Pagebottom ninja'd, so I'm putting it here.
@Napkins: Just because the narrative says something does not mean your character needs to echo it back. We heard it the first time, and it comes off as both forced and stating the obvious at the same time.
Hedjgdhej... Addy, seriously? Jesus Buttfucking Christ...
edited 17th Jun '13 10:20:47 PM by GameSpazzer
MY SOUL IS DARK BUT MY HAIR IS COLORFUL — Brahian Pokémon AlchemistOkay. I think that's a large part of it. The narrative exists to give you clues about the characters and setting. Not to spoonfeed you your next lines of dialogue. While addressing details of characters is good, it also helps to take into account how a person would react to this, rather than making seemingly random, out-of-place comments because you want to get right to what the narrative is talking about immediately.
It also tends to warp what little personality Griff has managed to develop into a mindless drone that just repeats what the narrative says, if that makes sense.
Daisy, I've noticed you still do this too, though you have gotted better about it.
If Addy is still mad about that thing all those months ago, I swear to fucking god...
edited 17th Jun '13 11:01:24 PM by GameSpazzer
MY SOUL IS DARK BUT MY HAIR IS COLORFUL — Brahian Pokémon AlchemistY, though I'm not sure who in the current group would be able to see her, and clone!Alpha, who is currently dying and is technically a disembodied soul himself, is elsewhere.
I like her so far, though. Which book is she from again? I've never read The Wish List before...
MY SOUL IS DARK BUT MY HAIR IS COLORFUL — Brahian Pokémon AlchemistIt's just called The Wish List. And it's really good. Haven't read it in a long time, though, so I may be getting some stuff wrong.
You're never online.
No, that's a fourteen year-old Zack Fair in the FG. The genuine article. And the actual Cloud as well, who spent half of yesterday crying in the bathroom doing MANLY things for various reasons which he disclosed to Coras in private.
@Random: For what reasons?
edited 17th Jun '13 11:12:44 PM by GameSpazzer
MY SOUL IS DARK BUT MY HAIR IS COLORFUL — Brahian Pokémon Alchemist

kay, have fun being bored
UN JOUR JE SERAI DE RETOUR PRÈS DE TOI