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- Villain Respect: During the initial phase of his voyage, Luffy has managed to earn the admiration and reverence of no less than four notable individuals. Moreover, even after the Time Skip, he has consistently demonstrated his exceptional abilities and continues to gain the respect and recognition of numerous high-ranking pirates in the treacherous waters of the New World.
- Always Someone Better:
- Before edit: The Eleven Supernovas of the Worst Generation are a group of infamous pirates who are considered to be the biggest heavy-hitters of the future generation. However...
- After edit: The Eleven Supernovas of the Worst Generation are a group of infamous pirates who are considered to be the biggest heavy-hitters of the future generation. However, despite being the last member of the group to enter the New World, within a few months, Luffy manages to outdo several of the already-impressive feats they accomplished over the two years he was training. While many are initially impressed, Kid and Law start showing a slight amount of resentment after Jimbei, a former Warlord, joins Luffy's crew as his helmsman.
Edited by jahman on Aug 4th 2023 at 3:58:31 AM
Tomboy and Girly Girl: Cleopatra and Frida Kahlo when they become an item . Cleopatra is a stuck up queen bee who happens to be the captain of the cheerleader squad and wears a lot of makeup. Frida Kahlo, on the other hand, is a laid-back skateboarder who doesn’t shave her body hair(like her light moustache) and even practices Wicca during the sleepover.
Edited by GXuniverse on Aug 4th 2023 at 5:12:23 AM
For Magnificent Bastard.
- The Amazing World of Gumball “The Vision: In Gumball and Darwin’s Imagine Spot Alan Keane is mastermind determined to take over Elmore school and eventually the world in order to eliminate sadness. Changing his face and voice to match his villianus demeanor, Alan manipulates students into suggesting him for school president while making them think it was their own idea. Using simple flayer on the school board to cause chaos in the school before announcing his candidancy. Alan uses slander against other candidates to win a election and institutes happy camp where all sad students are sent to be made happy by any means neccesary while announcing his intention to spread happy camps across the world.
- Ability Mixing: By combining Psychic Link and Compelling Voice into Mind Manipulation, Sister Amy was able to build Brain Trust into the world-shaking force it became.
- Always Chaotic Evil:
- Ambiguous Clone Ending: App has a clone app, unfortunately he ended up falling fell under Sister’s Amy control. While App managed to take him out, he couldn’t get rid of the clone with the servers down. When Sarah asked him how he knew if he was the clone, or the original, App didn’t answer. It turns out she was right and the two eventually gave up on trying to figure out which one of them was the original.
- And I Must Scream:
- Servant’s powers fall under Blessed with Suck as while his forcefields are incredibly powerful since he can never turn them off he can’t actually touch or feel anything.
- Apocalypse Cult: Brain Trust
- Bitch in Sheep's Clothing: Since Servant is immune to Sister Ami’s telepathy, she didn’t let him in on the fact that Brain Trust was an Apocalypse Cult until it was time to enact her plan.
- Brainwashed and Crazy: The Dervishes were just ordinary people that Sister Ami brainwashed into being terrorist. In fact, the majority of Brain Trust is under her control.
- Brought Down to Badass: A lot of the hardware for the server that houses App’s data was Rex Monday’s own design, and it is doubtful that the Knowbokov Foundation could fix it. So by the end of "Covanant" the twin App’s have lost their immortality and the only power they have is the app’s that were already programmed into their belt when the server was destroyed.
- Brought Down to Normal: Played with. While Servant ended up surviving his Heroic Sacrifice the Space Machine ended up absorbing all of the vacuum energy that allowed him to create his force fields essentially tearing his power from his body. while he was no longer super powered. His true form is still the shape of the man who’d been known as Ogre.
- Compelling Voice
- The Big Bad of the third novel was given this after reawakening the knowledge in the inmate that was used to study The Thrill’s power.
- Crazy-Prepared:
- Rex Monday created technology that makes him Immune to Mind Control. Mrs. Knowbokov started using it after his death.
