most of the way through the Charlie Bone books for the first time since I started troping, I think I’ll be winding down and/or wrapping up soon.
- Runner Bean briefly battles with a stone hound under Eric's thrall.
@ Red King Enemies
- In Charlie Bone and the Shadow, he repeatedly gets upset whenever anyone insults or damages his great-great-great grandmother's portrait and calls her a "very brave woman."
@ Please Don't Tell My Parents I'm a Supervillain
- Growing the Beard: Some fans feel that, as solid as the first book is, the series really begins to pick up with either the third book (which sees the Superkids Club formed), or the fourth book (a Darker and Edgier prequel about Spider and Goodnight), due to the new characters and world building in them.
- They Wasted a Perfectly Good Plot: I Did NOT Give That Spider Superhuman Intelligence! could have shown Penny's parents and a lot of their core peers at a low point in their lives while dealing with the Crapsack World of a pre-Spider's rules Los Angeles, but almost all of the heroes and villains to appear in that book (minus Goodnight, Mourning Dove, Delicious, and Nominal Hero and The Ghost Judgment) are new characters, few of whom are even seen or mentioned in subsequent books written in the main era.
@ Please Don't Tell My Parents I'm a Supervillain
- Iconic Sequel Character: Goodnight cameos in the third book before narrating the next novel, the Darker and Edgier, Growing the Beard prequel I Did NOT Give That Spider Superhuman Intelligence!.
- Iconic Sequel Character: Magenta takes seven books to make an appearance, but once she did, fans weren't complaining about the series' seemingly permanent shift from Penny's POV to rotating protagonists.
- Iconic Sequel Character: General Zakharov and Barracuda, two of the most infamous Punisher foes in recent memory, debut in the third and fifth arcs.
- Iconic Sequel Character: The Victor's Project is technically both a prequel and sequel to the earlier written and several particularly notable OC Victors from TVP (such as Abram, Orchus, Granyte, Cotton, Gates, Luxe, Luster, Honorious, Justus, Bovina, and Boudicca) are never even mentioned in The Lumberjack and the Tree-Elf.
- Iconic Sequel Character: Dagbert Endless, the most dangerous and complex of the younger antagonists in the series, takes six books to debut.
- Iconic Sequel Character: Captain Freedom, the Driver, Corpse Girl (in a Chekhov's Gunman role that takes until Ex-Communication to pay off), and Agent Smith all debut in book 2, Ex-Patriots, but quickly fill in important, seemingly permanent roles in the series.
- Iconic Sequel Character: Deuteragonist Nate Romanowski debuts in Winterkill (book 3), and Governor Rulon, the Big Good of much of the series, only shows up four books later in Free Fire. Both appear in season 1 of the television adaptation.
- Iconic Sequel Character:
- Captain Badaya and Jane Geary both end up being among the most prominent captains in the fleet, and both get more Character Development than some of the other major characters, but they take until books three and five to debut.
- Gwen Iceni first appears late in book six before becoming one of the main characters of @ The Lost Stars.
- Iconic Sequel Character: Despite her recognizability, Liesel is never even mentioned before the second book.
@ Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows
- He's Just Hiding:
- It's possible to wonder if Crabbe might have escaped the Room of Requirement fire, given how fast he is running when last seen, and is never seen burning by the other characters.
- Many people are convinced that Lavender Brown was only wounded in the Battle of Hogwarts, and even the Harry Potter wiki saying she should be considered a casualty of the battle can head-canon this into meaning she faked her own death after being infected with lycanthropy.
- Salvaged Story: Book 5 only had three of the many Dumbledore's Army whom the Golden Trio train contribute to combatting Death Eaters, leaving characters (Cho, Susan, Seamus, Ernie, Parvati, Angelina, Dean, Lavender, Hannah, Terry, the Creevey brothers, etc.) on the sidelines of the main conflict. Here, most of the other D.A. members actively resist Voldemort and his followers, albeit largely offscreen.
@ Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows
- At one point in the battle, Ron pauses to somewhat reluctantly save Draco from being killed by a Death Eater and then not so reluctantly punches Draco into unconsciousness.
- Fleur and Lupin's hilariously blatant and awkward effort to Change the Uncomfortable Subject when Percy encounters the rest of the family for the first time in months.
- As Ron frets about how hard it will be to get past the Whomping Willow using the methods the trio employed in the third book, an exasperated Hermione reminds him about a piece of magic they have learned since then that lets them disarm the defenses from a safer distance.
- When Harry wants some privacy during the victory party, Luna happily provides a distraction by pretending to have seen a Crumple-Horned Snorkack.
- Even almost two decades after the war, Harry still attracts a lot of awestruck looks from random people. Ron half-seriously tries to make his kids think those people are actually gaping at him and not Harry.
- Ron brags about finally getting a proper muggle driver’s license and then privately admits to Harry that he needed just a little magic to do it.
