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* TheMedic: Naruto's role in Team 7, Sasuke being the Tank and [[MyFriendsAndZoidberg Sakura]] TheChick.
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* TheMedic: Naruto's role in Team 7, Sasuke being the Tank and [[MyFriendsAndZoidberg Sakura]] TheChick.TheHeart.
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* GreenLanternRing: Seals. While they are very well explained, their very nature means that they can be tweaked to do a near infinite number of things, all depending on the wit and power of the Seal Master. [[spoiler: But even Jiraiya was shocked that Naruto decided to use it to create zombie animals as weapons]].
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* HumanoidAbomination: Orochimaru.
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* ImaginationBasedSuperpower: The nature of seals means that they can be tweaked to do a near infinite number of things, all depending on the wit and power of the Seal Master. [[spoiler: But even Jiraiya was shocked that Naruto decided to use it to create zombie animals as weapons]].
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* MagnumOpus: [[spoiler: Sasori's plan for Naruto as of chapter 14]].
* MarionetteMaster: ...guess.
** [[spoiler: His apprentice is proficient in Scorpion's Masterpiece.]]
* MarionetteMaster: ...guess.
** [[spoiler: His apprentice is proficient in Scorpion's Masterpiece.]]
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* MagnumOpus: [[invoked]] [[spoiler: Sasori's plan for Naruto as of chapter 14]].
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* MagnumOpus: [[invoked]] [[spoiler: Sasori's plan for Naruto as of chapter 14]].
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An epic AU story by Nobody102, [[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5166693/1/Scorpions_Disciple Scorpion Disciple]] tells the story of Sasori after Orochimaru's defection from Akatsuki. Only here it was much more spectacular than in canon, with Sasori barely surviving and losing his entire puppet collection with the exception of the Sandaime Kazekage. It was only thanks to his secret (being a living puppet) that Sasori managed to escape from the onslaught. Fearing the ire of Pain after such a colossal failure he faked his death, went underground, started to rebuild his forces, and prepares to hunt Orochimaru's to the end of the world, if needed.
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An epic AU story by Nobody102, [[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5166693/1/Scorpions_Disciple Scorpion Scorpion's Disciple]] tells the story of Sasori after Orochimaru's defection from Akatsuki. Only here it was much more spectacular than in canon, with Sasori barely surviving and losing his entire puppet collection with the exception of the Sandaime Kazekage. It was only thanks to his secret (being a living puppet) that Sasori managed to escape from the onslaught. Fearing the ire of Pain after such a colossal failure he faked his death, went underground, started to rebuild his forces, and prepares to hunt Orochimaru's Orochimaru to the end of the world, if needed.
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* BerserkButton: Never use in vain the label of "Art" in front of Sasori. Kakashi against those who betray truce pacts, no matter how "unofficial" they might be [[spoiler: As Zabuza learned the hard way]].
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* BerserkButton: BerserkButton:
** Never use in vain the label of "Art" in front of Sasori. And never suggest that puppets are toys.
** Kakashi against those who betray truce pacts, no matter how "unofficial" they might be [[spoiler: As Zabuza learned the hard way]].
** Never use in vain the label of "Art" in front of Sasori. And never suggest that puppets are toys.
** Kakashi against those who betray truce pacts, no matter how "unofficial" they might be [[spoiler: As Zabuza learned the hard way]].
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* BrutalHonesty: Sasori with Naruto. He never, ever lies about anything no matter how harsh or brutal it might be and he didn't even bother to hide his real intentions. Naruto both loves him for it and wants to punch him real hard in the face.
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* BrutalHonesty: Sasori with Naruto. He never, ever lies about anything no matter how harsh or brutal it might be (though he does sometimes conceal information) and he didn't even bother to hide his real intentions. Naruto both loves him for it and wants to punch him real hard in the face.
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* ChasteHero: Thanks to Sasori's seal on Naruto, he has zero sexual drive. While this helped him to concentrate in his studies it [[spoiler: ended very bad for Hinata and this still haunts Naruto]].
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* ChasteHero: Thanks to Sasori's seal on Naruto, he has zero sexual drive. While this helped him to concentrate in his studies studies, it [[spoiler: ended very bad for Hinata and this still haunts Naruto]].
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* CripplingOverspecialization: Sasori and poison. It came to bite him very hard in his wooden ass after Orochimaru proved to be immune. Since then he decided to... expand [[HavingABlast his repertoire]].
** Sasuke with his desire to meet his enemies head one. In later chapters he tries to outgrow it.
** Sasuke with his desire to meet his enemies head one. In later chapters he tries to outgrow it.
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* CripplingOverspecialization: CripplingOverspecialization:
** Sasori and poison. It came to bite him very hard in his wooden ass after Orochimaru proved to be immune. Since then he decided to... expand [[HavingABlast hisrepertoire]].
repertoire]].
