Ok here i go again, i am adopting the 18th one shot from Win some, Lose some (which can be read here https://www.fanfiction.net/s/5571816/19/Win-Some-Lose-Some
and despite it being labelled by FF.net as the 19th it's really the 18th*), it's called just a dream, the basic idea of the one shot is about a dreamwalker naruto, a random missing nin of Konoha who belives Naruto is the kyubi or at least to be safe it's better to have Naruto killed teaches Naruto the Shiki Fuin hoping that the Shinigami eats Naruto's soul along the kyuubi's soul.
Things dont go quite as planned as Naruto has technically four souls inside him, Kurama, Kushina, Minato and his own soul, Kushina and Minato wind up bargaining with the Shinigami so he does not takes Narutos soul and along the bargain Naruto obtains a set of beads.
The beads contain a small portion of the power of the Shinigami, enough to let Naruto affect the only area between worlds, the dreams.
The one shot has Naruto subtly help all of the next generation, chouji still eats like crazy but instead of junk food he went for more healthy things, ino and sakura stop being so much of fangirls and seek to attain sasuke's heart by becoming fine Kunoichi, Sasuke can now dream somewhat at peace,etc.
On one of his dream travels Naruto winds up meeting Yakumo who is being hunted by Ido, he helps Yakumo by encouraging her and just being there for her and with her destroying Ido and Naruto eventually adopted by the Kurama's.
Eventually Naruto chooses to tell the Sandaime about this ability and performs a live demonstration, he has tricked Inoichi, Anko, Ibiki, Iruka and Hiruzen himself onto thinking they are awake but in reality they are asleep and forces them to awake by removing the floor of the Hokage's office having all of them fall down to an abyss.
The whole thing is quickly acknowledged as valuable tool and both Naruto and Yakumo want to be both with Ino and part of T&I, as a gift he has been slowly breaking Mizuki ever since he walked by accident and saw him betraying Konoha for Orochimaru leaving the man a totally paranoid wreck.
That eventually goes to the chunin exams where Naruto ends beating Gaara with ease thanks to as you acknowledged before having performed the impressive feat of having put the Kyuubi on a permanent coma and that scared the shit out of Shukaku giving Naruto enough space to maneouver and help Gaara to break free for Shukaku's influence.
My plans for the time line are:
- Somehow get the event that started it all happen, i need to define who was the rouge Shinobi that taught Naruto the Shiki Fuin, for later use.
- Naruto starts to experiment with his dream walking and finds Yakumo, he aids her in her fight against Ido.
- Yakumo eventually finds Naruto and is adopted onto the Kurama clan, this would be first arc Naruto Kurama and how he starts to deal with people (give or take naruto would be around 7 just starting the academy)
- Academy Arc (detailing what nudges were done where, possibly now an individual arc for each of the rookies in an homage to Alundra where the dreams of people were dungeons)
- Genin Exams (getting Naruto and Yakumo to arrange their team with Ino)
- Training Arc (self explanatory)
- Waver Arc (will probably have a mayor difference regarding canon thanks to Naruto's abilities, after reflecting on what @IANCE and i kept going back and forth i am making this the wake up call for Naruto, he so far only has the beads and he needs team support, Zabuza will isolate them leaving Naruto as the fifth wheel)
- Chunin exams Arc (Have somehow Orochimaru not mark Sasuke, have Naruto and tenten battle, Tenten is no longer just weapon spam, she is able to use any of her weapons with great skill and has above average accuaracy)
- Invasion Arc (subverted to hell and back, Naruto has possibly breaked by this point inside Kabuto's mind and by extension was able to set up Orochimaru with Yakumo's help revealing during the free month the nature of the plans, Naruto aids Gaara to break free from the Shukaku, Ino mind switches with Kidomaru and has him stab Orochimaru on the back)
- Search for Tsunade Arc (played differently Naruto is able to help Tsunade with her Konoha issues by helping her relive her best and most pleasant memories of her deceased, will also feature Itachi returning to Konoha after Naruto reverses on his the genjutus)
Here is the original guideline:
- Ninja of ¿Konoha? (the one shot id's this mysterious nin as konoha affiliated who teaches Naruto the Shiki Fuin in hopes the shinigami eats him and that triggers the whole deal)
- Kushina and Minato bargain with the Shinigami for the beads as a compensation towards Naruto and the deity explains the limitations.
