Reviews: Chunin Exam Day

Decent Start, Awful Treatment

Most stories mimicking All You Need is Kill tend to be fun. That's what this is, a fun (Long) story with the general idea of endless repeats down... Well, the theory of it anyways.

If you want to see Naruto screw around, get frustrated, and then be a badass due to literally repeating the same time frame, then sure. Enjoy it. For a bit. (Nothing gets to react to his changes. It is all him, so fun but not challenging)

The beginning is good, promising. Sure, the characters are a little shallow but that's okay, it's the start and he will get better right?

Naruto commonly forces Temari to be his Girlfriend (Along with others) by being Gaara's new friend.

This is a common theme in PL's work, he tends to make the women in his stories to be nothing more than objects to trade or achieve.

Don't even get me started on how he treats the readers...

Excerpts from his A Ns Chapter 2: A hearty thanks to all of you who reviewed, I wish there were more but isn't that always the case? Chapter 14: Sheesh, if you can't figure out something so simple, I'd rather you don't read this. (14 Really shows off his hate. Read the AN)

Oh. This thing. Oh God Why.

To be clear, the concept itself is solid and original. The execution of it, in the first two or three chapters, is not bad. The majority of what follows could be considered some of the worst material ever spewed by PL. Saying that the man is sensitive is inaccurate.

Perfect Lionheart demonstrates steadfast intolerance to any criticism, positive or otherwise, and has been quoted as saying that "if [his] mistake(s) get pointed out, [he] will have to make more of them just to [be spiteful]." This is a man who deliberately damages his own story under the beliefs that doing so is punishment to his readers, further, that they deserve the punishment.

Ignoring who he has demonstrated himself to be as a person, his version of Naruto in this story is a complete sociopath. His characterization of women, when it isn't misogynistic, is downright horrifying and enough to render one physically ill.

Calling this fic 'good' or anything of the like is a tragic and disgusting misnomer. What this fic amounts to is a good concept turned terrible by an author who has demonstrated himself capable of writing well, but deliberately choosing to construct and focus upon disturbing, and increasingly twisted self-insert reinterpretations of various characters.

An entire thread on the Spacebattles Forum has been devoted specifically to examining every aspect of this fic that PL did incredibly, fantastically wrong.

Reader beware, this fanfic is shit.