Line #72 FanFic/Deserving


1	->''"Voldemort is gone, now the question is: What to do with the Marked Ones that haven’t really committed any crimes? The Wizarding World’s solution: Place them under the care and ‘protection’ of a Guide from the Light. The problem is most of Abuse, Anal, BDSM, Humil, M/M, [=MPreg=], N/C, Oral, Slave, Spank, [[ArsonMurderAndJaywalking WIP]]"''
2	-->--'''AFF dot net's fittingly-abbreviated summary'''
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4	''[[http://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600022825 Deserving]]'' by moonofthesea picks up the ''Literature/HarryPotter'' story in the year 1998. The Second Wizarding War is over, and Harry Potter and friends must decide what to do with the surviving Death Eaters. This being fanfic-world, a marriage law is instituted whereby each "Marked One" must come under the supervision of a "Guide of the Light". Harry sacrifices everything he has to be Guide of the Light to Severus Snape (who in the fic survived ''[[Literature/HarryPotterAndTheDeathlyHallows Deathly Hallows]]''), and ''Deserving'' tells their story.
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7	!!''Deserving'' contains examples of:
8	%%* AndThisIsFor: Harry does this when he's buggering Snape, culminating with "Dumbledorrrrrrrrrrre!"
9	* AntiClimax: Just as [[spoiler:Harry]] takes his wand out to fight, [[spoiler:Ron Weasley]] walks in with a pair or Aurors, takes his wand away, and tells the Aurors to take the former away.
10	* ArsonMurderAndJaywalking: [[spoiler:Millicent]] and her son have been thrown out of the house by her vindictive husband, with the kid being ''put up for sale''. The part that the story treats as unforgivable is that the kid is named [[spoiler:"Sin"]], which isn't even [[AerithAndBob that bad a name by wizarding world standards]].
11	%%* ArtisticLicenseBiology: It's inherent in the [[MisterSeahorse concept]].
12	* AsYouKnow: Characters will tell other characters things they already know, and in some cases [[DepartmentOfRedundancyDepartment the reader also knows]], and the actual phrase "AsYouKnow" is used at one point.
13	%%* AuthorAvatar: Madam Pomfrey seems to have become one.
14	* AuthorVocabularyCalendar: [[DrinkingGame A shot for]] any of the following: [[SaidBookism "stated", "dared" as a dialogue tag]], "rectum", "ministration(s)", "butt cheek", "entrance" in a sexual context, [[IKEAErotica "penetrate"]], [[DidNotDoTheBloodyResearch "git"]].
15	* AtrociousAlias: [[spoiler:Sin]] is treated this way, whatever the reader might think of it.
16	%% * BabiesEverAfter
17	* BabiesMakeEverythingBetter: Harry suggests that his baby was exerting [[MindControl some kind of influence]] on Snape ''before he was even born'', thus helping him along the road to redemption.
18	%%* BigNo: Several of them, to the point that it's almost an unintentional RunningGag.
19	* BizarreHumanBiology: Several factoids about [[MisterSeahorse male pregnancy]] and wizard infants are invented for the sake of the plot.
20	* BlackAndGrayMorality: It's hard to see who the good guys are in a fic where the [[LightIsNotGood "Guides of Light"]] are enslaving, raping and forcibly impregnating people.
21	* BodyHorror: Implicit in [[MisterSeahorse the concept]], but there's plenty more.
22	* BurlyDetectiveSyndrome: "The Gryffindor" isn't a useful epithet in a scene where ''everyone'' was in Gryffindor.
23	%% * CampGay: [[http://szaleniec1000.livejournal.com/tag/dennis%20the%20flaming%20stereotype Dennis]].
24	* ChekhovsGunman: The [[RapeAsDrama dire fates]] of Gregory Goyle and Pansy Parkinson are mentioned in passing in the first chapter, but become relevant to the plot later on.
25	* CListFodder: If you're a minor Slytherin character, this fic is going to put you through the wringer.
26	* ContinuationFic: It picks up after ''Deathly Hallows''.