- Naruto starts to explore his ability (here is the whole analogue i made over how it's similar to yu yu hakusho's Yosuke
- Naruto finds Yakumo over several nights he tries to help her against Ido, eventually suceeding.
- Original Arc of Naruto bonding with the Kurama's and Yakumo.
- Academy Arc two or three chapters regarding their academy days along with the subtle encouraging towards the Rookies.
- Genin exam Arc, Mizuki tips Naruto with the whole stealing the scroll of seals, Naruto decides to explore with Yakumo Mizuki's dream escape (Much like Alundra's dream sequences here they are representations of a person subconcious)
- Wave Arc (regarding the fates of Zabuza and Haku possibly one if not catatonic at the end of it depending on how i want to deal with both of them)
- Chunin exams Arcs (Somehow get Sasuke not branded and to follow the spirit of the original one shot make orochimaru paranoid enough to not touch the kid)
- Invasion Arc (follows as the one shot, Ino possesses the Kaguya and stabs Orochimaru in the back forcing Orochimaru to kill Kimimaro)
- Hunt for Tsunade (have Itachi come back to Konoha after Naruto digs enough holes around his mind/memory, Kisame will be killed Samehada will go to one of the kids)
- Raiga and Ranmaru arcs (could end with the teams convincing Ranmaru to be treated by Tsunade and with Raiga retiring to raise the kid)
- Konoha History Arc (inspiration for more bead based moves, look onto Virgo's saint moveset)
- Training of three years with Jiraiya Arc (will cover, land of vegetables, tea, Yuki and Sea arcs, have Jiraiya divulge that an insane Uchiha is behind akatsuki and can control bijuus like Yagura)
- OA to serve as bridge of Akatsuki going after Gaara.
- Original Arc regarding the Kazekage.
- Oni no Kuni before / Shion's Arc with Fu as a permanently hired bodyguard (thanks to Shion ability to see the future fu can avoid being captured, have naruto talk with Shion about other uses of the beads)
- Original Arc Featuring Konoha versus Akatsuki (while Akatsuki reach Konoha to capture Naruto the latter goes to Ame in order to help Jiraiya risking becoming missing nin in the process)
- Original Arc Ame's last stand, the all of the eight Jinchuriki ahving heard that the leader of Akatsuki is in ame move from their village in order to help Naruto with the fight, Nagato does not dies as Naruto is able to convince Konan that he found before hand the Gedo Mazo statue and blew it off, Nagato summons it and plays right onto Naruto's hands and blows it up.
- Original Arc Obito's counter attack: a sufficiently pissed Obito tries to sweep in to remove Nagato's head and the rinnegan, final arc of the fic, massive battle between both parts, Naruto employing previously mentioned abilities regarding his beads.
My first thing in order to write more is to figure that important bit, i had a OC!ROOT!ANBU Baku but if wanderer or iance pointed that danzo trying to kill Naruto is cliche'd so i was thinking of switching to Kagura as she had enough hatred towards Konoha to pull such a thing off or an Uchiha who thought it would be a good idea to not have the potentially lethal weapon around.
Oh the fun i will have writing shout outs to Eternal Darkness, by the time Yakumo and Naruto finish with Kabuto he will be every day shouting Kai! because he can no longer distinguish reality from fiction.
Basically one of the tricks they will pull is a version of double layered genjutsu, the first layer shows the normal area, the second layer alters it but when you break it you somehow are back on the second layer but then switches to the first and then to an altered second, all also based on his memories.
An example would be Kabuto speaking to orochimaru when two hands tear his chest inside out his sister shows up only for Danzo to forcibly be vomited from her body, then it returns to Orochimaru talking and nothing like i just mentioned looked like happened.
edited 13th Feb '14 11:00:51 PM by Duncan0Idaho
What should I have Naruto and co summon?
