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Escape From the Moon by Evilhumour and his beta-reader/co-author Anon e Mouse Jr. is a My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic fanfic, and the first in the Doa-verse. Originally posted September 9, 2017, it was completed September 13, 2017, with a promise of a sequel. One indeed came, and then some.

The overall series consists of:

  • Escape From the Moon: A mare finds herself all alone on a station on the moon, being monitored by unknown individuals and her life threatened by everything there. She knows nothing except that she has to find out who she is, why she's been imprisoned and how to escape.

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  • The Mare From the Moon (published September 15, 2017 and completed November 10, 2018): Three hundred years later, events drive Doa/Spliced Genome to finally leave the moon and return to her homeworld, only to end up taking an unexpected side-trip.

  • A Winter's Tale (published April 29, 2018): Set in the distant past of the Equestria that Spliced Genome visits in The Mare From the Moon, revealing the truth of Equestria's founding in that universe.

  • A sequel set in Equestria after Spliced returned to her home dimension, and following those she left behind, has been announced.

  • Scavenge for the Future (published November 13, 2018): The final chapter of the Doa-verse, it follows events in Doa's home dimension thousands of years after the end of The Mare From the Moon.


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     Escape from the Moon 

Escape From the Moon contains examples of:

  • Big Brother Is Watching: Whoever has placed Doa on the station has cameras in every room, including the bathroom.
  • Closed Circle: The entire story takes place in small space station except for the last chapter.
  • Enemy Mine: After the peace treaty between the "Pures" and the group rebelling was signed, Spliced Genome continued to create her plagues. Both sides promptly teamed up to capture her and lock her up.
  • Everything Trying to Kill You: Pretty much the entire station, from the showers, camera, airlocks and even the food is full of Death Traps.
  • Expy: Played with: The voice Doa has been hearing claims Doa is one for itself - the banished pony, imprisoned for a thousand years. Doa is not completely convinced.
  • Fantastic Caste System: in this universe, there exist Pures/alicorns and Thirds/the other three tribes. Despite having reached the stars, the three tribes were considered and treated like second class citizens. This reached a boiling point to where they rebelled against the Pures. This eventually resulted in them recruiting Spliced Genome/Doa…
  • From Nobody to Nightmare: Doa/Spliced Genome was just an independent biochemist researcher consultant before she became a war criminal with a death count in the billions.
  • Idiot Ball: The decision to make Spliced Genome immortal was decried by countless as an ill advised measure, including Spliced Genome herself. The people holding the Idiot Ball disagreed.
  • Keep the Reward: Doa/Spliced Genome is offered a chance to escape from the moon early, traveling to another world where she can aid and be aided by the mysterious voice, both gaining vengeance on their respective captors. Spliced turns them down, since she doesn’t want to indebt herself to another when she’s aware she’ll escape on her own eventually.
  • Lack of Empathy: In her true identity of Spliced Genome, Doa literally doesn't care if what she does is good or not, only if it's interesting to her.
  • Laser-Guided Amnesia. Doa has no problems functioning like a normal pony, but suffers Loss of Identity every time she wakes up from her odd dreams of dying.
  • Loss of Identity: Doa has no idea who she is or how she got to the moon. Until chapter 6, where it's all explained to her... and she subsequently overcomes this the next time she's killed and reawakens.
  • Mad Doctor: Spliced is a biochemist and doctor who genetically engineered deadly viruses, and was working on an improved version of the Black Plague when she was finally captured.
  • Magic by Any Other Name: Doa’s magic is referred to as "thaumatics".
  • Potty Failure: Doa apparently experienced this during her second or so the reader is lead to believe trip outside, but omits it from her journal entry.
  • Power Limiter: Doa has one on her thaumatics, preventing her from using more than a minimal amount.
  • Resurrective Immortality: Doa was given this to ensure she would live out her thousand-year sentence in jail, reviving in her bed in the station every time she dies.
  • Shout-Out: One of Doa’s false deaths, in her nightmare, draws from Georgie Denbrough’s death via having his arm ripped out of its socket in It.
  • Synthetic Plague: As Spliced Genome, Doa created a number of these that killed millions and infected billions more.
  • Tailor-Made Prison: Doa's lunar station was designed as one for her.
  • The Many Deaths of You: Doa has died many times, in various ways - poison, electrocution, being expelled from an airlock, acid from the showers and others.
  • Villain Protagonist: Doa/Spliced Genome, though this fact is kept secret until late in the story.
  • Wham Episode: The entirety of chapter of six, which reveals the full truth of Doa’s identity and why she’s on the moon… and the source of the voice that she’s been hearing.
  • Wham Line:
    "The percentage of memory used went from fourteen to fifteen with new short journal entry and Doa knew it was fourteen when she had started making her journals when she woke up from that painful nightmare of burning alive."
    • The reason this is a Wham Line: Chapter Five has her finally gain access to the other account on the computer. It turns out it has been storing all her previous journal entries in the restricted account, with the entire screen filled with overlapping file folders.