27	* CrackFic: If you were in any doubt, this fic has [[spoiler:Crabbe shagging a house elf]].
28	%%* CrapsackWorld: You have read the rest of this page, right?
29	* DeathByChildbirth: Male pregnancies are said to be quite dangerous and [[spoiler:Goyle]] finds out the hard way.
30	* DependingOnTheWriter: The beta's disagreements with moonofthesea herself, both in ideas and writing style, are speculated to be the cause of a lot of the fic's inconsistencies.
31	* DeusAngstMachina: Snape gets this piled on thick and deep.
32	* DidNotDoTheBloodyResearch: No, "wanking" is ''not'' a word to use in polite company. Contrariwise, "git" is a very mild term for the uses it gets put to in this fic.
33	* DoorStopper: 53 chapters, weighing in at slightly over 200,000 words.
34	* DreamingOfThingsToCome: [[spoiler:Millicent]] has a dream of [[spoiler:[[MisterSeahorse Snape birthing more kids]]]].
35	* DysfunctionJunction: The closest to a well-adjusted character in this fic is ''Kreacher'', which should tell you all you need to know.
36	* EverybodyLives: Implied to be the outcome of the Second Wizarding War. Snape and [[spoiler:Vincent Crabbe]] have survived the events of ''[[Literature/HarryPotterAndTheDeathlyHallows Deathly Hallows]]'', and nobody can see Thestrals, though the latter may just be a minor PlotHole.
37	* EverythingsBetterWithSparkles: Wizard babies cast "twinkles" to show they're magically adept.
38	%%* ExactEavesdropping: Happens several times.
39	* FelonyMisdemeanor: The business with [[spoiler:Millicent's]] kid's name.
40	* GenderBender: What [[spoiler:Snape]] tries to do in response to [[spoiler:Harry's {{Narm}}ful outburst]].
41	* GeniusLoci: Hogwarts Castle personally sends out all the admission letters. [[spoiler:It also controls its registration with an iron fist. Any attempt to alter the admission records causes them to vanish and be replaced with a new one. Despite hundreds of years of attempts by the Ministry, Hogwarts alone decides who may attend it.]]
42	* GodwinsLaw: Chapter 6 has Marked Ones ''explicitly likened to Holocaust victims''.
43	%%* GooGooGodlike: Serena, so very much.
44	* HeelRealization: "When did we become DARK WIZARDS and WITCHES?"
45	%%* IdiotBall: It would be easier to list the characters who ''aren't'' holding it in this fic.
46	%%* IKEAErotica: Whenever there's a sex scene, sometimes for multiple paragraphs.
47	* TheImmodestOrgasm: The infamous "Dumbledorrrrrrrrrrre!" is only one example of many.
48	%%* {{Infodump}}: Very common throughout.
49	* InterspeciesRomance: [[spoiler:A lot of Marked Ones escape by romancing house elves]].
50	* InTheBlood: The canonical trend for Hogwarts houses to run in families (a rule with [[http://harrypotter.wikia.com/wiki/Sirius_Black notable exceptions]]) is {{flanderi\|zation}}sed into Harry and Snape's [[MisterSeahorse ass-baby]] having literally a 50/50 chance of being in Slytherin or Gryffindor.
51	%% * KidFic
52	* KudzuPlot: Each chapter seems to develop more plot threads than it resolves. [[ViewersAreGeniuses Good luck keeping track if you're not taking notes]].
53	* LamarckWasRight: [[spoiler:Whatever it was that stopped the Marked Ones from using magic also did the same with their kids]]. Maybe.
54	%% * {{Lemon}}
55	* TheLoinsSleepTonight: Harry is impotent, though this isn't revealed until Chapter 36 despite having free access to Harry's POV. Oddly enough, this is one of the few bits that make any biological sense (he states that it came about following the final battle with Voldemort -- if anything would cause long-term impotence, it would be a psychological shock like that).
56	* {{Malaproper}}: The author's apparent reliance on autocorrect causes this a lot.
