Okay, first update. I think I need some aspirin...
Alright here we go.
The first sentence is a 50+ word sentence describing Ebony Darkíness Dementia Raven Way's hair. Why is there an apostrophe in her name? Don't look at me, I didn't write it (Thank God). A lot people tell he she looks like Amy Lee (I have no idea who that is, mind you. Also, there's an author's note saying "u donít know who she is get da hell out of here!" As if ANYONE should be reading this.)
She also isn't related to Gerard Way (Whom I assume is someone Tara likes, and therefore would be completely irrelevant in the Potterverse.), but she wishes she was, 'cause he's a major hottie. Outstanding. The rest of the paragraph goes on exactly like that further describing her appearance, establishing that she's a seventh year. Also, she buys all her clothes from Hot Topic. A magic student
shops at Hot Topic
. Also, she's wearing "a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. ...black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow." In Hogwarts
Anyway, someone calls her her name. I can't imagine who'd talk to someone wearing a corset
(OUTDOORS),but okay. The person is.... Draco Malfoy! That was actually there, btw. Ebony asks him what's up. He says nothing, which means this entire exchange was absolutely pointless. Also, he says it shyly
. When in the entire series has Draco ever been shy around a girl his own age? But now her friends call her, and she has to go away. Without saying a single thing, judging by the text.
Short update, but it was a short chapter.
edited 15th Oct '09 6:21:43 PM by Wicked223
You can't even write racist abuse in excrement on somebody's car without the politically correct brigade jumping down your throat!