     The Mare from the Moon 

The Mare from the Moon contains examples of:

  • Abusive Parents: Discussed in chapter 23 - Celestia, according to Twilight, does not approve of these, and is taking legal action to curb certain abuses in particular that are still happening in the far corners of Equestria, like parents forcing their underage kids (such as those who are around the age of the Crusaders) into leaving home and supporting themselves the instant they get a Cutie Mark. (The laws don’t prohibit underage work altogether, since there are some who would gladly get an after-school job if they could find one, and Rainbow Dash notes that she left school and started working early and turned out pretty good; the goal is to prevent it from being forced onto underage ponies.)
  • Anger Born of Worry: Spike starts to lose his temper with Twilight out of worry for her because she’s been acting so oddly the last few days. Then he finds out why she’s been acting that way and softens up.
  • Berserk Button: Don’t imply that Spliced doesn’t know anything about certain subjects. She gets very mad.
  • Bilingual Bonus: Snöflinga / Snowflake the windigo initially speaks in his native language, represented by Swedish. Translations are as follows:
    • Chapter 17:
    Snowflake: "Mitt huvud," Translation: "My head,"
    Snowflake: "Vem är du? Var är jag?" Translation: "Who are you? Where am I?"
    Snowflake: "Evinnerliga snöstorm! Vad ända in i Fimbulwinter är det för fel på mitt ben‽" Translation: "Eternal blizzard, what the Fimbulwinter is wrong with my leg‽"
    Snowflake: "Här är jag, bara så du vet," Translation: "I’m right here, you know,"
    Snowflake: "Jag förstår inte vad du säger men jag är rätt säker på att det handlar om mig och det uppskattar jag inte!" Translation: "I don't understand what you're saying, but..."
    Spike: "De försöker bara hjälpa dig," Translation: "They’re just trying to help you,"
    Snowflake: "Vänta, så du kan faktiskt [i]prata[/i] normalt?" Translation: "Wait, you can actually ‘’speak’’ normal?"
    Snowflake: "Kan du tala om för mig vad det faktiskt är som händer?" Translation: "Can you actually tell me what is going on?"
    Snowflake: "Hallå! Var är mitt halsband?" Translation: "Hey, where is my necklace!"
    Snowflake: "Jag hoppas verkligen att det är här någonstans. Translation: "I hope for real that it is here somewhere."
    Spike: "Hur såg det ut?" Translation: "What did it look like?"
    Snowflake: "En kedja av hård granit som omger en kristall," Translation: "A chain of hard granite surrounding a crystal,"
    Snowflake: "Det är mitt! Ge tillbaka det genast!" Translation: "That’s mine, give it back now!"
    Snowflake: "Jag vill fortfarande ha tillbaka mitt halsband." Translation: "I still want my necklace back."
    Snowflake: "Hallå där! Vad håller hon på med?" Translation: "Hey, what’s she doing?"
    Spike: "Hon gör så att alla ponnyer kan förstå vad du säger och du kan förstå dem," Translation: "She’s making it so all ponies can understand what you’re saying and you can understand them,"
    Spike: "Det kommer vara säkert, det lovar jag." Translation: "It’ll be safe, I promise."
    Snowflake: "Det är bäst för dig, or else I will-" Translation: "It is best for you, or else I will-"
    • Chapter 18:
    Snowflake: "I don’t what that is, but galna hynda passar dig," Translation: "I don’t what that is, but crazy bitch fits you,"
    Snowflake: "Vad sa hon?" Translation: "What did she say?"
    Snowflake: "Vad säger han och vad gör han med mig?" Translation: "What is he saying and what is he doing to me?"
    • Chapter 21:
    Snöflinga: "Vilka är ni fem?" Translation: "Who are you five?"
    Snöflinga: "It nice meet you five pony - gah, det här är så attans dumt!" Translation: "It nice meet you five pony gah, this is so blinking stupid!"
    Snöflinga: "Självklart har vi bakben," Translation: "Of course we have hind legs,"
    Snöflinga: "Vi är inte som de där Sirenerna – dumma fiskar," Translation: "We’re not like those Sirens - stupid fish,"
    Snöflinga: "De försvinner när jag flyger men jag mår inte tillräckligt bra just nu för att flyga." Translation: "They go away when I’m flying, but I’m not well enough to fly right now."
    Spike: "Så du gillar inte de där tre du heller va?" Translation: "You don’t like those three either, huh?"
    Spike: "Jag klandrar dig inte." Translation: "I don’t blame you."
    Snöflinga: "Vilka tre pratar du om? Det finns en hel ocean av dem." Translation: "Which three are you talking about? There’s an ocean of them,"
    Spike: "Twilight och jag mötte några som förvisats genom en portal för länge sedan och höll på att försöka ta över den andra världen," Translation: "Twilight and I met some who’d been banished through a portal a long time ago and were trying to take over that world,"
    Spike: "Adagio Dazzle, Aria Blaze and Sonata Dusk. Och de är maktlösa nu." Translation: "Adagio Dazzle, Aria Blaze and Sonata Dusk. And they’re powerless now."
    Snöflinga: "Jag tänkte säga att det inte låter ett dugg vettigt men jag kommer ju från det förflutna så jag är inte rätt person att uttala mig," Translation: "I’d say that doesn’t make sense, but I’m from the past so I don’t have much room to talk,"
    Snöflinga: "Dessutom, du borde tala om för dem vad vi pratar om. De ger oss skumma blickar." Translation: "Also, you should tell them what we’re saying as they're giving us looks."
    Spike: "Visst." Translation: "Right."
    Snöflinga: "Vill du ha bevis för att jag är en windigo? Här är ditt bevis!" Translation: "You want proof I’m a windigo? Here’s your proof!"
