Favorite lines from your own writing:

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1026 Demetrios28th Apr 2013 02:11:54 PM from Northbrook, Illinois
To be fair, it is the darkest and edgiest volume, so some corniness here and there can't hurt.

edited 28th Apr '13 2:14:51 PM by Demetrios

If you shoot for the stars and hit the Moon, do not be ashamed, for you have aspired to greatness. And the Moon had it coming.
1027 DhanaRagnarok29th Apr 2013 02:59:34 PM from France. COCO-FLIPPIN'-RICO. , Relationship Status: Having tea with Cthulhu
Disturbingly mad.
- You don't have unicorns in your world?

- Well, technically, yes we have. Except they're fat, bald, grey and we call them rhinos.

I don't even know why I like it, but it always amuses me. :p

edited 29th Apr '13 3:00:00 PM by DhanaRagnarok

Quod ego Solanum Tuberosum sum.
1028 Noaqiyeum29th Apr 2013 03:19:59 PM from Kcymaerxthaere , Relationship Status: Showing feelings of an almost human nature
The it-thingy
[lol]
Take everything with you you want to lose.
Freshly sponged spatial vectors enable propelling through sensory implosion default.
1029 TeraChimera29th Apr 2013 07:23:50 PM from somewhere out there
Cool Celtic Composition
[up][up] If you want, you could add something like, "Except when they swim. Then they're narwhals."

The hero criticizing the villain for not thinking his plans through: "What're you gonna do, take a crash course in arcane chemo-biological death plague production or something?"

edited 29th Apr '13 7:23:58 PM by TeraChimera

"The Uncertainty Principle isn't about uncertainty and it isn't a principle; other than that, it's perfectly named." — David Van Baak
1030 montmorencey29th Apr 2013 09:17:32 PM from the quaint town of Grimm, Bismarck and Gauss
So...yeah.
@ Dhana: That's hilarious. I love it [lol]

[up] That's also pretty funny, but the lengthiness stopped me in my tracks just the tiniest bit.
Complicated - because simple is simply too simple.
1031 Noaqiyeum30th Apr 2013 12:40:33 PM from Kcymaerxthaere , Relationship Status: Showing feelings of an almost human nature
The it-thingy
Try 'biochemical' instead of 'chemo-biological'. Ar-cane-bi-o-chem-ic-al-death-plague-pro-duc-tion.

edited 30th Apr '13 12:42:33 PM by Noaqiyeum

Take everything with you you want to lose.
Freshly sponged spatial vectors enable propelling through sensory implosion default.
1032 DhanaRagnarok30th Apr 2013 01:31:25 PM from France. COCO-FLIPPIN'-RICO. , Relationship Status: Having tea with Cthulhu
Disturbingly mad.
@Tera Chimera: Love the suggestion. That sounds glorious xD

-You don't have unicorns in your world? -Well, technically, yes we have. Except they're fat, bald, grey and we call them rhinos. Except when they swim. Then they're narwhals.

Also there's that piece of dialog...It's still in "theater format" as I call it, but I already love the thing :p

  • Lathspell: Let me try diplomacy!
  • Andrew: ...You? Diplomacy?
  • Lathspell: Yeah, nice and smooth. (Inhales deeply) Bring your moth-eaten ass down there, you oversize parasitic cockroach!
  • (Somewhere in the distance, a thunderous cry can be heard)
  • Lathspell: See? Smooth.
  • Andrew: You...Fuckin'...Fucked-up...Fucker! If I wasn't heterosexual, I would be kissing you so hard right now!
Quod ego Solanum Tuberosum sum.
1033 TeraChimera30th Apr 2013 02:55:02 PM from somewhere out there
Cool Celtic Composition
[up][up] Yeah, that's probably better. The protagonist is uneducated in this sort of thing and kind of just jamming words together, but he's not that uneducated.
"The Uncertainty Principle isn't about uncertainty and it isn't a principle; other than that, it's perfectly named." — David Van Baak
1034 m8e30th Apr 2013 03:04:15 PM from Sweden , Relationship Status: Wanna dance with somebody
Sano turns around, looks back at the other two and holds his left hand up high in front of Doc. A few drops of blood lands on Docs pale blue shirt but most of it gushes down Sanos arm. Doc thinks that Sano is holding up his hand to slow the bleeding and to show him it's time to do his job. But then Sano asks "Doc, How many fingers am I holding up?"