---> In fact, from a certain viewpoint, an explosion could be thought of as a precision weapon –- it was amazing how many problems could be solved with a well-placed explosion, as his lessons with Naruto had shown him.
** Sasuke with his desire to meet his enemies headone.on. In later chapters he tries to outgrow it.
** Sasori and poison. It came to bite him very hard in his wooden ass after Orochimaru proved to be immune. Since then he decided to... expand [[HavingABlast his
---> In fact, from a certain viewpoint, an explosion could be thought of as a precision weapon –- it was amazing how many problems could be solved with a well-placed explosion, as his lessons with Naruto had shown him.
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-->''"What does she see in Sasuke?"'' Naruto asked.
-->Sasori continued scribbling on the pieces of paper scattered on the table. ''"He is rich, handsome, extraordinarily gifted, comes from a prestigious family, and has a tragic past that strikes a chord in people's hearts."''
-->''"He's a cold-hearted bastard."''
-->''"Or alternatively, he has a wounded heart just waiting for that special girl whose love can heal it. A lot of people are suckers for broken birds."''
-->''"Girls are stupid, then."''
-->''"Congratulations, Naruto – you just made a sentence that is both hypocritical and sexist with only 4 words."''
* DifficultButAwesome: Sealing and puppetry. It took Naruto years of intense study, helped by a "Seal of concentration" and... [[AndSomeOtherStuff stuff]] to become marginally proficient, but this had left him as a powerhouse and one of the most dangerous Genin in Konoha.
* DishingOutDirt: Jiraiya's "Roses of Earth", which can kill a dozen of ''Jounin'' in a second. The Kicker: it's not even a combat technique but an assassination one. A low level one at that.
-->Sasori continued scribbling on the pieces of paper scattered on the table. ''"He is rich, handsome, extraordinarily gifted, comes from a prestigious family, and has a tragic past that strikes a chord in people's hearts."''
-->''"He's a cold-hearted bastard."''
-->''"Or alternatively, he has a wounded heart just waiting for that special girl whose love can heal it. A lot of people are suckers for broken birds."''
-->''"Girls are stupid, then."''
-->''"Congratulations, Naruto – you just made a sentence that is both hypocritical and sexist with only 4 words."''
* DifficultButAwesome: Sealing and puppetry. It took Naruto years of intense study, helped by a "Seal of concentration" and... [[AndSomeOtherStuff stuff]] to become marginally proficient, but this had left him as a powerhouse and one of the most dangerous Genin in Konoha.
* DishingOutDirt: Jiraiya's "Roses of Earth", which can kill a dozen of ''Jounin'' in a second. The Kicker: it's not even a combat technique but an assassination one. A low level one at that.
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-->Sasori continued scribbling on the pieces of paper scattered on the table. ''"He
'''Sasori''': He is rich, handsome, extraordinarily gifted, comes from a prestigious family, and has a tragic past that strikes a chord in people's hearts.
-->''"He's
'''Naruto''': He's a cold-hearted bastard.
-->''"Or
'''Sasori''': Or alternatively, he has a wounded heart just waiting for that special girl whose love can heal it. A lot of people are suckers for broken birds.
-->''"Girls
'''Naruto''': Girls are stupid, then.
-->''"Congratulations,
'''Sasori''': Congratulations, Naruto
* DifficultButAwesome: Sealing and puppetry. It took Naruto years of intense study, helped by a "Seal of concentration" and... [[AndSomeOtherStuff stuff]] to become marginally proficient, but this
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* GoneHorriblyWrong: Hinata was deliberately set against Neji in the prelims so he could work out his frustration on the main house and Hinata'd realize she needed to shape up. Unfortunately, [[spoiler:Hinata was far more skilled than anyone realized and Neji was far more hateful. When he realized Hinata might win, Neji killed her.]]
* GrayAndGrayMorality: No faction ([[MyFriendsAndZoidberg except Orochimaru]]) is truly evil or truly good, each one working for their goals in a ruthless war for survival against the other blocs in the Secret World.
* GreenLanternRing: Seals. While they are very well explained, their very Nature means that they can be tweaked to do a near infinite number of things, all depending on the wit and power of the Seal Master. [[spoiler: but even Jiraiya was shocked that Naruto decided to use it to create zombie animals as weapons]].
* GrayAndGrayMorality: No faction ([[MyFriendsAndZoidberg except Orochimaru]]) is truly evil or truly good, each one working for their goals in a ruthless war for survival against the other blocs in the Secret World.
