Well, psychological torture usually comes out in its subtleties, so yeah, it'll be practically the opposite of the story you wrote. I don't know if it'd be consistent with the children's character, but since we didn't see much of it, I suppose that's possible.
What kind of psychological tortures are you using? There are a lot of different ways to psychologically torture people, some of them easier/faster than others. This
has a few methods if you haven't thought of them yet; I don't know how much thought you're giving to realism (uh, I'm only considering "where did they get all these weapons" type realism, not "I can believe this would happen" here), but generally you wouldn't expect them to have access to drugs. Still, some don't need a lot of resources.
Normally I'd advise you to immerse yourself in the character POV and play with the prose as time passes, but it won't work if your story is stylistically similar to that rough draft. But regardless, details like the torture methods used are useful for advice like this.
I'd contest this. Not all torture scenes aim to elicit disgust or horror, first of all, and secondly, it is possible to desensitise yourself to torture scenes, particularly if you try to read a ton in order to get it right (stylistically or realistically).
You will not go to space today.Do the research.
The Other Wiki
is a good start.
Basically, anything that causes no physical pain, but is extremely unpleasant emotionally, counts as psychological torture. One big thing is to never give them a break. Keep them going through something unpleasant pretty much continuously, including depriving them of sleep. People break down very fast when they have no opportunity to recover.
If I'm asking for advice on a story idea, don't tell me it can't be done.

Right. So I'm writing a series of short stories about... well, there's really no way to say this without it making me sound mental, so, it's about two kids who torture people. So yeah...
Anyway, I already wrote the first story (Which can be found here
if you feel like reading a rush-job.)
And I don't want the second one to be completely the same, so I thought I'd have the kids participate in some psychologically traumatizing torture, basically, leaving the victim in such a horrible state that it's worse than actually killing them.
Problem is... I have no freaking clue how to describe this sort of thing.
Suggestions?
edited 21st Dec '10 10:50:24 PM by Mukora
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