Leave as in take a nap because I haven't slept in a while. I keep forgetting to. I should probably remember to eat more often, too.
And now that I'm assuming we've agreed not to brush me off, Napkins, work on your dialogue. Too tired to phrase it any better than that, but if I see one more stilted, bland conversation, I'm gonna go berserk.
MY SOUL IS DARK BUT MY HAIR IS COLORFUL — Brahian Pokémon Alchemist"You're"
Why is this so hard? Seriously. You learn this shit in kindergarten. Did all of us go to kindergarten? I sure hope we did, because the last thing I want to start doing is correcting people when they spell shit like "dog" and "blue" and "tree" wrong.
MY SOUL IS DARK BUT MY HAIR IS COLORFUL — Brahian Pokémon Alchemist(Slowly stops sobbing.)
Mmmfff... Sniff... Okay. I'm okay... Uh, yeah, what Spazz said, and in both posts. Chrissie, sorry, but I agree with her 100% there. Griff's dialogue needs some work. Try having him hold conversations like you would, and please focus on what a regular person would say rather than what would be coolest/most dramatic to say. He's just not feeling natural at all.
This also. You're a native speaker, Trip, and your grammar is otherwise fine. Step up the proofreading a notch or two.
edited 16th Jun '13 8:52:10 AM by GlobsterAGoGo
and then they fricked in the bootyBut seriously, learn to speak your own goddamn language. Lior speaks better English than you do half the time.
What Mobile said, because her brain is working better than mine at the moment.
edited 16th Jun '13 8:52:46 AM by GameSpazzer
MY SOUL IS DARK BUT MY HAIR IS COLORFUL — Brahian Pokémon AlchemistI have suspicions... That and your pattern of grammar errors seems more like slip-ups a native speaker would make than a non-native. I can gather that "than" and "then" must be homophones for you, among other things. Hence, native, or at the very least bilingual from a very young age (though I have never seen you speak any other languages).
and then they fricked in the bootyYou function in a US timezone and Daisy makes the same mistakes you do, so I know it's just our shitty education system hard at work, because I rarely see the people who learn English overseas make those kinds of mistakes. Again, that's pretty fucking embarassing.
MY SOUL IS DARK BUT MY HAIR IS COLORFUL — Brahian Pokémon AlchemistActually Spazz I'd have to say it's a part of mentality of the people who do it, most of my classmates are worse than me in English, so I think it's more of the part that the foreign people who get to English forums have. Usually they'll have very good English to want to be in these kind of communities.
Hopefully I wrote that in a manner that is easy to understand because I'm not sure. >_>
edited 16th Jun '13 9:02:44 AM by LiorVal

i got blisters on my
dead devotionfingerspalms >_<