- The White House wasn’t happy about dealing with Dr. Know when he used his telepathy to get his way, so they built a bunker beneath the White House with psionic baffles that’s shielded from all telepathic access. There is even a security code that can be used to ward the president against possible psionic incursion.
- The Russian military is so corrupt that Mrs Know was able to cripple their nuclear capabilities just by throwing money around. They have a lot of missiles sitting in silos that won’t go anywhere because the rocket fuel has been sold on the black market. Lots of other missiles are essentially empty shells because terrorists have paid top dollar for the fissionable material.
- Deconstruction: The third novel has one for Augmented Reality. After surviving a cacophony of tiny explosions her helmet warning her of the smoke, the flame, the dangerous proximity of trees overhead if she took flight, and, her opponent was not only far more distracting then helpful, but something she could see with her own eyes forcing her to cut its power.
- Evil Plan: Amy Mc Pherson’s plan is to have her Dervishes to perform terrorist acts on American soil, increasing political pressure to send more troops to fight overseas. Then use her Mind Manipulation to get the president to reinstate the draft and send the youth of America off to put an end to this terrible, terrible threat. Then once she’s started World War III she plans on transporting New Jerusalem to Old Jerusalem exculpating things until the Nuclear Option is the only choice the leaders of the world have.
- Facial Scruff: One of the Johnny’s grew this as a way to distinguish himself from the other, the fact that App is normally more groomed makes it even more noticeable. It could also double as a Beard of Sorrow.
- Failed a Spot Check: Sister Amy may have Telepathy but she’s not omniscient. She tried to kill Skyrider by teleporting her into outer space because she wasn’t aware that her suit was pressurize and didn’t know that App is Immune to Mind Control while in ghost mode.
- Failure Is the Only Option: It was simply impossible for Sarah to rescue her mother after Sister Ami shot her. Either the pullet reached her first, or the shockwave created from Sarah’s attempt at reaching her in time would.
- From Nobody to Nightmare: Delilah Mc Pherson went from a deranged if standard Church Militant to someone with enough knowledge and power to cause The End of the World as We Know It.
- Immortals Fear Death: Averte. After Chimpion destroyed his servers, App felt as if an invisible weight had been removed from his shoulders. His mind had squirmed away from any attempt to grapple with the ramifications of his potential immortality. Knowing that his current life might be his last made him feel as if it had some value.
- Impersonating the Evil Twin: Inverted. Delilah Mc Pherson was one of the death-row inmates that were apart of Dr. Know’s Wetware CPU. After his death Mrs Know wanted to give them a second chance and set them free unaware that since he had used portions of her mind as a telepathic amplifier Delilah was immune to the attempts at turning her into a Blank Slate. When she was released, kidnapped her sister Amy, drugged her, and turned her loose on a highway in a car with a stuck accelerator and the brake lines slowly bleeding out. And since she had already stolen all of Amy’s memories it was easy for Delilah to step into her life.
- Heroic Sacrifice: After Sister Ami was defeated Servant refused to be set free of the Space Machine despite the fact that it was killing him, because they still needed to transport New Jerusalem back to Texas and he he’s the only power source that can move the city back into place.
- Hive Mind
- Sister Ami also created one between her and fellow death-row inmates with her acting as the Hive Queen.
- Insane Troll Logic: According to Judgment it is blasphemous to have superpowers, as only God has the power to create something from nothing.
- It's All My Fault: Cliff blamed himself for falling for Sister Ami’s manipulation, but Sarah assured him that it wasn’t his fault.
- No-Nonsense Nemesis: After realizing that she was The Mole App can a across a feverish, mutilated, and half immobilized Chimpion. Instead of his apps he just took a rifle from one of the guards she killed and shot her.
- Chimpion
- What? No acid mode? No eel mode? You’re just going to shoot me?
- App
- Yeah, I’m going to fucking shoot you.
