Great characterisation. Spot-on dialogue. A believable course of events. A handful of typos. This fic did well in illustrating the issues of an unequal relationship between damaged individuals. It is arguably a deconstruction of the 'sex-fixes-everything' lemon fic, though I'd like to stress the physical side of things is quite (thankfully? YMMV) underdone with the exception of the more positive, lemon alternate ending - which, though it may feel tacked-on, is IMO truer to the spirit of NGE as I see it; it is the human condition to be imperfect and alone, but it is in striving to overcome our flaws and make our relationships work that we become truly, but still merely, human.