Laconic Description Improvement

I would suggest "Two characters have the same love interest, and will fight for their affection". I know that only covers one of the forms of love triangle but, then again, there are 13 types of Triang Relations.

Yeah, the problem with trying to write a clear laconic for Love Triangle is that it's a really broad trope and one laconic can't cover every possible type of it without being as vague as the current.

But if we're going to focus on one variant, looks fine.

Laconic.Tengen Toppa Gurren Lagann gives zero context to what the show’s about and Laconic.Fantastic Four 2015 is WAY to complain-y.

for the GL and second Fan4stic laconic.

Edited by GeneralGigan817 on May 21st 2020 at 9:49:50 AM

^ If I may make suggestions then:

Tengen Toppa Gurren Lagann:

Orphan boy finds a Mini-Mecha and goes on a journey with his Big Brother Mentor and a gun-wielding young woman to fight giant robots. Hot-Blooded Rule of Cool action ensues.

Fantastic Four (2015):

Creator.Twentieth Century Fox's last film about Marvel's first family, drastically reimagined as Darker and Edgier and Younger and Hipper.

If that still comes off as complainy...:

Darker and Edgier and Younger and Hipper take on Marvel's first family.

Since Laconic.Megamind talks about the movie's driving force but says nothing about its plot, would anyone mind if I changed it to say this?:

Blue supervillain finally defeats his lifelong nemesis and suffers an existential crisis.

/ The Gurren Lagann and Megamind suggestions look good. I'm not sure what to do with F4.

The Laconic for The Scream is not good, to say the least. It only adds to the misuse it suffers by having no details.

My idea for a replacement that actually describes the trope would be:

"A massive zoom out when someone screams loudly"

If someone could think of a better idea, then I'm open to it

I wonder if the laconic of Armor-Piercing Question is a bit too narrow. The definition says that it's a question that causes someone to reconsider their actions. Most of the examples have nothing to do with the characters' actions, and instead are questions that exposes a flaw or vulnerability that the one being questioned is trying to hide. It may cause them to rethink their question, but not always.

Need to ask again about the laconic for Captain Flamingo, which is essentially an X Meets Y laconic.

How about:

"A kid superhero uses inventions to help those in need."

That could work.

What's Main.Mercurys Wings?

Its Laconic doesn't say how they're meaningful...

Is it basically supposed to be an appearance-based Shout-Out to Mercury?

Laconic.Mercurys Wings:

Basically winged head and/or feet either as allusion to Hermes/Mercury or for other things like divinity and/or speed. Also can be used for Little Bit Beastly characters so different meanings. When I wrote the draft the trope years ago the scope was just winged feet / head as I think its a trope on its on given the impracticality alone

Not sure how to improve the laconic as winged heads and feet by themselves aren't chairs to me and describe at the basic level. But since they are usually allusions to Hermes I guess that can ve mentioned?

Laconic.Eek A Mouse:

You'll notice that this doesn't seem to say what the reaction is. Maybe something more like "Small rodents are frightening, particularly to women".

I'm not sure if "particularly to women" is gonna be helpful, because it's not an Always Female trope. Perhaps something like this?

Small rodents are frightening, so characters freak out at the sight of one

Paranoia is another “X Meets Y” laconic.

Edited by PurpleEyedGuma on Jun 2nd 2020 at 12:22:58 PM

I'm afraid I'm not familiar with Tabletop Games (except chess). I can only agree that the laconic has to be changed.

Laconic.Really Gets Around is just a link to dictionary.com, which seems like a pretty bad laconic if it requires further clicking to an external website.

The laconic description in question

Promiscuity.

Edited by Nouct on Jun 4th 2020 at 6:41:03 AM

Revert Laconic.The Arab Spring.

Done.

• Really Gets Around: "A character who has a disproportionate number of sexual partners compared to everyone else."
• TabletopGame.Paranoia: "The tabletop RPG: An over-the-top darkly humorous parody of dystopian fiction where not even your fellow players can be trusted."

I added the bold part to the Paranoia laconic because there's a bunch of things listed on Paranoia that could share the page if anyone wrote laconics for them.

Done and done.

Laconic.Happy Fun Ball is bold and in all caps. I'm tempted to change it to something like "Absurdly dangerous thing that has an innocuous name and/or appearance."

Edited by Serac on Jun 25th 2020 at 5:34:22 AM

Laconic.Girl Interrupted is pretty terrible. I've never seen the movie though, so I can't be the one to rewrite it.

Or we could just cut it since I don't think work pages really need a laconic page.

Edited by Primis on Jun 27th 2020 at 6:38:51 AM

Ehhh, I disagree with just cutting it. I have seen lots of good laconics for work pages, I myself created some. I think a better laconic can apply for this one (I agree that the current one is awful).