- More than Mind Control: This is the crux of Sister Amy’s Evil Plan to send New Jerusalem to old Jerusalem.
- Sarah
- We can’t leave the city here. Sister Amy didn’t need to control any nuclear weapons to trigger a global firestorm. You think the players over here are going to stand by passively and let a city built by Americans sit on sacred ground? We know there are nations in the mix that have nukes. We also know they have a history of spreading the pain around.
- No Good Deed Goes Unpunished: Katrina Knowbokov took it upon herself to take responsibility for the actions of Rex Monday and her late husband. Sadly she aware that the inmates time in the Wetware CPU had transformed them into Power Parasites when she freed them. This made her endeavor of giving them a chance at a new life doomed to fail, and is ultimately what led to her death. The Irony that Sister Ami killed her in revenge for what happened at Jerusalem something she had absolutely nothing to do with.
- One Dialogue, Two Conversations: Chimpion failed in her attempt to kill App due to not knowing that he could reboot even if the belt was destroyed. This caused her to express her frustration at typical human verbal looseness as he’d said several times the belt was the source of his powers, barely ever mentioning the servers that truly housed him.
- Powered Armor:
- Judgement one of the inmates freed by Mrs. Know and later brainwashed by Amy Mc Pherson wears one based off Steam-Dragon’s armor, designed to look like an angle.
- Powers as Programs
- The Dervishes are the result of the death-row inmates using the knowledge they gained from Dr. Know’s Wetware CPU to create Super Soldiers. Specifically, Uninhibited Muscle Power, Rail Blades’ Extra-ore-dinary, and Temporal Duplication.
- Psychic Link: This was Delilah Mc Pherson’s job in the Wetware CPU. While the other inmates were tasked with solving exotic scientific challenges like cloning, time travel, energy harvesting, and unraveling the secrets of his daughters’ powers. Her mind was used as a sort of telepathic bridge, a hub through which the thoughts in all the various minds might meet and cooperate with one another. When they were set free of the People Jars she still possessed this telepathic connection, not only with her fellow prisoners, but with anyone she focused on.
- Resurrective Immortality: App can either Reset, which is a command used to return to normal after using a power, or Reboot, which is triggered remotely when the server realizes he’s been mortally injured
- The Reveal: Servant’s father is Rex Monday.
- Serial Rapist: As of the third novel Rex Monday has two children both of which are a Child by Rape.
- "Shaggy Dog" Story: Katrina Knowbokov freed the inmates from her husband’s Wetware CPU. The experience left them all a Blank Slate allowing her to give them all a fresh start by imprinting new identities over their existing memories. Only for them to be brainwashed by Delilah Mc Pherson into joining her Apocalypse Cult.
- Surprisingly Realistic Outcome:
- It is not App’s belt that keeps him alive but the computers that houses the code for the belt. His line of work is extremely dangerous and as he himself stated the belt gets destroyed all the time.
- This is why Dr Know was amused by the presidents attempts at blocking his telepathy. Though it worked the second the president and his team left the bunker they would meet in to figure out how to deal with my Dr Know, he’d know what they’d discussed. He said the only way to it would have really worked would be if they never left the room.
- There Are No Coincidences: Pastor Amy believes that it is god’s will for her to bring forth the apocalypse
- Pastor Ami
- I have the ultimate marching orders. I’m tasked by the Lord to bring about the end of days. I have been given my gifts to see His prophecy fulfilled. Why else would a sham death sentence have given me telepathy? Why else would the Lord have given me a volunteer army of thirteen genius scientists, their talents hidden beneath the false programming of the mind butchers of the Knowbokov Foundation? These geniuses awaited the touch of my mind to waken and nurture them. These things cannot have happened by chance.
- Victory by Endurance: Most of the inmates that Dr Know had kidnapped had gone into death row in their twenties, but due to appeals, had faced execution in their thirties. Then, some had spent over a decade in a goo tube, and another six years had passed since they’d been freed. Judgement had to be at least 50 and maybe close to sixty. So even with his armor supplying all the real muscle Sarah had far more stamina and endurance them him. She was even worried that he might keel over from a heart attack while chasing her.
