Sounds good Big Bean. Let's say Unclaimed 6?
Also, letting Kruach Mor and Adelinde set their own pace for now, as the two begin to interact. Let me know if you need me to come in and provide NP Cs or anything.
edited 11th Sep '14 11:38:39 AM by dungeonguy88
On the one hand, I can't help but feel like the current state of the RP is just screaming for Nor-Rokkus and Sangorius to have a throw down of some kind already in spite of us being only 2 pages in.
On the other hand, I have a feeling that actually doing so wouldn't go too well at this point in time yet.
edited 11th Sep '14 10:31:18 PM by TheSpaceJawa
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Mos def. I was tempted to actually make talking to an unresponsive ice block part of my first post, but I decided to just leave things ambiguous since A) No idea what I have to work with, B) No character sheet to reference and C) No idea if you'd be accepted over the competition, so it's just all in limbo for now.
And don't worry Jawa, even if we don't fight, maybe we can schedule tea time or something?
Castles are quite fancy after all.
edited 11th Sep '14 10:58:08 PM by nman
I'm writing a post right now. The RP has, like, the most amount of posts at day one, personally, so it took a while for me to get my bearings.
edited 12th Sep '14 12:40:00 PM by sgtpendulum
http://www.last.fm/user/sgtpendulum Yo, check out what I'm listening, it'll be heat, brah :^)Alright, my intro post is done. Tell me if something's up, I'm kinda sleepy right now so not the sharpest right now.
edited 12th Sep '14 2:03:25 PM by sgtpendulum
http://www.last.fm/user/sgtpendulum Yo, check out what I'm listening, it'll be heat, brah :^)The #1 thing I noticed was your transition from present tense to past-tense, which is even more jarring than if you had just gone with present tense for the whole thing (which for an RP is really out of place and awkward, doubly so since everyone else is R Ping in past-tense).
I don't know, there's something awkward about your post overall in trying to read through it. It's like I'm reading something that's written in a broken english by someone who has english as a second language.
And all things considered, it was very difficult to follow. Frankly, I'm not even exactly sure what took place in it all.
Also, important distinction - the destroyed town in not part of Ajanya at all. Ajanya is the name of the castle specifically by itself - "Castle Ajanya". There is no "Ajanya" as a land or as a kingdom or even as a town. Just a castle.
edited 12th Sep '14 2:30:11 PM by TheSpaceJawa
Aside from what Jawa said, the incorrect use of homophones, synonyms, and subject-verb agreement makes this really hard for me to understand. And it's not just that half of it is past and half of it is present tense, but it seems to switch multiple times per paragraph. So yeah I have no idea what's going on either. It seems like a bunch of needless complication to just have Yuen show up and I'm not really quite sure what I'm supposed to be responding to at this moment.
Like from what I can make out, some guide got killed by passing elves? Or was it the male tourist that got stabbed? And the elves made some random human go seek out Yuen? Or was the human woman the one you list as Yuen's "housewife" in the signup? You wrote they go to Ajayna, which is Jawa's place so I'm going to assume you meant the village we're at, not Ajayna. But from the first post, whatever happened to this village was a week ago, so unless DG's approved differently in a PM, that might muck up whatever plans he has if you have some people getting butchered there in your own post. Then after that you wrote he was there all along, eavesdropping on them and they somehow missed him? But then he reveals himself out of nowhere, wondering why they're there? I'd imagine that they'd be suspicious of him if that's the case.
edited 12th Sep '14 2:46:04 PM by nman
Uhm, yeah, just checked-in again. And sgtpendulum, that post needs a lot of cleaning up. I was kind of hoping this wouldn't turn out to be an issue but...I mean, do you perhaps need some sort of proof reader or something?
And, as N Man said, that village is as dead as dead gets, and I'm not too keen on having the timelines get out of sink.
edited 12th Sep '14 2:50:48 PM by dungeonguy88

Gotta pass the millennia away somehow
edited 11th Sep '14 10:52:03 AM by nman