Favorite lines from your own writing:

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901 KyleJacobs10th Dec 2012 07:57:04 AM from DC - Southern efficiency, Northern charm , Relationship Status: One True Dodecahedron
My take on If You Ever Do Anything to Hurt Her..., from a script:

"Hm? You're still alive? The surprises really never stop with you, do they? But come to think of it, I do believe I owe you something. If I remember right, you told me that if I ever hurt [REDACTED], you'd put a bullet in my brain. I told you if it came to that, I'd hand you a gun. *Speaker puts a gun in the dying [REDACTED]'s hand and aims it point blank at his own head, grinning the whole time* I believe this satisfies my end of that bargain. Let's see if you've got enough life left to live up to yours. *[REDACTED] pulls the trigger. The gun clicks - empty. The speaker's grin widens as he takes the gun back, slides in a fresh clip, then stands and shoots [REDACTED] twice in the head.*
902 TeraChimera11th Dec 2012 08:58:52 AM from somewhere out there
Cool Celtic Composition
From an urban fantasy alternate history:

"Hold on a moment," said Simmons, frowning. "Read that description again."

Vincent did so. "Why? What’s wrong?"

"It sounds like a flying saucer, almost."


"We’re talking about UFOs," said Simmons flatly. "Nazi UFOs. I suppose next we’ll head off to their moon base, where they’re keeping Tesla captive?"

"Don’t be silly, Tesla’s not captive anymore," said Vincent in an isn’t-it-obvious tone of voice. "Someone that smart and that crazy? He broke out and is ruling them with his cloned cyborg T-rexes. Which are psychic," he added.

"Joke all you want," said Simmons, waving his arms, "but that doesn’t change the fact that this is supposed to be a serious scientific expedition, and yet we’re talking about mother. Fucking. Nazi. U. F. Os."

"He said to the head scientist, who was a magical lizard," said Vincent. Simmons turned red as Vincent leafed forward some more.

edited 11th Dec '12 9:00:04 AM by TeraChimera

"The Uncertainty Principle isn't about uncertainty and it isn't a principle; other than that, it's perfectly named." — David Van Baak
[up] I like that one. It reminds me of this gem from Firefly:

Wash: "Pyschic, though? Sounds like something out of science fiction."

Zoe: "We live in a spaceship, dear."

edited 11th Dec '12 12:09:18 PM by Lennik

The Dragon: "I wash my hands in innocence."

The Lancer: "Is that code for virgin's blood?"

Grifter: "You assume a role, and inside that role you become a purpose, a means to an end. There are rules to what people will believe, and they will more readily believe what they already know. You don't give your role an unexpected twist unless it benefits the purpose. Play it to the extremes: a cop is either always honest or always corrupt. Apply well-known attributes and or clichès to your role and zero in on them. Information that goes beyond the scope of your role is detrimental to its purpose. So: don't oversell your bit. Lead the horse to the water, do that just about good enough and it will decide to drink, all by itself."

edited 11th Dec '12 1:45:20 PM by Bresher

905 LastHussar12th Dec 2012 12:10:29 PM from the place is here.
The time is now,
Amy wasn't the first woman to throw crockery at him, and at least two others had better aim.
Do the job in front of you.
906 dRoy12th Dec 2012 03:03:57 PM from The Happy Place , Relationship Status: A cockroach, nothing can kill it.
Perpetually clueless
This line is from my NaNoWriMo work.

"Hey Steele."

"What's up?"

"Have you ever seen...a Humvee flying?"
Mother of god...You turned one of the hardest and best Champions into an absolute joke. - Zelenal
907 desdendelle13th Dec 2012 10:32:27 AM from Drangleic , Relationship Status: It's complicated
Knightess of Mirrah

This post was thumped by the Stick of Post Thumping
"The Dark Side is a pathway to digestion problems some consider... unnatural." -Flanker 66
908 BrainSewage13th Dec 2012 12:04:58 PM from that one place
"Rathland was bent low over the fire, teeth rattling, drawing the thin poncho ever tighter around his hunched shoulders, its rain-slick skin groaning in protest. Heavy drops pelted the canvas above him in a vague rhythm, the overflow streaking down off the edges of his makeshift roof like prison bars, sealing him in."

"Of course, there are still the hordes of people who wake up and hope to God that this is the day they can wear their belt just one notch tighter; who tell themselves that today they will get that call from the place they applied at a month ago; who swear this is the first day that doesn't end facedown in a puddle of equal parts vodka, vomit, and shame."
909 FullMoon17th Dec 2012 10:01:27 AM from Surface , Relationship Status: Shipping fictional characters
feeling blue

"So, what direction is the Doragon Kingdom?" Asked Joshua as he looked at the trees surrounding him and his partners, completely lost in that natural maze, he then glanced at Naoki and Reys "You don't have a map on hands do you?"

"Thankfully I have a map function installed, otherwise I'm certain you two would be lost forever here." Said Reys, much to Naoki's annoyance as he started to examine the place to determine the right direction.

"I'm not lost! I know exactly the way to the kingdom!" Declared Naoki before following in a straight line, leaving Joshua and Reys behind, who didn't look concerned at all.

"You're going in the wrong direction, the right way is here." Said Joshua, pointing at the complete opposite direction Naoki was going, said direction was where they just came from.

