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A short Fifty Shades of Grey Deconstruction Fic by Das Mervin. It revolves around a What If? scenario wherein Anastasia Steele is approached by one of Christian Grey's ex submissives, who has quite a bit to say about him. It was largely inspired by a Noodle Incident from the first book, involving one of Christian's subs being injured when he suspended her from the ceiling of his playroom. It can be read on LiveJournal here or here.

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  • 13 Is Unlucky: As referenced in the title, Sharon was Christian's thirteenth sub and the one who came out of it rather seriously injured. On the other hand, she ended the relationship right away and so avoided any further physical and emotional harm, and manages to save Ana from a similar fate.
  • Alternate Universe Fic: Ana canonically never met any of Christian's former subs (save for Leila) and was certainly never persuaded early on to leave Christian, meaning that many of the later events of Fifty Shades of Grey and the other books didn't happen. However, it is canon that Christian had a sub who got injured during a BDSM scene...
  • An Aesop: Being shy, Weak-Willed or a doormat doesn't necessarily make a person a 'natural' submissive when it comes to BDSM (Sharon is submissive sexually, but her manner everywhere else is confident and assertive, with Ana outright comparing her to her more outgoing friend Kate) and it's problematic to suggest that it does. At the same time, being controlling, emotionally manipulative and pushy without considering others' feelings doesn't necessarily make you a Dom (but it definitely makes you an asshole).
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  • An Arm and a Leg: Heavily downplayed, as Sharon didn't actually end up losing any limbs, but she reveals that when Christian suspended her from the ceiling of his playroom he tied her up in such a way her arm was dislocated and tore a ligament, requiring surgery. She said it sure felt like she'd nearly had her arm torn off, though.
  • Bastard Boyfriend: Thoroughly deconstructed. Christian's behaviour here is clearly presented as being disturbing, harmful, predatory and wrong.
  • Big Brother Instinct: Sharon mentions her 6'7", rugby-playing brother Greg helped her confront Christian when she ended things and also offered to "kick [his] ass" after he dislocated her arm.
  • Bit Character: OCs Warren and Yvonne, staff at Tommy O's who serve Ana and Sharon.
  • Bound and Gagged: Sharon says that she agreed to let Christian gag her and tie her up during a BDSM session, though it soon stopped being harmless fun...
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  • Broken Pedestal: Christian definitely becomes this to Ana by the end of the fic.
  • Casual Kink: Sharon is very upfront about her sexual kinks and interests to Ana, to the point where Christian comparatively looks rather 'tame'; Sharon outright calls Christian "pretty much a white chocolate S&M player" and Ana is astounded by some of the stuff she's done in the bedroom. However, Sharon comes across a pretty normal and friendly woman (which is generally how actual BDSM practitioners are).
  • Clingy Jealous Girl: Downplayed; when Ana figures out that Sharon is one of Christian's ex subs, she's immediately jealous of her, but doesn't do or say anything too irrational. And she stops feeling jealous once she hears what Sharon has to say about her lover...
  • Comfort Food: Sharon orders her and Ana a chocolate haupia when she gets upset about the Awful Truths she's just been told; Sharon actually says that "chocolate is the best comfort food".
  • Cool Big Sis: Sharon comes across as a bit of one to Ana, especially in the ending where she happily agrees to come with her and Kate as a support person when she breaks things off with Christian.
  • Curtains Match the Window: Sharon is a brown-eyed brunette. Like many of Christian's other subs, as she later notes.
  • Damsel out of Distress: Sharon. After Christian dislocated her arm and sent her to bed, she waited until he was asleep, then snuck out of his apartment and drove herself to ER.
  • Deconstruction Fic: The fic takes all of the more disturbing implications and Fridge Horror present in the Fifty Shades books and plays them realistically. The results are not pretty. It actually doubles as a Fix Fic too, though, as the ending has Sharon helping Ana realise she doesn't have to put up with this and deciding to dump Christian, becoming more informed about how BDSM actually works, gaining a new friend in Sharon and growing as a person.
  • Domestic Abuse: Sharon states her opinion that Christian is this rather than a Dom, especially considering how he treated her (and how he treats Ana in the present).
  • Extreme Doormat: Ana admits she has a tendency to let people walk all over her, especially Christian. Sharon makes a point of stating this is NOT the same thing as being sexually submissive and that it’s troubling that Christian suggested to her they were the same thing.
  • Foil: Sharon to Ana. They have both been involved in BDSM relationships with Christian Grey and look superficially alike. However, while Ana was a virgin before meeting Christian and knows virtually nothing about BDSM, Sharon has been involved in the scene for a few years and is quite experienced. While Ana is rather shy and unconfident, Sharon is assertive and very comfortable in her own skin. Ana finds almost everything to do with sex and BDSM scandalising and embarrassing, while Sharon is a lot more casual and even blunt about. Ana is also unsure about being a 'natural' submissive (which is what Christian calls her), while Sharon knows she's submissive and is completely fine with it as long as it's on her terms.
  • Gone Horribly Wrong: Sharon and Christian's relationship is a rather horrifying example of BDSM gone badly wrong.