I was thinking of his team and a few others being in the mission room complaining about D-ranks.( their sensei's are all sick due to plot no jutsu lol) being the only thing they could do( without adult supervision) one of the on duty chunins starts to cough and someone remarks about how a bunch the shinobi who usually handle the 'insertthenicknameoftheacademyhere' are all out sick and they still hadn't been able to convince anyone to take the jobs temporarily.(it would be Sunday and I imagine their school being like IRL and being mon-Fri) someone says it's a potential C-rank which catches the kids attention. Since it would require a bunch of shinobi's to fill in and it's in-village( and requires no actual adult supervision except for the occasional check up by the head edu-nin) the kids all try to sign up for it.The shinobi's at the mission desk decide to give them the mission and inform them of what they actually signed up for after they had already accepted the mission.On the first day they( being the temporary teachers) decide it would be a good idea for the kids to all spar against each other and decide to take their classes on a field trip of sorts the following Wednesday to one of the real shinobi training grounds(unbeknown to them the place they chosen is insanely huge for one sole purpose) where they run into a few Non sick chunin/Jonins all practicing a certain Justu. the large group observes the ninjas for a bit......yeah Hilarity Ensues when the kids all break into groups and a bunch of the kids (both civilian and shinobi born alike) pull a Jiraiya...causing the genin-sensei's to freak and one of the students who didn't do the jutsu(konohamaru!) shouting out "Cool! It's a transportation jutsu!" Before doing it himself...with a few other kids following..I came up with them actually touching up on summoning in the academy during their last two years... but non of the older kids ever learned what exactly happens when you try it with out a contract and the younger ones are just dang curious about what animal would pop out..... Haha I imagine the Jonins and chunins freaking out( especially the clan ones) lol and during the panic Naruto and co do the jutsu in hopes of going where their students went.....
Here's a list of kids I've chosen so far to do the jutsu. Konohamaru and his two friends
Hanabi(come on dude she has to be curious sometimes!)
Sasuke
Ino and choji
Futaba and hibari
Kiba and shino(curious)
Rock lee ( hey it doesn't exactly say he can't mold chakra it's just that he just doesn't have a talent for ninjutsu) Tenten and neji(was curious like hanabi) Hinata and Sakura...
edited 14th Feb '14 9:33:40 AM by viciousgirl2014
~insert witty comment here~
Yea I tried to respond to that earlier Duncan but it didn't post for some reason....Anyways its a good timeline as far as i can tell..jus a few question's are you gonna have only sasuke survive the massacre? Remember obito did help supposedly.
what about the uzumaki clan? i'm a huge sucker for em lol. just wondering if your gonna have anything about them in the story anywhere(the fact that nagato and karin are uzumaki got totally brushed off like it was nothing of great importance in both the manga and anime plus i don't think naruto knows jack about them let alone how to actually spot any other descendants)
yo I just got a general thought . Why doesn't anyone ever attempt to write a story where they basically stomped on the whole 'only nine shall pass' thing?'.......Ok I assume you lot know about the whole story challenge thing where someone post a general story idea/outline and others who are interested will attempt to write a story with it? Well I intend on creating such a challenge surrounding the whole fore-mentioned supposed 'rule'.
edited 14th Feb '14 10:35:20 AM by viciousgirl2014
~insert witty comment here~I am still debating on that point, if i use the dream walking skill of Naruto then i could potentially avoid the massacre but then it would present a few problems, there is still the posibility of Orochimaru invading but since there is no Itachi to drive him out from Akatsuki it means that he could sway them to invade Konoha as there would be two Jinchurikis to take and with only the Sandaime and Jiraiya Konoha could fall with ease if i may add.
As far the Uzumaki clan, nothing special sans maybe rescuing Karin and forcing redemption on Nagato along a moment of duh why dint i think about that? (basically he has the rinnegan, he could extract the soul of Yahiko from the pure world and place it back on his body resurrecting him)nothing else.
edited 14th Feb '14 10:36:41 AM by Duncan0Idaho
I have a rather hard time imagining Samehada allowing itself to be wielded by someone who propably doesn't even have a Jounin chakra.
As for Itachi returning... I assume you want him to serve as Konoha shinobi again, right? Just remember every Konoha shinobi hates Itachi and revealing the truth about massacre (the only way in my eyes Konoha-nin would accept Itachi again) is out of the question. Unless you're going to have him return non-officially.
Plus Tobi could stop Nagato from sacrificing himself.