The answer is four halves and then it turns into an argument whether four halves equals two or four.evil grin
1035 DhanaRagnarok30th Apr 2013 03:19:10 PM from France. COCO-FLIPPIN'-RICO. , Relationship Status: Having tea with Cthulhu
Disturbingly mad.
[up]I didn't find that sentence all that funny...But the idea of the two discussing whether four halves = two or four is hilarious. xD
Quod ego Solanum Tuberosum sum.
1036 RedEyesNegroDragon3rd May 2013 05:27:23 AM from straight outta Compton
OG
A character who's an exceptionally Bad Liar tries to cover for his buddy's absence.

"We were told you worked with a partner. Why is he not here?"

"He, um...died...of a weed overdose."

And later on...

"It was a fucking slaughterhouse. We lost five guys just trying to get out of that shithole, but then Reza pops out with a .50 and-"

"Reza? I thought he OD'd on pot!"

edited 3rd May '13 7:41:15 AM by RedEyesNegroDragon

1037 Wheezy3rd May 2013 08:43:12 AM from Tampa, FL. Again.
(That Guy You Met Once)
@Dhana: Both of those lines were pretty brilliant.

edited 3rd May '13 8:43:41 AM by Wheezy

1038 DhanaRagnarok3rd May 2013 11:10:22 AM from France. COCO-FLIPPIN'-RICO. , Relationship Status: Having tea with Cthulhu
Disturbingly mad.
[up][up]Made me laugh [lol]

[up]Sankyuu~

-Every time women think about love, they assume that the woman loves and the man lusts. The truth is, only women think about love. Men just love, they don't think.

edited 3rd May '13 11:10:37 AM by DhanaRagnarok

Quod ego Solanum Tuberosum sum.
1039 BiggerBen3rd May 2013 11:36:29 AM from Arizona,USA
Razzin-Frazzin Robot
"Oh, I see it now. Just because Iím a known evil villain who drives a murder train that runs on blood, I must always be up to something.Ē
1040 JimmyTMalice3rd May 2013 01:11:29 PM from Ironforge , Relationship Status: THIS CONCEPT OF 'WUV' CONFUSES AND INFURIATES US!
From a short story I'm writing at the moment:

I drew upon my reserves of righteous indignation and prepared to give this unwanted and unwarranted caller a piece of my mind.
"Steel wins battles. Gold wins wars."
1041 NickTheSwing3rd May 2013 09:07:51 PM from Ya really wanna know? , Relationship Status: Dating Catwoman
Swing, not Slide
This just happened.

Matthew stared at his opponent's...certainly odd new form. He had bragged about how unstoppable his true form was, and how he was the most powerful of Ein Woe's "Knights". All he saw right now was a gigantic butterfly with googly eyes, a lot of human arms on its chest, and a gigantic 8 ball hovering over it.

"...Is this supposed to be the unstoppable true form?"

Kugalbane narrowed the googly eyes, making them look even more unfortunately hilarious, "How dare you insult my true form! I will have you know it has struck down more than one thousand foes!"

Matthew asked in complete deadpan, "How? By making them keel over laughing?"
1042 Wheezy5th May 2013 01:09:45 PM from Tampa, FL. Again.
(That Guy You Met Once)
[up] It could be reworded to make it a little less awkward, but overall, wow.

The protagonist's Inner Monologue, towards the end of the book, describing what several years of Break the Cutie have done to her.

You have no sense of identity. You donít believe in God, love, human goodness, a better future, yourself, or anything. Thereís nothing that makes you feel truly happy, nowhere you feel at home, and no one you really connect with.

You donít participate in your own life, you just watch it like a movie. Years of isolation starved your personality. Life stomped out your hopes. Your emotions are muted. Your disconnect is complete.

Youíre just not there anymore.

edited 5th May '13 2:18:30 PM by Wheezy

1043 DhanaRagnarok5th May 2013 01:32:20 PM from France. COCO-FLIPPIN'-RICO. , Relationship Status: Having tea with Cthulhu
Disturbingly mad.
[up][up][lol]

[up]Ouch. Just...Ouch. That's harsh, in a good way.

