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Anyway! Given that most peeps think your signup looks good, I think I will start your test.
-There is a Zweilous-
-It's just standing there-
-What will you do? Whatever it is, do it as you would in the RP!-
Lucas looks at the Zweilous a bit confused, he thought he stayed away from all Zewilous territory, nevertheless he starts to slowly back away as he's not really in the mood for a fight.
Lucas: aw crud.
Zweilous Head 1: <Hey, Donny! It's a human!>
Zweilous Head A, or Donny: <For the last time, Greg, we don't need to->
Greg: <I'm gonna get him!>
-fires a Dragon Pulse-
Lucas yelps and jumps out of the way, pulling Vegeta out of his pokeball.
Lucas: Alright vegeta looks like you'll get your fight after all.
Vegeta:<what you brought me out here to fight these two small fries? i guess they'll have to do for now then.>
Vegeta uses Flame Charge on Zweilous
-The Zweilous is rammed by the Flame Charge, resisting it but still decently damaged-
Donny: <Way to go, Greg, he's mad at us.>
Greg: <We'll take 'em down, don't worry!>
-they deliver a combined Crunch-
edited 3rd Jun '18 11:13:11 AM by Umbramatic
Vegeta avoided one of the crunches but his arm get's bitten by the mouth of the other head.
Vegeta uses Focus Punch on Zweilous
-Due to the hit on the arm, the Focus Punch misses-
Greg: <Nyeh nyeh!>
-the Zweilous heads fire Dark Pulses-
Vegeta pry's his arm out of the other heads grip taking the damage from the dark pulse as he let's lose a barrel of flame,
Vegeta uses flame thrower on Zwelious
-The Zweilous stumbles back from the Flamethrower-
Donny: <Dammit, now look what you've done! DAMN IT!>
Sorry this is late! Stuff came up.
Vegeta avoids the brunt of the attack and readies a focus blast to use on the Zweilous.
Vegeta: <Take this!>
Vegeta uses focus blast
-The Zweilous goes down-
Okay, the bad news: Your posts are a little sparse and grammatically incorect, and your battles could be a bit more descriptive.
The good news is it's all minor enough to be worked on as you go in the RP, so... Welcome to WAAPT! I'll provide you the necessary links in a PM.
Name: Gavin Albright (Known by people as "Shutter")
Ethnicity: Mixed-race, Anglo/Latin/East Asian/Southeast Asian (somewhere along the lines of Macanese and Filipino Mestizo)
Appearance: A lanky tan man about 1.8 meters tall with brown shaggy hair. Frequently dresses in light clothing such as a T-shirt, buttondown and shorts and wears a flat cap. Often seen with a Rotom-colored gimbal on hand and carries a large bag that turns out to be much heavier than it looks. Frequently walks with earphones stuck to his ears; his mp3 player plays bad music from a forgotten era. He dons a plaid green hoodie in cold weather.
Occupation/Organization: Documentary filmmaker, having previously been the cameraman for a [YouTube-equivalent] channel that turned out to be a Team Rocket front
Region of Origin: Kinkan City, North Mandarin Island, Orange Archipelago
A former photojournalist and freelance videographer, he studied in a prestigious photography program launched by Todd Snapp sometime prior, eventually branching out to videowork. Having jumped from one dead-end videographer job to another to pay off college loans, including rather briefly working for [Jake Paul Equivalent]'s challenge channel on [YouTube-equivalent] that turned out to be a Team Rocket front (he quit because they lacked a dental; the horror of "I worked for a Team Rocket front" sank in on his way out).
Currently, he works as a documentary filmmaker for the Geographic Society, constantly being sent to far off and out-of-the-way places. Constantly on a tight budget to stretch out his meager stipend, he often branches out to take pictures and videos for anyone who could possibly need it at embarrassingly rock bottom prices.
His current project — his third with the Geographic Society — is a comprehensive look into the lives of Pokemon trainers. His first was as an assistant to the documentary on the Delta Invasion of the Archipelago titled "Islands Under Siege," and his second (the big break) was a nature documentary involving wild bug Pokemon. It led to a comical number of painful incidents too embarrassing to describe but paid off his college debts with change to spare. The shots were worth it, too.
He never intended to become a Pokemon trainer but was fascinated enough by them to be drawn to nature documentary work. He nonetheless took in a few Pokemon since he left college and has a roster of three, which he since trained into a production staff.
He got his nickname from being a schlocky amateur photographer (a shutterbug).
Edited by MasterJayAM on Jun 28th 2018 at 4:58:54 AM
The Signup looks good all together. I think we can begin with the test.
Shutter will be faced with a rather loud and annoying department head who is smoking a cigar and has a thick mustache.
"Shutter you're one of the best videographers around! One of the best! But I'm sorry to say that I can't let you go just yet! Not until my photo guy gets back here with pictures of the Arachnid Guy!"
His secretary leans over and whispers into his ear, "Oh. Oh I see."
"Okay I can let you go! But first! We locked eyes son! You know what that means!"
The DP stands up, opens a ball and out comes a large Gengar.
Shutter mutters to himself and appears to be talking to the oddly-colored orange gimbal that he had been holding throughout the interview.
Shutter: I keep telling you these assignments get harder and harder each year. no matter, we've been through worse scrapes than this, DP. How about we show the editor man how we got that money shot?
