Not meaning to start one, but the last sentence of the first paragraph of Edit War
is a little grammatically imprecise:
"If these problems become too unmanageable then it may lead to a need for page locking."
I feel that this would be better:
"If these problems become unmanageable, it may be necessary to lock the page
The first "sentence" of Emo Teen
in the second-to-last paragraph is an abominable mess of a run-on:
"Note that in Real Life most definitions of "emo" require that you act like your life sucks when it doesn't to qualify, but since There Are No Therapists, no matter how dark a Back Story a fictional character has, if he acts even remotely unhappy with his lot in life, he is "emo"."
A better and more clear way to state this is:
"In Real Life
, most definitions of "emo" require that you act like your life sucks when it doesn't
to qualify. In fiction, however, There Are No Therapists
, and no matter how dark a Back Story
a character has, acting even remotely unhappy is sufficient to be labelled "emo"."
On Horny Devils
, Merlin (in the third paragraph after the list) is potholed to King Arthur
. We have a page on Merlin
, so please kill the pothole and link accordingly.
There's also very inconsistent capitalization, with Incubus and Succubus
being inconsistently capitalized (or not capitalized) throughout the article. Since it's not a proper noun nor a technical term, all the capitalized instances should be made lowercase.
edited 3rd Jul '12 11:26:29 AM by DarkConfidant