Favorite lines from your own writing:

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951 LastHussar29th Jan 2013 05:58:26 PM from the place is here.
The time is now,
So now I was sat in the office of my agent, Nigel Levison, known across the trade as ‘Nearly Kosher Nigel’, due to his weakness for bacon sandwiches. I sniffed, and the heavy cloying smell of air freshener made me gag. “Expecting your Rabbi, Nige?”
Do the job in front of you.
952 JHM29th Jan 2013 10:04:05 PM from Neither Here Nor There , Relationship Status: I know
Thunder, Perfect Mind
[up] The first sentence feels like a run-on; the weird comma placement doesn't help things. That said, in concept, it's a good opener to a passage.

So, here's a recent passage of mine that I rather like. For context: It is a part of one character's memory of something that another character did, related in the second person.

With each word, he emptied. The familiar face, home to that smile of blood-smeared joys and those tilted broken-toy ears, became an alien landscape. You had wished to confer, maybe to confess, but all he could do was look at something that you could not see. For a second, you thought that there was fear there, a sort of fear that you had not seen in him in years and miles. A certain vision of Hell in another's eyes.

This was fleeting; the emptiness ate it.
I'd say I'm being refined

Into the web I descend

Killing those I've left behind

I have been Endarkened
954 Eagal1st Feb 2013 07:41:03 PM from This is a location. , Relationship Status: Waiting for Prince Charming
This is a title.
How's this tickle your fancy.

"Bellum cares only for glory in battle, and stories of great heroes where the only concession to death is the number of enemies that lie slain at their feet. I, for one, could not be less surprised that she should shun you, who represent the harsh realities of such things, and instead find her way to the bed of your brother, whom the bards credit as their own. It is, forgive me, 'a match made in Heaven'."

The madness is catching.
Responsible adult
[The setup: A prestigious school has just found itself knee-deep in snakes. In order to save the populace, our plucky Kid Heroes ally with spider-god Anansi, who has his children build a literal web of safety around the student populace. Not everyone is happy with this.

Annoyed Girl: "First snakes, now spiders. It's like some kinda messed up 'Bring Your Favorite Phobia'' school spirit day."
"Proto-Indo-European makes the damnedest words related. It's great. It's the Kevin Bacon of etymology." ~Madrugada
956 Matues26th Feb 2013 10:44:33 AM from eye on the horizon , Relationship Status: Having tea with Cthulhu
WARGLFLARG
[up]

Alright, that made me giggle.
957 LastHussar26th Feb 2013 10:53:38 AM from the place is here.
The time is now,
Gabe trying to apologise

“I’m thinking of contacting my publisher. I’ve got an idea for a new book: ‘How to screw up your life by being an ungrateful bastard.’ What do you think, will it sell well?” he said, addressing the remark to the fields.

“Needs the word ‘arrogant’ in there,” sniffed Lucy without looking up.

Do the job in front of you.
Cmdr. of His Supremacy's Armed Forces
"Can we just conclude that Los Angeles is fucked and get on with our lives?" Twilight asked, sincerely.

Twilight Sparkle talking about the battle being fought in LA between Bro Strider, the Metal Wolf, and Kefka Palazzo.

I love this hobby.

edited 26th Feb '13 9:44:21 PM by Steventheman

959 JHM26th Feb 2013 11:26:30 PM from Neither Here Nor There , Relationship Status: I know
Thunder, Perfect Mind
For a moment, I thought that "Kefka" was "Kafka" or "Kafuka," the latter of which in particular, when paired with the word/name Palazzo, brings up the most delightfully bizarre images.
960 MorwenEdhelwen26th Feb 2013 11:56:51 PM from Sydney, Australia
Aussie Tolkien freak
"The Runeband is the key." from Chapter 2 of Perilous Realms.
The road goes ever on. -Tolkien
For every libertarian, there are a dozen puritans and a dozen more communists.
I'd say I'm being refined

Into the web I descend

Killing those I've left behind

I have been Endarkened
962 Gaon4th Mar 2013 03:18:13 PM from Grim Up North , Relationship Status: Above such petty unnecessities
"Freedom has died, what right do I have not to die with it?" Best Famous Last Words I've ever written.

edited 4th Mar '13 3:18:24 PM by Gaon

963 MaxwellDaring4th Mar 2013 04:46:47 PM from Beyond the Event Horizon , Relationship Status: Singularity
Bring On The Singularity.
"When I tell you not to wear the goggles that gouge your eyeballs out and use them for ammunition, I really mean it."