    Snöflinga: "Jag borde förmodligen spara på krafterna tills jag är helt återställd," Translation: "Probably should conserve my power until I’m fully better,"
    Snöflinga: "Det har du inte med att göra," Translation: "None of your business,"
    Snöflinga: "Så snart jag känner mig bra nog kommer jag ta er ponnyer till grottan för att bevisa att jag har rätt." Translation: "Once I am good enough, I will take you ponies to that cave and prove I am right."
    Spike: har du något emot–" Translation: do you mind-"
    • Chapter 22:
    Snöflinga: Någon dag får du förklara det där närmre. Translation: "One of these days, you’ll have to explain more about that."
    Spike: “Åh, det ska jag,” Translation: "Oh, I will,"
    Spike: "Det är en riktigt spännande berättelse." Translation: "It’s a really exciting story."
  • Broken Bird: Having learned empathy from her time in Equestria, Spliced's breakdown is shown for the first time when she realizes the consequences of what she did with her viral creations, and then again during her trial, getting worse as time passes in chapter 30. Over the years, as she’s lost all her friends to age or dimensional barriers, she reaches the point where the emotivers call her emotionally dead - her sorrow has bottomed out and they doubt she can feel any actual emotions anymore. She can still get depressed or seem pleased, but nothing is really there.
  • Burning with Anger: In chapter 15, Twilight shows that she's learned out to trigger her flaming form (originally seen in the episode Feeling Pinkie Keen) at will through her memories of things that make her angry, though she's looking for a better, more stable and positive emotion to do so, since negative emotions burden the spirit.
  • Caffeine Bullet Time: Spliced gets very hyped up on coffee in chapter 6, to the point where she's talking a mile a minute and acting more than a little crazier than usual.
  • Call-Back:
    • To canon - in chapter 9, references are made to events from the episodes Dragonshy (Twilight mentions a dragon’s snoring and producing smoke that caused troubles), The Cutie Mark Chronicles (Twilight hatching Spike), The Return of Harmony two-parter (what Discord did the first time they met him), Secret of My Excess (Spike’s Greed Growth-fueled rampage), Dragon Quest (their first meeting with Garble) and Gauntlet of Fire (how they first met Dragon Lord Ember).
    • Multiple callbacks to canon, and to earlier in the fic, are made in chapter 14.
    • At the end of the first story, Spliced learned that she was her world’s "banished pony", who would be trapped on the moon for a thousand years, and at the end of that time “the stars would aid her escape”. At the end of the second story, this proves true - Spliced’s sentence ends exactly one thousand years after she was first sent to the moon, and she returns to Hesturland via the shuttle Aiding Stars, piloted by a pony named Escape Velocity.
  • Came Back Strong: It's noted that every time she dies and resurrects, Spliced adapts to what killed her, making it harder and harder for her to die by that particular thing again, and she revives faster and faster.
  • Character Development: The entire story is about Spliced learning empathy and changing from the person she once was.
  • The Clan: Like Applejack, Rainbow Dash has more distant cousins, aunts, uncles and other relationships than can be reasonably plotted out, and they’re a wide variety of species (both pony types and non-ponies). (However, her immediate family is just she and her parents, with Scootaloo being as good as.)
  • Color-Coded Wizardry: Spliced's thaumatics are turquoise.
  • Comically Missing the Point: Pinkie does this in chapter 12, resulting in a pun:
    Rainbow Dash: "Just let me get down first." As in, off of the cloud she's sitting on.
    Pinkie Pie (looks around in confusion): "Where are you going to get it from?" ... "I don’t see any ducks around here!"
  • Continuity Nod: In chapter 8, Discord mentions "this realm's Door to the Realms in Between". This was previously mentioned in chapter 12 of another of Evilhumour's stories, A Chance Meeting of Two Moons.
  • Covered in Gunge: In chapter 19, it’s noted that there was a pony who, about a week after the events of the episode The Crystalling, barged in on an event in the Crystal Palace’s ballroom and made insinuations about Flurry Heart’s parentage. This trope quickly happened, as he ended up hanging upside down from the chandelier, covered in banana creme and with a Dunce Cap glued to his head.
  • The Dreaded: Rarity, for Prince Blueblood, after the events at the end of the Grand Galloping Gala they attended together, to the point where Shining Armor can keep Blueblood in line by threatening to lock them in a room together for a few hours if he doesn’t behave.
  • Dr. Jerk: Spliced comes off as this when she's working on a patient, an attitude which greatly displeases other doctors that she's temporarily working with.
  • Even Evil Has Standards: Spliced Genome has a bodycount in the millions, but when she's told that Garble the dragon wanted Spike to smash a defenseless phoenix’s egg just for fun the first time they met, she concedes that he doesn't belong anywhere near any throne.
  • Eye Scream: In chapter 25, there’s a catastrophic failure in a machine Spliced is working on, and she gets a chunk of metal in her eye (and all the way into the bone) as a result. Fortunately, her healing ability allows her to remove it and regenerate the eye with ease.
  • Face Palm: Starlight’s reaction to learning how one of Spliced’s old classmates reacted when he failed a history exam, insisting he was right and the textbook was wrong.