* GreenLanternRing: Seals. While they are very well explained, their very Nature means that they can be tweaked to do a near infinite number of things, all depending on the wit and power of the Seal Master. [[spoiler: but even Jiraiya was shocked that Naruto decided to use it to create zombie animals as weapons]].
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* GoneHorriblyWrong: Hinata was deliberately set against Neji in the prelims so he could work out his frustration on the main house and Hinata'd Hinata would realize she needed to shape up. Unfortunately, [[spoiler:Hinata was far more skilled than anyone realized and Neji was far more hateful. When he realized Hinata might win, Neji killed her.]]
her]].
* GrayAndGrayMorality: No faction ([[MyFriendsAndZoidberg except Orochimaru]]) is truly evil or truly good, each one working for their goals in a ruthless war for survival against the other blocs in the SecretWorld.
World.
* GreenLanternRing: Seals. While they are very well explained, their veryNature nature means that they can be tweaked to do a near infinite number of things, all depending on the wit and power of the Seal Master. [[spoiler: but But even Jiraiya was shocked that Naruto decided to use it to create zombie animals as weapons]]. weapons]].
* GrayAndGrayMorality: No faction ([[MyFriendsAndZoidberg except Orochimaru]]) is truly evil or truly good, each one working for their goals in a ruthless war for survival against the other blocs in the Secret
* GreenLanternRing: Seals. While they are very well explained, their very
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--> '''Naruto''': ''"Yeah, I think I'm attracted to abusive women,"'' he said with a cheeky smile.
* ManipulativeBastard: Sasori and he didn't even bother to deny it to Naruto. In fact, he ''has'' trained Naruto to be one or at least had the patience to endure it.
* ManipulativeBastard: Sasori and he didn't even bother to deny it to Naruto. In fact, he ''has'' trained Naruto to be one or at least had the patience to endure it.
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--> '''Naruto''': ''"Yeah, Yeah, I think I'm attracted to abusive women,"'' he said with a cheeky smile.
women.
* ManipulativeBastard:Sasori Sasori, and he didn't doesn't even bother to deny it to Naruto. In fact, he ''has'' trained Naruto to be one or at least had the patience to endure it.
* ManipulativeBastard:
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* TheMedic: Naruto's role in Team 7, Sasuke being the Tank and [[MyFriendsAndZoidberg Sakura]] TheChick
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* TheMedic: Naruto's role in Team 7, Sasuke being the Tank and [[MyFriendsAndZoidberg Sakura]] TheChick TheChick.
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* MyGreatestFailure: Sasori's defeat at the hands of Orochimaru [[spoiler: also his "eternal body", since he found too late that it was imperfect and for that, worthless to become his masterpiece. He is grooming Naruto for this spot as of chapter 14]].
** [[spoiler: And he was successful]]
** [[spoiler: And he was successful]]
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* MyGreatestFailure: Sasori's defeat at the hands of Orochimaru Orochimaru. [[spoiler: also Also his "eternal body", since he found too late that it was imperfect and for that, worthless to become his masterpiece. He is grooming Naruto for this spot as of chapter 14]].
**14]]. [[spoiler: And he was successful]]successful.]]
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--> ''"Yes,"'' [[spoiler: Naruto]] nodded. ''"They are my eyes. They're not really alive, not after I'm done with them. They are more of an extension of me, allowing me to see far and wide. I like dragonflies because they fast and enduring fliers and just the right size – small and common enough to remain inconspicuous yet fairly large for an insect, allowing me to pack [[spoiler: a lot of seals]] into them."''
** [[spoiler: Naruto has freed Orochimaru for the sole purpose of learning Impure World Resurrection...and then sealed him inside his mindscape]]
** [[spoiler: Naruto has freed Orochimaru for the sole purpose of learning Impure World Resurrection...and then sealed him inside his mindscape]]
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--> ''"Yes,"'' [[spoiler: Naruto]] nodded. ''"They are my eyes. They're not really alive, not after I'm done with them. They are more of an extension of me, allowing me to see far and wide. I like dragonflies because they fast and enduring fliers and just the right size – -– small and common enough to remain inconspicuous yet fairly large for an insect, allowing me to pack [[spoiler: a lot of seals]] into them."''
** [[spoiler: Naruto has freed Orochimaru for the sole purpose of learning Impure World Resurrection...and then sealed him inside hismindscape]]mindscape.]]
** [[spoiler: Naruto has freed Orochimaru for the sole purpose of learning Impure World Resurrection...and then sealed him inside his
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* OldSoldier: Jiraya. It took him a second to slaughter over a dozen ''Jounins'' with a single technique and is, quite simply, one of the deadliest Ninja alive.
