The Sun Never Sets - Original Fiction

So, I recently started a blog in which I publish my own original fiction, and you can find the first chapter of my first story here:

https://phoenixact.blogspot.com/2019/03/the-sun-never-sets-chapter-1-cold-and.html

The story is basically an Isekai, but done in reverse, with a character being sent to a fantasy world based on Sengoku Japan, rather than Medieval Europe. I also tweaked it a bit more, and the main character is a Victorian lady, rather than a teenage boy from the modern day. There are some horror themes involved, as the original inspiration for the story came from the videogame Nioh and by extension Dark Souls, as well as a series of novels called The Tomoe Gozen Saga. The plan as it stands, is to post a chapter every fortnight, as I will be writing it around my normal, everyday commitments.

Now the reason for this thread, is because I want a place where I can answer questions and go into more detail on discussing the story. In my experience, the comment sections on blogs aren't really fit for that sort of thing.

Looks promising so far! You really nailed the stuffy-yet-vivid Victorian lit narrative voice. I don't personally play Soulsborne or Nioh, but I watch my flatmate play them fairly often and I think the part where the monsters show up managed to reflect their vibe pretty strongly. Looking forward to more chapters!

Thanks for the feedback, I'll try to keep it up!

Speaking of which, the next chapter is up!

https://phoenixact.blogspot.com/2019/04/the-sun-never-sets-chapter-1-ruins-of.html

A little slower and more introspective this time, as Alice takes her first steps into this new world.

Chapter 3 = An Unfortunate Encounter

https://phoenixact.blogspot.com/2019/04/the-sun-never-sets-chapter-3.html

A little more action this time.

If I can ask, how are people finding Chiyo's segments? I added them to explore Chiyo's character a bit, since with the language barrier and everything, I was slightly worried about fall into "inscrutable Asians".

Okay, after a brief delay, here is chapter 4 of The Sun Never Sets!

https://phoenixact.blogspot.com/2019/05/the-sun-never-sets-chapter-4-in-dark.html

There was going to be a fight scene in this chapter, but it really didn't fit so I had to remove it.

The latest chapter of The Sun Never Sets is up!

Chapter 5 - Dark Dreams and Chance Encounters

https://phoenixact.blogspot.com/2019/05/the-sun-never-sets-chapter-5-dark.html

How will our heroines fare after escaping the tunnels, and what waits for them next?

The Sun Never Sets | Chapter 6 - Voices on the Breeze

https://phoenixact.blogspot.com/2019/06/the-sun-never-sets-chapter-6-voices-on.html

Our heroines continue their adventure with a new member in tow, only to discover that they may have wandered into a trap!