  • Fainting: Spliced's reaction when she finds out that, contrary to what she'd believed, that she can walk on clouds.
  • Fantastically Indifferent: Zecora is completely unfazed at the sight of a new alicorn outside her home (she doesn’t even comment on Spliced’s species), and reacts with total calmness when she recognizes Spliced as being from another dimension. Apparently, zebras in general are used to travelers from other worlds dropping in or passing through.
  • Fantastic Racism:
    • As a diamond dog, Doctor Dies Horribly has been on the receiving end of this plenty of times. He’s pleasantly surprised when Spliced tells him she doesn’t care about his species, just his capabilities (which are high).
    • Apparently, windigos and sirens don’t get along.
  • Flat-Earth Atheist: Spliced Genome denies that magic is real - she refers to it as "thaumatics", an energy that can be manipulated by ponies in certain forms, and firmly believes it has a scientific explanation. She's also convinced that one of their most powerful enemies in the past was just a creature with a far greater ability to manipulate thaumatics than any normal pony rather than any sort of magical entity. By the end of the story, nearly six hundred years later, she’s not only changed to thinking of it as magic, her powers have developed considerably and she can now teleport.
  • Gale-Force Sound: Twilight manages to send Spliced flying by the sheer force of her voice when she gets angry at Spliced saying she'd abused Spike by the way she raised him not to horde.
  • Hell Has New Management: The Royal Sisters don’t want to banish Spliced to Tartarus; this is one of the reasons, as they fear her researching the creatures there, and the nature of Tartarus itself, turning them to her own benefit and making her even more dangerous.
  • Hidden Depths: Chapter 17 reveals that Spike speaks the language of the windigos, having learned a bit from one of his comics (a thinly disguised version of Marvel's "The Mighty Thor") and looked up more because he thought it was interesting.
  • Hurl It into the Sun: Celestia initially promises that she’ll do this to Spliced if she proves herself a threat. Later though, she changes her mind when it’s pointed out that Spliced’s Resurrective Immortality, and her adapting to what killed her every time she dies, will eventually leave her immune to both the sun and to Celestia’s magic, something she decides is too big of a risk.
  • Idiot Ball:
    • Spliced Genome was content to wait out her time on the moon, and had been reforming slowly after almost three hundred years of no conflict between her and her jailers. But then one of them grabbed firm hold of this trope and activated a death trap, triggering her Rage Breaking Point. Word of God is that it was done by an individual without permission and against standing orders to leave her alone.
    • In chapter 20, Spike indicates that he thinks Chrysalis had hold of this trope during the wedding invasion (and when she captured the entire royal family later), and once he explains himself, Spliced agrees with him - Changelings feed on love, but since she tried to turn them into a nation of hostages, all of them angry over being held captive, they wouldn’t be producing very much love for her to drain in the first place.
  • I'm a Doctor, Not a Placeholder: Spliced's dream in chapter 15 has her saying "I’m a scientist, not a doctor."
  • Is That a Threat?: When Princess Celestia says Spliced will find out what happens to a body when it is exposed directly to the sun if Spliced harms Twilight, Spliced figures out that Princess Celestia is threatening her. The princess' response is that no, it's not a threat - it's what will happen, because the sun is where she'll most likely imprison Spliced if she proves herself a threat.
  • "It" Is Dehumanizing: Spliced tends to use "it" to refer to her patients or test subjects as a way to distance herself from them. Doctor Hale, however, strongly disapproves of this method and scolds her for it. When she eventually stops, it's not clear if his words have really sunk in, or if she even realizes she's stopped.
  • Kangaroo Court: Spliced's trial starts out as one, with the defense having been given only two days (as opposed to the prosecution's two weeks) and the three judges blatantly trying to manipulate things in favor of conviction by interrupting the Defense's opening statement. Spliced responds to this with a rant that convinces them to subvert it for fear of her getting Off on a Technicality.
  • Know-Nothing Know-It-All: Spliced had to deal with a few of these in her classes as a younger pony, including one student who, after failing a history exam, still insisted he was right and the textbook was wrong. Then there was the one who went as far as trying to change the historical records to match up with what he claimed was right, but was caught almost immediately.
  • Lame Pun Reaction: After Pinkie makes an unwitting pun while Comically Missing the Point in chapter 12, there's a Collective Groan, then a chuckle from Rainbow Dash, who actually liked the pun.
  • Larynx Dissonance: The voice-changing effect of Poison Joke is replicated in chapter 16, this time on Sweetie Belle (as a demonstration of the plant's abilities). Scootaloo is barely restraining herself from laughing herself sick at the results, and Spliced herself has to suppress a snort of laughter when she hears it gives Fluttershy the same voice.
  • Legend Fades to Myth: The truth about the founding of Equestria has had this happen about it, as Snöflinga the windigo reveals. As he explains, among other things, "Private Pansy", "Smart Cookie" and "Clover the Clever" were actually his friends "Privateer Pansy", "Tough Cookie" and "Clover the Cobbler". Also, he refers to Princess Platinum, General Hurricane and Chancellor Puddinghead as "monsters".