Gimbal: <Run like cowards while avoiding a swarm of angry beedrill?>
Shutter: Don't give me that look, Gimbal and get out here. You're making me look crazy in front of the department head.
Shutter: Gimbal, go!
A mischievous-looking rotom emerges from the gimbal, which reverts to a polished gray and matte black color.
Shutter: Gimbal, see if you can slow that big lummox down a notch.
Gimbal: <Why don't we just shock it? It worked for the beedrill.>
Shutter: Stop giving me that tone and spite that gengar already.
Gimbal: <Fine, it's your career.>
Gimbal uses spite.
Edited by MasterJayAM on Jun 28th 2018 at 5:39:32 AM
The Gengar is hit with spite, and randomly has one of it's 4 pre-selected moves spited. It let's out a mischevious giggle as Shadow Punch is cut down.
"Newsreel! Use Lick!"
The Gengar floated over to Gimball and tried to use Lick
(Actually, note we don't have a 4-move limit so they can use any moves they know)
(The four moves is imposed in official battles like a ruleset)
Shutter: Dodge and shock! Dodge and shock!
Gimbal narrowly evades Newsreel's tongue by a hair's breadth and uses electroweb on the Gengar's exposed tongue.
<BLLBLBLBLBLBLBL!!!> goes Newsreel as they're shocked.
The DP doesn't look happy.
Newsreel shakes it off and lobs a large shadow ball at Gimbal in retaliation.
Shutter: Holy crap, dodge!
The ball hits Gimbal, whose dodges only narrowly reduce the effects it has on her defenses. Slightly disoriented, it looks around the office for
Shutter: Arceus, Gimbal, I told you to dodge. Oh, great, now where'd she go?
Although Gimbal is nowhere to be seen, her presence is definitely still in the room, or so Shutter thought.
Shutter (to the department head): Well, that was a hoot. Good show, I guess. I'm still getting my grant, aye?
As he contemplates on whether he should concede and just proceed with the assignment (or try his luck at a different department; he honestly couldn't tell how it works since the restructuring and Hank gives out the best assignments), he realizes to his horror that there is a minifridge in the office. And he remembers that it wasn't orange when he got there.
Shutter: Gimbal, no!
Gimbal has taken possession of the minifridge. Shutter sighed, noting that not only was this strategically disingenious, it would cost him his sign-up bonus if she was going to do what he thought she was going to do.
Edited by MasterJayAM on Jun 28th 2018 at 6:50:44 AM
The DP looked over and saw the orange fridge, he sighed, rubbed the bridge of his nose and went, "Shutter... Shutter tell me that isn't your mon, possessing my mini-fridge. I keep fresh cold drinks in there."
Shutter: Gimbal, you will gently put down that minifridge and either do as I tell you or Arceus help me if I lose this job...
Gimbal: <Oh he of little faith, can't a girl make a battle interesting for once?>
Shutter: Ahem. Big boss man. Owns cool drinks there. If that fridge gets damaged I get fired and we're both out on the streets with nothing to eat.
The fridge continued to loom ominously over the arena. Shutter glowered angrily at the orange minifridge, which smiled with an impish grin.
Shutter: Gimbal, gently put down the fridge and get back to your thingy.
Gimbal: <Well, since you insist.>
Gimbal abruptly dropped the fridge onto Newsreel with a soft thud. Shutter approached the scene carefully, praying to Arceus above that the fridge was anywhere near salvageable.
Shutter: Were any of the drinks there carbonated?
Hank takes a deep breath, "Several..."
Newsreel crawls out from underneath, unharmed, the Fridge seemed fine... mostly...
Hank looks over at Shutter and Gimbal, "Okay... please... get out... Just take your money, and get to work."
Shutter is relieved at first, up until he sees his rotom's impish grin, floating around as though she did her partner a solid.
Shutter: Gimbal, return.
Gimbal: <Well, a you're welcome would suffice.>
Shutter: This is one close call too many, Gimbal. You are going to be the death of me.
Gimbal: <Hey, you wanna win, you gotta rely on misdirection and creative thinking.>
Shutter: Maybe I should get Charger to do the next battle with a Department
Head. He'd never possess appliances at random and use them as ammo.
Gimbal: <Right, because that worked so well the last time.>
Shutter continued to argue with the rotom that possessed his gimbal as he picked up his assignment and made his way to the door. On his way out, he noticed that one of them included a bill for a case of a fancy brand of rootbeer to be deducted from the grant.
Edited by MasterJayAM on Jun 28th 2018 at 7:59:42 AM
Hank grumbles as he sits down at his desk, he's gonna have to get that minifridge cleaned now.
Just then the photo guy comes in, "Peterson! What took you so long!"
"Sorry Hank but I got the photos of the Arachna Guy!"
Not a bad start, formatting is good and writing is clear and concise, longform is a option if you feel more comfortable I noticed a emphasis on dodging which is interesting. But you can have the characters take hits harder, it's fine.
If I have any advice it's def don't just go for a dodge all the time as it may risk the flow of narrative.
Other than that I see no major problems.
It's been cleared, and you are approved. Welcome to the RP.
Edited by EchoingSilence on Jun 28th 2018 at 10:33:29 AM
Okay, I think I can officially welcome you to the insanity, JG! You're already in the Discord, so just head to the #j-team-hq channel; the RP thread is here and Discussion thread here.
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