  • Has a Type: Christian's subs are all at least superficially similar to one another. Ana notes that she and Sharon are both short, thin, white brunette women in their twenties, and Sharon states outright that Ana "look[s] like [her]". Sharon mentions that in hindsight, she realised all Christian's subs look alike, which she personally finds a bit creepy and alarming. Ana mostly feels upset, because it means she's not special to Christian, merely one of many.
  • Horrible Judge of Character: Zig-zagged in regards to Sharon. She admits that in hindsight, there were a lot of red flags around Christian, but she ignored them because she found him attractive and hadn't had good sex in a while with someone who shared her proclivities. Played painfully straight with Ana, who realises she's badly misjudged Christian, although Sharon makes a point of stating she thinks she's just naive, not stupid.
  • The Ingenue: Ana is portrayed as a bit of one, as she is in the original books. However, it's deconstructed and Played for Drama in this fic; Ana is so naive about sex and BDSM, she is easily manipulated by Christian and misjudges or misinterprets a lot of his more harmful behaviour. Sharon helps open her eyes and she is not happy when she realises what's actually going on.
  • Jerkass: Christian comes off as a huge one in this fic, with a sprinkling of Rich Jerk too.
  • Laser-Guided Karma: After the stuff Christian pulled with Sharon she cut him off and threatened to sic her brother on him if he came near her. She gave him a taste of his own medicine as well by recording their break-up conversation as insurance if he tried to harass her and later manages to persuade Ana he's bad news.
  • Manipulative Bastard: Christian comes across as one here, especially in regards to the very naive and inexperienced Ana.
  • The Missus and the Ex: Sharon intentionally seeks out Ana to warn her about what Christian can be like. They end up becoming quite friendly with each other.
  • Mundane Luxury: After being around Christian for several days, Ana is pleasantly surprised and happy when Sharon takes her to an inexpensive restaurant with good food, tells her to order whatever she wants and doesn’t pressure her to eat or drink any more or less than she wants to.
  • Nice Girl: Sharon comes across as very friendly and compassionate, seeking out Ana, a complete stranger, to warn her about Christian and make sure she's safe purely out of concern for her, and does everything she can to make Ana feel safe and comfortable.
  • O.C. Stand-in: Sharon Leibowitz. She's an actual character in the books, but is only vaguely alluded to and doesn't have a name. Here she's a main character and given a surprising amount of characterisation and backstory, considering the fic is only 10,201 words long.
  • Property of Love: Sharon finds being a 'slave' a big turn-on, which Ana is gobsmacked by. Sharon makes a point of explaining that a 'slave/master' relationship in the BDSM community isn't the same thing as actual 'treating people as property' slavery, especially given that these 'slaves' consent to the relationship and there are all sorts of rules and guidelines involved.
  • Questionable Consent: Some of Ana and Christian's sex scenes come across as this in hindsight, especially the incident where he broke into her house to tie her up, spank her and have sex with her. She's pretty disturbed when she realises this.
  • Resolved Noodle Incident: The main subject of the fic.
  • Revenge Fic: In regards to Christian Grey, though done in a more subdued and realistic manner (he in fact never actually shows up in person and the 'revenge' is more about getting Ana away from his harmful influence).
  • Safe Word: Sharon brings up the importance of these, only to mention that during her first session with Christian, he decided to gag her. They'd worked out some hand signals to use in place of spoken words in this scenario, but it doesn't end too well...
  • Screw the Rules, I Have Money!: Sharon mocks the idea that Christian thinks he can do whatever he wants because of his wealth: "Don't let him back you into a corner because he's got money. God knows he loves trying to convince you how powerful and wonderful he is just because he's got a massive bank account. It doesn't work that way—you've got plenty of evidence against him."
  • Screw This, I'm Outta Here!: Sharon signed the contract with Christian agreeing to be his submissive (or "slave" as she more accurately puts it) for three months, but after the incident where her arm was dislocated, which actually occurred on their first night together, she ended up fleeing his apartment as he slept and cutting contact with him.
  • Series Continuity Error: Ana at one point describes herself as having brown eyes like Sharon...but in the actual books she's repeatedly said to have blue eyes (although it is noted in both the original books and the fic that Ana's overall physical features are similar to all Christian's subs).
  • Shown Their Work:
    • Tommy O's is an actual restaurant serving Hawaiian food in Vancouver, Washington.
    • The author displays quite a bit of knowledge on BDSM so that Sharon can talk about it accurately to Ana; in particular she makes a distinction between the terms 'slave' and 'submissive' (and the accompanying 'Master' and 'Dom') in the BDSM community.
  • Wham Line: Sharon's description of what happened to her with Christian; it's at this point that Ana realises she's the sub whom Christian offhandedly mentioned got injured and displays just how serious the incident actually was:
    "I won't give you the gory details and all of that, but, to put it simply, I got tied up, and then he started hoisting and tightening the ropes. And by hoisting and tightening, I mean he damn near ripped my arm out of its socket".
  • Worse with Context: Played for Drama. Sharon gives a hypothetical context to Ana when they're talking about the submissive contract. When Sharon brings up that potential Doms and Masters complaining about a person's hard limits is a red flag, Ana questions why (Christian having done the same thing with her). Sharon says the following:
    "Because if he starts arguing with you and demanding something you don't want over, say, dinner, you can keep saying no. You can get up and walk away [...] You can't do that when you're gagged and bound to a table."
    • As it turns out this is pretty much exactly what happened to Sharon when she was with Christian.

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