Reviews: Lavender And Orange

A fic that could have been great

This fic is... something that could have been truly amazing with just a little focus. As it is, it's too all over the place, the Po V shifts too much with little warning, there is hardly any build up to the climax and the epilogue does nothing but shows us the wedding scene between Hisana and Ichigo. It's always sad to see a fic that all it needs to shine is a bit of focus, a scene reduced, a scene added or lengthened and it would have been truly amazing.
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