A bit of a running gag in one of my stories.
964 LastHussar4th Mar 2013 05:18:29 PM from the place is here.
The time is now,
"Professionally, I’ve seen him be very rude to some very expensive barristers. He’s very entertaining when taking apart a defence lawyer.”

[down]Whoops! wink For those unaware of the UK legal system here's The Other Wiki. At least you didn't read Barista - that would have altered Gabriel's character entirely!

edited 5th Mar '13 1:18:25 AM by LastHussar

Do the job in front of you.
965 Noaqiyeum4th Mar 2013 06:41:44 PM from across the gulf of space , Relationship Status: Showing feelings of an almost human nature
Otherworldly Rainbows
[up] I read that as "expensive banisters"...
If you love somebody, set them on fire.
I was looking through some of my older writing and I found this little alternate universe snippet I did of one of my characters learning they're a wizard and going to attend Hogwarts. It's a completely useless piece of writing and I can't do anything with it, but man, did I like some of it.

Their mum chose to let one in, looked at its leg and the paper tied to it, and then left the room.

The owls seemed to be smart enough to realize that they should leave when she returned with a broom and a lighter.

Had Carl been aware of the concept, he would have realized that the conflict emotions he was currently experiencing was known as an identity crisis.

"I really don't think he's a squib."

What? Of course not. He was a human, not some ten legged fish. Dumb old lady.

edited 4th Mar '13 11:57:55 PM by Hermiethefrog

967 ohsointocats11th Mar 2013 03:56:09 PM from The Sand Wastes , Relationship Status: Showing feelings of an almost human nature
I am working on a short story.

"It's not exactly something I plan on losing sleep over. I kind of have bigger problems than the existential quandary of the morality of resurrecting my dead body and replacing the burned out consciousness with a copy that's none the wiser," said Sascha, "I mean. I managed to set oatmeal on fire this morning."

edited 11th Mar '13 3:56:34 PM by ohsointocats

968 Khantalas11th Mar 2013 04:03:00 PM from ((Not actually a creepy adorable little girl.))
Creepy adorable little girl
You look at her, and you see the scars, and you think she is made of glass. If you treat her as such, though, you will find out the truth. You will find out that she is made of fire and blades, and that she will burn you and bleed you, as she was burned and bled before.

- regarding Hisui Rainer.
"Be mine, dear big brother."
969 MatthiasPendragon11th Mar 2013 04:31:42 PM from A spinning orb in space
Honor For All...
"Ever read Dracula? You know, by Bram Stoker?" Cyrus asked.

"Sure," Darius answered, "I found it in the bookstore once."

"It was like the vampire ladies that attack Jonathan Harker," Cyrus explained. "It's scary, dangerous, but suductive. The first prick of the needle sends you into paradise, but once it's all over you just become a hollowed out shell of who you used to be."

- This is an excerpt of a yet to be written conversation between two brothers, discussing the others drug addiction.
Some people think I'm strange. I think it's sad that they can't see all the awesome stuff going on in my head right now.

Pronounced YAK-you-luss
[up]Seductive, not suductive.
What's precedent ever done for us?
Razzin-Frazzin Robot
"Now you don't want to be kicking that gong around. I tried it once, and the emperor got really pissed."

"He died doing what he loved. Living."

"See, this is just the reason kids shouldn't be allowed to build planes."

[up][up]I believe the word you're looking for is subductive. I always thought vampires were particularly tectonic.
973 Gaon23rd Mar 2013 11:51:02 AM from Grim Up North , Relationship Status: Above such petty unnecessities
"I, much like God, don't play dice with the universe. I play Chess."

Uttered by Leviathan, a demonic Big Bad from one of my stories.
974 JHM23rd Mar 2013 08:33:50 PM from Neither Here Nor There , Relationship Status: I know
Thunder, Perfect Mind
[up] It is a decent quip, but the word order lets you down. I think that this would serve you better: "Like God, I do not play dice with the universe. I play chess."
975 Masterofchaos23rd Mar 2013 08:48:09 PM , Relationship Status: In Lesbians with you
I AM AN ANIME
Ahhh, I'll give this another go. This one is much, much shorter.

Said by The Dragon of the Big Bad.

"These people, right here, are wanted. They had been for nine years. And two little boys believe that they can bring us down easily? They are highly mistaken. Xaiver gave us a mission, and that mission is to hunt down these three* and put an end to their hide and seek game. But now, we have another task; we'll join this little race of theirs."

edited 23rd Mar '13 8:49:20 PM by Masterofchaos


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