iowaforever
Since: Feb, 2013
09/01/2014 18:00:50
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Fanfic Wonderful
Really, that's all that needs to be said. This is probably one of the greatest fanfics of all time. The plot is well thought out and Ursa's chemistry with Hakoda is amazing. The other characters and O Cs are a joy to read about (although the fic did become a bit cluttered towards the end) and I cared more for the Mauve shirts in this fic than most protagonists in other fics.
Really, if you haven't read this fic yet, correct that problem.
Fanfic Great concept let down by shaky writing
The concept is really interesting, but I can only describe the writing as bearable. It's not outright bad, and in some places it gets pretty good, but overall it doesn't do the story justice. When conveying emotion the writer likes to just state what the character is feeling, which doesn't really convey emotion well, ironically, and the bridge between dialogue scenes is usually just a few short paragraphs with something like "The next few weeks passed by... meanwhile in the canon plot..."