A Reality Warper discovers that his only friend has been targeted by a group who wants to destroy him (He's a demon, and they are exorcists, to put it simply.)

- "You see, F. is a great friend of mine. My only friend, to be exact. I'd like to tell you...It might surprise you, but I'm a demon of my word. The last demon there is, actually, which makes me the de facto most powerful being to roam this world. I am a Chaos God walking among mortals. And you know what? If you try to hurt her ever again, in any way..."

The demon gave a mirthless laugh, his appearance changing with each breath - bear, lion, giant, and a variety of monsters that no living man could ever claim to have seen. Until his raging face appeared mere inches from the man's own, who let out a startled cry.

- "Who knows?"
Quod ego Solanum Tuberosum sum.
1044 Wheezy6th May 2013 08:12:54 AM from Tampa, FL. Again.
(That Guy You Met Once)
If someone considers something I wrote a Tear Jerker, that means I can cross a small goal off my bucket list. Thank you.
1045 Noaqiyeum6th May 2013 09:59:35 AM from Kcymaerxthaere , Relationship Status: Showing feelings of an almost human nature
The it-thingy
"Do you want to live long enough for me to forgive you? Drop the knife."
Take everything with you you want to lose.
Freshly sponged spatial vectors enable propelling through sensory implosion default.
1046 DhanaRagnarok6th May 2013 11:19:52 AM from France. COCO-FLIPPIN'-RICO. , Relationship Status: Having tea with Cthulhu
Disturbingly mad.
[up]For some reason, I can't help but picture this sentence coming out of Jesus Christ's mouth. That's hilarious beyond belief. xD
Quod ego Solanum Tuberosum sum.
1047 Noaqiyeum6th May 2013 11:24:17 AM from Kcymaerxthaere , Relationship Status: Showing feelings of an almost human nature
The it-thingy
[up] Heh, not really. Is (a character inspired by) King Arthur an acceptable alternative?
Take everything with you you want to lose.
Freshly sponged spatial vectors enable propelling through sensory implosion default.
1048 DhanaRagnarok6th May 2013 11:57:56 AM from France. COCO-FLIPPIN'-RICO. , Relationship Status: Having tea with Cthulhu
Disturbingly mad.
[up]Yes. Yes it is. Especially if he's got a knife. Of a big kind. (Crocodile Dundee reference xD)
Quod ego Solanum Tuberosum sum.
1049 NickTheSwing6th May 2013 12:25:41 PM from Ya really wanna know? , Relationship Status: Dating Catwoman
Swing, not Slide
It'll be reworded to be a bit less awkward. I generally just love parodying classic RPG and JRPG tropes in New Dawn.

That enemy in particular had been troublesome, and everyone expected him to turn into something gruesome given his difficulty.

The ensuing boss fight lasts all of two paragraphs.

Then there's this. Matthew has previously been given a lot of trouble by Silmarill, a creation of one of the Dark Gods. His menace was killed here:

Matthew dismissed Balmung as he watched the once intimidating figure of Silmarill. All of their previous encounters played back through his mind as he saw this formidable creation of the Demon Lords limply resting on the ground, panting and beaten.

And then something struck him about Silmarill. Though dark, twisted and covered in spikes, bequeathed the look of a dark knight, there was no doubting what his lower body structure resembled.

"...He's a giant enemy crab. I guess I struck his weak point for massive damage."

Silmarill furiously shouted at his teenage archenemy, still evidently capable of overwrought proclamations of superiority, "Silence your arrogant assumptions, lowly human! You cannot comprehend the true fo-"

A lemon was thrown into the mouth area of the horrific abomination, making the giant enemy crab sputter and choke, coughing until it could get the lemon out.

Matthew juggled about six more lemons in his hands, fetched from a shopping cart nearby, "Shut up, Silmarill. Seriously, just shut up."
1050 Noaqiyeum6th May 2013 12:36:41 PM from Kcymaerxthaere , Relationship Status: Showing feelings of an almost human nature
The it-thingy
[up][up] Well, he doesn't have a knife yet. :P After his opponent loosens his grip, however...

("You call THAT a knife?")

edited 6th May '13 12:37:44 PM by Noaqiyeum

Take everything with you you want to lose.
Freshly sponged spatial vectors enable propelling through sensory implosion default.

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