That was true, I was kind of conflicted on actually saying that. Sheesh I really need to make a checking list on his dialogue, but I'm being a lazy ass.
Being obvious is not a trait I'd want him to have. Perhaps I should go to a style a bit like Fancy's, narrating what's happening in his mind, and such things would make more sense then.
edited 7th Jun '13 10:13:02 AM by LiorVal
Nah, it's okay. Just think about whether or not the dialogue you're writing sounds natural, to the best of your ability, anyway. And try to go easier on having him verbalize everything he sees. You could indicate his thoughts in -dashes- or (parentheses) if that would help, but only have him verbalize his thoughts if it would be natural/appropriate in that situation.
Prolly ninja'd.
and then they fricked in the booty... Did you just call me dear? (Used to be a past somewhat mild Berserk Button of mine in the past to call me things like cute or dear etc...)
edited 7th Jun '13 10:20:20 AM by LiorVal
so i was messing around in photoshop and I did this
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I don't know why but I like it.
I live in a constant state of fear and misery.Lior, it's okay, dear.
For some reason, so do I.
edited 7th Jun '13 10:21:02 AM by WackyPancake
"I like girls, but now, it's about justice."I think we should add white text saying:
"MAJORA"
"(First page she appeared)-(Last page she appeared)"
"In loving memory"
"I like girls, but now, it's about justice."

oh my god guys
bulldog is playing deadly premonition
and he happens to share a name with one of the characters
this is fucking hilarious
UN JOUR JE SERAI DE RETOUR PRÈS DE TOI