57	* MilkingTheGiantCow: Harry is described as doing this at one point when he was in full LargeHam mode [[MundaneMadeAwesome talking about Kingsley's son's birthday party]], complete with ''magical fireworks''.
58	* MisterSeahorse: The entire premise.
59	* NoIndoorVoice: Everyone in this fic spends half their time shouting. They make the Harry of ''[[Literature/HarryPotterAndTheOrderOfThePhoenix Order of the Phoenix]]'' seem calm.
60	* OffscreenInertia: Severus takes up knitting, but is never shown actually completing anything even though the story spans several years. This led one reviewer to suggest that he was making the [[Series/DoctorWho Fourth Doctor's scarf]].
61	%%* OffstageWaitingRoom: Happens frequently, as a consequence of the rather odd pacing.
62	* OneSteveLimit: Averted. There's a Mark Sly and a Mark Rogers, neither of whom are [[{{Pun}} Marked Ones]].
63	%%* OutOfCharacter: ''Everyone'', by the author's own admission.
64	* PaedoHunt: Appears as a DiabolusExMachina when Harry and Snape's family life starts to become as normal as it can be. [[WhatHappenedToTheMouse And vanishes just as quickly]].
65	* PairTheSpares: Neville and Dennis, also a LastMinuteHookup.
66	* PayEvilUntoEvil: The point of the fic's premise, vengeance upon the defeated Death Eaters... Er, [[InsistentTerminology "Marked Ones"]].
67	%%* PunctuatedForEmphasis: [[{{Narm}} "Dumbledorrrrrrrrrrre!"]]
68	%%* PurpleProse: To the extent that it's been likened to ''Literature/TheEyeOfArgon''. It's practically ultraviolet.
69	%%* PutOnABus: Happens to Harry's TrueCompanions in the first chapter.
70	%% * RapeAsDrama
71	%% * RedStringOfFate
72	%% * RougeAnglesOfSatin
73	* SaidBookism: Lots of it, often combined with a refusal to use character names and pronouns, produces a MundaneMadeAwesome effect when phrases like "proclaimed the Chosen One" appear in a conversation about interior design.
74	* SecondHandStorytelling: Over the course of the story, Harry and Snape [[DivorceIsTemporary get married twice]], and both times are off-screen despite the shipping being ''the entire point of the fic''.
75	%% * SituationalSexuality
76	%% * SlashFic: Well, yeah.
77	%% * SmugSnake: Madam Pomfrey of all characters has her moments.
78	%% * SoBeautifulItsACurse: Dennis bemoans this in Chapter 39.
79	* SophisticatedAsHell: A result of the children's inconsistently-written dialogue alternating between baby talk and LittleProfessorDialogue often in the same scene.
80	* TokenMinority: [[spoiler:Dennis]] is the only character who's depicted as being actually gay rather than subject to SituationalSexuality. The only purpose this seems to serve is to tell the rest of the cast that Dumbledore was gay, because apparently he came out to him.
81	%%* TrrrillingRrrs: During an ImmodestOrgasm, no less.
82	* UnusuallyUninterestingSight: [[MisterSeahorse Men are getting pregnant]] left, right and centre, and only once in passing is it noted that this isn't exactly normal.
83	** There is also a scene in which it appears that Snape is naked during dinner with Harry and Mrs Weasley, and nobody comments on this either.
84	%%* WhatTheHellHero: Everyone seems to be queuing up (sometimes literally) to give Harry this treatment, especially [[AuthorAvatar Madam Pomfrey]].
85	* WiseBeyondTheirYears:
86	** Richard, who is fully fluent in LittleProfessorDialogue and offers accurate opinions on relationships and office politics (!) ''before he's three years old''.
87	** Serena takes this up a notch when she's talking and using controlled wandless magic before her '''first''' birthday.
88	* WorldOfHam: Every character is given to overdramatic dialogue and behaviour. One memorable scene has Harry casting fireworks with his wand to emphasise a point [[MundaneMadeAwesome in a conversation about a birthday party]].

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