  • Little "No": Spliced utters one at the end of chapter 29, when she realizes she’s back on the moon.
  • Logical Weakness: Snöflinga’s species feeds on conflict and negativity. Naturally, when Flurry Heart’s unrestricted love is directed at him, it makes him queasy.
  • Lotus-Eater Machine: The one Sombra set up in the Crystal Empire comes into play again in chapter 20, this time affecting Spliced Genome and showing her her worst fears - that she’s back in her lunar prison, suffering Loss of Identity again.
  • Mama Bear:
    • Celestia decides to send Spliced to stay in Ponyville with Twilight, but makes it very clear what will happen if the visiting alicorn if she harms Twilight or anypony (or non-pony). Spliced’s reaction: "That mare is scary."
    • Twilight is the same when it comes to Spike, warning Spliced that if her plan to help him get ready for what's basically puberty doesn't work out like she promised, Spliced will have to explain the entire thing to Spike, all of Twilight's friends, Princess Celestia, Princess Luna, Dragon Lord Ember and her father, former Dragon Lord Torch. And then, as an implied threat and the final nail in the coffin, she informs Spliced that she and her friends once banished a being who hurt Spike into the prison realm of Tartarus.
  • Mistaken for Racist: When Spliced starts explaining about her world's Pures (Alicorns) and Thirds (the other three tribes, who have only a third of what a Pure has), she realizes that this might sound like racism, and starts explaining that to her, the differences between the tribes are purely biological, with Thirds variously lacking any or all of the following: a carbuncle (the organ that generates their thaumatics), the particular keratin (a fibrous structural protein) that makes up a horn, or the bones that form wings.
  • Must Have Caffeine: Spliced is this in the morning, since she doesn't get a lot of sleep due to her nightmares.
  • My God, What Have I Done?:
    • Twilight's reaction when Spliced points out the damage she’s inadvertently done to Spike's growth, meaning he's physically a child who's about to enter puberty with the wrong mindset.
    • Spliced's reaction when it finally hits her just what kind of monster she was before she was sent to the moon.
  • Narrative Profanity Filter:
    • Spike mentions an incident in his past when Princess Luna apparently swore a lot in his presence (to the point where it nearly set the nearby paperwork on fire) while complaining about Prince Blueblood, but adds that he’s not allowed to use that kind of language until he’s at least eighteen - the only part he can quote without getting in trouble is 'snooty little plothead'.
    • In chapter 21, Snöflinga mutters something profane under his breath in his own language; Spike, who says he's heard worse, declines to translate it for the others.
  • Never Heard That One Before:
    • Snöflinga is used to being referred to by "Snowflake", which is what his real name translates as.
    • Doctor Glorious Death has heard all the jokes about her name. Luckily, she has a sense of humor about it, and her colleague Doctor Hale suspects she went into medicine for the irony.
    • In chapter 19, Spliced becomes convinced that Shining Armor can't be Flurry Heart's father, due to her oversized wings and having more pegasus magic than unicorn magic. Cadance and Shining Armor inform her that others have made such speculation too, but they were wrong - Flurry Heart gets her wings from her mother, since Cadance was born a pegasus before ascending to alicornhood.
  • Noodle Incident: Just what happened the first time Luna met Princess Platinum to make her so distrusting of the other mare?
  • Not a Morning Person: Both Spliced and Twilight, as shown in chapter 23.
  • Out-of-Character Moment: Even Spliced knows she’s being a bit out of character when she decides to comfort Twilight over the latter realizing her mistakes in regard to Spike, but can’t bring herself not to do so.
  • Papa Wolf: Discord is very protective of Fluttershy, and makes it very clear to Spliced that he knows of her past with experimental plagues and what will happen if she harms Fluttershy or anypony else in this world with them.
  • Parental Substitute: Per canon, Twilight to Spike, but it’s made more visible as Twilight actually refers to him as her son here, especially when Spliced starts calling her out on her inadvertent stunting of his growth.
  • Poke the Poodle: Spliced and Starlight’s interactions amount to this when Spliced swipes Starlight’s breakfast from her in chapter 11 after Starlight makes a snippy remark to her about being polite. Twilight is not amused.
  • Power Copying: Averting this trope is one reason Luna and Celestia don’t want to send Spliced to Tartarus, regardless of her crimes; they’re afraid Tirek might do this to her and become immortal.
  • Powers That Be: Twilight reveals that for all the dimensions she was shown, there are Powers that act as the source for what they are named after in that dimension. Examples include:
    • Celestia is the Lady of Day. Luna, her Opposite, is the Lady of Night (and also of Dreams).
    • The Bearers each represent a subset of Harmony (Honesty, Loyalty, Laughter, Kindness and Magic); their collective Opposite is Disharmony, with Discord as its Lord, and the Opposites of the six Elements are Lies, Oathbreaking, Sorrow, Cruelty, Self-centeredness and Technology (the last of which Twilight doesn’t seem to appreciate).
