I have admittedly done too little research on RL owls, at least the mate selection part, but I'm having trouble seeing bird childbearing as more than "bring worms to nest, watch chicks tear them from both sides
" for some reason.
As for Palkia, I've been reading the article some more, let me add some minor Silent Reverence
©®™ spice to it.
1.- Given that Palkia is to be considered "female" remember to pothole the talons to Femme Fatalons
2.- Since you talked about transformations into "a bucker of water and a Sharpedo" I was truly expecting a pothole to the Superfriends, or, if a page exists, to the Wonder Twins
. Maybe something can be played there, although I'd consider it minor (and who wants the Wonder Twins
3.- "the anima to its animus
4.- "The language used by Palkia is the language that the recipient thinks in
" (if you can add some more anecdotes like Palika getting word of a neologism and requesting a human to explain it
you could get to pothole My Hovercraft Is Full of Eels
5.- "and enhanced their telescopes to the point where they first discovered cells" — you may have want to talk about microscopes
in this one.
6.- "Eventually, she had had enough, and legend states that She once came to a group of philosophers to merely talk" — different capitalization of the "She"s where the implied deference is about the same.
7.- I'd have to check what story or work best fits whe Apricorn story to pothole around.
8.- Given the location of Palkia's "pearls", some reordering of the second and third paragraphs may allow you to pothole to Diamonds in the Buff
; to do so it may be fundamental, however, to reinforce the idea that the notion of Palkia "femininity" is (apparently) attributed by humans first and foremost.
9.- You may want to link Power Crystals
to the description of Palkia's signature attack (I'm not sure if Signature Move
itself should be linked).
10.- The paragraph stating the Apricorn legend starts most if not all sentences with "and" and "but". Rewording the sentence leads to indications of continuity (such as "such" and "hence") may make the paragraph read less fragmented.
11.- The hippies part should link to Mass Teleportation
12.- "even if the creature did not simply use its powers to strand one in another place
13.- I've been looking for a way to describe Palkia's appearance in a manner that allows potholing Memetic Mutation
on Her suppossedly "phalic" appearance but since I don't even accidentally it, I may not be the most adequate person to even try.
That's unfortunately All that I can offer ATM since I'm off to sleep at this time.
edited 19th Feb '11 10:06:59 PM by SilentReverence