Naoki then stopped in place, and started to head at the direction pointed by Joshua who was just amused by that, Reys could only shake his head as he saw the young prince going.

"See? You're so lost, you're taking MY directions." Mocked Joshua, snickering as Naoki just glanced at him and gave a sigh, which only entertained him even more, "And if you're going back to the village, could you buy us a map?"

A little humour to the normally serious story =P

edited 17th Dec '12 10:01:40 AM by FullMoon

Pronounced YAK-you-luss
[up]There are a considerable number of grammatical errors in that, but above all else, you need to read this thread.

edited 17th Dec '12 12:30:22 PM by Iaculus

What's precedent ever done for us?
911 JHM17th Dec 2012 04:14:51 PM from Neither Here Nor There , Relationship Status: Showing feelings of an almost human nature
Thunder, Perfect Mind
This little excerpt is possibly the most morally reprehensible thing that I have ever written. That said, I am putting it here because it encapsulates the character saying it perfectly.

"There is a point when they know what I have done and what I am doing. I can see it in their eyes, but sometimes I can feel it in their whole bodies. After that point, every hand that touches them, every embrace, each kiss and each and every thing that follows—is mine. In that moment, there is nothing else in this world or any other. Even as they live, they are dead… and I am God.

"And after that… I let them go. But they never really leave. Even if they forget, or pretend to forget, I know that they are mine."
912 Collen17th Dec 2012 04:40:33 PM from it is a mystery
the cutest lizard
It seems rather tame, actually. :P
Gave them our reactions, our explosions, all that was ours
For graphs of passion and charts of stars...
913 FullMoon17th Dec 2012 04:55:39 PM from Surface , Relationship Status: Shipping fictional characters
feeling blue

Oh... That helps, lots of editing to do now...
914 JHM17th Dec 2012 07:14:06 PM from Neither Here Nor There , Relationship Status: Showing feelings of an almost human nature
Thunder, Perfect Mind
[up][up] I never said that it was graphic, merely that it was unusually despicable. Perhaps the lack of the preceding paragraphs makes it unclear who "they" are, but even so.
915 TeraChimera17th Dec 2012 09:53:24 PM from somewhere out there
Cool Celtic Composition
I like these two because I think they show Humans Through Alien Eyes really well:

"I still think beards are creepy."

"This coming from the species that has a massive amount of care products specifically to groom thin strings of dead skin cells all over the tops of their heads."
"The Uncertainty Principle isn't about uncertainty and it isn't a principle; other than that, it's perfectly named." — David Van Baak
Just passing by...
A few months of basic training and the new recruits... ...was ready to march south. Or at least there were enough of them to fill the gaps in the ranks and they knew at least which end of the sword that were supposed to be in their hand and which end that was supposed to be in the enemy.
I reject your reality and substitute my own!!!
917 JHM20th Dec 2012 01:25:08 AM from Neither Here Nor There , Relationship Status: Showing feelings of an almost human nature
Thunder, Perfect Mind
[up] Reasonably amusing passage in principle, but I think you'll want to take a good long look at your grammar.
918 PsychoFreaX20th Dec 2012 06:32:54 AM from Transcended Humanity
"Understanding what our adversaries will be on the lookout for, we must make use of more subtle traps. If our pursuers plan to drive as a means of transport then we can use traffic to our advantage. Now I estimated that the organization would get impatient in only another forty minutes, which should be half past three. If driving to the premises, investigate it and its surrounding takes one hour and a half, the time they drive back should be about five. So taking into account the time when certain businesses finish for the day and their distance from the residential zone, if we take use of one of these areas as bait, we can maximize the traffic jam at the time our pursuers drive off. We will choose this cafe."

edited 24th Dec '12 11:12:00 AM by PsychoFreaX

Just passing by...
[up][up] I know, my English isn't the best...sad

I reject your reality and substitute my own!!!
Pronounced YAK-you-luss
[up][up]Yours could also use a bit of work, Psycho. 'If we take use one of these areas' particularly stood out.
What's precedent ever done for us?
921 Night20th Dec 2012 12:33:13 PM from Jaburo , Relationship Status: Drift compatible
The future of warfare in UC.
"The bravest thing I ever saw a man do was scream. Until you understand how that is possible, you do not realize what you are asking or what would result from it."
Nous restons ici.
922 PsychoFreaX20th Dec 2012 04:08:25 PM from Transcended Humanity
[up][up] Oh right whoops typo. Edited.
Pronounced YAK-you-luss
[up]You've still got a couple more, as I mentioned, but I'll let you look for them - it should be good practice for the rest of your work.

If there's one thing this thread demonstrates above all else, it's that editing is important.

edited 21st Dec '12 2:23:35 AM by Iaculus

What's precedent ever done for us?
924 drunkscriblerian21st Dec 2012 02:57:09 AM from Castle Geekhaven , Relationship Status: In season
Street Writing Man
If one of your favorite lines includes a typo, you probably need to do more editing.
If I were to write some of the strange things that come under my eyes they would not be believed.

~Cora M. Strayer~
"[Shamsiel] is the most dangerous kind of liar: it is honest just often enough that you cannot dismiss anything it says outright, and its favorite lie of them all is the ever-so-tempting lie of flattery."

Honestly, a bit worried I'm accidentally channeling another quote here...

edited 24th Dec '12 7:29:58 AM by KillerClowns

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