    • War and Peace are also Powers that are Opposites, with Peace being the nasty one who acts aggressively to ensure that war won’t break out.
    • It's further revealed that a Lord or Lady of one Power cannot enter another dimension unless that Power has no Lord or Lady present at the time, unless they’re invited.
  • Pragmatic Hero: Spliced displays a touch of this when she chooses to help Twilight with Spike, out of a desire to avoid being punished by certain individuals for causing harm by deliberate inaction.
  • Rage Breaking Point: Spliced Genome's comes when, after close to three hundred years of behaving herself, she's killed again... destroying all the hard (and harmless) work she's been doing, causing her to decide she's had enough and she's leaving now.
  • Reasonable Authority Figure: Princess Celestia is one, accepting Spliced's gesture of fixing her broken nose in the spirit that it was meant, and being willing to hear her out about her past. However, upon hearing about her past, Celestia and Luna have a private conversation on their thoughts on Spliced, recognize the danger she poses and agree to handle her with extreme care.
  • Recap Episode: Chapter 29 serves as a summation of many past events as Spliced testifies about herself in court.
  • Red Baron: In her native dimension, Spliced was dubbed the “Viral Maniac” for her crimes.
  • Screw This, I'm Outta Here!:
    • Apparently, the Great Old One Azathoth once resided in Spliced Genome's world, but the locals kept resisting its control, to the point where Azathoth decided it wasn't worth the effort and moved on to go after some other planet or dimension.
    • In the last chapter, Spliced learns that nobody knows how to turn her mortal again. Furious and tired, she teleports away to parts unknown.
  • Shout-Out:
    • Nurse Crystal is an OC of SpaceBattles.com/FIMFiction user Tangent, who provided the name of the story.
    • Batty, another OC for Tangent, appears briefly in chapter 4.
    • The Old Man Henderson story is referenced in chapter 7 as "Old Mare Henderson".
    • Twilight gives a near exact quote from Star Wars: X-Wing #4 - The Bacta War, only replacing a character name with "We".
    • Discord similarly borrows the majority of one of Commander Khashoggi's lines (changing the last word into a longer phrase) from We Will Rock You. He later paraphrases the Major General Song.
    • In chapter 8, Discord references Through the Looking Glass, and What Alice Found There with the line "I do six impossible things before breakfast", a variation on a line originally spoken by the White Queen.
    • In chapter 9, Twilight describes dragons as both "extreme omnivores" and "obligate silicavores", in reference to a scene from Saphroneth’s The Unicorn At Hogwarts where she used the same phrasings.
    • Also in chapter 9, Spliced mentions (when explaining why she doesn’t want to anger beings like Discord) that "You’d be surprised what you can live through, even without my kind of immortality." The first half of that sentence references the Arc Words from Aladdin: The Return of Jafar.
    • Chapter 11 mentions one of Spliced’s old classmates who, during a history exam, made a mistake involving a war from long before their time - he thought it was named after one of the generals involved instead of the piece of territory where most of the fighting took place. This references a scene from the Johnny Dixon book The Drum, The Doll and the Zombie, in which the title character's father is noted as having made the same mistake on his own history exam (he thought The Peloponnesian War involved a general named Peloponnesian, instead of primarily taking place in the Peloponnese region). However, unlike the character Spliced mentions, Major Dixon acknowledged and accepted his error when it was pointed out.
    • During the aforementioned scene in chapter 11, Spliced refers to one of her classmates as "a gasbag of ego". The same phrase was used by an annoyed character to describe one of her squadron mates in Star Wars: X-Wing #7 - Solo Command.
    • In chapter 14, Spliced references a quote from Socrates: "I am the wisest [man] alive, for I know one thing, and that is that I know nothing."
    • The valley Twilight mentions as the setting for a weather control experiment (or rather, lack of weather control) is based on Perfection Valley.
    • During their discussion on weather control, Spliced names a method of creating new clouds that is straight out of Star Wars: X-Wing #2 - Wedge's Gamble.
    • Still in the same discussion, Twilight discusses the creation of rainbows; the methodology used comes from a scene in RealityCheck's The Audience. So does her usage of the term "morphic resonance field control".
    • During Chapter 15's scene in Rainbow Dash’s house, Rainbow Dash mentions that a compound named pyrobloin is mixed into the vapor used to make cloudstone. This is almost exactly how sea clouds and island clouds (like Skypeia) are created in One Piece, except there pyrobloin seems to be a naturally occurring compound that's expelled into the atmosphere via volcanoes.
    • In the same chapter, Twilight mentions that she's looking for an emotion that she can use to manually trigger her flaming form (the one triggered by her Rage Breaking Point in Feeling Pinkie Keen), and that she needs a positive one, since negative ones burden the spirit. This is inspired by a scene in chapter 23 of the Ranma ½ fanfic The Truth and the Tempest. The method she's currently using is reminiscent of Sanji’s "Hell Memories" technique.
    • Twilight’s two Trust Passwords in chapter 21 are one - "The world is quiet here" is the motto of the V.F.D. organization in A Series of Unfortunate Events; "The celery stalks at midnight" is the title of the third book in the Bunnicula series.