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* OldSoldier: Jiraya. It took him a second to slaughter over a dozen ''Jounins'' with a single technique and he is, quite simply, one of the deadliest Ninja alive.
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* [[TheReasonYouSuckSpeech The Reason Your Plan Sucks]]: Done softly by Garaa in chapter 13 after [[CasualDangerDialogue Naruto]] [[MexicanStandoff explained]] his plan to become the Hokage:
-->''"I asked is it worth it?"'' Gaara said louder. ''"Do you really want to sink your life into this... endeavor. To toil away for years, maybe decades, suffering indignity after indignity, just for a chance of a few empty words of praise from your tormentors? Your situation doesn't seem to be quite as hopeless as mine is – you could make a life for yourself elsewhere. Somewhere where no one knows what you are… where the deck hasn't been stacked against you from the very beginning."''
-->''"I asked is it worth it?"'' Gaara said louder. ''"Do you really want to sink your life into this... endeavor. To toil away for years, maybe decades, suffering indignity after indignity, just for a chance of a few empty words of praise from your tormentors? Your situation doesn't seem to be quite as hopeless as mine is – you could make a life for yourself elsewhere. Somewhere where no one knows what you are… where the deck hasn't been stacked against you from the very beginning."''
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* [[TheReasonYouSuckSpeech The Reason Your Plan Sucks]]: Done softly by Garaa Gaara in chapter 13 after [[CasualDangerDialogue Naruto]] [[MexicanStandoff explained]] his plan to become the Hokage:
-->''"I asked is it worth it?"'' Gaara said louder. ''"Do you really want to sink your life into this... endeavor. To toil away for years, maybe decades, suffering indignity after indignity, just for a chance of a few empty words of praise from your tormentors? Your situation doesn't seem to be quite as hopeless as mine is– -– you could make a life for yourself elsewhere. Somewhere where no one knows what you are… where the deck hasn't been stacked against you from the very beginning."''
-->''"I asked is it worth it?"'' Gaara said louder. ''"Do you really want to sink your life into this... endeavor. To toil away for years, maybe decades, suffering indignity after indignity, just for a chance of a few empty words of praise from your tormentors? Your situation doesn't seem to be quite as hopeless as mine is
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* [[SpoiledBrat Petulant Brat]]: A difference from the rest of "Naruto grow strong" fics, here Naruto is not treated like a poor woobie messiah waiting to happen, but explores the kind of personality a loud, confrontational brat who decided to ''attack'' his teammates in their first encounter should have and how to grow out of it.
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* [[SpoiledBrat Petulant Brat]]: A difference from the rest of the "Naruto grow grows strong" fics, fics; here Naruto is not treated like a poor woobie messiah waiting to happen, but explores the kind of personality a loud, confrontational brat who decided to ''attack'' his teammates in their first encounter should would have and how to grow out of it.
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* GeometricMagic: Sealing. The fic explains very [[InfoDump deeply why]] [[TropesAreNotBad this is so]].
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* GeometricMagic: Sealing. The fic explains very [[InfoDump deeply why]] [[TropesAreNotBad [[Administrivia/TropesAreTools this is so]].
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-->''Sasori'' '''would''' ''have his revenge, even if it was the last thing he ever did ''
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-->''[[ArcWords You are such a petulant child]]''
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* TheMole: [[CaptainObvious Kabuto]]. Naruto in a very indirect way, since he doesn't know that Sasori is not ''really'' loyal to Konoha [[spoiler: but after the screw in the Chunin Exam, his loyalties are shifting]].
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* TheMole: [[CaptainObvious Kabuto]].Kabuto. Naruto in a very indirect way, since he doesn't know that Sasori is not ''really'' loyal to Konoha [[spoiler: but after the screw in the Chunin Exam, his loyalties are shifting]].
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* BecauseYouWereNiceToMe: While this was the goal of Sasori with Naruto since the beginning, he barely had to put effort into it[[SelfFulfillingProphecy thanks to Konoha idiocy]]. Naruto is aware of this but after [[spoiler: Hinata's death]], realized that Sasori is really the ''only one'' who he can count through and through. It depressed him a little.
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* BecauseYouWereNiceToMe: While this was the goal of Sasori with Naruto since the beginning, he barely had to put effort into it[[SelfFulfillingProphecy it [[SelfFulfillingProphecy thanks to Konoha idiocy]]. Naruto is aware of this but after [[spoiler: Hinata's death]], realized that Sasori is really the ''only one'' who he can count through and through. It depressed him a little.
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* CynicalMentor: Sasori is so cynical that it managed to (almost) drown Naruto's optimism.