For me Rinne Tensei can revive huge amount of RECENTLY deceased people if you have enough chakra but if a person died a long time ago you can only revive that persen and no matter how much chakra you have you will die.
edited 14th Feb '14 11:10:00 AM by Kaitenhammer
You can still have the massacre happen by having Itachi only kill off the one's who are actually in the know about it and actually wholeheartedly supported it at clan meetings and such. Seriously kishimoto makes it looks like there was absolutely no other younger kids in the clan besides Sasuke( who was unaware of what was happening)! You can have a group of young genin/chunin level Uchiha's approach Itachi a few days before the planned massacre and confront/question him on his behavior(Having observed his willingness to stand up to his elders at the meetings and not caring that his actions were making him a outcast within the clan). I highly doubt Itachi and Shisui were the only ones who secretly disagreed with what their elders/families were planning. I would have the same group go straight to the Hokage and the elders and report about the planned coup much like Itachi did and that while they understood somewhat where their clan was coming from they didn't agree with what their clan was planning and instead wanted what Itachi wanted( To have the Uchiha's be accepted back into konoha's society and not looked on with suspicious eyes.) you can have Itachi tell the group to go and hide somewhere in the village with the kids around Sasuke age and younger( you can get away with this by having a few of the genin Uchiha's be on teams with kids from the other clans(thus giving em reason to stay away from the compound)...better yet have the massacre not happening until the exact day the coup was planned to begin and have the Uchiha's who were either ignorant of the coup or whom didn't approve of it be led away from the compound by trusted ANBU(kakashi Yamato yuugao etc) early in the morning or in the middle of the night. The shinobi can cast a forced deep sleep jutsu on the little kids in order to have them not wake up and start screaming.
As for tobi/obito...have him ignorant of certain things(how many kids there are etc) regarding the clan. Have Danzo (who if I remember correctly had meet with tobi on the day of the original massacre in canon) feed him false information. Have Hiruzen and his team be informed of the rouge Uchiha shinobi by Danzo himself. After the massacre have the remaining Uchiha's pretend like they were there the whole time and barely managed to stay alive...
In the end Itachi will still be able to be in Akatsuki and obito will be none the wiser.
I'm sorry but I think in the process of giving you ideas I just wound up laying down the background of a totally different story lol.
edited 14th Feb '14 11:40:01 AM by viciousgirl2014
~insert witty comment here~Good point, more than likeley the blade would go to Naruto if i dont have it shatter so each of squad six can wield a variation of Samehada.
Depends as i said on my post before, if i get him back it will be as a prisioner that will latter be drafted onto ANBU again as Tsunade crafts a sob story to redeem him.
Something along the lines that Itachi was framed by Orochimaru after he showed up and tried implanting the cursed seal on many Uchiha's as he could while fending others or something like that.
I never said sacrificing, the redemption will be via sort of manipulation from Naruto, Yakumo and Jiraiya, basically what naruto and Jiraiya did to Nagato and Konan in the last chapter of win some lose some, primarch Naruto gives a no holds barred beatdown to both of them and Jiraiya shows up and tells them he no longer considers students, and that while he is regretful he never contacted them their actions shame him as a teacher as it seems his lessons fell on deaft ears.
or something along those lines.
YMMV on that there can be a hundred ways for example creation of all things>make a new body for Yahiko>Place the soul on it and remember the six paths are in a degree alive as one of the paths can always bring them back to life.
@viciousgirl there is a story like that, it's daybreak and it's pretty much what you just said.
edited 14th Feb '14 11:33:17 AM by Duncan0Idaho
Well not all you said but mostly the whole Itachi kills those who are really wanting to go for the coup was done in One small kindness/Daybreak
A small snippet for the future (will need fixing):
"So Naruto-kun you told me you went inside the minds and dreams of the clan heirs, care to tell me how was their mental state?" Sarutobi asked his surrogate grandson, now that he knew that Naruto could wander inside the minds of people as they slept it was a prime oportunity to know how the next generation of ninja were he couldnt risk an Orochimaru among the kids.
"Most of them were well except for two people, Hinata and Sakura"
At that statement the Hokage's eyebrows rose, he knew that the Hyuuga's werent the most friendly of the people but that their heir was in such a state that either they dint notice it or were hiding it was worrying.
He motioned for Naruto to continue.