Edited by Jinpuu on Aug 5th 2023 at 8:31:42 AM
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While they are guilty of gang-raping Shenandoah in both versions, in the book <- no comma they...
...in-depth discussions of Supreme Court rulings, Senate filibusters...
...she barely looks up from her magazine while defeating a group...
...but here <- no comma he is half-Cheyenne.
...workshop makes illuminates a lantern several scenes...
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Noticing her worries, Archer diminishingly says he is sorry, but she took it the wrong way, and it's pleasing that the fool (Shirou) has someone who cares about him. Having enough of Archer's demeanor, especially...
^ "diminishingly" is not correct, but I can't tell what you meant to write. Possibly "dismissively"?
...has no malicious thoughts about Shirou...
Edited by Arivne on Aug 5th 2023 at 10:12:58 AM
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the more cynical and grounded tone, and the edgier humor wound up...save it, and...
...shippers and to form... chances are <- no comma they'll likely...
Cleopatra and Frida Kahlo, <- comma when they become an item. <- no space Cleopatra...hair (like <- space her light moustache)...
In Gumball and Darwin’s Imagine Spot, <- comma Alan Keane is a mastermind determined to take over Elmore school and eventually the world in order to eliminate sadness. Changing his face and voice to match his villainous demeanor, Alan manipulates students into suggesting him for school president while making them think it was their own idea. He uses simple flayer on the school board to cause chaos in the school before announcing his candidacy. Alan uses slander against other candidates to win a election and institutes Happy Camp, <- comma where all sad students are sent to be made happy by any means necessary while announcing his intention to spread Happy Camps across the world.
^ "Using simple flayer on the school board" is not correct English, but I don't know what you meant to write.
Thank you
@ Please Don't Tell My Parents I'm a Giant Monster
- Ancestral Weapon: Jebediah uses a rifle that once belonged to his grandfather.
- Loophole Abuse: Marcia can't accompany Mirabelle on a supervillain mission due to her pact with Mourning Dove (who is keeping Marcia's powers from killing her). However, once a rival would-be thief attacks Mirabelle, Marcia is able to join in the fray since she is technically intervening to stop a robber, even if she's letting the other intruder escape.
Edited by Alpinist on Aug 5th 2023 at 11:52:40 AM
@Jinpuu
^ This post is just too large for me to deal with in its entirety. In the future, please make your posts of a reasonable size, splitting them up on different days.
In both the second and third novel of the series, <- comma they attempt an Apocalypse How. In Burn Baby Burn it was out of resentment at being the minority compared to humans, while in Covenant they were merely acting as mercenaries for the Big Bad. In both cases, <- comma the underlining cause of their actions is their belief in The Right of a Superior Species.
App has a clone app. <- period Unfortunately he ended up falling fell under Sister’s Amy control. While App manages to take him out, he couldn’t get rid of the clone with the servers down. When Sarah asked him how he knew whether he was the clone <- no comma or the original, App didn’t answer. It turns out she was right and the two eventually gave up on trying to figure out which one of them was the original.
Servant’s powers fall under Blessed with Suck, <- comma as while his forcefields are incredibly powerful since he can never turn them off, <- comma he can’t actually touch or feel anything.
^ Example Indentation in Trope Lists
Apocalypse Cult: Brain Trust
The Dervishes were just ordinary people that Sister Ami brainwashed into being terrorists.
So by the end of "Covenant", <- comma the twin App’s have lost their immortality and the only power they have is the apps that...
While Servant ended up surviving his Heroic Sacrifice, <- comma the Space Machine ended up absorbing all of the vacuum energy that allowed him to create his force fields, <- comma essentially tearing his power from his body <- no period while he was no longer super powered. His true form is still the shape of the man who’d been known as Ogre.
There is even a security code that can be used to ward the President against...