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* CynicalMentor: Sasori is so cynical that it managed to (almost) drown Naruto's optimism. He even states that people form relationships based on a cost-benefit analysis of whether there was any point to spending time with someone.
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* MagnumOpus: [[Invoked]] [[spoiler: Sasori's plan for Naruto as of chapter 14]].
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* MagnumOpus: [[Invoked]] [[invoked]] [[spoiler: Sasori's plan for Naruto as of chapter 14]].
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* MagnumOpus: [[InUniverse]] [[spoiler: Sasori's plan for Naruto as of chapter 14]].
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* MagnumOpus: [[InUniverse]] [[Invoked]] [[spoiler: Sasori's plan for Naruto as of chapter 14]].
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In this story Sasori wants to make Naruto into his Magnum Opus. So it falls under the in universe clause.
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* MagnumOpus: [[InUniverse]] [[spoiler: Sasori's plan for Naruto as of chapter 14]].
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* MagnumOpus: [[spoiler: Sasori's plan for Naruto as of chapter 14]].
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* GoneHorriblyWrong: Hinata was deliberately set against Neji in the prelims so he could work out his frustration on the main house and Hinata'd realize she needed to shape up. Unfortunately, [[spoiler:Hinata was far more skilled than anyone realized and Neji was far more hateful. When he realized Hinata might win, Neji killed her.]]
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* DifficultButAwesome: Sealing and puppetry. It took Naruto years of intense study, helped by a "Seal of concentration" and... [[AndSomeOtherStuff stuff]] to become marginally proficient, but this had left him as a powerhouse and one of the most dangerous Genin in Konoha.
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* DishingOutDirt: Jiraiya's "Roses of Earth", which can kill a dozen of ''Jounins'' in a second. The Kicker: its not even a combat technique but an assassination one. A low level one at that.
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* DifficultButAwesome: Sealing and puppetry. It took Naruto years of intense study, helped by a "Seal of concentration" and... [[AndSomeOtherStuff stuff]] to become marginally proficient, but this had left him as a powerhouse and one of the most dangerous Genin in Konoha.
* DishingOutDirt: Jiraiya's "Roses of Earth", which can kill a dozen of''Jounins'' ''Jounin'' in a second. The Kicker: its it's not even a combat technique but an assassination one. A low level one at that.
* DoesThisRemindYouOfAnything: Naruto deliberately invokes this when he paints the Hokage Tower pink to tell Sarutobi "he's a giant dick".
* DishingOutDirt: Jiraiya's "Roses of Earth", which can kill a dozen of
* DoesThisRemindYouOfAnything: Naruto deliberately invokes this when he paints the Hokage Tower pink to tell Sarutobi "he's a giant dick".
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* TakeOurWordForIt: Naruto's 800 pages legendary report is so mind blowing boring and detailed that nobody in Interrogation and Torture department had managed to pass half of it.
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* TakeOurWordForIt: Naruto's 800 83 pages legendary report is so mind blowing mind-blowingly boring and detailed that nobody in Interrogation and Torture department had managed to pass half of it.
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It Got Worse cleanup/rename to From Bad To Worse as per this thread. Zero Context Examples, misuse and sinkholes willl be exterminated.
* FromBadToWorse: Land of Waves [[spoiler: With the introduction of Hidan and Kakuzu and subsequently Pain's "visit"]] but it found its summit in the Chunin Exam after [[spoiler: Hinata's death at the hand of Neji and Orochimaru deciding to kill Naruto with his own hands... moments before Itachi, Kisame, Deidara and Jugo came for Garaa and Naruto]].
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* ItGotWorse: Land of Waves [[spoiler: With the introduction of Hidan and Kakuzu and subsequently Pain's "visit"]] but it found its summit in the Chunin Exam after [[spoiler: Hinata's death at the hand of Neji and Orochimaru deciding to kill Naruto with his own hands... moments before Itachi, Kisame, Deidara and Jugo came for Garaa and Naruto]].
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* WhatDoYouMeanItsNotAwesome: Kunais, according to Anko.
* WeakButSkilled: Naruto. A difference from Canon, Naruto is rubbish in a hand to hand combat and a complete incompetent with weapons (outside Kunais) and never learned Kage Bunshin. Instead he has become a master of indirect fighting, sealing, and puppetry, making a war of attrition against his opponents. [[spoiler: At least until chapter 14 when the Kyubi decided to give him a "hand", making him, as pointed by Jiraiya, ''the second coming of Tsunade'']].
* WeakButSkilled: Naruto. A difference from Canon, Naruto is rubbish in a hand to hand combat and a complete incompetent with weapons (outside Kunais) and never learned Kage Bunshin. Instead he has become a master of indirect fighting, sealing, and puppetry, making a war of attrition against his opponents. [[spoiler: At least until chapter 14 when the Kyubi decided to give him a "hand", making him, as pointed by Jiraiya, ''the second coming of Tsunade'']].