- Damsel out of Distress: Hattie is captured by villains multiple times but can usually escape her restraints and take out her attackers on her own (although she sometimes needs the distractions her brother and Hobbs provide).
- Men of Sherwood: The extended Hobbs family and many other local Samoans provide a small army to fight the villains with in the final battle and acquit themselves well.
- Stab the Scorpion: After Hattie escapes from some goons in front of their hostage, the professor, he moves toward her with a scalpel but is just using it to cut an escape hatch through a tarp.
@ Harry Potter and the Half-Blood Prince
- Hermonie admits that she considered asking out Zacharias Smith instead of Cormac to really piss off Ron, but she had to draw the line somewhere. Harry has a Brain Bleach reaction to the thought of Hermoine on a date with Smith.
- The mostly grim scene of Marvolo Gaunt making a racist ass of himself to Ministry of Magic member Bob Ogden has one Hilarious in Hindsight moment after the next book reveals that the supposed Peverell coat-of-arms Marvolo was bragging about is actually the symbol of the mythological Deathly Hallows, something that Ogden (an implied pureblood) likely knew. From Ogden's perspective, Marvolo was claiming that a children's story symbol was proof that he was descended from the oldest families in Britain, which likely made Marvolo seem like an even bigger madman/idiot than he actually was.
- Accidental Suicide: Druella Black burns herself to death with magical fire that she summons in a desperate attempt to drive a swarm of dementors out of her house after they spend weeks hovering around to make Druella and her husband miserable (likely at the instigation of their estranged daughter Bellatrix).
- Adaptational Villainy: While Regulus and Narcissa get a Sympathetic P.O.V., both are also involved in various deeds far blacker (albeit not without nuanced motives) than anything they did in canon, such as killing Regulus's uncle Alphard and setting up the Prewett brothers to be ambushed and killed.
- Alas, Poor Villain: For all of their scores of nauseating pureblood supremacist and Abusive Parents moments, the last days of Walburga and Orion Black are surprisingly sad as they mourn Regulus, reflect on the broken status of their family, come to hate the Dark Arts, and even regain a little affection and longing for Sirius that they never manage to convey to their older son.
- Descent into Addiction: After losing her immediate family and falling out with most of the few peers who can tolerate her (pureblood supremacists whose support for Voldemort makes her furious after what happened to Regulus), Walburga Black spends the last years of her life constantly using the kinds of drugs she once disapproved of her brother Alphard selling. She is at her nastiest during the rare moments when she is sober, and substance abuse hastens her death by a number of years.
- Impoverished Patrician: Cyngus Black, one of the cruelest and proudest members of his Blue Blood family, ends up in this state after his wife burns their house down while trying to clear out dementors. Cyngus is forced to live off of his sister's begrudging charity. They don't get along well, and she kicks him out with instructions to ask his daughter Narcissa to let him move into Malfoy Manor. Narcissa's violent refusal briefly sends Cyngus back to his sister's house before he emigrates to South America and spends the rest of his days as a con artist who can't even afford a house to himself.
- Psychopathic Man Child: After first revealing himself to be a sadistic Not-So-Harmless Villain, Crabbe talks about being rewarded for capturing Harry "like a small child promised a large bag of sweets."
- Many fans feel that having a Slytherin or two join Dumbledore's Army (even if only during book 7) would have been good world building and a heartwarming affirmation of house unity, but there is never the slightest indication that this happens.
Her first love is also killed in a random Death Eater attack when she might have been able to save him if they had been together.
She also becomes estranged from her Girl Posse due to her grief, save for Marietta, only for Marietta to become a pariah for betraying the D.A., with Cho losing some if not all of the new friends she had been making in the group due to sticking by Marietta.
- The file clerk jokes about how, amidst all the genuinely devastating data losses during the blackout, the missing bank records were actually a plus for indebted families like his.
- Fanfic Fuel: Joshi sends K a slideshow of five other replicant soldiers who deserted with Sapper, but none of them show up again, even with the resistance, making it interesting to wonder what kind of incognito lives they are living.
- He's Just Hiding: It's possible to wonder if Joi survives Luv stomping on her hologram emitter, given how it doesn't look too broken after the stomping.
Edited by Alpinist on Sep 4th 2023 at 8:57:10 AM

Page 1038 @seekmsn
...capable of fighting against strong opponents <- no comma such as the Marines when the Marines invade...
However,
withthe Marines' new battleship designed by Dr. Vegapunk made them able to traverse the Calm Belt with ease andcouldattack the island at any point due to the reputation of the Kuja Pirates. As pointed out by Elder Nyon,onlyHancock's title of Warlord was the only thing protecting the island from outside forces. Come the most recent Revirie, the Warlord system and Hancock's means to protect her people are abolished, which results in the Marines and the Blackbeard Pirates invading Amazon Lily, nearly destroying the island, injuring and possibly killing several civilians.^ First sentence: How did the reputation of the Kuja Pirates have any effect on the new battleship's abilities?
Edited by Arivne on Sep 2nd 2023 at 8:47:49 AM