"You see Jiji there are two 'levels' i can access within a persons mind, the more active part where they inhabit and their subconcious where their fears and problems lay, Hinata was bad, i still have shudders at what i saw there"
"When i move donto her subconciou smind i was expecting just a room like most people, in Hinata's case it wasnt such, there were two replicas of the Hyuuga compund, one shiny and new the other old and rotting"
"I went onto the old and rotting one with Yakumo-chan"
Here Yakmo took the lead "And what we saw there was not nice"
"We saw the gentle and not shy Hinata but this Hinata was not well, parts of her flesh had started rotting, her eyes were slowly acquring a dull grey tone and she was being constantly berated by sme old people and a guy she called Neiji nii san and the more she was berated the paler she got" Naruto quickly hugged Yakumo to help her with relieving those memories.
The Sandaime thought prudent to ask "Any physical abuse signs?"
"None really, just constant downplay of whatever she made, her tea was perfect the elders always told her it was either too hot or too cold even after she had used a thermometer to ensure the perfect temperature or that it was not the right tea"
Before Naruto could continue the Sandaime asked a new thing "Where was Hiashi in all this?"
"No idea Jiji we dint saw him in the old compound"
"However when we moved to the new compound we saw the shy Hinata that was trying to be a people pleaser, and people around her weere still sending harsh glares however these branded Hyuga's were giving her some kind looks"
The whole package worried the Sandaime, he was no Yamanaka but he had studied some of their material he had to guess the old compound that was slowly falling was how Hinata saw it, a fantasy but with it she had started to believe her outgoing self was also a sham the new one was closer to reality and likewise she felt her new persona was closer to reality.
This showed that things were not quite fine after the Kumo incident.
"What about Sakura Naruto-kun?"
"Well Sakura was better than Hinata, she had a concious split personality but her other self dint sought to harm her but encourage her and seemed to be more violent"
An other Facade, the Haruno despite not being really a clan at least the father of Sakura was a candiate for being Candidate to Hokage however he whidrew once he heard that his wife was pregnant.
"Thanks Naruto-kun that will be all"
After dismissing them the Sandaime now had much to think and how he would go about fixing this issue, a prospective Ninja being broken like Hinata was is something he could not allow, but he had to figure a way to bypass those who rule in the shadows of the Hyuga to reach Hiashi.
A plan slowly formed in his mind...
For those that do not understand it's a whole reference to Alundra I, where the titular character was a dreamwalker and had the ability to enter the dreams of people, their dreams often took the shape of dungeons and Mazes of great splendor and that inflicted great terror (Klein's dream iirc was his name is by far one of the most scary and annoying ones)
edited 14th Feb '14 1:21:45 PM by Duncan0Idaho
It's a good fic tbh, it's an example of the Domino effect, basically Mikoto has a fridge brilliance moment where she realizes that Naruto is Kushina's son, and everything unfolds, and ends with only a handfull of the Uchiha dead, Madara (at the time of the writing Tobi was not revealed to be Obito) winds up dead after Jiraiya in conjunction with Mikoto use a fuinjutsu to reverse the MS genjutsu on him.
It has it's own tvtropes page https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/FanFic/OneSmallKindness
It has a sequel Daybreak where shit hits the roof, Orochimaru becomes the bigger bad along Danzo, Naruto is forced to flee Konoha, Sasuke winds up on Orochimaru' hands and Mikoto dies.
And to be fair Night not every fic i rec is bad, TMOK for example draws Naruto's characterization and uses the domino effect too, there Teuchi tells Naruto that everything in life has a price, so if he wants something he has to give something, which winds up helping his development more, for example he winds up forming bonds with the Konoha ninja much earlier, his naivety is also used as an example of things that might go wrong as Anko demonstrates.
Win some, Lose Some are a series of one shots i found funny, a Naruto that trolls Itachi, Sasuke and Kisame, rescues him and winds up with Samehada? or a Naruto that liked the idea of siege weapons and winds up crafting an entire strategy about it.
On the other hand we have a Naruto that is souless thanks to Minato taking a mayor decision in that rather than risk the Kyuubi get loose again he would rather seal it permanently on the shinigami's stomach however Minato had to fuel the request with Kushina's and Naruto's soul.