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* WhatDoYouMeanItsNotAwesome: Kunais, according to Anko.
* WeakButSkilled:WeakButSkilled:
** Naruto. A difference from Canon, Naruto is rubbish in a hand to hand combat and a complete incompetent with weapons (outside Kunais) and never learned Kage Bunshin. Instead he has become a master of indirect fighting, sealing, and puppetry, making a war of attrition against his opponents. [[spoiler: At least until chapter 14 when the Kyubi decided to give him a "hand", making him, as pointed by Jiraiya, ''the second coming of Tsunade'']].
* WeakButSkilled:
** Naruto. A difference from Canon, Naruto is rubbish in a hand to hand combat and a complete incompetent with weapons (outside Kunais) and never learned Kage Bunshin. Instead he has become a master of indirect fighting, sealing, and puppetry, making a war of attrition against his opponents. [[spoiler: At least until chapter 14 when the Kyubi decided to give him a "hand", making him, as pointed by Jiraiya, ''the second coming of Tsunade'']].
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An epic AU story by Nobody102, [[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5166693/1/Scorpions_Disciple Scorpion Disciple]] tells the story of Sasori after Orochimaru's defection from Akatsuki. Only here it was much more spectacular than in canon, with Sasori barely surviving and losing his entire puppet collection with the exception of the Sandaime Kazekage. It was only thanks to his secret (being a living puppet) that Sasori managed to escape from the onslaught. Fearing the ire of Pain after such a colossal failure he faked his death, went underground, started to rebuilt his forces, and prepares to hunt Orochimaru's to the end of the world, if needed.
By chance he choose Konoha (mainly because of Kabuto) and all was going according to plan until one day he bumped into an hyperactive orange menace in the street and after a misunderstanding and a botched prank, he started to get curious about this young idiot who seemed at the same time incredible incompetent and efficient and why he was hated so much by the population at large. What he found piqued his interest to such extent that he decided to add Naruto to his collection.
By chance he choose Konoha (mainly because of Kabuto) and all was going according to plan until one day he bumped into an hyperactive orange menace in the street and after a misunderstanding and a botched prank, he started to get curious about this young idiot who seemed at the same time incredible incompetent and efficient and why he was hated so much by the population at large. What he found piqued his interest to such extent that he decided to add Naruto to his collection.
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An epic AU story by Nobody102, [[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5166693/1/Scorpions_Disciple Scorpion Disciple]] tells the story of Sasori after Orochimaru's defection from Akatsuki. Only here it was much more spectacular than in canon, with Sasori barely surviving and losing his entire puppet collection with the exception of the Sandaime Kazekage. It was only thanks to his secret (being a living puppet) that Sasori managed to escape from the onslaught. Fearing the ire of Pain after such a colossal failure he faked his death, went underground, started to rebuilt rebuild his forces, and prepares to hunt Orochimaru's to the end of the world, if needed.
By chance hechoose chose Konoha (mainly because of Kabuto) and all was going according to plan until one day he bumped into an a hyperactive orange menace in the street and after a misunderstanding and a botched prank, he started to get become curious about this young idiot who seemed at the same time incredible incredibly incompetent and efficient and why he was hated so much by the population at large. What he found piqued his interest to such an extent that he decided to add Naruto to his collection.
By chance he
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* AMillionIsAStatistic: Averted. The destruction of the [[spoiler: Land of Waves came as a terrible shock to Konoha with its repercussion still resounding strong in the fic]]. Played straight with Pain hunt of Orochimaru, destroying 90% of his labs and soldiers so far.
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* AMillionIsAStatistic: Averted. The destruction of the [[spoiler: Land of Waves came as a terrible shock to Konoha with its repercussion still resounding strong in the fic]]. Played straight with Pain Pain's hunt of Orochimaru, destroying 90% of his labs and soldiers so far.
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* AxCrazy: The {{Fanon}} flavor of Anko. In her first appearance, she decided (by mistake) to throw a Kunai at the back of Naruto head after a botched prank. She was pleasantly surprised (later) after he evaded, since it would have been a bother if he died. It never occurred to her that the Sandaime had ''slaughtered'' people for less against Naruto and it was only luck (and Naruto not talking) that saved her from... giving a [[TroubleEntendre visit]] to Ibiki.