    • In chapter 29, after being warned that another outburst could see her charged with contempt of court, Spliced thinks to herself that I have nothing but contempt for this court, a line from The Transformers: The Movie.
    • Late in chapter 29, Legal Preview says she’d be happy if Due Justice’s legal license was “dumped in some black hole where it belongs”. A similar line, except for referring to the case as a whole, was used in Star Wars: X-Wing #3 - the Krytos Trap.
  • Stupidest Thing I've Ever Heard: Spliced Genome's reaction to learning that being an alicorn automatically puts you in a position of leadership in this world, especially if they try to make her a princess - she admits that she would make a terrible leader, having killed every plant she's ever owned out of negligence. Even a cactus.
  • Teleportation: As of chapter 19.5, Pharynx has apparently learned how to do this, as he teleports back to the hive for a quick word with Thorax, and then back to the Crystal Empire afterward. Thorax makes a note to learn it himself. Spliced has also learned it by the end of the story.
  • Time-Compression Montage: The final chapter shows various scenes, jumping forward in time between each one and covering up to the end of her sentence on the moon.
  • This Is Wrong on So Many Levels: When Spike mentions that all winged species can walk on clouds, Spliced's reaction is that "That is impossible on so many levels that I cannot even begin to describe how impossible that is." She's quickly proven wrong when Rainbow Dash pushes a cloud into the room and sits on it. Then again when Starlight levitates Spliced herself onto the cloud, which she finds is quite solid to her.
  • Translator Buddy: Spike acts as this for Snöflinga both before and after Snöflinga starts learning modern Equish, since he's the only one around who can speak the windigo's native language.
  • Trust Password: Twilight sets one each up for Spike and Starlight, in order to confirm her identity after she returns from the Valley of Alicorns and prove that it’s not another Power impersonating her.
  • The Unreveal: What exactly the Valley of Alicorns is; the chapter cuts off right as Twilight starts to explain.
  • Unusual Euphemism: Snöflinga/Snowflake the windigo uses "Fimbulwinter", the term for the three years of successive winters (with no summers in between) that precede Ragnarok in Norse myth, as a curse. Later, he refers to certain individuals as "Ymir-spawned bastards!", referencing the father of all frost giants in the same myths.
  • Use Your Head: Spliced Genome’s reaction, when Princess Celestia tries to keep her from leaving her bed, is to headbutt the other mare and break her snout. (She apologizes later and heals it though.)
  • Wedgie: In chapter 19.5, Pharynx says he's going to give one to Chrysalis once they catch her. When Thorax points out that she doesn't wear clothes, Pharynx says that clothes or no clothes, he's still capable of doing it to her, and Thorax is both intrigued and terrified by the idea.
  • Wham Line: The very end of chapter 18, when Snöflinga/Snowflake identifies "Privateer Pansy", "Tough Cookie" and "Clover the Cobbler" as his friends. Chapter 19 then shows the characters reacting to it.
  • Who Names Their Kid "Dude"?: While listening to the story of Ponyville's founding, Spliced wonders to herself "who in their right mind would give their foal the first name Stinking?"
  • Who Wants to Live Forever?: Spliced Genome begins to really hate her immortality. After years of promising to turn her mortal, those in charge admit that they lost the process to render her mortal again. This only furthers her growing depression.
  • Who Would Be Stupid Enough?: Spliced wonders, in chapter 19, if Blueblood would really be dumb enough to attempt a coup while the princesses are away. Celestia's response, that they have to pretend they're concerned about it so as to discourage him from doing so, indicates that yes, he is.
  • "World of Cardboard" Speech: Happens in chapter 15. Unusually, it's a character doing this on behalf of somepony else:
    Twilight Sparkle: "I… asked her about that, after Starlight told me about the whole thing. She compared it to something from one of Spike’s comics, actually. That most of the time, she feels like she lives in a world of cardboard, and that she always has to hold back to keep from breaking everything around her. Daybreaker is what happens when she doesn’t care enough to hold back anymore, to let loose with everything she has without worrying about the consequences. And that’s something that she’d only use as an absolute last resort."
  • Yank the Dog's Chain:
    • In chapter 29, Spliced has been put on trial and effectively gotten what she wanted, with the judges having reduced her sentence to freedom once she cures all the diseases and viruses she's made, requiring her only to undergo mandatory psychological evaluation and therapy afterward. Then agents of the higher intergalactic tribunal show up and inform everyone that their bosses have already made up their own minds, re-arrest her and take her back to her old cell on the moon.
    • The story ends with Spliced, having finally served out her full sentence, asking the council members to fulfill their promise and make her mortal again so she can die permanently… only to learn that they don’t know how.
  • You Are a Credit to Your Race: Spliced Genome says this to her doctor, but realizes afterward that her words might be taken as offensive. Her attempts to apologize lead to a case of Digging Yourself Deeper.

