alright i don't wanna rip on this person because it sounds like they put a lot of time and effort into making it look good and they like it but.........
mario is red, i am green, i try my best, but everyone's meanIn all seriousness though none of it makes any sense.
There are what I can only assume are coolant lines running out side of its frame. There's one line that goes into another.
And a bunch on the wings.
What if it gets cut what then?
And there's one connecting one of his legs to his torso so he can't move that leg or risk leaking.
There's exposed wiring all over the place.
The single wing, because I do not see another one is not gonna help it fly, I doubt even with two it could get the lift required.
euuuugh so many things.
edited 5th May '15 7:12:57 AM by Azure
PM box is Closed, Indefinitely Friend Code: 3368-4181-6850Alright so for those of you who are in the RP enough to say, I'm kind of worried I've been laying it on a bit thick. There's a line between facetioius narration and telling instead of showing, and I think I've been leaning towards the latter out of residual paranoia from the whole Deluge thing where if I didn't spell out everything Cloud did I'd get yelled at for being unclear. But now that phase has mostly passed and I'm still doing it. Or it feels like I am anyway.
i can't tell because its stupid hard for me to keep up with both rn
remember when tom baker told an ebola joke and kakyoin was all "im tired of your shit
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The thing about R Ps, especially script R Ps, is that they lack a lot of the inherent subtleties of other mediums.
The only input a person has as to what's going on around their character is what other people write. You don't often have the information needed to figure out something really complex and vague unless its been previously given to you.
So you kinda have to be as clear as possible, because without your input people are pretty much blind to everything.
edited 5th May '15 7:40:08 AM by Azure
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