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* AxCrazy: The {{Fanon}} flavor of Anko. In her first appearance, she decided (by mistake) to throw a Kunai at the back of Naruto Naruto's head after a botched prank. She was pleasantly surprised (later) after he evaded, since it would have been a bother if he died. It never occurred to her that the Sandaime had ''slaughtered'' people for less against Naruto and it was only luck (and Naruto not talking) that saved her from... giving a [[TroubleEntendre visit]] to Ibiki.
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* BecauseYouWereNiceToMe: While this was the goal of Sasori with Naruto since the beggining, he barely had to put effort [[SelfFulfillingProphecy thanks to Konoha idiocy]]. Naruto is aware of this but after [[spoiler: Hinata's death]], realized that Sasori is really the ''only one'' who he can count through and through. It depressed him a little.
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* BecauseYouWereNiceToMe: While this was the goal of Sasori with Naruto since the beggining, beginning, he barely had to put effort [[SelfFulfillingProphecy into it[[SelfFulfillingProphecy thanks to Konoha idiocy]]. Naruto is aware of this but after [[spoiler: Hinata's death]], realized that Sasori is really the ''only one'' who he can count through and through. It depressed him a little.
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* DishingOutDirt: Jiraiya "Roses of Earth", which can kill a dozen of ''Jounins'' in a second. The Kicker: its not even a combat technique but an assassination one. A low level one at that.
* FriendshipMoment: Shino defense of Naruto from Shikamaru's accusations and Team 8's visit after the Genin exam, just to mention a few.
* FriendshipMoment: Shino defense of Naruto from Shikamaru's accusations and Team 8's visit after the Genin exam, just to mention a few.
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* DishingOutDirt: Jiraiya Jiraiya's "Roses of Earth", which can kill a dozen of ''Jounins'' in a second. The Kicker: its not even a combat technique but an assassination one. A low level one at that.
* FriendshipMoment:Shino Shino's defense of Naruto from Shikamaru's accusations and Team 8's visit after the Genin exam, just to mention a few.
* FriendshipMoment:
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* GrayAndGrayMorality: No faction ([[MyFriendsAndZoidberg except Orochimaru]]) is truly evil or truly good, each one working for their goals in a ruthless war for survival against the other bloques in the Secret World.
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* GrayAndGrayMorality: No faction ([[MyFriendsAndZoidberg except Orochimaru]]) is truly evil or truly good, each one working for their goals in a ruthless war for survival against the other bloques blocs in the Secret World.
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* TheLittleDetecto: After the land of waves, Naruto become quite paranoiac, so he decided to create a seal in his headband to warn him against assassination attempts. [[GoneHorriblyRight It nearly ended frying his brain and knocked him out for hours]]. A more weaker one made him a Chakra sensor that would put Karin to shame.
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* TheLittleDetecto: After the land of waves, Naruto become quite paranoiac, so he decided to create a seal in his headband to warn him against assassination attempts. [[GoneHorriblyRight It nearly ended frying his brain and knocked him out for hours]]. A more weaker one made him a Chakra sensor that would put Karin to shame.
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* OldSoldier: Jiraya. It took him a second to slaughter over a dozen of ''Jounins'' with a single technique and is, quite simply, one of the deadliest Ninja alive.
--> He absent-mindedly outstretched his hand, forming a giant rasengan in front of him, and the puppet promptly turned to sawdust. The two sword-wielders didn't even have time to react when Jiraya buried his hands into their chests, breaking ribs like they were twigs.
--> He absent-mindedly outstretched his hand, forming a giant rasengan in front of him, and the puppet promptly turned to sawdust. The two sword-wielders didn't even have time to react when Jiraya buried his hands into their chests, breaking ribs like they were twigs.
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* OldSoldier: Jiraya. It took him a second to slaughter over a dozen of ''Jounins'' with a single technique and is, quite simply, one of the deadliest Ninja alive.
--> Heabsent-mindedly absentmindedly outstretched his hand, forming a giant rasengan in front of him, and the puppet promptly turned to sawdust. The two sword-wielders didn't even have time to react when Jiraya buried his hands into their chests, breaking ribs like they were twigs.
--> He
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* [[TheReasonYouSuckSpeech The Reason You Plan Suck]]: Done softly by Garaa in chapter 13 after [[CasualDangerDialogue Naruto]] [[MexicanStandoff explained]] his plan to become the Hokage:
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* [[TheReasonYouSuckSpeech The Reason You Your Plan Suck]]: Sucks]]: Done softly by Garaa in chapter 13 after [[CasualDangerDialogue Naruto]] [[MexicanStandoff explained]] his plan to become the Hokage:
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Piqued. Not picked. Piqued his interest. /Grammar Nazi
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By chance he choose Konoha (mainly because of Kabuto) and all was going according to plan until one day he bumped into an hyperactive orange menace in the street and after a misunderstanding and a botched prank, he started to get curious about this young idiot who seemed at the same time incredible incompetent and efficient and why he was hated so much by the population at large. What he found picked his interest to such extent that he decided to add Naruto to his collection.
