Again; I am sorry.
-sigh- For some reason any small little thing that occurs in the internet always pisses me off.
"Please crush me with your heels Esdeath-sama!Del, I'm sorry, but I was just trying to be forthright. I'm not going to sugarcoat anything. To be frank, you responded to the criticisms here in the discussion, but I see little indication that you have put the improvements into practice in the FG. I don't know, maybe I overlooked something, but the issues are still there.
Another thing, and I've noticed this both IC and OOC, but you seem to try to start conversations by asking personal/uncomfortable questions. I understand that it might be hard not to if you're socially-inept like you said, but I think you should at least be aware that it causes discomfort. It's not appropriate to start a conversation by asking the origin of a total stranger's name. I'm sorry if I'm coming off as rude here, but I just want to let you know about these things so that you can improve.
As far as the ramifications of actions thing, just try to give it a little extra thought.
and then they fricked in the bootyPretty much what Mobile said. Also in you responses you seem to reject the critisms we give you. They aren't to hurt you, they're to help you improve at the game. We understand that you don't know much about socilaizing but half the people here are Autistic, and that doesn't stop them from being great witers.
As for conversations its better to start them with "Hello, my name is ____. You are?" Or some variation of that. Stuff like "When is your birthday?" is a little strange for most people. Most people would only reveal that kind of information to someone they trust because they want to see them there on their birthday.
Also in order for us to really get a handle on your R Ping style you have to post more. Right now all we have to go off of is a few posts.
PM box is Closed, Indefinitely Friend Code: 3368-4181-6850THEN GET A PHONE! SILLY DEL...
But it's okay. If this is, indeed, your first RP, then I'm pretty sure you'll get better. Everybody has to learn some day. Just listen to the advice people give you and don't beat yourself up too much about it all.
-ADVICE FAIL-
edited 24th May '13 12:22:36 PM by WackyPancake
"I like girls, but now, it's about justice."Everyone does you just don't know it yet. Experiment with stuff until you find something you're good at and stick with it.
Oh and one more thing. You seem to be trying to rush relationships with characters. For example. I imagine you would see SB and Bullet as good friends. However they've only known each other for a few days. SB is just an acquaintance to Bullet. They don't have a very deep connection yet. This ties into posting more. Stick with it and eventually characters will develop that deep connection that you seem to want to write.
Well if you can only post on weekends that's fine. Real Life is more important and all. But As I said until you've posted more its hard to really do any accurate critiquing.
edited 24th May '13 12:28:21 PM by Azure
PM box is Closed, Indefinitely Friend Code: 3368-4181-6850That certainly does not mean that you can't develop one. Heck, this was my first RP, too. It took me a while to get the ropes, but it came to me. It takes patience and a bit of forethought, but it happens eventually. I understand if you don't have a great deal of posting time, but in the future, please only try to seek feedback on events with more substance to them. Even with the limited amount of time you can be here, you should be able to crank out some things that last long enough to be worth commenting on.
Please take everything we said into account. We're saying this because we want to help you improve.
And yes, what Azure said. I know it's tricky when you have just that short window of time, but let things happen naturally.
and then they fricked in the bootyrAAWR
also small fact
i actually have Old Shame regarding roleplaying as katz, because i was terrible at his character last year.
cries
and now they're haunting me baack
GO AHEAD .... MR. JOEHSTUR .......

Deltora. It is a game. We have provided constructive criticism. You are taking this way too seriously.
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