Edited by Arivne on Aug 5th 2023 at 10:45:23 AM
Thank you. Here is today’s just under 700 words (another post was just some copied dialogue onto a quotes page so I didn’t think I needed to include it here, but I can if you want).
@ Joe Pickett The show's tropes are also listed here.
- Composite Character:
- The governor who Joe tickets for fishing without a license and his Big Good successor are combined into one governor in the show.
- Deputy Cricket Ludlow plays similar plot roles to both Friend on the Force Mike Reed and Nate's girlfriend Alisha (who still appears in the show, but with an Age Lift, slight Adaptational Job Change, and lack of any apparent connection to Nate) from the books.
- Race Lift: Nate and Vern are black, while in the earlier books, the postmaster's family are Saddlestring's only black residents.
- Seduction-Proof Marriage: After engineering dozens of moments meant to subtly seduce his married friend, Robin, Jim realized she was too deeply in love with her husband to even notice his intentions, causing him to Murder the Hypotenuse for the sake of Comforting the Widow.
- Suspicious Spending: Ivy's brother Daniel and Autumn's boyfriend Gabe are suspected of involvement in a drug ring for being able to buy new sneakers and a muscle car, respectively, despite having a low-paying job and no job at all. Gabe is guilty, but Daniel just bought used sneakers, which understandably cost less.
- Heel–Face Turn:
- In Pineapple Grenade, Ted Savage is introduced as a CIA agent stirring up guerillas to destabilize an honest South American president (indirectly on behalf of Corrupt Corporate Executives) but goes on to help Serge protect the president from an assassin after feeling betrayed by his handlers, and seems invested in his new mission.
- In The Pope of Palm Beach, a group of Dirty Cops are outraged enough by the murder of a Man of the City and two of their colleagues to kill the cartel goons responsible and then work to protect a witness to the crime rather than try to kill him and steal the millions of dollars he ended up instinctively taking from the crime scene.
- In No Sunscreen for the Dead, New-Age Retro Hippie Tofer Baez was a high-profile Soviet spy for much of the Cold War. However, he has come to acknowledge the worst aspects of the Russian government and would have quit before the end of the Cold War if he wasn't being blackmailed. When old Russian contacts still in America start being murdered, he sets out to warn people who he had manipulated into giving information that they may be in danger as well and assists Serge and various other guest characters in the climactic shootout.
- In Mermaid Confidential, cartel member Mercado inserts himself into the life of hospice worker Julie to provide for her and her patients to atone for the one time he personally killed someone (a Badass Bystander near a botched drug deal).
@ Johanna Mason: They Will Never See Me Cry
- They Wasted a Perfectly Good Character: District 5 Victor Cassio is the only confirmed non-Career Victor in the last ten Games besides Johanna, Byte, Katniss, Peeta, and possibly the Victor of the 72nd Hunger Games. He could have had interesting scenes mentoring alongside Johanna (especially when Foxface/Merade is a contender), but he is only mentioned once or twice in passing.
- They Wasted a Perfectly Good Plot:
- Johanna’s final duel is with her district partner, but their hometown’s reaction to this is rarely, if ever, mentioned.
- The 72nd Hunger Games, Johanna's first year as a mentor, is passed over in a Time Skip, with it even being unclear which district the Victor came from.
- Lady in Red: Natasha is a sexually aggressive, mob-associated drug user who wears a bright red dress.
- Miles Gloriosus: B.B. is fine with shooting Lupino in the back or bragging about how killing Michelle and her baby awakened a badass inside him, but he immediately panics the moment he’s in real danger.
- Villain of Another Story: Mona tries to keep her sister off drugs and sympathizes with Max's losses and mission, but she also has authority over several Mafiya goons and a Dirty Cop informant and seems to be concluding a mob negotiation in one scene.
Edited by Alpinist on Aug 6th 2023 at 5:00:50 AM
Before edit: Not yet, but his dream is to become King of the Pirates, which by default means wanting to become this.