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By chance he choose Konoha (mainly because of Kabuto) and all was going according to plan until one day he bumped into an hyperactive orange menace in the street and after a misunderstanding and a botched prank, he started to get curious about this young idiot who seemed at the same time incredible incompetent and efficient and why he was hated so much by the population at large. What he found picked piqued his interest to such extent that he decided to add Naruto to his collection.
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misuse as emphasis
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* TheSpymaster: Sasori's role in Akatsuki. He managed to create an International net equal to [[BeyondTheImpossible one of the Great secret Villages for a quarter of its cost]]. He was so good that even after several years, Pain had barely managed to return it at 1/4 of it's original size
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* TheSpymaster: Sasori's role in Akatsuki. He managed to create an International net equal to [[BeyondTheImpossible one of the Great secret Villages for a quarter of its cost]]. cost. He was so good that even after several years, Pain had barely managed to return it at 1/4 of it's original size
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** [[spoiler: Naruto has freed Orochimaru for the sole purpose of learning Impure World Resurrection.]]
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** [[spoiler: Naruto has freed Orochimaru for the sole purpose of learning Impure World Resurrection.]]Resurrection...and then sealed him inside his mindscape]]
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* AMillionIsAStatistic: Averted. The destruction of the [[spoiler: Land of Waves came as a terrible shock to Konoha with its repercussion still resounding strong in the fic]]. Played straight with Pain hunt of Orochimaru, destroying 90% of his labs and soldiers so far.
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* AMillionIsAStatistic: Averted. The destruction of the [[spoiler: Land of Waves came as a terrible shock to Konoha with its repercussion still resounding strong in the fic]]. Played straight with Pain hunt of Orochimaru, destroying 90% of his labs and soldiers so far. far.
* AndIMustScream: [[spoiler: Orochimaru's]] fate by [[spoiler: Naruto]] in Masterpiece.
* AndIMustScream: [[spoiler: Orochimaru's]] fate by [[spoiler: Naruto]] in Masterpiece.
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** [[spoiler: His apprentice is proficient in Scorpion's Masterpiece.]]
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** [[spoiler: And he was successful]]
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** [[spoiler: Naruto has freed Orochimaru for the sole purpose of learning Impure World Resurrection.]]
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-->-- '''Sasori's first lesson to Naruto'''.
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-->-- '''Sasori's first lesson to Naruto'''.
Naruto'''
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A sequel by [[http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1688557/Knightmare_Gundam_of_Ni Knightmare Gundam of Ni]], called [[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7725164/1/Scorpions_Masterpiece Scorpion's Masterpiece]], which has been sanctioned by Nobody102 has recently popped up. It begins after the timeskip after the events of Scorpion's Disciple (including those events that were summarized at the end of the fic by the author). Whether it reaches the same heights as the original remains to be seen.
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I just read the line, in the first chapter, and it said quarter.
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* TheSpymaster: Sasori's role in Akatsuki. He managed to create an International net equal to [[BeyondTheImpossible one of the Great secret Villages for a tenth of its cost]]. He was so good that even after several years, Pain had barely managed to return it at 1/4 of it's original size
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* TheSpymaster: Sasori's role in Akatsuki. He managed to create an International net equal to [[BeyondTheImpossible one of the Great secret Villages for a tenth quarter of its cost]]. He was so good that even after several years, Pain had barely managed to return it at 1/4 of it's original size
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Is now officially abandoned. A summary describing what was planned has been left by the author.
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[[DeadFic Is now officially abandoned. abandoned]]. [[WhatCouldHaveBeen A summary describing what was planned has been left by the author.
author]].
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* VisualPun: Naruto painted overnight the Hokage Tower bright Pink to tell the Hokage [[spoiler: He was a giant Dick]]. Even the Hokage was impressed.
* YourDaysAreNumbered: Naruto flat out tells the Sandaime that [[spoiler: Neji]] had only two months to live.
* YourDaysAreNumbered: Naruto flat out tells the Sandaime that [[spoiler: Neji]] had only two months to live.
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* VisualPun: Naruto painted overnight the Hokage Tower bright Pink to tell the Hokage [[spoiler: He [[spoiler:He was a giant Dick]]. Even the Hokage was impressed.
* YourDaysAreNumbered: Naruto flat out tells the Sandaime that[[spoiler: Neji]] [[spoiler:Neji]] had only two months to live.
* YourDaysAreNumbered: Naruto flat out tells the Sandaime that
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As of chapter 14 is in the Tsunade arc.
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