     A Winter's Tale 

A Winter's Tale contains examples of:

  • The Call Put Me on Hold: Like the Cutie Mark Crusaders, Clover has yet to earn her Cutie Mark… but it hits her far worse, because she’s already effectively an adult and doesn’t have one.
  • Fight Clubbing: Tough Cookie (the real name of Smart Cookie) is revealed to be involved in an underground fight club in the first chapter.
  • Foregone Conclusion: Since it's a prequel, it's a given that the story will result in Equestria's founding and Snöflinga being separated from his friends and buried in ice for over a thousand years.
  • Prequel in the Lost Age: A Winter’s Tale covers the events set before the founding of Equestria, which are over a thousand years in the past.
  • Privateer: "Private Pansy", as mentioned in The Mare From the Moon, is actually Privateer Pansy, a former sky pirate who's been pardoned and is now working for General Hurricane's military junta. Despite this, he's still treated poorly by the other captains working for the general.
  • Bilingual Bonus: In chapter 1, Snöflinga is mentioned as being in his "spöklik" form, meaning "spectral" or "ghost-like" (it's the flying form that all windigos have).
  • The Un-Favourite: Snöflinga is this for his family, as the fourth son who has a far more progressive view and desire to adapt certain developments that the ponies have, as opposed to his highly conservative family who see ponies only as a food source.

     Scavenge for the Future 

  • Girl-on-Girl Is Hot: Scratched and Aerostorm certainly think so. Zaat disagrees when Aerostorm is one of the girls, though not because he objects to homosexuality - he just doesn’t like seeing a girl he thinks of as a sister doing that kind of thing with anyone, regardless of gender.
  • Landfill Beyond the Stars: The story begins on Zeehale, a desert world full of junk, with Scratched Wrench, Aerostorm and Zaat living there.
  • Like Brother and Sister: Zaat and Aerostorm, as Zaat says in the first chapter.
  • Not Blood Siblings: Scratched Wrench’s parents have adopted Aerostorm as their other daughter. Doesn’t stop the two from being a couple, with plans to get married someday.
  • Power Trio: Scratched Wrench, Aerostorm and Zaat.
  • Shout-Out: The trio's ship, Excelsior, is named (out-of-universe) in memory of the late Stan Lee and his catchphrase.
  • Universal Universe Time: Subverted. Scratched Wrench and her crew come from a planet with a very long year - by its standards, they’re only two years old, whereas by Hesturland or Equestrian standards, they’d be roughly twenty-one.
  • Wrench Wench: Scratched Wrench, a genius with fixing up technology.

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