After edit: He hasn't achieved it yet but aspires to find One Piece and become the Pirate King, which implies having this goal in mind. He has attained the status as one of the Four Emperors of the Seas, the most infamous and dreaded pirate commanders in the One Piece world, by defeating Kaido, the "Strongest Creature" of the Emperors.
- Foil:
Before edit: Luffy's reputation was monitored as he quickly rose the ranks in infamy with ever increasingly large incidents. Teach's rise to power was quiet, staying below the radar for years without receiving a bounty, before finally instantly emerging to the world by defeating Whitebeard and claiming his title as Emperor.
After edit: As Luffy's notoriety grew, his reputation was closely monitored. He swiftly rose in the ranks, causing increasingly significant incidents, ultimately earning the title of Emperor by defeating Kaido in a one-on-one fight. In contrast, Teach's ascent to power was more subtle. He kept a low profile for years, avoiding bounties, before finally revealing himself to the world by employing pirate pragmatism to defeat Whitebeard and become an Emperor.
- World's Strongest Man: In this case, we refer to the strongest Norse god. He is known as the King of the Aesir, the Top God of Norse mythology, and is considered Kratos' most formidable opponent yet by the developers. What makes Odin stand out is not just his physical and magical strength, but also his ability to use them effectively in battle. During his boss battle, he alternates between using magic and his spear, Gungnir. Despite this, Kratos's attempts to grapple with him are quickly overpowered and reversed by Odin, a feat that only a few of Kratos's previous opponents have managed to achieve. One of the main reasons he fears the Ghost of Sparta is because Kratos is infamous for his ability to kill gods, making him a clear competitor for the title. However, it should be noted that Kratos doesn't care much about this title.
Edited by jahman on Aug 6th 2023 at 2:44:52 AM
Main.Right Hand Versus Left Hand:
Literature
- Eragon: The Valran are a conglomerate of several factions opposing Galbatorix, and one of the main tasks of their leader is to arbitrate conflict between them.
@Jinpuu
Continued
After surviving a cacophony of tiny explosions, <- comma her helmet warning her of the smoke, the flame, the dangerous proximity of trees overhead if she took flight <- no comma and <- no comma her opponent being strike:not only far more distracting then helpful <- no comma but something she could see with her own eyes, <- comma forcing her to cut its power.
Amy McPherson’s plan is to have her Dervishes to perform terrorist acts on American soil, increasing political pressure to send more troops to fight overseas, <- comma then use her Mind Manipulation to get the President to reinstate the draft and send the youth of America off to put an end to this terrible, terrible threat. Then, <- comma once she’s started World War III, <- comma she plans on transporting New Jerusalem to Old Jerusalem, <- comma exacerbating things until the Nuclear Option is the only choice the leaders of the world have.
^ [=McPherson’s=] -> McPherson’s
One of the Johnny’s grew this as a way to distinguish himself from the other; <- semi-colon the fact that App is normally better groomed makes it even more noticeable.
Sister Amy may have Telepathy, <- comma but she’s not omniscient. She tried to kill Skyrider by teleporting her into outer space because she wasn’t aware that her suit was pressurized and didn’t know that App is Immune to Mind Control while in ghost mode.
Either the bullet reached her first <- no comma or the shockwave created from Sarah’s attempt at reaching her in time would.
Delilah McPherson went from a deranged...
Averted. After Chimpion destroyed his servers...
Delilah McPherson was one of the death-row inmates who were a part of Dr. Know’s Wetware CPU. After his death, <- comma Mrs Know wanted to give them a second chance and set them free, <- comma unaware that since he had used portions of her mind as a telepathic amplifier, <- comma Delilah was immune to the attempts at turning her into a Blank Slate. When she was released, she kidnapped her sister Amy, drugged her, and turned her loose on a highway in a car with a stuck accelerator and the brake lines slowly bleeding out. And since she had already stolen all of Amy’s memories, <- comma it was easy for Delilah to step into her life.

Corrections:
Eragon: