When I say that the plot is wasted, I mean that even with bad writing and the just-as-bad case of Artistic Licence - Geography she has going on, the story might have been enjoyable if these three things were changed:
1. It was supposed to be a story about a man using BDSM as an excuse to/a cover for abusing women
2. Kate was more active in the story as the actual Intrepid Reporter she's supposed to be.
3. Stop calling Christian "(my) Fifty (Shades)" like it's his name
Kate was a wasted character. Had her Intrepid Reporter attitude actually been a consistent trait throughout the story, it would have improved the story. Kate is clearly interested in the fact that Christian has been a lifelong bachelor, but she doesn't take interest in the fact that Christian is very interested in her best friend and flatmate, Ana.
While you could argue this was because Ana is her friend, Kate is later concerned Christian is bad for Ana even though Ana denies it. She seems to think he's abusive to Ana, noting that Ana cries all the time since getting with him and refusing to let him see her (though he forces his way in). If Kate had followed this despite the fact that she doesn't feel comfortable invading Ana's life, and despite the fact that Christian is doing everything he can to stop her, while not letting Ana know (lest Kate rat him out), this might have been interesting and less horrifying. Keep the story from Ana's PoV, but have her aware that Kate is up to something and noting odd behaviour in Christian as well that ties in to Kate doing everything she can to get evidence against him. Have Ana come in to Escala and smell burning, which is Christian disposing of evidence Kate gathered against him, forcing Kate to start anew and have Christian threatening to kill Ana if Kate keeps trying to nose in after Ana finds out Kate thinks he's abusive (and has thus, put the idea in Ana's head).
It would be a very hard story to write, and I don't know how positive it would be (as Kate does much of the work to expose Christian to the public, not Ana, I suppose inadvertently sending a "someone will get you out, you don't have to work" message), but surely it would be better than not even acknowledging the abuse? Make it a story about not keeping quiet about abuse you witness.
Point 3 was just something that I found really annoying.
The plot is full of wasted potential
When I say that the plot is wasted, I mean that even with bad writing and the just-as-bad case of Artistic Licence - Geography she has going on, the story might have been enjoyable if these three things were changed:
1. It was supposed to be a story about a man using BDSM as an excuse to/a cover for abusing women
2. Kate was more active in the story as the actual Intrepid Reporter she's supposed to be.
3. Stop calling Christian "(my) Fifty (Shades)" like it's his name
Kate was a wasted character. Had her Intrepid Reporter attitude actually been a consistent trait throughout the story, it would have improved the story. Kate is clearly interested in the fact that Christian has been a lifelong bachelor, but she doesn't take interest in the fact that Christian is very interested in her best friend and flatmate, Ana.
While you could argue this was because Ana is her friend, Kate is later concerned Christian is bad for Ana even though Ana denies it. She seems to think he's abusive to Ana, noting that Ana cries all the time since getting with him and refusing to let him see her (though he forces his way in). If Kate had followed this despite the fact that she doesn't feel comfortable invading Ana's life, and despite the fact that Christian is doing everything he can to stop her, while not letting Ana know (lest Kate rat him out), this might have been interesting and less horrifying. Keep the story from Ana's PoV, but have her aware that Kate is up to something and noting odd behaviour in Christian as well that ties in to Kate doing everything she can to get evidence against him. Have Ana come in to Escala and smell burning, which is Christian disposing of evidence Kate gathered against him, forcing Kate to start anew and have Christian threatening to kill Ana if Kate keeps trying to nose in after Ana finds out Kate thinks he's abusive (and has thus, put the idea in Ana's head).
It would be a very hard story to write, and I don't know how positive it would be (as Kate does much of the work to expose Christian to the public, not Ana, I suppose inadvertently sending a "someone will get you out, you don't have to work" message), but surely it would be better than not even acknowledging the abuse? Make it a story about not keeping quiet about abuse you witness.
Point 3 was just something that I found really annoying.