Now without a very modded seal and further dampening seals in the form of pendants no one can get close to Naruto his very existance terrifies people as he is something he should not be, this Naruto can never have friends or family.
edited 14th Feb '14 5:37:51 PM by Duncan0Idaho
@Night
One Small Kindness...
Eh. It was... okay, I suppose. I've certainly seen far worse. It suffers from a lot of problems hailing from the fic being before certain revelations, of course.
himitsu keisatsu seifu chokuzoku kokka hoanbu na no da himitsu keisatsu yami ni magireru supai katsudou torishimari@IANCE compare OMSK with Master of Foxes and Serpent or the Ice/frozen fox, OMSK is very well written and at least gives the heroes a chance, daybreak however YMMV.
Also can you give me any comentaries on the snippet i posted? I am curious if i managed to get all three involved characters personality right, Naruto might seem a bit OOC but thats because some of his atenttion whore characteristics never developed in first place.
Also only people who have big trauma's will have mind dungeons, you can expect me narrating Naruto helping Yakumo in an Ico esque way as they travel through her mind dungeon, Hinata is much much simpler as she hasnt reached the point where she is canon at the start.
Sasuke i have a half mind of looking some vids of Link's Awakening and having it so that each room he access has a memory of the massacre, the end boss is Shadow!Sasuke.
edited 14th Feb '14 6:47:53 PM by Duncan0Idaho
@Ironypus it crossovers sligthly with Warhammer 40k so some of the 'rules' of Narutoverse are somewhat altered, Chakra is separate from the soul in that one shot.
Also anything to coment on the snippet it posted? i was inspired to write after i remembered some of the dream world stages from Alundra, the twins stage also give me a solution towards Orochimaru, if he can more or less manipulate people he is opening a channel to their minds, so all Naruto has to do is crush that channel hard enough to startle orochimaru that some one is able to cut his connection to his subordinates.
Outside Naruto has problems to fight and can use the Rasengan and variants but let him inside your head and you will be little more than a broken mess.
Ah the fun of porting the Eternal Darkness mindscrews.
(Also if any one does not likes the snippet or ideas tell it to my face, i am posting them in search of feedback with only one person giving it to me is not much of feedback, if i end publishing this and in the off chance any one of the posters here write 'this is bad, etc,' well that happens when feedback is not given
And i repeat i am stubborn person, heck my chinese sign is the sheep/Ram and it's the metal element i am more stubborn than a mule!)
edited 14th Feb '14 6:47:34 PM by Duncan0Idaho
What do you suggest as a cause for Hinata's shyness?
And what i had in mind was that Hiruzen would simply do one thing, he would send an ANBU to spy on Hinata for some time once the ANBU got enough evidence he would tell Hiashi his daugther along her cousin neiji both are being removed from the Hyuga clan, Hinata is not to be branded and neiji's brand is to be removed, both are being placed under the Hokage's custody until Hiashi can demonstrate he can be a competent father because what the ANBU would find qualifies as subtle psychological abuse.
Hiashi would be outraged, angry but in the end powerless, he tries to remove his clan from Konoha? he will turn the threat on him by telling him that Konoha removes at least 98% of the attempts to bypass the walls and get the Byakugan, as soon as the clan stepts outside Kumo will be more than glad to kidnap all of them to remove the eyes and have them as cattle.
Nothing explicit but clear enough that a smart girl like Hinata can see it more or less would be comments on how Neiji is good, shame he is not main branch, Neiji is quite talented but nothing mentioning Hinata ever (hence what is relfected on her mind, remember one thing is what reality is an other is how the mind sees it, Hinata is not directly berated but her mind reflects the treatment)
By rulers in the Shadows i also meant that there are people within the clan that hold more power than the head, old men with strong links, etc.
Hiruzen will deliver afterwards a brutal blow to them, once Neiji and Hinata are out of the reach of the Hyuga's he will have Naruto take him in the dream world to talk with Hiashi, it turns the man was more affected by the loss of Hizashi and worried about his wife illness and his mind has now turned onto a dungeon to solve.
Once they eventually reunite both Hiashi's parts the Hokage will have a chat with him and Hiashi forks the names of those who are trying to wrestle control of the clan from him, Naruto then is charged with his first mission, to break those four men.
edited 14th Feb '14 7:09:06 PM by Duncan0Idaho

edited 13th Feb '14 7:18:59 PM by Ironypus